TSKAQN- THE NOT QUITE CHAPTER 24
Well, first off, in response to my reviewers...
Demo B. Jackalope- Hi! I remember you... I haven't talked to you on AIM in ages... -shifty eyes- Anyway, glad you liked the chapter :)
Narfy- You're "Narfy" now, eh? Awesome XD Anyway, yes, Keo's discovered the pridelands... -cackles- XD
no-on-inparticular- I'm going to really have to agree with you. I started writing this story, actually, in September of 2004... back before I -cough- seemed to realize that multi-chaptered stories needed an actual plot. I've been thinking of rewriting this, and your review has convinced me I was right to think that way. I'm particularly not fond of the varying in my portrayal of Sarafina... I like her as an insufferable jerk but she only became that way a few chapters ago o-o; So you're right... TSKAQN kinda sucks. Lol. But as far as my wording goes- no offense meant, but to be blunt I'm not sure how seriously I can take that complaint from a person whose sentences never seem to end and they can't spell "sense" (sence) and you know all those other little odd qualities in your review you know and speaking of continuity you might want some in the way you spell continuity you know hehe. XPPPP So yeah, I agree with what you said about the characters and the plot, but I don't take kindly to people insulting my writing style XD It's just a little more advanced than, "Nala sat on Pride Rock. She was sad because Scar had done bad things to her." Or anything juvenile like that. So I'll agree you have to put in a little effort for it to make sense XP
SunRise19- Hello! Thanks for reviewing my other newest fics! Anyway, yeah... the chapter WAS really rushed... and all of this brings me to my next point.
I need to rewrite TSKAQN. It has no plot. The characters are puppets. The chapters are too short and have no emotion.
I'm planning to keep the original TSKAQN up until the new TSKAQN is finished... So that I can compare them, mostly. Oh, and I won't be calling it TSKAQN- so make sure to read the summaries, dearies, if you want to find it XP Hehe, anyway, so that concludes the not quite chapter 24 of TSKAQN.
-Sulkie Wolfen