Uzumaki Ricky: HELL YEAH! THIS JUST HIT 20 REVIEWS! ON TOP OF THAT, A LOT OF PEOPLE HAVE ADDED THIS STORY TH THEIR ALERTS LISTS AND FAVORITES LISTS! I REALLY THINK THIS IS GONNA BE A WINNER! He he... Sorry about that. I'm just really happy about this. Since I'm actually on brake from school until October 12, I might not be able to update any time soon. One thing I like is that almost none of the reviews were just to slam my work. ALMOST none of them.
Review Responses:
Daiski:
I'll pretty much agree with the summary about Naruto. However Naruto was NEVERbeaten in canon, nor was he ever chased down by an angry mob of villagers, soit fails in that assumption. That's one facet that I'm tired to death ofseeing implemented into a story to get whatever lame desired effect the authoris shooting for. 9 times out of time 10 I hit the backspace button accordingto how idiotic it is when I see that in a story, which I'll be doing afterthis review because yours ranks pretty high with how ridiculous it is.
This thing was an anonymous review to chapter 1 and made me wanna find this guy so that I could punch him in the neck so hard that the impact would break it! Do you know why? Because he's just assuming that Naruto was never beaten by the villagers when he was a child! Remember, they don't say much about exactly what the villagers did to Naruto or even talk about his childhood too vividly! For all we know, a few of them could have beaten him! Me, I'm assuming that at least some of them beat him. Two more anonymous reviews like that, and I SWEAR TO FRICKIN GOD I WILL PERMANENTLY TURN OFF THE ANONYMOUS REVIEWS FOR ALL MY STORIES! IF YA DON'T LIKE IT, THEN DON'T EVEN BOTHER TO FRICKIN REVIEW IT! Ahem... Sorry. I just hate it when people waste a perfectly good review on flaming.
monsterhuntergod-Ratholas Mk1:
Amazing, keep it up and this Aengus guy better like this, because it is awsowme! keep it up, and if you need me, you know where to find me
Thanks man. I really appreciate the kind words. If I need your help, I'll definitely ask for it!
Camo 005
Pretty good chapter. Although it was a bit short. I would probobly prefer less frequent updates with long chapters than frequent updates with uber short chapters.
Short. SHORT? You call a 3, 072 word chapter short? huff... Guess it cant be helped. I'll try to lengthen my chapters, at least a little bit.
raw666
Can I recommended that Naruto meets the Kyuubi and the Kyuubi, not wanting to look weak tries to toughen up Naruto by trying to beat on him in a fights until he snaps or is too far gone. Also, it trys to keeps Naruto within his mind and the clan heads try to help Naruto or Kyuubi satisfied and let him go.
Second, because of Kyuubi, Naruto is turned into a berzeker. Which leads to Naruto being his shy self most of the time but in combat or bullied, he snaps and attacks brutally any he consider an enemy. Mainly anyone beside his freinds, Iruka and a certain angle who try to stop him from beating Sasuke to a bloody pulp.
I was actually thinking of doing something almost exactly like that later. Great minds think alike, I guess. You'll just have to wait and see.
KaliAnn
I think you have an interesting chapter and I love how you included Shino in the group. Good job
Thanks. I had a good feeling about including Shino in the group. I thought it would really say something about how little we know about him from the series.
notgonnasay09
Well, this is a somewhat different approach to the other two or three fics in this challenge, and so far it seems to work fairly well. I do wonder if you plan on Naruto being raised by someone like some other fics did. If you plan on going that route, I would like to recommend either Tsume, as you have her showing the most concern of the four parents thus far, or Kakashi, as he has not really had a chance to be a good parent in ANY fics on this site. A great two chapters thus far.
Dunno. I'm still trying to decide on that one! I might decide to post a poll later and let the fans decide.
