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Ohirume: Before we start, a quick shout out to Justsomeguy77777 (Just Some Guy 777's DeviantArt account) for the picture of Luke he whipped up.
Luke: *smiles* I believe it is a rather nice likeness.
Yugo: Rob has also created a DeviantArt account under the name Ohirume1.
Ohirume: 'Ohirume' was taken.
Yugo: We're considering dual posting Pokémon Trix on both FanFiction and DeviantArt.
If you guys think that's a good idea, let us know.
Ohirume: But remember that I suck at drawing. It'll be very unlikely that I will ever post artwork on the Ohirume1 account.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 51):
Just relived something Rath and Incineroar are kinda simmiliar there both bipedal tigers and wrestlers, say you don't suppose you can have a battle between Incineroar and Rath in the future
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Klipper
Ohirume: um … I honestly cannot think of a situation where a scene like that would make sense.
How would that happen? Why would that happen?
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From RT89 (Random-ish chapter 9):
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Arc, everyone keeps nagging you about the Soot's Origin bit. I get where they're coming from but at the same time, its in character for a kid to kiss a dog; if a young boy gets licked by a dog, usually they will lick back. Its not played out that Ash made out with the Mightyena or more, with how you portrayed the production of Poke eggs it makes sense. Don't let them get you down!
Ohirume: Don't worry about Just Some Guy. We've been Private Messaging for a while and I can tell you that he really does feel bad about that.
Yugo: Although, we were telling the truth about how Soot came to be. It really was an accident.
Faux: *scratches head in confusion* And I'm not really sure what you mean with the licking thing.
For a Pokémon, licking is the equivalent of how humans view kissing. An actual mouth-to-mouth kiss is the equivalent of-
Omega: And cutting Faux off because K rating.
Now what still bothers and worries me is the issues with Ash's Father you hinted at in the Kangaskhan chapter, I'm not going to let that go till it's explained.
Gem: *raised brow* Trix's father? We haven't mentioned him at all.
Faux: *frowns and ears flatten* The thing Trix hinted at is tied to something early in the Safari Zone chapter.
But not an event that actually happened in that chapter.
Ohirume: The full details will be revealed in time.
Seishin: *sly smirk* Although, if you happen to guess what he was talking about, we might tell you the rest. In a Private Message.
Thanks for the post, sorry about the length of this comment.
Ohirume: *smiles* Hey, don't worry about it. The length of this one is nothing compared to some other reviews I've gotten over time.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 51):
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I didn't mean skip to journeys what I meant was are you gonna include it in your story I mean come on there still lot of pokemon that need to be seen in this story like Heracross, Sceptile, Infernape, Krookodile, Hawlucha, Greninja, Incenaroar, and Lycanroc. Also characters like May, Max Paul, Dawn, Clemont, Serena, Lillie, Lana, Gladion, Professor Kukui, and Professor Burnet. All I'm asking is are you gonna include Journeys,
Ohirume: Well, eventually, yes. But that still doesn't change the fact that that storyline is nowhere near close.
as for Ash being the perfect strategist I wouldn't call him that. If he was then he would have won his first battle with Brock with his first pokemon not mention he almost got beaten by Sabrina.
Ohirume: I have never stated that Trix is a perfect strategist. He's just smarter than normal.
By the way are there going to be paring yet 'cough cough' AshXSerena 'cough cough cough'.
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Klipper
Omega: *sweat drops* Smooth.
Ohirume: I'm still deciding on the pairing.
And, if it does end up being Serena, you're going to have to wait for a while. She's not journeying with him early.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 51):
By the way I think the personality glitches might come from Osmosian ability to go crazy after absorbing to much energy.
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Klipper
Mizuro: I really don't think that's an actual aspect of the species.
Omega: *nods* Mizuro's right. What Kevin repeatedly went through was the concept of "absolute power corrupts absolutely" and/or "going mad with power."
Ohirume: Or, at least, that's how I see it.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 33):
I love that show! And I've seen that animation on youtube! Great work so far guys
Seishin: AWESOME! Also, what?
Yugo: Yeah, we referenced a lot of stuff in that comment response.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 42):
Doctor Stone.
Random reincarnated person:
Freaks the heck out before doing a ton of research into if there is a petrification stats effect.
Omega: Finally, someone gets it!
Faux: Also, there are the Paralyzed and Frozen status conditions.
Ohirume: But, in all seriousness, it was just a passing reference.
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 1):
So We're acknowledging that Oak met future-past Ash and had the whole Suicune thing happen. neat.
Seishin: Yeah, we are! 😃
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From Icewolf9879 (Trix chapter 51):
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When is pidgeotto going to hurry up and kiss ash and lay her egg,
Faux: Well, the thing with Pidgeotto is still in the air.
