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Ohirume: Daaaang. I think this might be the longest comment response post yet. I'm kind of impressed.
Omega: Just goes to show how little taste people-
*CRASH*
Seishin: *holding grand piano on a stick* No one likes an unconstructive hater, greenie.
Omega: *pained, high-pitched whine*
Illavera: *sigh* I'll get the first aid kit.
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Seishin: Now, before we really start, Rob wants to brag about something. ;P
Ohirume: … well, I wouldn't really call it 'bragging'.
Seishin: ',:\ Given the topic, what would you call it?
Ohirume: I … *sigh* fine, I guess it is bragging.
I'm excited to say that "Pokémon Trix: Tales of Soot and Ash" is officially #1 in all non-date related categories on the Pokémon/Ben 10 crossover page! And I realize I may have just jinxed that by saying it here.
Regardless, I can't thank all of you enough for your support.
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From Johnathen Youngs (Trix chapter 45):
(Given the length of this comment, I split it up as follows)
Omega: *raised brow* Wait. When you say 'interrupt,' do you mean the thing where Yukiro literally jumps into a chapter? Or our mid-chapter chats?
1st one i don't mind your chats cause to me they serve as line breaks
Omega: *glances at Yukiro with a smirk*
Seishin: -_-
Anywho i do have an account in wattpad and Instagram and facebook but not here so we can't dm here however hete are my ocs
Anna pie Wilson- has pink hair with blue ends loght blue eyes a green striped shirt black pants is kinda and innocent and childlike and is lesbian and is 5 minutes younger than strawberry
Strawberry- strawberry red haie with brown eyes weres a blue long sleeved shirt with a red and black balloon and a pink baloon a black skirt shes calm collected and mature and protective of her sisfer and is straight
Ohirume, Yugo, and Seishin: *perk up with frowns and share a worried look*
Yugo: Well, the thing is ... we're not looking to recruit any OC's for our chats.
Seishin: When Rob said he'd probably mess up their personalities, he was mostly trying to be polite. :(
Ohirume: *waves hand defensively* It's nothing against any of you guys, but I already have 18 OCs clouding up my mind to begin with. And I've had most of them up in my head before my account was even created -
Yugo, Yukiro Seishin, Omega, Faux, Trix, Gem, Gem's Pikachu, Soot, Illavera, Mizuro, Nuevo, Pike, Luke, Laura, Shadow Pearl, Shadow Peridot, Amber Mewtwo, and now Electra.
Seishin: Regardless, we'd still be happy to continue doing OC to OC chats through private messaging and/or the regular Comment Responses. :)
Ohirume: *bows apologetically* I know that probably isn't what you wanted to hear and I'm sorry.
I hate disappointing people.
I hope you can make a tv tropes oe wiki for this story
Ohirume: Like I said, I've been considering that. But I wouldn't even know where to begin in making one.
Omega: Rob doesn't exactly fall into the category of genius.
and whu do you worry about your art skills
Ohirume: Because I've seen my own work. I'm bad at art.
anywho keep up ghe good work and i hope you took my suggestions about chuggaaconroy also i dont know jojo so that reference is lost on me anywho keep things fresh
Deadpool; you guys are awesome
Seishin: *Homer Simpson voice* WOO HOO!
Pinkie pie: mabey you can do a deadpool x me story
Ohirume: *nervous chuckle* I'm, uh, not too sure about that.
MLP stuff isn't exactly one of my interests.
Anna: i enjoy the stort uh i doubt it but will you include lgbtq in this story
Gem: What does igbaq mean?
Omega: *annoyed sigh* Gem, it's LGBTQ. Meaning you.
Gem: Human/Gem hybrids?
Faux: More like your relationship status.
Gem: Oh.
...
Ohirume: Gem is my take at Pikashipping ... it was a phase and the reason I'm debating as to whether I should write his story.
Gem: WHAT?!
Omega: Calm down, rocks. You still exist in Rob's psychotic mind.
Strawberry: keep up the good work
Laura: *smiling* Okay.
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From RT89 (Random-ish chapter 6):
(The comment has been split up as follows. Not for length, but for convenience)
I absolutely love these! Bloody hilarious; dang out of Motrin, hey Seishin, got a morphine?
Seishin: Sorry. No morphine. :(
But we do have a Fooly Cooly Fanboy who's also fluent in Trading Card games. :D
Mizuro: CHAAAAAAAANCE!
You guys must have are either genius or found an emoji dictionary.
Omega: The "Emoji dictionary" is the internet. Also, they're emoticons.
We're not sure if FanFiction allows real emojis.
Seishin: Yeah look - 😝😭😫😐👍
... HOLY ####, that actually worked?! 😳
😃 BEST DAY EVER!
Omega: Rob, what have you done?
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Seishin: We just tested it in the dummy character tester document. 😁
Again, BEST! DAY! EVER!
Omega: Once again. Rob. What?! Have?! You?! Done?!
****Continued message from RT89; requested via private message****
Ha! Thanks for the laugh, its been a stressful day and i needed it. I asked for morphine because i was trying to continue a running joke, last time i mentioned taking painkillers for laughing to hard. Seriously, you all, or plural if this is just one writer, consistently have me doubled over with laughter or in awe of you creative genius.
Omega: Not sure if that "you all, or plural if this is just one writer" was a typo or auto-'correct,' but whatever.
Rob is the only real one among us.
Yugo: *nods* Counting Trix, Soot, and now Electra, Ohirume has 18 OCs. And most of us 'existed' before Rob's FanFiction account did.
Omega: 19.
Yugo: what?
Omega: 19. You forgot Omni.
Omni: I maybe be a part of Sato-
Omega: *clears throat*
Omni: Omega, but I am still my own life form.
Seishin: Robby-boy is actually just THIS messed up is in the head. 😝
Ohirume: Headaches, remember?
Illavera: Hey, wait! What about Hidari?!
Ohirume: 20 … wait, does Clefairy count as an OC?
Your creating a masterpiece and i can't wait to see where you'll take.
Ohirume: Thank you for the support, RT.
Omega: *sweat drops; deadpanned* Masterpiece? Really?
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From johnymike98 (Trix chapter 45):
Hey i have me an account now so pm whenever you want to talk story is great keep up the good work
Seishin: Yup.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 45):
Can you please not make Bulbasaur evolve I like him a lot better as he his. By the way is Electra staying on the the team permanently.
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Klipper
Ohirume: Bulbasaur evolving is something I'm still debating with myself.
We've still got about ten … uh, nine episodes until then.
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Seishin: *Tribore(Final Space) voice* Is Electra staying permanently? That's a good question. A veeeery good question.
Yugo: We've already decided on something for her. *smirk* You'll just have to wait and see what it is.
