From TheSilverUmbreon (Trix chapter 39):
the only reason why I am sure armidrillo is underrated is because when you think of ben's heavy hitters you really don't think of armidrillo
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nor would i
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who can be a more memorable heavy hitter than rath (who has the most personality and comedy), humgosaur (because he's dino-like and who doesn't like dinosaurs), or wildmutt (an original)
Ohirume: Oooh, you meant in a nostalgic and memorable aspect. *shrugs* Huh. Fair enough.
I guess my reason for choosing the Talpaedan was that I thought it seemed more versatile as a metallic heavy hitter and earth specialist.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 38):
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Great chapter, loved the ending. More than a few spelling errors though; no fire lily though, I still haven't fixed the ones in my own story.
Ohirume: *pouts* Really? Aww man. I thought did better on this one … Wait. *rereads chapter* Oh. Okay, yeah. I'm seeing them now.
Seishin: Aww. He's learning.
Ohirume: *chuckles and rolls eyes* Yeah. Yeah.
Honestly, I'm not too concerned with a handful of mistakes littered around story. I'm still going to try and work to fix and lessen them, but I know I can't make it perfect.
I've been reading stories of multiple varieties on multiple websites for a long time and learned a few things. And the most prominent is this: Perfection is impossible.
I've come to see it as "Even the greatest of gems have cracks."
Omega: Did you seriously just this story a gem?
Ohirume: Do you seriously think I'm that self-absorbed?
I mean stories like Saphroneth's "Ashes of the Past" and "Harry Is A Dragon, And That's Okay", The Warmongers of Simora's "Ash's Just Reward", NoSignalBlueScreen's "Pondus Omnium: The Weight of All things" and "The Master Challenge" (all arcs), and pretty much all of RedHeadsRock1010's stuff.
They're all amazing stories that are incredibly well written. Yet, there's always going to be some kind error somewhere; like a miniscule crack in a gem. Not even cracks, more like hairline factures that you need to actually look for in order to find.
They're errors that are so rare that -when you do find them- they don't take way from the story's worth in any way whatsoever.
Seishin: On the other hand, there are a few stories that are loaded with spelling errors but are still amazing.
Namely, Nenilien's "The Pokémon Gods." The story Rob stole me from.
Ohirume: Nenilien took it down about five years ago.
Seishin: Doesn't matter, you're still a thief.
Anyway, English wasn't Nenilien's first language, so the story was practically made of spelling errors.
Ohirume: Still, it was the story that got me into fanfictions in the first place and is still one of my favorites.
The storyline, characters, and, concepts were so amazing that the errors were irrelevant.
It's the story that showed me that grammar and spelling doesn't make a story great. Even the most well written stories can be terrible without a good storyline.
I was heartbroken when I couldn't find it anymore.
Loved the personality glitch.
Omega: You … did?
Ohirume: Well, uh, thank you RT.
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Seishin, lay of Percy... I mean Omega. ;)
Omega: Percy? What the **** are you … You think I'm Percy Jackson, don't you? *glares at Ohirume*
Ohirume: Hey. Don't blame me. I didn't even know about the whole "Percy Jackson Omega" thing when I chose your name.
Heck, I had to look it up when RT said that.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 39):
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Thanks for the mentions, absolutely loved your all's responses. In response to 'what kind of emoticon are those', they're hieroglyphs from Egypt.
Omega: That's not what I meant. What would you say if you saw someone making a face that resembled that cluster **** that Yukiro put together?
Ohirume: Still, it's interesting to know what the 'mouth' symbol was. I just grabbed a symbol that I thought would look confusing or nonsensical -as part of an emoticon- from what Microsoft Word has to offer in the Insert tab.
You have me very interested in what could be in the works for Pikachu Tribe, several probably wrong ideas already but ill hold on to them for now. Looking forward to more.
Ohirume: Yay!
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Ps. Small idea; The Mask vs Seishin.
Seishin: *0* Yes. Yes. Yes! Yes! YES!
Ohirume: No.
Seishin: WHAT?! WHY?!
Ohirume: How many of The Mask's cultural references do I understand?
Seishin: -_- Lame.
Ohirume: Although, if anyone wants to make an Omake of that, I'd be happy to collab.
Omega: *deadpanned; sarcastic tone* Yes. Because who wouldn't want to do an over-the-computer only collaboration with a psychopath who has 3 to 10 voices in his head on a regular basis.
Ohirume: *pouts* I never said they had to accept.
Also, little concerned what you hinted to during Ash's rant to the Father in chapter 38. I'm guessing someone's going to swing back to that?
Seishin: You were not the only one to be concerned.
Ohirume: We're holding off on revealing all of the details. For now.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 39):
lol
Seishin: XD
Gem: Uh-
Omega: It stands for "laugh out loud."
Gem: Thank you.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
Sorry. Didn't know Yukiro would take it as a insult I was just making a death battle references Deadpool vs The Mask.