DivineKnightofBritannia
MY STUDENT! This chapter was better than the first. I'm glad to see Shika-Shino-Choji-Kiba team stick up for Naruto and threaten SasUKE. I am wondering about Hinata through. Is she going to be shy or outgoing? I wonder what will happen next? I guess I'll have to wait. Other than that. GOOD JOB! Now keep working on it or else not only will I make you walk backwards around the earth ten times, I will have Sasuke following you, threatening to kiss you! NOW CONTINUE ON MY YOUTHFUL STUDENT!
THANKS FOR THE MOTIVATION, SENSEI! That one's still in the oven, too. But, I've just about decided. Who knows? Hinata may make an appearance in this chapter! Read and find out!
CXPW
WOW... Shikamaru, Chouji, Shino and Kiba huh? I like it!
About the other two with thoughts off making sasuke swallow his teeth I'm betting in Hinata and maybe... just maybe Ino (because of her father being on of those who have Naruto's back she might as well think the same)... (And don't teaqse me I like to answer rhetorical questions xD even if I'm a terrible guesser *rubs the back of the head shamefully*)
Yeah I know I'm boring as hell and crazy, sorry...
Anyway, loved the way you portrayed sasuke... (I'm have deep hatred for him, to say the truth *evil laugh*)
So pweaseeee Update Soooon~~!
Dude... YOU HIT THE NAIL RIGHT ON THE HEAD! I posted all of those things in the parenthesis because I wanted people to take a crack at guessing! Still haven't gotten any guesses as to who my other favorite 'Naruto' character is! By the way, do you really think I managed to capture Sas-Jerk as being a viper (like Randy Orton).
zentary
I like the Fact Kiba Shino Chouji and Shikamaru are naruto's friends. so far the story is looking good.
Oh and i would keep Hinata shy That would make for some interesting scene's between Naruto and Hinata later on in the story.
Well, ya got me there! But I'm just not sure if that would pan out. If I do decide on that, then Hinata most likely won't stay shy.
Well, that's enough outta me. On ta Chapter 3.
Kiba: I'll handle the disclaimer this time. Get back ta work, ya lazy bum!
Uzumaki Ricky: I'M NOT LAZY! I JUST CAN'T WORK ON THIS AT HOME RIGHT NOW!
Kiba: Yeah-yeah, whatever. Anyway, this lazy bum doesn't own Naruto.
Uzumaki Ricky: THAT'S IT, KIBA! I'M GONNA FUCKING CASTRATE YOUR ASS!
Kiba: Ah hell!
"Talking"
'Thinking'
Emphasis on certain words
"Inner (You know, that little voice inside your head (No, not like a Bijuu inside a Jinchuuriki) talking"
'Inner thinking'
Demonic voice or evil voice talking (which includes a Jinchuuriki's feral almost demonic voice when he/she's using their Bijuu's chakra, but are still in control)
Demonic voice or evil voice thinking (See above)
(Author talking)
Naruto: Life of a Shy Jinchuuriki
Chapter 3: A Friend in Need
Iruka, as well as Kiba, Chouji, Shikamaru, and Shino, were all stunned at the news that the Hokage had just revealed.
"W...What? Did you say that Naruto was attacked?" Iruka asked, refusing to believe what he thought he'd heard.
"Yes." Sarutobi said sadly.
Iruka looked into the aged shinobi's eyes and saw them full of sadness, tears, and anger. When he saw that look, Iruka knew it was the truth. There was a moment of relatively calm silence. Then, the temperature of the room seemed to drop to below freezing.
"THOSE BASTERDS!" Iruka yelled, completely overcome with rage.
On the other side of the door (Yeah, sorry I didn't specify that before), Kiba and the others were thinking the exact same thing, whereas Akamaru growled in anger. They also thought,
'How dare they do this to our brother! They're gonna pay for this!'
"Iruka! Calm down. They've already been punished for it." Sarutobi told the enraged Chuunin.
Iruka calmed down a bit after hearing this, but instantly became overcome with worry about Naruto's condition. Seeing the worry on Iruka's face, the aged Hokage assured him.
"No need to worry, Iruka-kun. He's still alive and well. He's resting in the hospital with two of my most trustworthy ANBU guarding him."
Upon hearing this news, Iruka visibly calmed down.