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From Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 45):
(Given the length of this comment, I split it up as follows)
This is going to be a general review of this fan fiction. At the time of writing this, chapter 40 has not been made yet, so please take that with consideration. There will be spoilers for chapters 1-39, so if anyone who is reading this before diving into the story, their's your warning.
Ohirume: *wide eyed shock* Wait. This is- *bright smile* HA! An actual in-depth story analysis!
Omega: *smirk* This ought to be good.
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Overall, this fan fiction is pretty good. I will be dividing my comments into separate sections so it's easier to separate my pros and cons.
Yugo: Fine by us.
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Pros
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Story:
There really isn't much to talk about the story aspect of this fan fiction. The main reason is because it's just alternated story elements from the original anime. And that's perfectly fine with me. Usually fan fictions try to create their own story with the characters they are righting with without looking at episodes to try and reshape them, and try to make their own stories.
Ohirume: *chuckles nervously* Yeah. That type of creative thinking isn't really my strong suit. The Pikachu tribe arc was probably my biggest personal challenge.
*perks up with regular smile* But, in all fairness, most of my inspiration comes from other re-writes like DarkFoxKit's "The Child of Mew," Dragosrule18's "When One Door Closes, two More Open" and arielrapunzel1250's "A Child of Two Worlds."
Every advantage that their Ash's have is given a reason and makes sense. There's a logical and practical start and an execution that keeps things from going out of hand.
Omega: Rob still has long ways to go until he even be on par with them. *annoyed groan* But … he is trying to improve.
Ohirume: *stares at Omega in shock* That might be the nicest thing you've ever said about story writing abilities.
Omega: Don't push it.
Sometimes this can be good, other times it can be bad.
Yugo: *sigh* We hear ya, Guy.
Seishin: We've definitely seen the "it can be bad" examples. 😒
Ohirume: Yeah. Those over cramped, Ash is as OP as possible for no logical reason, everyone catches everything with no explanation stories are what I'm trying to avoid with Trix.
Yugo: Ashes of the Past doesn't count in the 'catches everything' flaw because Saphroneth gives all of them a reason.
Ohirume: I mean, Trix has a grand total of two more Pokémon than he had in the original series. And that's not counting Mankey and Muk sticking around.
This one, to me at lest doesn't really follow that structure to a T, and decides to reshape original episodes to fit it's own story. I like that; it gives the story a unique feel to it compared to others. Now I do have issues with some of the rewrites, but I'll get to that in a bit. The writing is also pretty good. Though do take this with a grain of salt, since I'm still in school and couldn't right a good story to save my life. But from what I've read (both from this story and others), it's probably one of the best writings I've seen in a fan fiction.
Ohirume: *soft smile* Thanks. Luckily, I've found a new proofreading method that's really been helping me nullify mistakes.
Omega: Yeah. It only came forty chapters late.
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Characters:
Personally speaking I don't dislike any of the characters. I think that has to do with the fact that most characters int the story act just as they did from the official series. The only one who's changed is Ash, which again I have no problem with. The original Ah was fine, but sometimes I felt like grew much depth as much as other protagonists, and also came across as idiotic at times, a la Black and White.
Faux and Gem: *grumble*
Meanwhile this Ash actually knows what hes doing and never came across as boring or felt like a Mary Sue. There were at times were he came across as a tiny bit too knowledge able, but not to the point were it becomes degrading. And in all honesty, I kind of prefer this Ash over the current Ash by a tiny bit. As for his pokemon, they two are also pretty good. Almost every pokemon of Ash's team have a personality that fits in with their anime counterpart, without having one seem unbelievable. The only real change of character was Pidgeotto, which I'm now complaining about because she didn't really have much for her going in the anime.
Ohirume: I know, right?!
Seishin: She never scored a clean win in a battle. Not once.
Yugo: *glares* Hey! That's not true! What about … Um- *sorrowful frown* Oh, Pidgeot.
Also, if you decided to give Ash a Clefairy because it was originally going to be the mascot of the franchise, then kudos to you.
Ohirume: Thanks. Though, "The Child of Mew" beat me to it.
As for Soot, at first I thought that she didn't think she served much purpose other than being a translator for the human characters. I still think she still doesn't to a degree, but her personality and dialogue negates that so I'm fine with her inclusion. Her powers kind of came out of no where, but I quickly adjusted to it, and learn to appreciate both her character and her powers.
Seishin: Sugoi! 😃
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**Major Spoilers**
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So making Ash half Osmosian and having the change lens was a surprise to be sure, but a welcomed one. Not only does Ash being an Osmosian explain why he's so knowledgeable (partially), but also explores the concept of what would happen if an Osmosian actually did get the Omnitrix.
Ohirume: Technically, you're not wrong. Though, Trix wasn't born half Osmosian.
The change lens were kind of a shock and kind of degrade Ashes uniqueness from the group (not saying it has to change, just pointing it out), but at least they are just lenses and not completely different Omnitrix's, because that would be too much.
Yugo: *chuckles* Yeah. We really can't argue that.
Ohirume: *soft smile* Still, I did try to give them a reason for existing … even if that reason was 'Ash wanted to.'
Faux: *smiles* Trix is a kind and sympathetic person who never let the Omnitrix's power go to his head. He didn't like making people who knew about the watch jealous of his abilities. So, he made the Lenses as an equalizer.
Yugo: *shrugs* As much as they could be with all the glitches.
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Cons
Omega: *wicked grin* Now, we're getting to the good stuff.
Ohirume: *gulps*
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Personality Glitches:
Yea, I'm not a fan of these things. First off, why do the alien forms have personality glitches, but the I forms don't. I'm not saying give every form Ash a distinct personality, but at least be consistent. The only real personality glitch that I can think of from Ben 10 was Rath, but other than that, their wasn't any. Also, while Rath's personality made him stand out from the other forms and made him a fan favorite, these feel like they're their for the sake of being their. Some are fine like Overheat and Quick Attack (even though I think it's stupid), but I no reason for Frenzy Plant to be shouting plant puns. I don't care if it was made for laughs, it's just stupid and it's isn't really a personality glitch (same with Hammer Arm). I get what you were going with Calm Mind, but Grey Matter rarely talked like this in the show. In all honesty I just hope you fix the glitches once you get future in the story, because they just come across as annoying and unneeded (unless it's Rath).
Ohirume: *sad smile* Yeah. I hear ya.
The only real reason I thought of the Personality Glitches was to give the aliens a foley in comparison to the Pokémon forms. Something to make Ash not want to use them unless the situation became that desperate.
Also, Aliens are OP as **** compared to any Pokémon below Pseudo-Legendary.
Unlike the Lenses and the Osmosian form being the Power Integration Trigger, the glitches weren't something I had planned before the start.
*nervous chuckle* I probably could have thought that through a little more.