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Klipper
Seishin: Oh … Sorry. *sigh* Now I feel like a jerk. :(
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
Will Ash get together with Serena by any chances. Any can you post when you will put up the next chapter please it gives the people reading this a bit of a heads up.
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Klipper
Yugo: Serena is still really far away in the timeline. It's way too soon to say.
Ohirume: And no, I don't plan to add her in early.
Also, I can't really put a heads up without posting something in the story. I already put a notice on the Labor Day Special.
I post new chapters on Sunday … if the chapter is ready. Specifically, around 12:00 midnight, Sunday. Central Standard Time.
If you're actually referring to the "Do Guest reviews intentionally show up later than logged in reviews?" thing, that's not what I meant. I was legitimately asking.
Seishin: Plus, the six comments you posted on the 25th didn't show up until the 27th. We really have no idea why the website does this.
*Almost two weeks later
Ohirume: … So. I found out why the reviews were showing up later than normal. I, uh- *nervous chuckle* I had the "Moderate Guest Reviews" option enabled.
It turns out that the setting adds a 36 hour wait time to any Guest/non-member reviews. During which I can choose to accept/decline them.
Sorry.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
Thanks for explaining those questions from earlier so that means ash's Omnitrix came from another dimension. Can't wait for the Kalos region maybe Ash can help Clemont with his inventions with his Galvan form or as we known him, calm mind.
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Klipper
Ohirume: You are right about that. *smirks* But, as you saw in Code: PoЯygon, he won't actually need to use Calm Mind to help … at least, not always.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
PS big Ben 10 fan along with I fan speaking of which have you ever thought of setting up a deviantart page so you can post pictures of your fanfiction characters.
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Klipper
Ohirume: I have not. Because I have even less skills in artistry than I do in writing.
Omega: True. Very True.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
I'm gonna guess that the omnitrix Ash got was the one Ben 10 might have had so that's how he got hammer arm. By the way Yukiro acts a lot more like Deadpool then the Mask probably a good thing since The Mask is literally an Idiot. While Deadpool is surprising smart at times.
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Klipper
Ohirume: … I really need to write that prologue.
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Seishin: -_- And now I feel like even more of a jerk.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 39):
P.S. maybe you can get Deadpool as a guest appearance sometime latter in the chat after all he is the original 4th wall breaker.
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Klipper
Ohirume: Absolutely not. He's called the merk with a mouth for a reason.
'Deadpool': Yvel right!
Ohirume: Yukiro, why are you dressed like that?
Seishin dressed like Deadpool: Why the freak not?
Omega: Also, DP didn't invent the fourth-wall break. The concept's been around since the 19th century.
Seishin dressed like Deadpool: Yeah. That mother-lovin' son of a glitch is just one of the more well-known freaking examples.
Omega: Mother-lovin?
Seishin dressed like Deadpool: ›:P
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From Exodia3215 (Trix chapter 39):
Awesome story so far! Hope you can update soon!
I think 1 of the Legendary/Mythical Pokemon Ash should get a form for is Mew, cause she's very playful and VERY curious. Plus it would be funny to see mew's reaction. Who knows? Maybe she'll even want to join Ash's team.
HAPPY 'MEW' YEAR!
Ohirume: I've got somethings in mind. ;)
Seishin: Ö ROB USED AN EMOTICON!
Ohirume: Don't get used to it.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 40):
Good chap
Ohirume: Thank you.
Seishin: *British* MEANWHILE in a parallel universe where Ohirume is actually Scott Sterling at a bowling alley.
Ohirume: Thank y- *nailed in the face by a bowling ball*
*ball rolls down alley and hits a strike*
British narrator #1: *excited shouting* And Scott Sterling has taken a bloody bowling ball straight to the schnoz and still scores yet another perfect strike!
British narrator #2: This man's snot rockets must have enough accuracy to give him the gold medal on the dart board!
British narrator #1: … Not your finest work bud.
British narrator #2: Who cares! That was still awesome!
Seishin: *British* MEANWHILE in a parallel universe where Ohirume is actually Scott Sterling at a bowling alley,
but it's not fake.
Ohirume: Thank y- *nailed in the face by a bowling ball* *falls back*
British narrator #1: AH! Sweet butter crumpets!
British narrator #2: Someone call a bloody ambulance!
Seishin: *British* MEANWHILE back in our universe.
Ohirume: … Yukiro?
Seishin: Yeah?
Ohirume: You're not still upset about Klipper's review, are you?
Seishin: *snickers* Don't worry, I'm way past that.
Ohirume: So, we're just … not doing anything?
Seishin: *sly smirk* That's one way of looking at it.
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From Wizzer96 (Trix chapter 40):
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From Guest (Trix chapter 40):
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Good chapter for this one. My favorite scene is with the Kangaskhan one it was funny.
Faux: *snickers* Yeah.
But the only thing I'm a little mad at is when Yukiro and ohirume messing around with another episode and rigging it so that ash get 30 Tauros not cool dude. I know ash needs them for something but come on.
Ohirume: Fair enough.
Seishin: *Zoidberg voice* Hurray! They hate us!