Seishin: Pun very much intended.
Omega: Yukiro's lying. It was a coincidence.
Ohirume: Omega's right.
Seishin: 😒
Faux: Right now, she just has an extremely uncontrollable crush on Trix's braviary form.
Illavera: She's not even sure how she'd feel in the long run or if the crush extends beyond that form.
in the anime charmeleon didn't listen to ash in this story can he be more a daddy's mon where he sees dragonite Ash as his meema and wants ash to be dragonite more
Yugo: That is, more or less, the route we've been taking with him as a charmander. Though, he is a charizard now.
Omega: As we've seen so far, the apparent not-dragon has grown more confident and a little cockier since evolving.
Ohirume: But in a more competitive way. Not that high-and-mighty ****.
Faux and Gem: *sour pout* lucky…
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 13):
I forgot about Bill... the first confirmed furry in Pokemon... and he does it for scientific purposes
Seishin: All true. But don't forget about Nicholai.
Gem: Oh, right. I forgot about him.
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 13):
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Also Zacian is best girl... Zamazenta is a good boi
Faux: YES!
Omega: *grumbles*
Gem: *blinks in surprise* Wait, Zacian and Zamazenta have genders?
and attack on pokemon is one of the best games ever.
Illavera: *blinks in surprise* Is that actually a game?
Ohirume, Seishin, and Yugo: Nope.
Ohirume: Sorry, d8rkforcen1ght7. We have no idea what that is.
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 16):
So we're going the 'papa gio route' aren't we? Eh. not sure if good or not with that move...
Ohirume: *sly smirk* Well, that is one possibility. You'll just have to wait and see.
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 32):
I'd love to see Faux's story eventually...
Faux: *smiles brightly and tail starts wagging*
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 38):
We are going to meet Pikachu's Adopted Mom aren't we!?
Ohirume: We'll, uh … we'll have to see, I guess. *nervous chuckle*
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 38):
I like the puns-brawn
Brain: Stop! This isn't natural!
Bold: Pie knot?
Brain: Argggggh!
brawn- Pecans?
Brain: Stop!
Yukiro: HAH!
Omega: *eye twitch*
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 43):
K. your explanation for pokemon mating is... interesting. Definitely useful for a K story though. Good chapter!
Ohirume: *smiles* Thanks. Though, truth is, I don't rightfully own the concept.
I actually have Colb-a-nater's "Inner Strength" to thank for the idea. All I did was expand it to the Pokémon population as a whole.
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 50):
Shadow BallFire FangFiendfyre...
Faux: *claw to chin* That kind of sounds like a Finishing Move. *smirks* Like my Auranic Breaker.
Luke: *smiles and pulls Bone Rush off back* And my Auranic Javelin.
Pike: *grins* High Speed Lightning Bat.
Laura: *smiles* Dragonic Wand.
Yugo: Finishing Moves are a form of Link Attack that are comprised of all four of the user's moves. The attack type adopts the name 'Finishing Move' in place of 'Link Attack' and changes the name of the actual attack entirely.
Ohirume: And, no, none of what Yugo just said is relevant or canon to Trix's story. Just Faux's.
Faux: *zoroark version of a thumbs up*
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From d8rkforcen1ght7 (Trix chapter 50):
Please keep Soot. She's one of the best things in this story. #keepsootinpokemontrix
Pike: *chuckles* I think that's pretty much a given. Her name's in the title.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 52):
While it's sad one of the members of Ash's team may be leaving for a little bit 'I'm guessing either Squirtle, Muk, or Primeape' it's awesome he's getting Aerodactyl on his team. Not to mention you gave some seriously good character development for Charizard showing a more calmed down personality with a lot of knowledge on how to fight along with looking up to Ash as a father figure along with Aerodactyl looking up to him as a mentor of sorts. Overall one of the best chapters in the series so far and so not filler.
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Klipper
Ohirume: Thanks.
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From Just Some Guy 777 (Trix chapter 52):
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My friend you've done it again, handled Charizard extremely well, fossil pokemon talk like how cavemen in media talked, the entire beginning, and the cherry on top, Ash catching Aerodactyl...
Ohirume: *smiles with a thumbs up* Thanks Guy.
Omega: *grumbles while rolling eyes*
Excuse me *gets up and walks into the distance*
Gem: *watches in confusion* What's he doing?
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YEAAAAAAAAAHHHH! *insert stock explosion*
Everyone: *flinches*
Shadow Peridot: That … apparently.
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10/10
Seishin: Wait, really?!
Yes really.
Seishin: *snickers*
Also, do you actually have a plan for Jigglypuff unlike the anime?
Ohirume: Well, not yet at least.