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On a side note, why are their two Kangaskhan forms? Why would the Omnitrix create a prime form that has a weak, inferior form. I guest that you were trying to make it unique, but now it's caused me to question on why the Omnitrix did this. Also the excuse that Soot provided doesn't help. I would also question why you didn't make the form female, but I can understand why, even though it doesn't make sense. Can't get the rating higher than it already is.
Ohirume: *sigh* Again. Can't argue.
My mind basically played it out as a combination of 'The mother is born with the child in the games, so the species is basically made like that. That makes sense … right?', 'Adding a multiform-form without Ditto or Echo Echo.', and 'Have the Omnitrix yield a second revolutionary advancement in the Pokémon world.' The first one was Inheritance.
But, primarily, it was meant to be comedic.
Still, I agree. The logic and reasoning could use some work.
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Self Inserts and the Forth Wall:
Seishin: 🙁
Ohirume: Wait, what? I've never done a self-insert.
Okay, I get that they're trying to be funny, but they just don't work for me.
Seishin: *whimpers* 😞
The only times it actually worked was when Team Rocket was doing it (because they are the only in universe characters that I can see breaking the fourth wall, or when your Ocs/Inserts comment in bold during the story).
Omega: *nods with calm expression* Fair.
But when you create a chapter that's just your Ocs/Inserts doing stuff or sections of a chapter where they cause events to happen in the story, it just comes across as distracting and a waste of time. I'm sorry, but when I reading a fan fiction that involves Ash having an Omnitrix, I don't expect me to question why your Ocs/Inserts are causing events and making Jojo references.
Seishin: 😆 *whining* But Jojokes are fuuuuun.
Omega: Feel free to ignore Yukiro.
My suggestion is have them do their stuff while watching the story (bold writing), or when you reply your comments.
Ohirume: I completely understand. And, as you've seen by now, that will be the way things work for a good while.
Still, I at least tried to give the inserts a reason for happening … okay, except for Trix's 'nightmare' in the A.J. chapter, Yukiro's cameo on the St. Anne, Omega and Faux trashing Pokémon Land, and Gastly using the Arlequins at Maiden's Peak.
Omega: *glances at Ohirume; sweat dropping* Isn't that half of them?
Ohirume: *ashamed sigh* Yeah. Anyway.
Yukiro's influence in 'Gym Psycho 100' was done to get Haunter to Sabrina. He did this because Trix and co. weren't going to Lavender Town, Trix would've known better than to get a Poison/Ghost-type to battle Sabrina, he already had Soot, and -overall- the episode would've been bland. It'd be bland because Trix doesn't scare easy and got hit by a metal platform in Pewter without getting so much as a sprain. Add that to his electric conductivity, and a chandelier wouldn't have, uh … 'hurt' him like it did in the anime. If it even hit him, for that matter.
'Fighting Alpine' was done to keep Mankey on Ash's team. Team ALPN just went overboard with their … everything. Sorry.
Faux, Luke, Pike, Laura: *annoyed groan*
Ohirume: If Mankey -possibly Primeape by the end of the chapter- wanted to leave, Trix wouldn't've argued. He wants what's best for his team. Even if it means leaving him. Butterfree left because mating season was unavoidable.
'Into the SafaЯi … Zone' was to add on the thirty tauros to Ash's account and to keep everyone from over expanding the **** out of their teams like in a handful of other stories I've read. Though, in hindsight, I probably could have spared a few non-Tauros Pokémon for the group.
'Paras, Parasect, Parasyte' was done to … get that bland episode over with. And introduce the Omni Force.
But, yes. You're right.This is a Pokémon/Ben 10 story.
We're done with the confusing cameos for a good while.
Gem: *pouts* But-
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"Crossover"
I know that you said that you we trying to figure out how to incorporate more Ben 10 stuff in the story, but as of now, this isn't a true crossover. When I think of a true crossover, I think of the Sonic and Megaman comics, or Kuro the Artist's Five Years later. To be fair, they aren't creating a universe from the ground up like you are, but my point still stands.
Ohirume: *shrugs* Yeah. That sounds about right.
I actually have a few ideas on how you could incorporate the Ben 10 universe into the story, but this review is taking a lot of space, so that were I'm going to stop for now.
Ohirume: *smiling* Yeah. By all means, go for it.
I'm always open to take suggestions and I do appreciate advice.
Yugo: *whisper* They already posted the idea.
Ohirume: Well … yeah. But what I said still stands.
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I'd give this fan fiction a solid 7.5/10; pretty good, but has a lot of potential.
Omega: *deadpanned* Are you sure you're not being a bit generous?
Ohirume: *Rolls eyes before looking at readers with a smile* Thank you Just Some Guy. This was nice to read, and I really appreciate the feedback. Even the cons section … namely, because it was primarily constructive criticism. *soft chuckle*
Yukiro: 😠 Constructive?! They dissed my sense of humor!
Omega: Again. Feel free to ignore Yukiro.
Ohirume: Yeah. I'm agreeing with Omega on this one.
Yukiro: 😤
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 46):
good chap
Omega: Called i- wait, what?
Illavera: *blinks in surprise* We actually got a 'good chap'? Not 'decent'?
Team ALPN: *annoyed groan*
Ohirume: Uh … anyway. Thank y-
Seishin: Ricky Spanish.
Faux: What?
Seishin: *suddenly wearing full body gray suit, gray shirt with 'Albuquerque Zoo Discovery Center written on it' written on it with a giraffe, lion, and elephant on it, red leather vest, black leather pants, and brown wig with the sideburns shaved off*
Ricky Spanish.
Ohirume: Oh ****.
Laura: I- I don't get-
Seishin/Ricky Spanish: *suddenly and forcefully pulls Laura into a kiss*
American Dad Ricky Spanish whisper lady: Riiicky Spaaaanish…
Omni force, Faux, and Luke: *slack jawed, shocked stares*
Faux: *furious glare* Dude! What the Yvel?!
Laura: *pushes Seishin away and gags* Oh dear Arc!
Seishin/Ricky Spanish: *deep voice* I'm Ricky Spanish.
**cut away image of Seishin/Ricky Spanish driving an armored bank car through baby panda hospital**
American Dad Ricky Spanish whisper lady: Riiicky Spaaaanish…
Everyone except Ohirume and Seishin/Ricky Spanish: *looks up at cut away line in horror*
Mizuro: Wha-
Ohirume: *shameful groan* I cannot believe I just typed that.
Seishin/Ricky Spanish: Well, get ready for another! Ricky Spanish.
**cut away image of Seishin/Ricky Spanish dumping a bucket of heavily expired milk all over someone's breakfast **
American Dad Ricky Spanish whisper lady: Riiicky Spaaaanish…
Nuevo: *dumfound* W- why?
Illavera: *raised brow* Huh … still messed up but tamer than the other one.