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From Guest (Trix chapter 40):
The chapter Today was just confusing by the way can you give some of the legendary genders I'm pretty sure the reason there considered gender less is because nobody knows anything about them. plus it would be kinda insulting to call the it.
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Klipper
Ohirume: I'm not sure I understand.
Seishin: He said it was confusing. My specialty. Thank you, Klipper! :D
Ohirume: Not that. I meant the 'give the Legendaries genders' thing. I haven't listed any of them in such a way; aside from that massive, interrupt-chat in the Scissor Street chapter. Them being genderless is just how it works.
Mewtwo: However, we do often classify under a gender in terms of mentally and preference. For example, I classify as male. Despite my biology.
Faux: *nods* Yeah. Plus, X classifies as male, Y as female, and Z is also male,
Pike: *raises brow* Wait, I just realized something. If X and Y are biologically genderless, where did Z come from?
Luke: That's, uh … actually a really good question.
Laura: *Looks at Ohirume* You probably know. Right?
Ohirume: Um … I'll get back to you on that.
Anyway, Klipper. While I'm not going to actually give a gender to a genderless legendary, I will continue with the whole 'mental gender' thing. Mostly.
Some Legendaries may not go along with actually choosing a gender and just be … themselves.
Yugo: Like Ashes of the Past's Mew?
Ohirume: Exactly.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 40):
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Maybe you should base the change lens on something like creature power suits from the Wild Kratts, disks an all.
Omega: By the time you read this, the purpose of the Change Lenses (still a terrible name by the way) will have already been revealed.
Ohirume: And don't worry. I've had the better name in my head for a long time. The only reason they're still called Change Lenses (for now) is because Ash doesn't know the Omnitrix is called an Omnitrix.
As for the Wild Kratts thing. I looked that up YouTube and … I think I'll pass on that concept.
The Kangaskhan episode was nice but a little sad
Omega: Yeah, I can't argue that.
and despite being new at this your a really good story writer.
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Klipper
Ohirume: Wait, really?
Omega: Trust me. I'm just as surprised as you.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 40):
This is without a doubt one of the best stories I've ever read up there with uchiha heiress, story's by Kenchi618 and Master Attlon. While you did change Ash a little bit it's a lot more like his kalos version of him only a little smarter and more understanding of pokemon.
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Klipper.
Omega: … You're ******* with us, right?
Gem: *looks at Omega; frowning* Why so it so weird for Rob to be good at this?
Seishin: Mostly the fact that we exist. Robby Bobby with the 2D hobby who may or may not like pastrami's got some screws loose in the engine-not-caboose which is weird since he's never cut loose on that quote-un-quote dizzy juice. :)
Omega: *deadpanned* That was by far the stupidest thing I've ever heard.
Seishin: No. This is the stupidest thing you've ever heard. *Sheen from Jimmy Neutron's random noises from the prison scene in the movie and/or Patrick from SpongeBob's crazy talk. Your choice*
Omega: *looks at camera; still deadpanned* This is why I envy anyone who isn't a figment of Rob's imagination.
Ohirume: *rolls eyes*
I guess … the only reason Pokémon Trix is any good is that I've been reading stories for about ten years, I think. Despite the fact that I didn't make my FanFiction account until 2018.
Heck, I still remember back when Ashes of the Past only had like … 20 chapters. And now it's almost at 300!
Anyway, I've just had a lot of examples to learn from. Be it good, bad, or just … cramped.
That, and my perfectionist tendencies help with readability and finding ways to ensure something doesn't get messed up. Namely, adding the following to my Microsoft Word's dictionary:
The name of every single Pokémon -to date- and their possessives, whatever character names the program doesn't like, and other similar terms … I was hoping I could come up with more than three
I even made a dummy document in my FanFiction account to test what characters/symbols I could and couldn't put in a chapter. For example, FanFiction's document editor doesn't like the "Greater-than" or "Less-than" signs that are on a keyboard.
Although, it's blatantly obvious by this point that these methods have their limits. Namely, in my ability to proofread.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 41):
Good chap
Ohirume: Thank you.
Omega: It's-
Seishin: *Mini Ladd scream from the clip that starts at 12:33 on the I AM WILDCAT video "Garry's Mod Prop Hunt Funny Moments! – Break Beat Talking, Sneaky Coffee Cup, and WATERMELOOOON!" right in Omega's ear*
Omega: AHH! *Falls back and covers ears* WHAT THE **** MAN?! I thought we were messing with Rob!
Seishin: I thought I'd take it old school with this one. P
Ohirume: *relieved sigh*
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From Wizzer96 (Trix chapter 41):
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nice chapters, well for the mewtwo idea (the male one) is: if you use y previous giovanni and family theory you can make that mewtwo has an incredible amount of hate towards Ash just because he's from THAT family, which causes him to focus basically only on ash (you can make the start like the film and during the first confrontation use OP mewtwo psichic powers to find ash family ties).
Ohirume: I like it, but there is one minor flaw in that.