"Iruka-kun, it's obvious that you're still worried about him. Why don't you and our little guests go and see him?" The Hokage said knowingly.
Iruka was about to ask Sarutobi what he meant when he saw the old man eye the door in a confirming gesture. Iruka walked over and opened the door, making Kiba, Shikamaru, Chouji, and Shino to fall forward and hit the floor. The four boys looked on guiltily at the two adults in front of them.
"How long did you know we were listening?" Kiba asked the Hokage.
"The whole time."
At this, Kiba and Chouji looked a little surprised, while Shikamaru and Shino just looked stoic.
"You knew that he knew?" The two boys asked their friends simultaneously.
"It was too troublesome to mention." Said Shikamaru sleepily.
"He's the Hokage. It would have been illogical for him to not know" Shino said.
Kiba and Chouji looked at their friends, livid that they didn't say anything. Then the Hokage, after coughing to get their attention, said assuringly.
"Now that our guests have been revealed, why don't the five of you go visit him before you go home."
"Thank you, Lord Hokage." The five of them said, dismissing themselves before leaving to visit Naruto.
As soon as they left, Sarutobi got back to work in his struggle against the greatest bane of the kages: paperwork. Just as he was getting back to work, a thought crossed his mind:
'Why are the ANBU watching over Naruto-kun always so late to help him?'
At the Academy entrance
Tsume was pacing outside, waiting for her son to come out. She'd had Kuromaru stay behind and make sure that none of the younger children of the Inuzuka clan caused any trouble. While she was waiting, Shikaku and Chouza arrived to pick up their boys, too.
"Hey Tsume." The two said at the same time.
"Hey guys. Lemme guess... Your boys got detention, too." Tsume said.
"Huff... Yeah." the both answered.
"That doesn't explain why Shino-kun hasn't come home yet." Said Shibi Aburame, who seemed to have popped in out of nowhere.
Startled at their old friend's surprising arrival, the three jumped slightly and turned their heads.
"Shibi! When did you get here? And what do you mean 'Shino-kun hasn't come home yet'?" The three of them asked.
"A moment ago. And I mean he hasn't come home yet." Shibi stated.
"But didn't he tell you that he, along with our sons, wouldn't walk home until they made sure that Naruto-kun got home safely?" Chouza asked, clearly confused.
"He told me that the very day that Naruto-kun first became their friend." Shibi answered.
As Shibi said this, they started to believe that the boys noticed their blond friend's absence and grew concerned. They decided to check the classroom to see if the boys were there. As soon as they were outside the classroom, they noticed that Shino wasn't waiting for them outside like he and Naruto usually would whenever their friends got detention. They went inside and noticed that the classroom had absoutely no one inside it.
"Not a soul. Looks like they weren't the only ones who were worried about Naruto-kun."Said Shikaku.
"Iruka probably went to talk to the Hokage about it. We should try there." Stated Shibi.
Tsume, Chouza, and Shikaku all nodded their agreement. The four clan heads then left the academy and started to walk to the Hokage's office.
At the hospital
Naruto was rolling around restlessly in his sleep when he suddenly jolted awake, sweating profusely. He had been having yet another nightmare about the villagers and his friends. In most of his nightmares (which he has pretty frequently), the villagers chase him through the village before cornering him, then begin beating him to death. Iruka and Naruto's friends then arrive and try to protect him, but this causes the villagers to set their sights on them. The villagers then proceed to beat Naruto's precious people to death, forcing him to watch, before they finally strike him with a killing blow. Naruto always wakes up before the blow lands, sweating in a profuse manner and screaming in terror. This was another such nightmare.
Outside Naruto's room
Iruka, Kiba, Shino, Chouji, and Shikamaru were all walking towards Naruto's room.
"Sensei, do you think Naruto's alright?" Asked Chouji with his voice full of concern.
"Yeah! You know as well as we do that a lot of the doctors here don't like him!" Kiba stated.
"Guy's! Calm down. Remember, Naruto's got the Hokage's most trustworthy ANBU guarding him. He's most likely sleeping right now." Said Shino.