Seishin/Ricky Spanish: Really? Well then, fourth times the-
Ohirume: NO! *snap*
*pop*
Seishin: *regular clothing* Okay.
Omega: *wide eyed* What just happened?
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From Alpha Drache (Trix chapter 46):
Ich liebe diese FF, ich hätte nie gedacht das mich eine FF so fesseln kann. Ich meine sie ist wirklich perfekt ( meine Meinung ) als Deutscher sind gute FF so schwer zu finden.
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Übrigens tut mir wirklich Leid das ich nicht auf Englisch geschrieben habe aber schon mein Deutsch ist so mies sowohl Grammatikalisch als auch von der Rechtschreibung her das meine Texte nur mit korrigieren fon Google einiger Maßen lesbar sind.
Ohirume: … does anyone here speak German?
Nuevo: *looks at Ohirume warily* You do realize who you're 'talking' to. Right?
Ohirume: … Google translate, it is. *starts typing*
Mizuro: Ugh. Rob, just stop now. Google translate never works right.
Gem: What's google? Some weird brand of goggles?
Luke: It's a search engine that lets you find almost anything on the internet and is only one of many. Translate is a faulty part of it that … well, translates words or sentences between other languages.
Gem: Oooooh.
Illavera: *looks at Luke in confusion* How do you know-
Ohirume: Translate just finished and … woah.
Nuevo: *annoyed sigh* How bad is it?
Ohirume: It's … not.
Mizuro: *perks up in surprise* What? *runs over to look at screen and jaw drops* What the ****?!
Ohirume: I uh … Just … wow. Does someone mind reading this?
Yugo: *raises hand* I got it. *walks over to screen and eyes widen* Woah. *shakes it off*
I love this FF, I never thought that an FF could tie me up like this. I mean it is really perfect ( my opinion ) as a German, good FFs are so hard to find.
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Incidentally, I am really sorry that I did not write in English but my German is so bad both grammatical and spelling that my texts can only be read by Google to some extent.
Illavera: It- it actually translated that well? And you're not paraphrasing?
Seishin: *Shakes head* He's really not. *points up at translated portion* That was copied and pasted directly from Translate. ?
Ohirume: It's freaky right? *shakes it off* Anyway, thank you Alpha Drache. I'm glad you like it.
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From Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 46):
(The comment has been split up as follows. Not for length, but for convenience)
Ehh...
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6/10
Still not a fan of the OC team taking over, but at least you're not doing it for a good while now.
Omega: *thumbs up*
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I also still have a good idea on how to implement Ben 10 characters into the story, but considering how late it is and how long my previous post was, I'll say them when I think the time is right. AKA later during the week.
Ohirume: *grins with thumbs up* Yup. We're getting to that comment in a bit.
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From Wizzer96 (Trix chapter 46):
Good chapter! I especially liked the wholesome moment with charmander
Ohirume: *soft smile* Aww. Thanks.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 46):
A somewhat cute filler chapter, I look forward to Electra's decision. Almost thought you had the team go there to take my advice for Gem from my last PM.
Ohirume: Actually, I've been trying to do an Omni Force chapter for a while.
I already passed up doing that for the Kangaskhan and Bike Gang chapters and I decided against the upcoming Snorlax(well … it was upcoming by the time this response was typed up) and Dark City.
I ended up choosing Paras because that episode was ... boring.
Omega: *nods* Yeah. But luckily, Rob wisened up and didn't have us overtake the whole **** thing.
That A story/B ... well, I guess you could call it a 'story' gimmick actually helped a bit.
Illavera: *smiles with thumbs up* We even got a 'good chap' from B.F.P. and a 6/10 from Just Some Guy.
Mizuro: *sly smirk* As opposed to buterfly's 'decent chap' for Team ALPN's chapter.
Faux: HEY!
Laura: We couldn't have been THAT bad!
Gem: *pouts* And are we seriously not doing a second Shadow Brigade chapter?
Mewtwo: *frowns* Yeah. I've been itching for some action.
Seishin: 😃 Oh! I can take care of that!
Mewtwo: *eyes widened in shock* What do you mean by-
Seishin: *Stanley Pines voice* LEFT HOOK!
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From IMBADATNAMES (Trix chapter 39):
Nuevo, if there is any consolation for your trauma from TTGo, the hour-long special The Night Begins To Shine is actually an amazing thing that even the most die-hard haters agree was epic. Watch that and your trauma will be washed away.
Seriously, they fight a techno-remix dragon with Ceelo and Fallout Boys and it's not the least bit cringey at all. That fight was epic!
Nuevo: *groans while rubbing temples* Yeah. That was part of what Rob loaded into me.
That special wasn't bad, but it got drowned out by … everything else.
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From IMBADATNAMES (Trix chapter 42):
I'm guessing that human-like transformation was human DNA from Ben's reality. Ooh, wonder if there was any technopath genetics in there?
Gem: *raised brow* Wasn't that already revealed to be the Osmo-guy?
Omega: Osmosian and yes. But, like the thing with the Talpaedan a while back, that won't stop people from guessing before reading ahead.
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From IMBADATNAMES (Trix chapter 42):
Scrap what I said before.
Osmosian.
Omega: Nor will it stop them from reading the FanFiction account's profile.
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From Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 46):
(Given the length of this comment, I split it up as follows)
Might as well get this over with. Truthfully, I was waiting for the next chapter, but considering that hasn't happened yet, I say it right now.
Ohirume: Yeah. Fair enough.
Like I've said before, I post new chapters on Saturday at midnight if the new chapter's ready.
My current average is about two to three weeks between posts. One week if I'm really feeling it.