Back in the Saffron Chapter, Ash revealed that the Butterfree, Mightyena, and Calm Mind Power Integration gave him a resistance/immunity to Psychics and the knowledge to set up mental barriers; which he's already done. Soot's also immune because Dark-type.
What I'm getting at is- He wouldn't be able to scan Ash or Soot's minds to find the connection. He could figure out their connection to each other and learn about the watch from Ash's friends and/or Pokémon, but that still wouldn't lead him to Giovanni.
Still, Mewtwo can get the info out of Giovanni before escaping.
Omega: *sweat drops* If that's the case, what was the point of bringing this up?
Ohirume: *shrugs* Eh. I was just straightening out the facts.
Although, one more thing. *sly smirk* How can you be sure that Ash knows about Giovanni?
but then will come in play Soot who'll show mewtwo:
1- you DONT **** with a ghost-dark type (aka mewtwo tasting some very, VERY nasty dark pulse, night slashes, ect...)
Faux: More like Sucker Punch and/or Shadow Ball.
Yugo: Also, Soot isn't actually a Ghost-type. She's a Dark-type with Ghost-type abilities.
Ohirume: … Which I'm now realizing isn't that different. Aside from the fact that she can be hit by Normal and Fighting-type moves.
*smiles* Regardless, that would be a pretty cool battle.
2- that ash is nowhere near the evilness of giovanni, so he shouldn't "judge a book by its cover"*wink*
Seishin: HA! XD
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for the aftermath of the film i have some funny ideas:
1- you can make mewtwo go to professor oak, who is known for being fair to all living being, and will absolutely take him under his wing.
doesnt hurt that mewtwo is a literal genius who created a cloning machine, so those two together would make a fine collaboration.
Omega: *Looks at Faux, Laura, and Yugo* Pay up.
Yugo, Faux, and Laura: *grumble* Crag.
(p.s. make mewtwo meet Delia, i want to see her reaction when she discover he almost killed her son and grandaugther)
Seishin: *crazed laughter* Ho- holy- THAT has to happen in some way! I don't even care how stupid the plot is for that scene! Rob, you have to put that in sometime after Mewtwo's official debut!
Ohirume: *smirk* Oh, I plan too. Worst comes to worst; I'll do an Omake with the exact same personalities.
Faux: Wait. Official?
Yugo: There was a picture of them on Bill's door.
Faux: … How the Yvel did I not realize that?
Ohirume: Anime.
2- have mew follow ash and company for a bit, the reason is that since mew is the true ancestor-mother of all pokemon, she would get very curious about the strange combination of Soot impossibility and ash traformations (pokemon and non) and their effects on him.
Ohirume: Huh. That actually makes a lot of sense.
Having a way OP legendary travel with the group -without one of them catching them- is not only reasonable, but also something that's happened in the Anime multiple times.
Not to mention, that's a really good reason for Mew to want to follow them. *sly smirk* Imagine their reaction to the 'Phantom Child' story.
(and yes, my demented mind gave a freaking gender on all legendary-mythical pokemon except arceus, who for me is technically a fourth dimensional being [aka eldrich])
Yugo: *snickers* Hey, it's not that weird.
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okokok, i admit i would like to see some decent legendary interactions like "ashes of the past" and and "ash just reward" cuz lets be honest, the legendaries in the majority of the fanfics in existence are:
1- one arc-chapter stand
Ohirume: True.
2- so OP that is ridiculous (which sometimes is true actually, but here im talking about something like a thanos infinity snap)
Ohirume: So True!
3- inexistent
Seishin: … You mean, like … they just never show up?
Ohirume: *scratches head* I'm not actually sure I've seen that before.
or, even worse, arceus forbid, giratina's help, the "ash got betrayed and became op with all legendaries following him like he's arceus son and get all the female's ass for himself cuz wynaut" type of stories. I have some serious trouble tolerating those kind of fanfiction,
Ohirume: THANK YOU! Seriously! What the **** is the appeal behind those?! Why are there so many?!
Most of the reasons they betray him don't even make sense!
And the harem-thing! Just, WHY?! I know it's a part of some cultures and natural for Elephant Seals, but it's gotten to the point that I stop reading a story the instant something like that pops up!
I can stand for A LOT of bat ****, psychotic stuff but not that!
My limit is when multiple people are attracted to the same person. Because that isn't harem, that's high school movie drama!
Seishin: I could not agree more.
Yugo: Woah. Even Yukiro doesn't like the idea. And his favorite movie is Son of the Mask.
Mizuro: *gags* Oh, dear lord. Why?
Seishin: Why not? It's nightmarishly cartoony, graphic, and just plain confusing. It's everything I stand for! :D
My favorite scene is when that lady's head turns into nothing but nose. The snot. THE SNOT!
the only one who has a similar concept that i ever liked was even as betrayed story, it was ash leaving on his own accord after a really lucky win in the unova league.
Ohirume: Okay, that one actually sounds a little interesting. But, if there's any harem-esque stuff, please tell me so I don't even try to find it.