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From I am vegito (Trix chapter 52):
excellent translation of the Pokemon speech...and excellent chapter...keep it up
Seishin: Thank you. 😊
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From Exodia3215 (Trix chapter 52):
Muk, Krabby, or Bulbasaur
Mizuro: It was the crab.
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From johnymike98 (Trix chapter 52):
Awsome storg and i think its a good idea ash got the fossil anywho i think your bryter than ashes of the past cause while ashes may be lomg and fixed a few things it also created problems wnd got crinzy this story js worth fhe read hope goj do more
Nuevo: uh…
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Ohirume: *deadpans* Okay. I can understand you liking the story, but please don't put down other stories when talking about mine. I don't see it as a compliment.
Ashes of The Past was part of my inspiration for Trix. If that story never existed, Trix wouldn't be half the story it is.
Omega: *nods* Yeah. It'd probably be as bad as I usually say it is. And that's saying something.
Seishin: *points at johnymike98* Also, that 'crinzy' near the end had better be a typo for 'crazy'. Ashes of The Past is anything but cringe.
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From RocKHord (Trix chapter 52):
Hell Yeah,thats what i want,very good.
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But why so long?
Ohirume: I've actually had that conflict in the wings almost a year before the chapter was posted. Probably around the time Trix gained his Dragonite form in the first place.
Yugo: Also, by 'so long,' did you mean the amount of time it took to get to a conflict like this, the length of the chapter, or the fact that it took three weeks to post?
Gem: If it's the first one, that's because a lot of Kanto didn't have that much serious conflict aside from the Team Rocket attacks.
Faux: If it's the second, it's because Rob has been learning over time.
Omega: If it's the last one … that's about how long it takes for our author to post. Rob is not fast.
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From Guest (Trix chapter 52):
By the way you don't suppose you can set who's with Ash and who's at Oak's ranch in your bio.
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Klipper
Omega: … *sighs* Klipper, that has been Ohirume's entire profile since the Porta Vista chapter was posted.
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From Icewolf9879 (Trix chapter 52):
This is where muk goes to oaks lab and does all that funny hugging right,
Faux: *rubs back of had while chuckling nervously* Sorry. It was Krabby.
Pike: *raises brow with paw to chin* Also, I'm not really sure if the whole hugging thing would make sense for Trix's Muk anymore. He's a lot calmer.
what a touching chapter and a surprise twist ash gets a fossil Pokemon cool and charmander finally became a charizard good for him is he gonna see dragonite-ash as his meema ever that was so touching the way he looks up to dragonite-ash
Ohirume: *smiles* I'm glad you liked it.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 52):
good chap
Ohirume: Thank y-
Seishin: HEY! Look who I got!
Omega: *groans* Here we go.
Faux: *raises brow* Who is it?
Seishin: *gestures to the side; excited smile* Steven Upshaw! More commonly known as 'Crazy Steve'.
Steve: *Waves; wearing work uniform* Hello.
Mizuro: *eyes widen in shock* Seriously?!
Laura: *looks at Mizuro in confusion* You know him?
Illavera: *bright smile* ****, yeah we do! He's from Drake & Josh and hilarious. Also, he's *eyes widen fearfully before looking at Steve warily* crazy.
Steve: *notices before raising hand* Oh, don't worry. My psychologist worked out a plan where I'm only allowed to get angry four times each day. *looks down at watch before looking at others* Now's not the time.
Gem: *walks into room with a paper plate in hand; eating an enchilada*
Mizuro: *looks at Gem before eyes widen in realization* Gem. Where did you get that?
Gem: *points back* I found it in the fridge. There wasn't a note so, *shrugs before taking last bite*
Steve: *looks at plate before looking at Gem* You ate my enchilada?
Gem: *looks at him and swallows before frowning sadly* Oh, sorry. I didn't realize it was yours.
Steve: *stares at Gem blankly* you ate my enchilada…
Gem: *frowns before looking at others* Is he okay?
Illavera: *runs up and puts hands on Gem's shoulders* You need to run now.
Gem: *blinks in confusion* What?
*small watch alarm*
Steve: *looks at watch* It's time. *Pushes Nuevo over and steals his shoes*
Nuevo: *glares at Steve* HEY!
Steve: *holds shoes by laces and glares at Gem* YOU ATE MY ENCHILADA!
Mizuro and Illavera: GEM, RUN!
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From Guest (Trix chapter 52):
On second thought maybe Krabby the one to go to Oak's ranch because he doesn't that much presence in the story. Also I'm going to guess Areodactyl is going to be like the Ash's original Charizard.
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Klipper
Faux: Well, you were right that time. It was Krabby.
Ohirume: Also, I'm still thinking it over.