My ideal is that this happens after Omniverse's conclusion, because that Ben is the ideal Ben that can work best in the story. After creating the Omnitrix, Azmuth's been working on a secret project that no one knows about until it's revealed to be a type of dimensional teleporter. Unlike Professor Paradox (who as far as I know can only travel through different realities and times in the Ben 10 universe) this devise allows the user to travel true alternate dimensions completely separate from the user's. After sending a handful of drones, Azmuth discovers the world of Pokemon, containing creatures with powers that could rival the being in his universe. Fascinated, he decides to collect the DNA of these creatures as well as translate the language of them, which hes discovers is universal for them. The DNA only DNA that he collect is that of any final evolution, any final regional forms (having both versions of Ninetails, and having both the original Farfetch'd and Sirfetch'd to name some examples), and having most of the legendaries and mythicals. The only DNA signatures that he doesn't get are Arceus (because he was resting during this time (assuming that the film is canon)) Genesect (hasn't been created), and Mewtwo (same with Genesect). Through his studies, he also discovers the supposed phantom pokemon and that he has a device similar to the Omnitrix. Having curiosity take over him, he decides to travel to this world to see how someone that's not an alternate Ben handles the device that's said to be one of the most powerful weapons in his universe. When he doesn't return however, Galvan Prime decides to contact Ben, Gwen, and Kevin to locate him and bring him back. In doing so, Ben is given the DNA of the creatures that Azmuth obtained, and give them smaller universal translators that contain the pokemon language, and that functions similar (not exactly) like a hearing aid. Now, how Ben and his friends meet Ash and the gang, is entirely in the air. Maybe Ben encounters Ash and company while battling the Rocket trio, and Ben being a hero, decides to step in and helps out and discovers that Ash also has an Omnitrix (info Amuth never stated to any other Galvan). Or maybe, Ashes pokemon get separated (again), and encounter Ben and company, then eventually meet back with Ash. Or the old route of the groups having a misunderstanding of one another and fight. These are just some ideas of how to get the character to meet up and have a mini arc like the pikachu tribe. You could also have Ben and Kevin be like mentors for Ash. Ben because he's had experience using the Omnitrix, and Kevin becuse he's alo an Osmosian and doesn't want Ash to go insane with too much power just like he did. Eventually, thay discover that Azmuth's been captured by Team Rocket, and they've been using his knowledge for a secret project that only a few members of the organization know. After Azmuth is safed, no one knows what exactly what Team Pocket was planning for Azmuth's knowledge. The only thing Azuth and everyone elso know is that the project was called "M.2". I think everyone can figure out what that means.
Ohirume: This is … pretty good. It's logical, it's believable, and it even plays into the story in a way that doesn't turn everything into 'Hey! This is happening because it's happening!' cluster****.
Still, there are a few things. Though, not anything big.
1. When this happens.
I actually already have something in mind for the Mewtwo movie.
Yugo: *scratches head* Plus, we're pretty deep into Kanto. Johto or the Orange Islands might be easier.
Ohirume: *smiles and raises a finger* Which actually does play a bit into what you said in a later review.
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2. Pokémon inclusions in B10.
I like the translator, but I'm not too sure about adding Pokémon into Ben's Omnitrix. It just seems like a bit … much.
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3. Ben and Kevin mentor Ash
Don't forget, Trix has had this watch since he was five. And he's raising Soot for just as long. Dude's mature for ten-year-old.
Main point, I'm not exactly sure what Tennyson would be able to teach Ash. Open to suggestions, though.
Yugo: Also, Trix isn't really an Osmosian. The Omnitrix has been loading the usable DNA into him through Power Integration. Which was created using the Osmosian DNA.
Ohirume: *shrugs* Yeah. He can't absorb from outside sources like Kevin or Aggregor.
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Overall, I like this idea of adding Ben, Gwen, and Kevin into the story, albeit temporarily. I just may have to push the timing if I go with this.
Also, I'm still waiting on another "True crossover" idea from someone I've been Private Messaging.
Yugo: We won't say who it is in case that person prefers to remain private.
Seishin: 😃 But, if you *pointing to reader in question* want to say it yourself, we won't argue.
Omega: *Looking around at every other reader* Just, be warned that we will call you out as a liar in the next Comment Response if you're not the person we're talking about.
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That basically t, but I do have some questions for you guys.
1. Will Ash get more pokemon that he never got in the original series like Clefairy?
Ohirume: Eh. Still thinking it over. Trix does have a full team right now.
2. Is it possibel to introduce Rath and Gax as two of Ash's alien forms? GAx could have an appearance similar to how he appeared in the reboot, have his name be "Sucker Punch", and his persoality glitch be pride. Rath's name could be "Outrage" while his glitch could be...well, how Rath acts in Ben 10.
Ohirume: I haven't considered Gax until now, but Chimera Sui Generis DNA has been verified to be in the non-reboot Omnitrixes. So, that could happen. Also, Sucker Punch and a pride glitch make a lot of sense.
Rath would actually keep his canon name. Because he named himself in the classic, 23 timeline, reboot, and I think the Mad Ben timeline. I can't guarantee that last one, though.
3. Who would win in a fight, Alien X or Arceus?
Seishin: Well, I once put Arceus in a headlock, so probably me. 😝
Yugo: Didn't you also get vaporized by Arceus?
Seishin: Different Arceus, but yes. Though, to be fair, I wasn't jovial fourth wall breaker yet. I was … Yukai. 😞
4. Please have Animo appear in some way, shape, or form. Having him experimenting on pokemon DNA and fusing them together is something that really has potential. Maybe intro ducing him in a Jhoto arc would work, being the main antagonist of the story.
Ohirume: *frowns* I'm not really sure about B10 villains popping up in the Pokémon world.
The only difference between this Pokémon world and the canon one is the Omnitrix, what it's helped create, and the biology-based stuff I've been using.
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That's all I really got to say. I'm sorry if I came across in a negative way in these posts. This is just something that I wanted to get out of my mind.
Ohirume: *soft chuckle while waving hand* Hey. It's fine. Like I said in your in-depth review, I really appreciate constructive criticism.
Besides, I get my daily dose of hate from Omega.
Omega: Rob is incapable of proofreading without a text reader program.
Ohirume: Case and point.
I wish you the best of luck writing this story. Hope the next chapter is just as good as the rest of the story.
Ohirume: *soft smile* Thanks.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 46):
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Pokemon the new series is changing so much with ash getting a Riolu, Dragonite, and a Gengar it's giving ever one so much hype.
Team ALPN and Second Shadow Brigade: *Wide eyed shock* WAIT, WHAT?!
Ohirume: *snickers* Yeah. It's like nearly every FanFiction writer's dream finally became canon.
Yugo: Because it did.
I still don't know if your going to the Galar region cause if you do your going to haft to leave the Rilou from Sinnoh there cause with everything that's happening in the new series
Ohirume: No, I won't. Just because the series made it happen doesn't mean I can't play out what I have in mind for the Aura Sphere Riolu.
Faux: My cousin?
Seishin: In your timeline, yes.
😏 Although, in Trix's timeline, he's … *looks at Ohirume in confusion* You're not gonna stop me?
Ohirume: *smirk* Are you actually going to say it if I don't?
Seishin: 😑
I'm sure lot's of people want you know to go into the 8th generation now. Cant't wait when it comes out in english.
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Klipper
Yugo: We're still in Gen 1. At the rate we're going, Galar/Pokémon Journeys is years away.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 46):
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Just to clarify about the deviantart account I never said anything about you being the drawer you can send out a commission for somebody else to draw for you.
Ohirume: Sure, but I'm not really looking to hire someone for artwork.
Omega: Feel free to call him a cheapskate.
Ohirume: Also, I am NOT asking someone to do it for free. I've seen enough R/Choosingbeggars -namely voiceovers on YouTube- to become thoroughly ****** off at the mere thought of doing that.
Seishin: Althoooough. 😏 There is a picture of me out there on the internet. 😄 Bonus points to whoever can-
Omega: Will you stop with the points?! They're not even for anything!