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Ohirume: Anyway, Wizzer. I can tell you put a lot of thought into this and I'm really liking these concepts. Not just because they work from a logical standpoint, but because of how rare a good handful of them are too.
Still, there are some things I'm not too sure about. YET.
But, you have given me a lot of cool stuff to consider. I guess we'll just have to wait and see what makes the cut. ;P
Seishin: EMOTICON!
Ohirume: Stop it, you freak! *clears throat* Thanks, Wizzer.
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From AlphaGodzilla19 (Trix chapter 42):
That episode gave several Japanese children seizures.
Yugo: *sweat drops* Uh, yeah. We know. It was because of the extreme red and blue flashes. We found the episode online and that happened A LOT.
Seishin: -_- We stated this in the Dratini chapter's post chat. Y'know another banned episode.
Ohirume: Also, I made an Omake of the actual, unedited episode and posted it in "Random-ish stuff on the side." So, people can read the episode without any risk.
Omega: And, it wasn't 'several.' It was well over 600.
Gem: *frowns* Aren't you guys being kind of harsh?
Faux: *frowns* Yeah. Maybe they just didn't know about all that stuff.
Omega: That still doesn't explain why they decided to say this about a fanfiction where the only risk of having a seizure is if their computer is somehow that bad.
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From Johnathen Youngs (Trix chapter 42):
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Story is looking amazing
Ohirume: Thank y-
Deadpool: cant wait to see you guys continue mabey you can add some YouTubers like chuggaaconroy
Seishin: Hey, DP! Awesome to see you! Also, who dat?
Pinkie pie: or mabey munching orange mabey you can even include poke sweets
Seishin: Okay, we've at least heard of Munching Orange. No idea what the Yvel poke sweets is though.
Omega: What the **** is this? A gathering of fourth-wall shatterers?
Anna: that would be a great idea mom and dad or mabey others like purple rodri and sully pwnz
Omega: … what?
Strawberry: or general secura sotry is awsome mabey professor paradox will show up
Ohirume: Okay. That actually sounds like it could happen. Hmm. Although, I'll have to look over Paradox's lore to see if he can span the multiverse. Well, more than his multiverse.
Omega: *Sweat drops* That's my thing. I'm the dimension walker here.
Ohirume: Well, sure. But people actually know who Professor Paradox is.
Omega: … Yeah, fair enough.
(Anna and strawberry are my ocs deadpool and pinkie pie are their parents strawberry is slightly older and more mature and is straight and anna is lesboan and child like and innocent)
Omega: Oh. That makes a little more sense.
Ohirume: *blinks in surprise* Gotta admit, that's a new angle.
Seishin: And, don't worry, Rob ain't judging you.
Omega: Plus, it'd be really hypocritical if he was. This freak had a five-year-old, Omnitrix wearing Ash Ketchum have a half-ghost baby with a dog.
Faux: Mightyena.
Omega: Whatever.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 42):
Good chap
Ohirume: Thank-
Gem: *runs past while screaming* AAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Ohirume: Gem! What's wrong?!
Gem: There's some frowning freak in a black hoodie chasing me! He keeps hitting me with a spoon for some reason!
Seishin: O_O Wait, the Ginosaji's going after you?! I thought I set him on Rob!
Ohirume: You did what?
Ginosaji: *Enters room; glaring at Gem* *Raises spoon and walks menacingly!*
Seishin: *Thoughts; Patrick Star voice* MENACINGLY!
Gem: AH! He's here! Someone do something!
Ohirume: We can't! The Ginosaji is impossible to stop! It'll just keep hitting you with a spoon until your dead! It won't even let you kill yourself!
Gem: *gulps*
Seishin: Oh, calm down. I had a backup plan in case of this. YO! Kinofoku!
Ohirume: Kino what now?
Kinofoku: *Walks into room* *description: white clothing, wielding golden fork, everything else the same* *glares at Ginosaji*
Ginosaji: *sets sights on Kinofoku and glares* *raises spoon*
Kinofoku: *raises fork*
*tink*
**Time Skip … in a comment response for some reason**
Seishin: I'm gonna be honest, I did not see this coming. :l
Ohirume: I- I don't think anyone could have expected this.
Gem: I don't get what's so weird about it.
Omni Force: *randomly walks into room*
Nuevo: Hey, what's going- *notices Ginosaji and Kinofoku* Uh, who are the guys angrily playing Chinese Checkers with a fork and a spoon?
Mizuro: *surprised gasp* Holy ****! It's a ******* Ginosaji!
Illavera: A what?
Omega: It's Japanese for 'silver spoon' and the main antagonist of The Horribly Slow Murderer with the Extremely Inefficient Weapon. It's an R Rated parody trailer.
Nuevo: … what?
Mizuro: Okay! We are watching the video! NOW! *drags Mizuro and Illavera away*
Seishin: … Well. I guess we didn't need the Seidonodeba.