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From Lycoan wolf entity (Trix chapter 52):
Well, I have an idea who's NOT going back to the ranch. Primeape, Charizard, Squirtle and Krabby are all battle crazy and won't miss a training session if you payed them. Bulbasaur won't leave yet out of respect. Pigeotto because of her crush. Aerodactyl because of obvious reasons. Soot, Pikachu and Clefairy because they don't wanna leave. So that only leaves Muk as the most likely to go willingly.
Gem: *whispers to Faux* Trix's Krabby is battle crazy?
Faux: *shrugs* First I'm hearing of it.
Ohirume: *sad smile* Sorry Lycoan. It was Krabby.
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From Zach the hedgehogCharmander (Trix chapter 52):
The best chapter plus this is better then the canon version!
Seishin: That's the goal, Zach! 😁
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 52):
I think its either crabby or muk volunteering.
Pike: Yup. Krabby.
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From Generalhyna (Trix chapter 52):
I dont know if you responded or got my review, but its really growing...awsome and fun and more awsome and...well, I dont know if you have my oc, but I have a revamped version of my poke oc, who was born in Galar and has a goal to fill the pokedex...mostly to tell her 12 older sisters who are "SOOOOOOO" much better then her as a trainer that they had to rubb it in her face, that she belives that filling the dex when her siblings didnt even focus to do it will tell them to skuzz it that she is there equal (She omits alot of her past and just talks about hanging out with her favorite Cousion Minato)
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If you go into Aloha she participates in the island challege to earn the cool Z-crystals to amp her pokemon with super cool Z-Moves, and then the pokemon championship in Galar.
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if you like her and want more info...you can drop a note and I can give more explanation like appearance and personality nad team and history
Seishin: *looks at readers and chuckles nervously* Yeah, turns out there was a bit of a misinterpretation. In that there wasn't a review that led to this one.
Ohirume: We talked it over with Generalhyna in a Private Message.
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From foxchick1 (Trix chapter 1):
Love this, glad Soot and Ash played along and how did Ash get Soot?
Laura: From Soot's mom.
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From OrangeBloxxing (Trix chapter 52):
I think the Pokemon being sent over is going to be either Muk or Krabby.
Shadow Pearl: It was Krabby.
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From Mr Darklord (Trix chapter 7):
Are you going to use the whole kanto episode? I know you're mixing your own style here but i read a lot pokemon fanfics and they're using the canon, following it and i mean all of them. It's kinda boring and waste a time you know?
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Well, I hope not. I like your story.. I enjoy your writing style
So yeah
Ohirume: Thank you for the constructive criticism. But, I'm just not sure how I would mix things up.
I've been playing the story under the idea of "what would happen if an average Ash Ketchum acquired the Omnitrix at a young age?"
Soot aside, I can't really think of anything that would cause the route to differ from the canon. I mean that in the literal sense. I'm not the most creative when I don't have something to work off of.
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From OrangeBloxxing (Trix chapter 52):
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I wonder what would happen if ash DID scan a Nidoqueen, would he become a male Nidoqueen or a Nidoking? I am genuinly curious...
Seishin: Male Nidoqueen. And it is exactly as freaky as it sounds.
*smirks* Imagine if he scanned a vespiquen or salazzle.
anyways, great story so far, and I can't wait to se where you take this concept next. I would love to see more of Trix's adventures through Kanto and beyond!
Ohirume: *smiles and gives a thumbs up* That's the plan, Orange.
And i kind of think that thing about you not wanting Trix to be too op would be thrown out the window once he joins the chats in the other stories (if and when you write them) because, well... just look at Faux, or even Omega.
Omega: *shrugs* I can see why you'd think that, but that actually isn't the case.
Faux: *holds out claw to the side* We got our extra abilities in our own stories. Not after the chats started.
Ohirume: Sometimes, I really plan ahead.
I actually started with Trix because his storyline is the most reasonable.
And I know I'm not the only one who thinks one of the legendaries/mythicals he scans is going to be Mew, but I am not keeping my hopes up because if I did and he doesn't scan them then I would be very dissapointed.
Ohirume: *sly smirk* Well you'll have to wait and see.
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From OrangeBloxxing (Trix chapter 52):
I kinda hope that when Lucario and the Mystery of Mew comes around (even though that's 3 and a half generations away) that Trix accidentally scans Lucario while Lucario still thinks Trix is Sir Aaron, I already know what power integration he would get: increased Aura Control/decreased time to activate Aura Sight
Ohirume: *smirks* I've got some stuff in mind.
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From Just Some Guy 777 (Trix chapter 53):
(Given the length of this comment, I split it up as follows
Also, the two follow-up/correction reviews by the same person have been merged into this one)
I mean...was it really that surprising that Krabby was the one leaving?
Faux: *shrugs* Eh, I guess you have a point.