Seishin: 😑
Ohirume: Yukiro was serious about the picture, though.
By the way whens Charmander going to evolve into Charmeleon cause the place where he is supposed to evolve was taken care of by your OC's.
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Klipper
Gem: No, it wasn't. Charmander evolved after he battled all of those exeggutor.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 47):
Good chap
Ohirume: Thank y-
Mizuro: *strumming in a way that somehow makes his guitar sound like a lute*
Seishin: *Playing a flute*
Dear journal I'll sing of a questor of quests
The Hero-est hero is Tigtone!
He fights for the KingQueen, more better then best
He fights for proclaiming he's Tigtone!
Ohirume: … So, you're just gonna sing The Filk of Tigtone for this one?
Gem: *raised brow* KingQueen?
Seishin: *Tigtone voice* QUIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET!
Let us continue finishing of this song SO THAT WE CAN BE DONE WITH SINGING!
Mizuro: *Smiles with raised finger* But feel free to react.
Yugo: And believe it or not, there were zero typos in what Yukiro said.
Seishin: Forget that he burned down your forest and food,
Illavera: *eyes widen* Wait, what?
Seishin: Brush off all the bruises and bones that protrude,
Nuevo: *Frowns with scared look* uh-
Seishin: Ignore that your house-homes are all barbecued
The world is at stake for Tigtone!
Luke: It sounds like the world is at stake because of him.
Omega: Just … let them finish. Trust me, that's not even the beginning.
Seishin: *more flute*
A worthier questerer, Festus' bane
With Helpy to help-ie him, Tigtone
He quests with his cunning, his strength, and his name
A sidequest! He'll take it! He's Tigtone!
Who cares if he conjured a dead, giant wizard
So what is he set off a flood, or a blizzard
Just clean up the glass of the windows he shattered
Don't make a mistake hire Tigtone
Your bones may all break 'cause of Tigtone
He once saved a snake-lady Tigtone
The world is at stake for the *all music stops* mightiest champion of all the lands, defeater of the evil sultan Rio Pio, co-recipient of the giant's golden-heart enchantment, and vanquisher of the seven-headed serpent of Kloom.
He's Tigtooooooooooone!
*triangle ding*
Laura: I, uh … wow.
Illavera: *looks back at Omega worriedly* And you met this psycho?
Omega: *looking around for something while speaking casually* Yeah. He pushed me through a magic door of unknowable infinite cosmic terror. *looks at Yukiro* Where's Faux?
Seishin: 😏 That's part 2.
Mizuro: *wide eyed shock* Wait! What about a terror door?!
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From Wizzer96 (Trix chapter 47):
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uh...i didnt know at all about that peculiar interaction with the everstone and evolutionary stones, and i've been a pokemon fan for...i think around 14 years.
Guess it's true that you learn something new everyday.
Ohirume: *chuckles* Trust me. You're not the only one. Most stories I've read don't really know that fact either.
Yugo: *shrugs* We just found that out a while back on Bulbapedia.
Seishin: Still, a few stories have come up with a pretty interesting alternative to their interaction.
"Evolution" by Jaxxon -AMAZING story by the way- actually thought up the concept that Everstones negate other Evolutionary Stones. 😳 Like, to the point that finding them in the same cave makes the Evo Stones infinitely useless.
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anyway, good chapter! oh, and i also reread the story (quarantine is making me crazier than usual) and with my limited language i havent found any kind of big error. \_(ツ)_/
Ohirume: Thanks. Still, I know that every chapter up to Pika tribe pt3 could use some work; unless it already has a '(fix)'.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 47):
Sweet chapter, loved your portrayal of Eevee. Misty finally got her wish. Can't wait to see where we go next.
Ohirume: Thank you, RT.
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From RocKHord (Trix chapter 47):
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This is...This is...The best thing ...The best thing what i ever you for this ...
Seishin: *blinks in surprise* Did you just experience one of Electra's joy overloads?
Never...Never stop to write this manificient thing.
Ohirume: *soft smile* Trust me. I don't intend to stop.
I think it will be more cooler if you add that he can transform into legendary about fan pokemons(some looks very coolg)My RESPECT
Yugo: Trix is undoubtably getting a Mythical and/or Legendary form. It'd be pretty hard to believe if he didn't.
Can't say the same about him catching one.
Ohirume: *nods* Canon Ash has met every Mythical and Legendary-
Seishin: Raikou and Marshadow. "I Choose You" Movie doesn't count in this case.
Ohirume: almost every Mythical and Legendary Pokémon there is and gained the trust of a lot of them.
While joining his team may be a little farfetched, one or more of them entrusting their form to him wouldn't be that unbelievable.
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Yugo: *raised brow* When you say 'fan Pokémon,' do you mean fan favorites or fan made?
Seishin: 😋 If you mean fan made, I'll probably be using some of those in the league. Like Fiddlyfaddlybiddlybaddlydiddlydoodlyhiddlyhoodly.
Yugo: Unfortunately, Rob won't be including anything out of this world's definition of ordinary … without our influence. Namely, Yukiro's.
Seishin: WRRYYYYYYYYYY!
Ohirume: If you mean fan favorites, then … *shrugs* yeah, probably.
I'm open to suggestions on which one(s).
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From Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 47):
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A solid 8/10, enough said. Just a really solid remake of the original episode.
Omega: *deadpanned and sweat dropping* Still being generous, I see.
Ohirume: *glares at Omega* Zip it. *looks back at readers with a smile* Thank you, Guy.
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Although I am curious, what is your thoughts on the new anime?
Ohirume: First, this-
************SPOILER ALERT – INCLUDES INFORMATION ON EPISODES 17 AND 22************
It's pretty good. I mean, Ash's new team speaks for itself.
The anime strays away from the norm in a way that isn't as … odd as the Sun & Moon series. All of the episodes so far are kind of filler-based but still enjoyable.
The only thing I'm not a huge fan of is Go. And not because he's a second protagonist. I thought them doing that was neat.
Go does play out the slogan of "gotta catch 'em all." That's something that hasn't been executed in the anime in … ever. I think. I liked it at first.
What I'm not a fan of is that Go seems to be built on the premise of 'what if a Pokémon Go player was a real trainer in the anime?' It sounds fun and might be a cool premise of an Isekai-ish Pokémon Fanfiction. But it doesn't really fit with the series we're used to.
Go doesn't seem to care about his Pokémon in the way Ash or most of his friends or rivals do. He doesn't hurt or abuse them, but he doesn't seem to see them as more than a goal or a steppingstone towards Mew.
Scorbunny … uh, Raboot's disobedience likely comes from the fact that Go didn't support him or even attempt to help when the Rabbit Pokémon wanted to learn a Fire-type attack. Go tried to let him down easy by saying that he didn't need to learn a Fire attack and saying that everyone has their limits. But that only made it worse.