"Shino's right. Just have faith in lord Hokage's judgement." Iruka told his worried students.
Suddenly, they heard their favorite blond scream in terror.
"YOU WERE SAYING?" Shouted Kiba, Chouji, and Shikamaru, while Akamaru growled at Iruka and Shino in agreement with his partner and his partner's friends.
The five of them made their way to Naruto's room and burst through the door. The looked around and saw someone under the bed's covers, shaking like a leaf in the wind.
"Naruto, are you okay?" Kiba asked, knowing it was Naruto.
"N-n-n... No." Naruto stuttered out, so frightened he could barely speak.
"Did you have a nightmare?" Iruka asked knowingly.
At this, Naruto nodded his head from under the covers. Seeing Naruto like this broke their hearts, making them curse the villagers and wish death upon them for doing this to a soul as kind and caring as Naruto.
"Was it one of the usual ones?" Chouji asked, concern for his friend and anger towards the villagers ringing in the young Akimichi's voice.
Naruto just nodded again, and started to cry when he started to remember the nightmare.
"It's okay Naruto. Go back to sleep. We'll stay here with you as long as we can." Iruka stated, trying to comfort his favorite student.
"R-r-r.. Really?" Naruto asked while coming out from under the covers just enough to confirm if they meant it, his eyes still swimming with tears.
"Hell yeah, Naruto! We're here for ya, little buddy!" Kiba exclaimed and Akamaru barked in aggreement.
Naruto visibly relaxed when he saw that they meant what they were saying, then went back to sleep. Iruka and the others stayed by Naruto's bedside and didn't move a muscle, even when Shibi, Tsume, Shikaku, and Chouza arrived to take the boys home. The four clan heads let the boys stay, under the condition that Iruka keep an eye on them. They then left for home and decided to meet up with Inoichi the next morning to discuss what they were going to do to help Naruto. Every time a nurse tried to get Iruka and the others to leave, they gave her death glares that would make an ANBU captain flinch in fear.
The next day
Naruto, Kiba, Shino, Chouji, and Shikamaru were all walking to the academy together, with Akamaru sitting atop Kiba's head. During the entire trip, Naruto would flinch in fear when he would see the glares the villagers were sending his way. Every time the villagers glared at Naruto, his friends would return their glares tenfold and Akamaru would growl at the villagers. Finally, the five of them, plus Akamaru, arrived at the entrance to the academy. As soon as they reached the entrance, they saw Sasuke and his goons blocking the front door while each of Sasuke's fan girls tried to make a move on him. Sasuke turned all of them down, Which elicited a few groans from the disappointed girls.
"Awe come on, Sasuke-kun! Just one date! Please?" Sakura Haruno asked, her voice at it's usual loud, banshee-like volume.
She said it so loudly that Naruto and his friends heard from their position. The five boys and the puppy noticed that Sasuke and his cronies appeared to be waiting for something, or someone. Sasuke looked their way and saw Naruto. As soon as he saw that Naruto was in today, a sadistic smile wormed it's way onto the young Uchiha's face and he got an evil look in his eyes. Sasuke then motioned to his friends and pointed in Naruto's direction. They all got what he was trying to tell them. As soon as they noticed how nervous and fidgety Naruto was, Sasuek and the others started to make their way toward their leaders favorite target, with Sasuke's crowd of grazed fan girls following close behind. Chouji, Shino, Shikamaru, Akamaru, and Kiba all stepped in front of Naruto, daring the Last Uchiha and his goons to try something. They did this because they knew that , amongst the bullies, Sasuke would be the only one who would try to go through them to get to Naruto.
"You lookin' for trouble, Uchiha-teme?" Kiba asked in spite.
"You think I'm scared of you losers? I could take any of you with one hand behind my back. So just make this easier for all of us, and get out of the way." Sasuke said arrogantly.
"You want Naruto? Then come get em." Kiba said, not backing down.
Chouji, Shino, and, surprisingly, Shikamaru all agreed with Kiba, while Akamaru jumped off of Kiba's head and started growling at Sasuke like a dog protecting a member of it's pack.