Gem: Trix definitely didn't expect it, though.
As for the chapter itself, it's definitely good, the beginning portion before reaching the hospital was the best part,
Ohirume: *smiles*
Electra talking to Oak was nice,
Seishin: *grins* Yeah. You could even say it was 'insane.'
Nuevo: *sweat drops* I don't think I'd take it that far.
Seishin: *glances at Nuevo sourly*
kind of wish that you left some of the Dr. Proctor out,
Yugo: *raises brow* Wait, the person or the episode?
Ohirume: If you mean the character, then I actually left out a lot of him as is.
and Ash gaining Nidoking and Chansey, 2 forms that I'm sure will come in handy in the future.
Luke: I believe you will be correct about that.
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8/10, better than most, but not enough to be a 9.
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Clef: *visible confusion* Wait, how is that cheap? If he's using those forms of his to train his little critters only, than isn't that a good thing?
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Bright: *sighs* Just don't question it Alto. Trust me, it's only going to get worst if you do.
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Clef: *pouts before perking up with a smirk* Still, wait until he finds out he's not the only one.
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Bright: *smirks* Or the amount of aliens in the Omnitrix.
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Me: *smirks* Indeed.
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*all three of us start laughing simultaneously*
(I don't own SCP)
Ohirume: … *shrugs* I'm honestly not sure how to respond.
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From A Guest (Trix chapter 53):
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Well, we cannot fault the Doctor for the superglue thing, actually some teeth damage like broken teeth are actually healed with a specific medical glue sometimes,
Omega: *holds out hand to side* I'm pretty sure that's only the case when implanting new teeth after pulling out damaged ones.
I don't think people actually glue together existing teeth that are broken in half.
and military use superglue for closing some wounds until proper medical attention arrives; and he's a human doctor, in a way it's like forcing a human doctor to work as a veterinarian or vice-versa, both know the very basics about the other but several finer details would be wrong or missing.
Ohirume: Okay, fair. I can't really argue that part.
*chuckles nervously* I guess I could've done a little more research on the matter.
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From RocKHord (Trix chapter 53):
FINALLY,A CHAPTER!
THAT WAS GOOD,AS ALWAYS
Illavera: *sweat drops and smiles nervously* glad you enjoyed it.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 53):
Good chap
Steve: *chasing Gem while swinging Nuevo's shoes* YOU ATE MY ENCHILADA!
Gem: *running* I'M SORRY!
Seishin: *angry pout* The line was supposed to be 'there was no note.'
Omega: *rubs temples* This has been going on for an hour! Can someone put a stop to this already?
Seishin: *sigh* Fine. *runs up in front of Steve* Hey hey hey hey! Look at me!
Steve: *looks at Yukiro; harsh whisper* He ate my enchilada!
Seishin: I know! I know! Just-
She'll be comin' 'round the mountain when she comes
Steve: *jerky stuttering* She'll be … *shakes head*
Seishin: *nods*
Steve: She'll be ... comin' 'round the moun-tain when she comes
Seishin: She'll be comin' 'round the mountain
Steve: She'll be comin' … 'round the mountain
Seishin and Steve: *harmonizing* She'll be comin' 'round the mountain when she cooooooooooooomes.
Steve: *drops shoes, lurches forward, and hugs Yukiro* I'M SORRY!
Seishin: It's okay! It's okay! Now, go to the kitchen and get yourself some milk.
Steve: *nods* I promise! *walks away towards kitchen*
Seishin: *waves happily before looking at Faux* Go with him.
Faux: *perks up before running after Steve*
Nuevo: *walks over and grabs shoes* ******* psycho…
Laura: Why did that song calm him-
Seishin, Ohirume, Mizuro, and Illavera: Nobody knows.
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From DarkSonic21 (Trix chapter 53):
This is so awesome. Please do more!
Ohirume: *grins* Trust me. I plan to.
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From I am vegito (Trix chapter 2):
i have already read this chapters but it is kinda fun to read it again and saddening at the same time...
Laura: *sad smile* Yeah. I hear ya.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 53):
A fantastic improvement on that rather poor episode! Great job. I'm curious what the power integration is going to give Ash this time from those two touching the watch. I imagine strength from him and either increased empathy or child protectiveness from her. Looking forward to where you take us next.
Pike: *smiles and crosses forepaws* Dead-on with the nidoking Integration.
Luke: *nods* Agreed. The species is rather strong in the physical sense.
Ohirume: As for Chansey … *chuckles nervously* Well, I'm still deciding on that. I'm trying to think of a healing-esque thing, but there is one problem.
Yugo: As was shown in the episode "Ignorance is Blissey," the chansey species aren't naturally accustomed to medical training. There's a nurse school for them. Meaning it's a learned trait. They're most often used/employed in the medical field because of all the heal-based moves they can learn and their desire to help hurt beings.