I mean, think about it. Raboot wouldn't give Go the time of day before the events of ep22. It wasn't until after Go actively tried to help the Fire-type that his 'rebellious stage' went from 'don't you have something better to do?' to 'dude, you're embarrassing me.'
On the downside, Go didn't really seem to realize he did something right in Raboot's eyes. And, by default, he still doesn't realize why Raboot started rebelling in the first place. Go just thinks think the big guy has started growing out of that 'rebellious phase' and hasn't learned much of anything.
Regardless, it's progress. But Go still has a way to … well, go and he could stand to learn a thing or two about empathy.
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******END SPOILERS******
So, not bad.
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From Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 47):
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Quick question, I noticed that the episode after the eevee one was wake up Snorlax. So is Ash going to capture him or are you going to save that for the Orange Island Arc?
Omega: We'd answer if that chapter hadn't already been posted by the time this response was posted.
I ask this because that arc isn't really seen as a well made one so I was wondering if it was possible to skip it and go to Jhoto. Granted you would also have to try and fit in Lapras and Tracy into the standard series but I think it's possible.
Ohirume: I was actually planning to do the Orange Islands as a … I dunno 'pseudo-arc?' *shrugs*
*Smirk with raised finger* But now you've got me thinking. What if your true crossover idea took place during that arc to spice things up?
You said it yourself, Orange Islands doesn't have the best reputation in terms of quality. But, doing the cross event there would give the entire storyline more of a purpose.
Also, do the pokemon and people of your world eat pokemon? This is just something I'm asking for clarification and will probably feel like an idiot after asking that
Ohirume: *smile* I've been trying to find a way to do the 'where does meat come from?' reveal but I haven't really found a way to do that.
Namely because the reveal would show that the concept is common knowledge worldwide in this Pokémon world. Any character in the story who doesn't know or asked if it came from Pokémon would be seen as either a blatant idiot for not knowing or a psychopath for even suggesting the 'comes from Pokémon' angle.
Faux: *raised claw* Like when Team Rocket consider eating Magikarp back in Sunken Anne.
Gem: *gags* Please don't remind me of that.
Yugo: The concept is drawn from another story we found, but we can't find it again or remember the name. The most we remember is that Cilan talked about the concept … I think.
'Meat' in this world is actually the result of a complex chemical reaction that comes from mixing certain types of berries the right way. But, not any of the kinds that are also indigenous to the real world. All the benefits of real meat (such as protein and iron) are a result of the chemical reaction.
Different kinds of meat come from different mixtures and the way it's prepared. Although it's created raw. So, they still have to cook it.
And don't ask what the recipe is, because I don't know either.
Nuevo: *blinks in surprise* So … all meat is vegetarian there?
Faux: The Yvel's vegetarian?
Seishin: *snickers*
sorry if I come across as a pester bug in these posts. I'll try not to do that in the future.
Ohirume: *chuckles softly and waves hands* Hey, it's fine. I'm happy to answer where I can.
The only things I won't answer are major spoilers. The meat thing was not a spoiler of any caliber.
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From Alpha Drache (Trix chapter 35):
Ich wollte nur kurz sagen das ein Objekt sollte es Lichtgeschwindigkeit erreichen in der Lage ist eine Krümmung in der Raum Zeit zu verursachen und so in der Zeit zurück zu reisen. Wie das bei Reisen in die Zukunft ist weiß ich noch nicht, aber was ich auch noch sagen wollte ist das dies nur in einem nicht Expandierenden Universum passiert.
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P. S. Ich hoffe das ( nur für den Fall das diese Nachricht dich erreicht ) ihr das Übersetzen könnt
Ohirume: Yugo.
Yugo: Already have the translation.
I just wanted to say briefly that an object should be able to reach the speed of light and cause it to bend in space and travel back in time. I don't know what it's like to travel into the future, but what I also wanted to say is that this only happens in a non-expanding universe.
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P. S. I hope that ( just in case this message reaches you ) you can translate
Mizuro: *stares at Yugo in shock* I will never comprehend Google Translate working that well.
Omega: *smile* Well Drache, that is a very logical and believable sci-fi explanation to what we were talking about in the diglett chapter and I really appreciate the level of thinking behind this.
*annoyed sigh* Unfortunately, this is the Pokémon world. Where scientific concepts have been neutered by hairbrained biology.
Seishin: *poking in while upside with a raised finger* To clarify, Omega's only annoyed at the fact that things work like that in Pokémon.
Ohirume: *shrugs with sad smile*
Don't forget, Pokémon (both this story and the canon) have living beings that are made of metal and still have DNA, a dragon and a sprite that can traverse time with the glow of an eye, living ghosts, and is a place where magic and psychic powers are common knowledge and co-exist with science.
*monotone* Also, they have a footless, no-mouthed, hula-hoop llama that was proven to have created the universe.
Nuevo, Mizuro, and Illavera: *look at Ohirume in shock* What?
Seishin: *wild laughter*
Ohirume: My point is that logic and reason as we know it doesn't always have a say in the Pokémon world(s). Because of the Pokémon.
But I admit, Diglett moving at lightspeed and not time traveling in the process was something I made up on the spot. And the idea of diglett moving at lightspeed was only ever talked about in the anime.
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From johnymike98 (Random-ish chapter 7):
Wow thanks for posting this it was interesting to re read it
Ohirume: You're welcome.
I just worked with what I was given.
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From Drago (Trix chapter 31):
Can ash scan legendaries because from new and mewtwo we know that legendaries do possess DNA and the only alien species the omnitrix couldn't scan are anodites due to them being aliens made out of pure energy and not DNA
Yugo: *sly smirk with hand to chin* Now isn't that a Good question? From the appearance alone, it's obvious that the mewtwo have a Yvel of a lot more than pure mew DNA in them.
Mewtwo: Don't I know it.
Yugo: But the real question is, is that difference enough for the Omnitrix to treat the species as separate from mew? OR is that similarity too much for the watch to see them as anything but an 'older/younger' variant.
Seishin: 😏 Also if they both end up touching the Omnitrix in some way and are too similar, which one will be first?
Ohirume: *grin* I have verified that Trix will be getting a Legendary and/or Mythical form(s) eventually. But I will neither verify nor deny that he will gain a Mew and/or Mewtwo form.
But I've already decided on a few things like that. The only thing I'll say, for now, is-
Ohirume, Seishin, and Yugo: *dramatic pointing with bright grins* WAIT AND SEE!
Omega: *deadpanned glare at Ohirume, Seishin, and Yugo* And you're doing this why?
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From Guest (Trix chapter 48):
Nice chapter
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7/10
Seishin: *blinks in surprise* Just Some Guy?