Seidonodeba: *description: yellow clothing, wielding bronze knife (flat end facing forward), everything else the same* *looks down sorrowfully; still glaring and frowning like usual*
Omega: … How many of those do you have?
Seishin: Just two more. The Haganenohashi(Steel chopsticks) and the Suzunowara(tin drinking straw).
Omega: Okay. What are you on?
Ohirume: My headaches.
Seishin: NYAN JACK! Weird censored version.
Jack Jack Jack Jack, Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack
Jack's so unhappy cause he's running from the Ginosaji
Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack
Jack's so unhappy cause he's running from the Spoon
Jack Jack Jack Jack, (and again) Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack Jack
Jack's so unhappy cause he's running from the Ginosaji
Ow ow ow ow ow ow ow ow ow crag ow ow ow ow
Jack's so unhappy cause he's running from the Spoon
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From Guest (Trix chapter 42):
Feedback the conductoid due to it being erased and having electric powers.
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Klipper
Seishin: *game show announcer voice* OH! So, sorry Klippy my boy! That is incorrect!
Yugo: Do remember that the form appeared completely human in both silhouette and in when Ash actually turned into it.
Omega: 'In when'?
Yugo: Don't look at me. Yukiro's the one who gave me that cue card.
Seishin: YUP! Thank you, my lovely assistant!
Yugo: … What have I gotten myself into?
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From GoldenGirlGalaxy (Trix chapter 42):
(Given the length of this comment, I split it up as follows)
This was a really good chapter all things considered. It explained some of the lore without it being too out of place and finally found some resolution to a plot point that will change up status quo without completely toppling the story. I can't wait to see how Brock and Misty will interact with their Pokemon while they are also Pokemon.
Ohirume: WOO!
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Also, the Change Lens are a good idea in my opinion, especially since they have faults and limitations compared to the Omnitrix. And you foreshadowed them enough that it doesn't come too much out of left field.
Ohirume: *massive relieved sigh* Oh, thank goodness! I was genuinely worried about that.
I was really hyped to see Ash finally complete them and for Misty and Brock to finally be given a chance to understand their Pokéballs.
Omega: … Y'know, I'll give you a pass on the 'pokéballs' thing.
Though for a question, will there be any sort of Power Integration for the Lens?
Ohirume: Good question. Although, I won't say.
Gem: What? But that doesn't seem like that much of a spoiler.
Ohirume: I won't say, because we're getting the answer early in the next chapter. Remember the jumbo dragonite thing?
*bright smile* I already have that part typed out.
If it weren't for that, I would have answered this without hesitation.
Also, do they need to get Pokéballs for whoever is using the Change Lens?
Ohirume: Oh … I did not think of that. That's goin' on the list. Thank you.
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As for the deleted form, I want to say it was probably something similar to the Ultimate Ben thing from Ultimate Alien, due to the fact that it was Ash with the symbol on his chest and because it ended up triggering Power Integration.
Seishin: *Game show announcer voice* Good guess, G/G/G! But no dice!
Yugo: Keep in mind it's an Omnitrix. Not an Ultimatrix.
Ohirume: Sorry.
But since you were the last person to guess before this was posted, how about a hint?
It's a species that no Omnitrix/Ultimatrix/Nemetrix/alternate-dimension-watch-thing user has EVER used. Not even in the non-canon crag … that the actual creators made. Although, I wouldn't be surprise if someone else worked it into a Fanfiction and/or Fanart.
In the Ben 10 universe, the species has only ever been seen in the form of living specimens. Both good and bad. *wink*
Omega: And before you ask, the species is in the canon Omnitrix. It was confirmed by Dwayne McDuffie.
Seishin: Rest in peace, you cartoon genius. *sniffle* Rest in peace. :'(
Also, if it turns out that the Omnitrix having that DNA was actually retconned, keep in mind: Multiverse.
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Also, a question that has been bugging me about your story. What do you plan to do with Ash's traveling companions and Pokemon if you make it to Honnen? I know it's still a ways off, but I'm just curious, namely because of how much closer Ash is to everyone, particularly his Pokemon.
Ohirume: Oh … You might have a point about that.
Knowing Trix, it might be something along the lines of 'ask what they want.' I mean, he does have ten slots where only three are perpetually taken up.
Yugo: As for Brock and Misty, we know Brock's making a comeback. Misty, on the other hand, was practically forced home because her sisters are … her sisters.
Ohirume: Yeah. I'll have to think that over.
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From Wizzer96 (chapter 42):
im actually pretty chill, even excited about the lens. these are the reasons:
1- more interactions, both for comedy and wholesome-fluff stuff (like the pair GM getting to know their pokemons on a whole other level)
Faux: It's awesome, right?!
2- can add some actually serious plot about an evil team trying to steal them (i think this should actually come later, maybe during the jotho arc, with some rebelling team rockets not giving a **** that giovanni is gonna fry them if they hurt his grandson *wink* *wink*)
Ohirume: The more you say stuff like that … the more I can't help but appreciate the way you think.
Omega: Which is also why Rob rarely lets me talk to you directly during your reviews. He knows I'll find a reason to say something negative.