Ohirume: There is the way that wild chansey tend to hurt Pokémon that isn't move based, but … *frowns* I really can't think of a way to spin that without making it too weird.
The increased empathy thing makes sense, but I don't think it would actually change anything.
Omega: We're open to suggestions.
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From Timothy45 (Trix chapter 42):
Ok nice one dude and I cracked it. the humanoid alien was Alien X The amount of powers that alien can do could explain the whole power integration. wonder if the personalities of the alien still even exist after that electric shock?
Seishin: *game show announcer voice* Oh, so sorry, Timmy-ma-boy! That is incorrect!
Omega: The answer was Osmosian. Kevin and Aggregor's species.
We revealed it in a response a while back.
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From Timothy45 (Trix chapter 53):
nice work. So since it's desperate from the Ben 10 universe any chance of Professor Paradox showing up maybe somewhere down the line? Be a nice excuse to show more ben 10 in this story.
Ohirume: *smiles* We've got some stuff in mind for later on.
Faux: *smiles nervously and ears droop* Though, it is gonna be a while. Sorry.
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 53):
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Ok few things: a. What does he catch next a legendary!?
Yugo: *blinks in surprise* Isn't that a bit of a leap? Aerodactyl legitimately showed up in that episode.
Ohirume: *shrugs* Though, I guess I could've held back on the move set.
is comedy gold at time
Illavera: … That was 'b', right?
And c. You guys and girls inspired me to make a story witch I have given the name "star rider acdamia" yeah there are a few hiccups but any way please check it out. You'll find it in the mha FanFiction.
Ohirume: *points at self* Well, first, I'm a guy and the only real one among us.
Nuevo: *nods* The rest of us are overdeveloped OCs.
Omega: *sweat drops* Second, please don't self-advertise in a public review. Rob's seen enough of that on YouTube to become mildly annoyed by it.
Ohirume: Though, I won't argue to a Private Message.
A while back, someone actually contacted me for a second opinion on a new story of theirs. Though, I won't say anything else about the matter unless that author is okay with it.
Seishin: Third, we did look at SRA and we have no freaking idea what 'spk' stands for.
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 1):
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I really love this story and want to contribute to creating more chapters. Hack I have one oc ready for breaking the dimensional barriers that keep worlds apart so I can enter this and give ash the challenges he needs to get more accustomed to the omitrix.
Omega: *sweat drops* We already have someone for the multiverse hopping gimmick. Me.
*Performs at Attack On Titan salute* Satoshi Hayate. Dimension Walker. My kind have the ability to open portals between dimensions at will.
You can find more information about me in the Pokémon Land Omake and the johnymikes98 collab.
Seishin: *raises hand and grins* And I'm a Deadpool/The Mask rip-off whose strengths, weaknesses, and powers are whatever the Yvel Rob says they are! I'm very inconsistent and the embodiment of Rob's crazy and chaotic side.
Ohirume: *frowns and rubs back of head* And I'm not really sure how comfortable I am with a self-insert. And, no, I don't count my inputs on the chats or anything Yukiro does. He had a source before me.
Seishin: *Throws hands up and smiles; Rosedoodle/Beepubun voice* YAH! I'm stolen!
*looks up thoughtfully with arms crossed; normal voice* Or maybe 'salvaged' would be the appropriate term. My original story was deleted.
Ohirume: I just … I'm not sure.
That and I am a huge Ben 10 fan boy and proud.
Ohirume: *raises brow* You're proud? I'm not sure I understand what you mean.
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 10):
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Sooooooo...is meloetta going to be romantically attracted to ash or something
Omega: *raises brow* How the **** did 'Melanie' autocorrect to 'meloetta'?
Faux: *looks at Omega* They could've also meant Pidgeotto.
Omega: That still doesn't explain how autocorrect messed up that bad.
Faux: *shrugs* I really don't know either.
(note:I don't care what you think. Soot would be a badass sister. Got it memorized?)
Ohirume: *confused stare* You mean the idea of Soot being an older sister?
Omega: *sweat drops* That was never off the table.
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From darj (Trix chapter 53):
love the story ! great job . it would be interesting to see big chill introduce reproduce and add a new race to the Pokemon universe.
Omega: That … actually makes a startling amount of sense.
Ohirume: But I did a little digging and found something on the Ben 10 wiki that poses a possible problem.
Yugo: After hatching, newborn necrofriggians instinctually travel to Klymyss. The necrofriggian home world. Klymyss doesn't exist in the Pokémon universe.
Luke: *raises paw* However, a question of the matter is raised. How do they know how to find Klymyss if they're born off world? Is it a location-based trigger or does the planet act as a beacon?