Omega: *sweat drops* He definitely has the same generosity.
Ohirume: *glare at Omega* Dude. Give it a rest already.
*looks back at readers* Thank you … Guest.
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From Timothy45 (Trix chapter 48):
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Hey there man. Great job and hoping you're staying safe.
Ohirume: *soft smile* I'm doing fine. Thank you.
So i have a question i was curious about. Any plans at all to include maybe ash learning more about the Omnitrix or maybe meeting the maker in some way. I know he isn't Ben who knew someone to get him to Azimuth's planet but, This just make me very curious later on. Especially if Paradox pokes his head into this timeline.
Ohirume: As you've seen in some previous responses, we're working on some stuff.
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From Reclusive Dork (Trix chapter 48):
All hail the hungry fat guy! ...Cat. All hail the hungry fat CAT.
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All hail Garfield!
Seishin: 😲 *GAAAAASP* ROB! I need to get an orange snorlax of my League Team!
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From Reclusive Dork (Trix chapter 47):
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I have read your response to my bearguy review. I... actually don't play yu-gi-oh, not since I was in elementary school. I understand.
Seishin: Hey, it's fine. 😊 The game doesn't exactly appeal to everyone.
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I Shall forgive you. Seishin... On one condition.
Seishin: Huh?
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- U 6 /\/\ 3 !
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3/\/\8R C3 -3 - IR!
Seishin: Uuuuuuuuuuuh. 😟 C- can I get a cipher?
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From Reclusive Dork (Trix chapter 46):
Well, Shiz. I just checked my review history to make sure the message went through right. it didn't.
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Thus, I must translate.
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HUG ME!
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EMBRACE THE HAIR!
Seishin: Oooooooooh. Okay. 🙂 The comment system just didn't recognize what symbols you were putting in.
Anyway, *Josh(Drake & Josh) voice* HUG ME RECLUSE!
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 48):
Good chap
Ohirume: Thank y-
Seishin: PART TWO!
*Faux
Faux: *running while screaming at the top of his lungs* Leave me alone already!
Tigtone: NEVEEEEEERRRR! All evil shall be befallen by the daring sword of the hero who dares to be heroic! TIGTOOOOONE! *raises sword* WHICH IS MY SWORD!
Helpy: And by Helpy!
Faux: *blank stare* Wha- *shakes it off and puts paw to his chest* I'm not a bad guy! My species just looks like this!
Tigtone: LIES! Helpy! Be on fire now!
Helpy: *rubs arms together until they literally burst into flame* AHHHHH!
Tigtone: HYA! *cuts off Helpy's arms before throwing them at Faux*
Faux: *dodges flaming limb before looking at Helpy in shock* Doesn't that hurt?
Helpy: Yes! But I regenerate! *arms grow back*
Faux: *blinks in surprise* okay, that's actually pretty cool.
Tigtone: GAHHH! *cuts off Helpy's arms again*
Faux: *flinch* Aura Transmution! Hamon!
*Everyone else watching Faux on a suspended monitor
Seishin: Oooooh, not a bad choice, foxer. *eats handful of popcorn* 'dat'll actually help wit' 'elpy's limbs.
Laura: *worried frown* Okay. But, shouldn't we help?
Seishin: Nah, he'll be fine. 😋
Faux on monitor: AHH! You were lucky that arm was fake!
Seishin: maybe. 😅
*Back with Faux
Helpy: Tigtone! IT'S NOT WORKIIIIING!
Tigtone: *laughing* Fear not Helpy. For I still have my SNAKE HARP AND GNOME FLUTE!
Faux: … huh?
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 48):
Another interesting twist on a filler. Great job.
Ohirume: *smile* Thanks.
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From Wizzer96 (Trix chapter 48):
Its a very good chapter! i quite liked it too.
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Right now im thinking though: if you want to include other things from the Ben-10 universe. One of the most obvious would be Professor Paradox joining the fray. But wont this alert the great legendaries? after all Paradox, manipulate space and time, and im pretty sure Dialga and Palkia won't be too happy about it.
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Arceus is out of the equation, given his role in the 4th gen film, and the rest of the legendaries are not as supposely powerful...maybe hoopa would be able to sense Paradox?
Seishin: 😋 Nah. I think we'll be fine. I took care of it.
Yugo: *raised brow* You did?
Seishin: Did now.
Ohirume: Jokes aside, that does bring up another thing.
Celestialsapiens don't like Paradox. Despite … THAT, he's only forbidden from coming within 500 Light years of one of their kind. They don't harm him.
I do realize that Alien X's personalities Serena and Bellicus immediately agreed to destroy him when he appeared in front of them. Still, before they could do that, Paradox pulled Ben out of the transformation.
I repeat, Paradox outran agreeing celestialsapien 'voice of love and compassion' and 'voice of rage and aggression' personalities that wanted to destroy him.
Ben may have been a factor in why they didn't, but … that's somet'in to think about, right?
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Just Some Guy (Trix chapter 48):
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Me again. Just figured I might as well comment for one more time until the comment answering.
Seishin: 👍
I noticed that a lot of people have been saying for Professor Paradox to show up. Personally, I feel like it's best to start out small and then work your way up. That's why in my way to have Ben show up, it was to find Asmuth and not something cliche like a multi-dimensional event. I think that should happen, but not until later.
Seishin: Who's to say Paradox can only show up because of something multiverse-threatening going down? 🌝
Omega: *looks at Seishin warily* Why is that emoji freaking me out?
Seishin: Probably Smosh. 🌝
Omega: Dude seriously, stop! I don't know why but, just … stop.
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Also, am I the only one who found it odd that Anodites don't have DNA, but Prypiatosian-B's (NRG) and Celestialsapien's (Alien X/ god like beings) do have DNA? Just seems odd to me.
Omega: *shrugs* Different universes, different definitions of what makes sense. Odds are they are some dimensions where those energy-based lifeforms don't have DNA and some where Anodites do.
Seishin: Anodite Ben! YES! 😆
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Seishin: That's all folks! We don' got no deleted scenes this time! 😝
Omega: Wait, really?
Ohirume: Believe it or not, yes. Chapter production was pretty straightforward this time around.
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Seishin: Before we close, here's a thing!
WE GOT BAGELS! WOOOO!
Pike: *blinks in surprise* We do?
Seishin: … no.
Also, feel free to check out the little collab we did with Johnymike98/Johnathen Youngs. It guest stars Omega and Mizuro!
Also, it's the "Random-ish stuff on the side" chapter post immediately before THIS.
Omega: … It was … an experience.
Mizuro: *pouts* I barely did anything.
Nuevo: *raised brow* Wait, why couldn't Illavera and I show up?
Mizuro: You said you didn't want to go to a Fooly Cooly world.
Illavera: You didn't go to a Fooly Cooly world.
Omega: We were trying to.