"Maybe I will." Said Sasuke, taking a step forward.
Kiba and the others all got ready to fight. When suddenly...
"ALRIGHT, BREAK IT UP! I WANT ALL OF YOU IN CLASS IN FIVE MINUTES OR IT'S DETENTION FOR ALL OF YOU!" Iruka shouted, getting their attention.
Sasuke and the others then backed off, but not before Sasuke could shoot a glare at Kiba and the others for getting in his way. Naruto then looked at his friends, his eyes still full of tears.
"What's the matter, Naruto?" Shino asked.
"Y-y-y-you g-g-guys p-p-put yous-s-selves at r-risk ff-or m-me. B-b-but.. I-I'm not w-w-worth it."Naruto said, trying to keep himself from crying.
"What are you talking about? Of course you're worth it. You're our friend Naruto." Said Chouji.
"Chouji's right, Narruto. And as long as you'tr our friend, we'll always stick by you whether you want us to or not."" Said Shikamaru
The others all nodded in agreement and, just as Naruto was about to say something, he felt something nudge him in the leg. He looked down and saw that it was Akamaru. Kiba, Chouji, Shikamaru, and Shino looked down as well.
"See? Even Akamaru agrees with us." Kiba said, smiling at his partner and his blond friend.
"T-thanks g-guys." Naruto said as he knelt down and started to pet Akamaru.
In response, Akamaru Leaned up and started to lick Naruto's face.
"Any time, Naruto." Shikamaru said. (Shocking, isn't it?)
"Yeah. And if anyone wants to hurt you, they've gotta go through us first. Right guys?" Kiba stated/asked
"Got that right!"
"Indeed."
"Yeah... No matter how troublesome it is."
"Alright Akamaru, I think he's feeling better." Kiba said.
As soon as he said this, Akamaru's licking slowed to a stop. The puppy then walked over to Kiba and stood next to him, turning his gaze back to Naruto.
"Guys. We'd better get to class before Iruka-sensei blows a gasket." Said Shikamaru.
"Shikamaru-san is right. We should hurry before we're late" Said Shino.
Kiba picked Akamaru up and set him back in his usual spot. As soon as Akamaru was comfortably atop Kiba's head, the five boys turned around and walked into the academy.
TO BE CONTINUED...
Uzumaki Ricky: Finally! I've finished chapter 3. You have no idea what I had to go through to finish this! By the way, you don't have to worry about Kiba. He and I have worked it out.
Kiba: Worked it out? You almost cut my nards off!
Uzumaki Ricky: Hey, I warned you about my anger management issues! Besides, you don't have the right to call me lazy unless I'm still updating like this when my punishment's over.
Kiba: THAT IS... Totally true. I really hate it when you're right!
Uzumaki Ricky: Get used to it, buddy-boy. Now... Back to business! Since I've only had like 7 people vote on my pole, I've been thinking about just closing it already. So... let's see some more votes, people! By the way, the competition between Monsterhuntergod and I will begin after I start Naruto's shinobi career. So I'm gonna try to get there as soon as I can. The more you review, THE MORE I TYPE! AND THE MORE I TYPE, THE SOONER I POST! SO LET'S SEE SOME...
Kabong!
Shino: Sometimes, he is just way too loud.
Shikamaru: You're tellin me... I was just about to settle down for a nap too.
Chouji: You could try again while he's unconscious.
Shikamaru: Good thinkin, Chouji
Shikamaru lays down and goes to sleep.
Kiba: Anyway, let's see some reviews!
Monsterhuntergod: Ya, this one is a little crazy, but if you think this fics crazy, think again, my fic, wyvern chronicles is even more crazy! Plus let me add, we are in competition to see who can create the strongest Naruto, now that is one that he is going to have to try real hard to beat me in, because I already have a 18 chapter head start! Review this, and good things will happen, don't, and there will be consiquences! Just kidding, but seriously, review! And don't question this guy, he has some great ideas, and he knows how to use them.