Omega E the Reader's Foreword

This is not my story however it is just me doing a CinemaSins-styled commentary on it. The original author for this, Lt Colonel Jack Summers, gave me permission for me to comment. Anyways hope you enjoy my commentary alongside a fellow friend of mine in this fic.

Prologue

Time: 1430 hour, January 1st of unknown year

Location: Youkai Mountain base; Headquarters of the Gensokyo Police Force (GPF for short)

"Marisa Kirisame, this is not the first time you've stole things from others. Moreover, this isn't your first time breaking into the Kawashiro Electronics building."

Omega E the Reader: the Kappas don't own a company nor does Gensokyo NEED a police force.

Lunatic-Over'9000'Lord: Besides, the Tengu do it just fine.

Sin Count: 1

"I'm not stealing, I'm just borrowing things until I'm dead, ze."

"Listen carefully, what you consider as 'borrowing' is considered 'stealing' by others."

"Is that so~?"

"See, you even took other people's catchphrase. What else did you took...

...From Kawashiro Electronics?"

It was another interrogation at the GPF headquarters, the person being interrogated is a human witch who goes by the name Marisa Kirisame. She is the least favorite of the Gensokyan humans for her habit of stealing things.

The person doing the interrogation is the GPF Police Chief: Kotohime. If there's anything to know about her, it is that she detest violence, but still get the job done.

However, when it comes to Gensokyo's resident finger-itchy witch, interrogations isn't that easy...

...

Location: Hakurei Shrine

"Gosh darn it!"

Yet another unhappy day for Gensokyo's shrine maiden: Reimu Hakurei...

"My credit card's empty again! This is just like the old days... *sigh*"

Omega E the Reader: Wait since when did Gensokyo use credit cards? Isn't that a western thing? More importantly, didn't they use Yen or old coins back in the day?

Sin Count: 2.

A voice suddenly spoke: "Having another bad day, Reimu?"

Reimu: "You're not helping, Yukari. So why don't you come out now?"

A purple gap opened, and out came Yukari Yakumo the gap youkai.

Yukari: "Oh, Reimu. Don't be so serious..."

Reimu: *turns toward Yukari* "Have you ever been ser... -What is that?"

Yukkuri Shiteitte Ne!

Cue the YukkuReimu jumping off Yukari's arms and bouncing all over.

Reimu: "Godsdammit Yukari! What did I say about bringing Yukkuris to the shrine?!"

...

*10 minutes later*

The YukkuReimu is closed in a cage while struggling to break out.

Omega E the Reader: Wait what purpose does this scene mean? Is this one of this Big-Lipped Alligator Moments? More importantly this feels VERY out of place in the later parts of this story and it's sequels.

Sin Count: 3

Reimu: *pant* "This would've been tougher if we were in the Outside World."

"Speaking of the Outside World..."

Reimu then turns toward Yukari.

"Hey, Yukari. Just how many Outsiders have you gapped into Gensokyo in your lifetime?" Reimu asked. Yukari replied after a head-scratch, "None since New Year this year. Before that, I... kind of lost count."

Why none this year?" Reimu wondered.

"Just a few years ago, the Outsider's Government seems to be warring against an army of darkness I have yet to identify. The Outsiders devoted their attention on the war, so I was able to take a stroll out there without drawing attention. Now the war is over, but the Outsider's armies are still preparing for their possible next encounter with the army of darkness, and is devoting their attention on security. If one person goes missing from the world, the entire world is notified and I'll be forced to stay out during the heat..." Yukari explained.

"In short..."

"Whatever last war they fought seems to have made the outsiders aware of anything and everything, even things that occurs on microscopic scales."

"That kind of savvyness..."

"It also means it's a matter of time before someone manages to find and break through the Hakurei Barrier..."

Omega E The Reader: Wouldn't Yukari prevent anyone from the Outside World to notice the Hakurei Barrier? Also isn't the Hakurei Barrier unnoticeable as the outsiders actually have NO way to see it. More importantly, do you really think that Yukari is going to let a couple of outsiders notice it? She is very ruthless and won't let anything happen to it.

Sin Count: 4.