Faux: Also, don't worry too much. Trix knows how powerful the Lenses can be and … well, he's got something in mind.
Seishin: :)
3- for mind-****ing the tRio, making them believe that the phantom is an infectious disease or some **** like that
Ohirume: *crazed laughter* Okay, that's pretty good! I've got something else in mind, but that is good!
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for those hating comments i suggest to read them while drinking a cup of coffee and an open page of google images "haters gonna hate" \_(ツ)_/
Ohirume: *snickers* I'll keep that in mind the next time I get a hate review.
Omega: Although, he was actually referring to other stories he's read. The closest we got to a legit hate review was from N-san in chapter 1 back on July 15th, 2019.
Ohirume: *groans* I keep telling you guys; that wasn't a hate review. They were giving constructive criticism and voicing their opinion.
Seishin: Still, they could have typed in a more appropriate guest name. :I
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GOOD CHAP
Yugo: Normally, we save what's about to happen for one of B.F.P.'s reviews. But what the Yvel, you've put us in a good mood.
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Ohirume: *Sigh* Alright, Yukiro. Just get it over with.
Seishin: *snickers* Aww, calm down, Rob. I'm not messing with you on this one.
Omega: *glares at Seishin accusingly* Then what did you do?
Seishin: Oh, nothing much.
I just took the Little Baby's Ice Cream freak, gave them the face from the original version of the live action Sonic The Hedgehog, made it so they can only make the same noises as MisterEpicMan's fully covered pink suit guy, put them on an infinite loop where they do the, uh … thing that the petting zoo animals did in Stewie's nightmare(Family Guy), and then I put them in the girl's bathroom.
Funny, right? :)
Omega: What the actual ******** **** is wrong with you?
Seishin: ;P lol.
Yugo: We should get that … thing out of here before-
Illavera: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
Ohirume: Too late.
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*Deleted scenes
Safari Zone – Kaiser explaining the Safari Zone rules:
Why: Didn't work for later on
Where: Self-explanatory
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Brock and Misty stood at the front desk as Kaiser was rifling through a cabinet. Ash sat on a couch and pet Soot as she laid on his lap. Pikachu and Clefairy were looking at the surrounding pictures curiously.
Kaiser turned back around and place a bucket of green pokéballs and three fishing rods on the counter, "Here. You get ten balls each and you're on a three-hour time limit."
Brock waved a hand, "Actually, we're not here to catch anything. We were just hoping to do some sightseeing."
"Doesn't matter." Kaiser stated matter-of-factly, "It's required that you take the Safari Balls with you in case you change your mind at some point after you enter. Whether or not you actually use them is up to you. Time limit stays the same." He glared, "The Safari balls and these fishing rods are the only things you'll be allowed to use to catch any Pokémon. No other types of pokéballs are allowed and none of your Pokémon can be used for battles." He motioned towards his holstered gun, "Breaking these rules will result in-" He froze up when and flinched as Ash flashed a quick Intimidate. Kaiser gulped, "W-well- They're not allowed, and I have security cameras everywhere."
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Safari Zone – finding the dratini picture:
Why: I preferred the idea where Ash and Soot knew about the Dragons in advance
Where: Duh / Not sure why I include this section for all of these
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Pikachu continued looking around the pictures before blinked in surprise and pointing at one, "Hey, Ash. Isn't that a dratini?"
Ash and Soot jerked and looked at him in shock, "What?!"
They looked where he pointed to find an old picture of what looked like a younger Kaiser smiling and crouching down next to a dratini with an 'X' scratched into the side of its horn. The ran over immediately.
Soot smiled brightly, "Holy Yvel, you're right!"
Misty looked back in surprise, "What is it?"
Ash removed the picture from the wall, "Look. It's a dratini."
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Safari Zone – After Kaiser's cover story about the dratini:
Why: wasn't feeling it / part of the rough draft where Ash and Soot didn't know before hand
Where: *yawn*
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Kaiser took a deep breath, "I just don't want to make that mistake again." He started walking towards the entrance, "I need some fresh air. You'll be free to enter the Safari Zone when I get back." He closed the door behind him before anyone could respond.
Misty frowned, "Now I kind of feel bad for him."
Soot sweat dropped, "Than, you might like to know how much of that was a lie."
Brock looked at her in confusion, "Wait, what? How could you tell?"
"It was actually a few things." Ash responded before raising a finger, "For one, he's been cold and distant this entire time, yet he had no problem with telling us about his mistake. This was likely for us to take pity on him and not pry." He raised a second finger, "Second, during the entire explanation, he had his back turned to us." He raised a third finger, "And third, that photo wasn't doctored. It was definitely thirty years old and the tech required to doctor photo wasn't that advance back then."
Brock sweat dropped, "You knew he was lying too?"
Ash nodded, "The whole time."
Misty glared at Ash, "Well, why didn't you call him out on it?!"
Pikachu nodded, "Yeah!"
Ash frowned, "Because he really does feel guilty about it."