Laura: If it's the former, then the concept can't be done due to … *clears throat*
Pike: If it's the latter, then the hatchlings would be confused as all Yvel and have no idea where to go.
Yugo: So, to summarize, the idea isn't off the table but needs tinkering. Though, it's also not a guarantee.
Ohirume: And even if I do decide against this, that does not take away the idea of Trix getting a necrofriggian form.
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From foxchick1 (Trix chapter 54):
Loved what you added to the story.
Seishin: *smiles with double thumbs up* Yeh!
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From Reclusive Dork (Trix chapter 54):
YES. I love stories where james takes growlie with him!
Yugo: *thumbs up with smile* Awesome.
Illavera: I still have mixed feelings about that.
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From I am vegito (Trix chapter 54):
thanks for the chapter...bro
Gem: You're welcome.
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From I am vegito (Trix chapter 54):
thanks for the chapter... bro
Omega: *raises brow* Huh. The 'double post' glitch can happen in reviews too. I seriously thought it was just Private Messages.
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 52):
Me and Jessie be like "4th wall? What 4th wall?"
Omega: *sweat drops* Actually, she just got tired of the fourth wall **** after the Celadon chapter. She's still aware of it.
Seishin: *crosses arms and pouts sourly* Jessie's become such a killjoy since then.
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 54):
James-the next man of men' the underdog' he-who-shall-be-the-king. I shall wait for his glorious rule and then and only then may he be recognised as the one they underestimated and lost horribly against. Until then we wait...also James vs rath who's with me?
Everyone: *blank, confused stare*
Nuevo: I- I can't tell if you're joking or not.
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From buterflypuss (Trix chapter 54):
Good chap
Gem: *peaks into room* Is that Steven guy gone?
Mizuro: Crazy Steve. And no.
Illavera: But it's fine. He felt bad and offered to steam clean.
Steve: *removes goggles and looks at Gem* I think of each stain as my father. *puts goggles back on*
Gem: *raises brow* What?
Steve: *glares at stain* THIS IS FOR MAKING ME DO MOM'S LAUNDRY! *aggressively cleans*
Faux: Oh … *glances at others* Should we be concerned?
Steve: THIS IS FOR SENDING ME TO FAT CAMP!
Mizuro: For us, for him, or the stains?
Faux: Any of them.
Steve: THIS IS FOR TAKING THE LAST STUFFED MUSHROOM WITHOUT ASKING!
Illavera: *raises brow* Okay, that's new.
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From Just Some Guy 777 (Trix chapter 54):
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...You know, I actually forgot James had a growlithe as a kid.
Amber Mewtwo: *shrugs* Understandable.
Once again you did something better than the original by have James actually keep growlithe, instead of leaving him behind.
Omega: Ashes of The Past did it first.
And in a more bad*** way.
Side note, I'm actually not that big of a fan of the whole, "James being rich thing". The concept itself is neat, but it's one of those things that had waisted potential in my opinion.
Faux: *raises brow* Wasted? It came up pretty often ... well, at least once a region. Except Johto. And only before Unov- okay, I see your point.
Although most of that has to do with Jessiebelle. Not her being apart of the reason why James ran away, being a dobleganger of Jessie. It's really just one of those ideas that sound funny for about a few minutes, before it becomes just plain stupid.
Ohirume: Fair and agreed. But I didn't really have the right to change it.
Still though, you were able to something new for the original episode, though I will say that this isn't one of my favorite chapters. But still, not bad.
Ohirume: *shrugs* Eh. I made do with what I was given.
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7/10
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Cartoon Cat: That's all folks!
Seishin: *Yakko Warner voice* Goodnight Everybody!
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From Guest (Trix chapter 54):
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You give a surprising amount of character development to Primeape
Ohirume: Thanks. I kind of feel like I should make up for the anime kicking him out forever after little to no screen time.
and personally I think you should get rid of Giga Impact do to getting to close to a target and Hyper beam gives you more time to recover from do distance and the ability to take shelter behind something.
Faux: I'm not so sure about that line of reasoning about Hyper Beam.
Ohirume: *shrugs* Still, I'll consider it. Keep in mind, it's Aerodactyl's choice.
You also resolved the story of Growlie and James good job. By the may when Mewtwo Strikes Back comes around have Trix scan Mewtwo go lockdown and we can have a clash of titans Mewtwo vs Mewtwo and don't erase the main trix's friends memory
Yugo: *sweat drops* We already have something in mind.
Ohirume: I do plan ahead sometimes.
and take up some suggestions from previous commentates.
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Klipper
Ohirume: While I will still take opinions and ideas into consideration, I can't always take them as is.
Also, do keep in mind that coincidences will come up between what other people want and what I already have planned.