Clefairy blinked in surprise, "What do you mean?"
"He means the effect the dratini thing had on the Safari Zone." Soot replied somberly, "Everything he said about trainers flooding in and trashing the place really happened." Her frowned deepened, "And given his tone, he really does blame himself."
Misty raised a brow, "Wait. Was the point of all of that to keep us from feeling sorry for him or not?"
Ash and Soot blinked in surprise and shared a look.
Ash looked back at his friends, "I, uh- I think we were going for getting the facts straight."
Brock raised a brow, "So, there really are dratini here?"
Soot shrugged, "Maybe. Given the picture, Kaiser might have befriended one and is trying to protect them."
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Double (part 2: Ditto) – Ditto taken instead:
Why: Seemed to make less sense given what I've made Team Rocket's reason for following the group
Where:
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They all ran into the room and stared in shock. The side wall had a gaping hole blown into it; right where the work bench was. Duplica was laying on the ground.
Brock grimaced, "Duplica!" He ran over and propped her up, "Come on! Wake up!"
Duplica slowly opened her eyes. She groaned, sat up, and held her head, "Ugh. What happened?"
Everyone else ran and crouched down.
"We were kind off hoping you would know." Soot said worriedly before glancing at the wall.
Duplica blinked in surprise and followed her gaze. She flinched and jumped to her feet, "Dear Arceus! What the Yvel-" She jerked, and her eyes widened, "Ditto!"
Misty's eyes widened in shock, "Ditto did this?!"
Duplica shook her head, "Two people and a meowth busted in and kidnapped Ditto!" She held her head, "I'm pretty sure I got Tackled by a weezing."
Misty groaned, "Of course."
Brock pinched the bridge of his nose, "Team Rocket."
Duplica blinked in surprise, "You know them?"
Soot sighed in annoyance, "I'm sorry to say we do. They're thieves who do this kind of thing a lot."
"We run into more times than should really make sense." Ash followed before pulling out and tossing up a pokéball, "Pidgeotto!"
The Bird Pokémon emerged in the air, "What's going- Woah!" She cried out upon seeing the wall. She sweat dropped, "Uh."
Soot spoke up, "It's Team Rocket again. They stole this girls ditto and we need you to find them."
Pidgeotto nodded with a determined glare, "Alright." She turned and flew out the hole.
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Ditto – scrapped title:
Why: I don't entirely know.
Extra: I might end up using this at some point in the future; since Duplica shows up again in Johto.
Tell me what you think about that idea.
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You Thought It Was Pikachu! But It Was I, Ditto!
(Seishin: Ha ha! JoJo meme!
Omega: Ew.)
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Double – alternate title:
Why: Not really sure / probably would have used this if it happened a bit more in the chapters
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The Two Where Ash Carries Soot A Lot
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Porygon – Team Rocket's 1st scene of the chapter:
Why: I just … wasn't feeling it.
Where: After group climbs onto Porygon / meant to be a scene change (Hey, including this part actually makes sense this time)
Ash sweat dropped, 'I'm not sure if I should take that as a compliment.' He shook it off and ran over to pick up his Fairy and Electric-types, "Come on. Franz did have a point."
Everyone nodded and loaded onto Porygon before they started moving along the virtual highway.
Seishin: Life is highway!
I wanna ride it all night long!
Omega: What the **** are you doing?! This is supposed to be "A World Without Danger"!
Seishin: Says you. ›:I
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*Team Rocket
The tRio stood in front of a line of traffic barricades holding back massive piles of pokéballs at the exit to one of the highway tubes.
Jessie smirked and struck a pose, "To prevent the destruction of the world!"
James followed suit, "To protect the peace of the world!"
"To stand by the evils of love and truth!"
"The lovey, charming, Katakiyaku … -th."
Meowth sweat dropped from behind them, "Dat ain't da right motto."
Jessie glared back at him, "Hey, this episode got banned worldwide and only aired in japan. The Japanese motto makes sense here."
Meowth crossed his arms, "Still, did ya have ta do da direct translation? You know dat never works. Just check out da 'Crossin' Field' April fools cover from Amalee/LeeandLie."
Seishin: HA! I love this cat!
James slumped forward, "I know. But I couldn't think of a long enough rhyme that ended in the -th sound."
Jessie glared at Meowth and held up a fist, "What did I say about all that fourth-wall crag?!"
Meowth deadpanned, "Jess, you literally started it when you said da word 'episode'."
"There you are!" They heard a familiar red-head shout.
The trio looked over to see Ash and co. flying towards them on Porygon. All of them were glaring.
"Right on cue." Meowth said in a bored tone.
James looked at him, "Hey, are you alright? You seem kind of out of it, today."
Meowth yawned, "Didn't get much sleep."
Jessie deadpanned, "You slept for fourteen hours last night."
Meowth yawned again, "I don' get it eitha. I think the autha just bein' weird again."
Ohirume: Hey!
Omega: You wrote that! How can you argue it?!
Ohirume: *grumbles*