I'll give credit where credit's due if a suggestion is added solely because someone else thought of it.
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From Tuck94 (Trix chapter 54):
U what?! When diid you have to forget a move to learn a new one especially since this is clearly not based on the games, because frickin ANIME! I'm done with the story, bye.
Ohirume: *frowns* Hm. So sorry to see you go.
Seishin: Though, I am a little confused as to why that was the deal breaker.
Omega: Especially since Pokémon Trix has been explicitly using that concept for the entire story. So much so, that Pokémon listed in the profile have a "Forgotten Moves" section below their Move set.
*takes deep breath* Alright. Just had to get that out.
Ohirume: But, in all seriousness, it's a limit. Something to keep things from getting out of hand.
Pokémon infinitely learning new moves while remembering old ones can get messy and complicated if not handled well enough. I am not an author who can handle that.
Omega: Feel free to call him weak.
Ohirume: If you want good stories that use the 'as many moves as you want' concept well, then "Ashes of The Past" by Saphroneth, "Pokémath" by A Hobbyist, and "The Trainer From A Far Away Land" by RenegadeWarrior are in my favorites.
Faux: One more thing, when was the last time Pikachu used Volt Tackle after learning Electro Ball? Or Electro Ball after learning Electroweb?
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From Ohma flame (Trix chapter 29):
I'm worried. Team rocket is stupid and ash has the omitrix... if they aren't carful they could activate the universe-destroying self-destruct.
Ohirume: I could explain why that would hardly be an issue, but Omega can explain it better in just two words.
Omega: Technopathic Clairvoyance.
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From RT89 (Trix chapter 54):
Not bad. I give the original episode a 1/5. This I give a 3/5, would have been a 2/5 if not for that ending. I get that the original episode was suppose to offer some back story on James, but it stunk worse than a gloom and had a goomy ending. Looking forward to the comment responses, those always perk up my day.
Omega: *smirks* HAH! You should've seen the PokéSins. It got a negative 48.
... granted, that's the same rating as the Bike Gang episode.
Ohirume: As for a perk up, Yukiro said he has something in mind.
Seishin: THIS-
youtu:be/BBtPwuZgUAU
We found a way to post YouTube URLs! Just replace the colon with a period! Isn't that awesome?! 😃
Oh, and the video's pretty good too. 😒 ... 😏
Omega: I will confirm now that it is not Rickroll, The Gnome, Stickbug, that Dame Da Ne song, or the apparent 'Get Distracted' thing from the Henry Stickmin series.
Seishin: *glares at Omega* Killjoy.
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*Deleted Scenes
Fossils – Misty's offer to help with Electra's outfit
Why: Meant to be comedic and a nod to Misty's sense of fashion from the prime Scissor Street chapter/episode. But I couldn't really find a fitting spot.
Where: Not sure, really. Sometime while they were in the store.
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Misty smiled happily and clenched a fist, "Don't worry, Electra. I'll help her pick out something I'm sure you'll love and that'll look great."
Soot tensed up, ran in between them, and looked up at Misty with a nervous smile, "Um, how about we leave it to Electra and Rei, here." Ms. Rei perked up and looked at Soot in surprise as she continued, "I mean, you said it yourself, this is Electra's choice. And this lady probably knows a lot more about fashion."
Electra looked at the Dark-type with a smile, "But I don't mind. I trust Misty."
Soot leaned closer to her and harshly whispered, "Electra, please trust me on this!"
Electra perked up and blinked in surprise.
Misty put a hand to her chin, "Well, I guess you're right."
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Fossils - primal Aerodactyl
Why – I wasn't as comfortable with it as I initially thought.
Also, it voided the idea of Aerodactyl joining the group.
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"Listen!" Ash shouted, "I don't want to fight you! I only wanted to get out of your home!"
"Aero!" Aerodactyl cried out in response.
Ash stared in surprise, 'What the?! How did I not understand th-' His eyes widened fearfully, "No. You can't be serious."
Aerodactyl glared at Ash and licked his jaw.
Ash grimaced in fear and shouted downward, "HE'S SAVAGE!"
Soot's eyes widened in shock, "What?"
Misty frowned, "Soot, what's wrong?"
"Aerodactyl," Soot muttered, "he- he's savage."
Gary looked at her in shock, "What?! I thought that theory was disproven!"
Brock looked at him in surprise, "What?! What theory?!"
"It's an old theory in paleontology. The prehistoric Primal theory." Soot said apprehensively, "Fossil restoration has provided a lot of evidence against, but it's the idea that ancient Pokémon don't think like the Pokémon of today do. That they're savage." She gulped, "They're attacks are incredibly dangerous. Aerodactyl's not just fighting for a knockout."