Ricky: Sorry this took so long. I had a few problems finding time to work on this one. And, even when I found time to work on it, I'd end up getting writer's block at the most inopportune times! But… At least it's finally out.
Kiba: Good for you! Another day or two, and we would've glued you to your seat and watched you 24/7 to make sure you worked on it!
Everyone else: YEAH!
Ricky: Note to self… Start saving up money to buy a laptop.
Inner Ricky: *Pulls out a pad and pencil* MAKING NOTE!
Ricky: I DIDN'T MEAN IT LITERALLY!
Review Responses:
CloudRed1988
Pretty good...this must be Naruto best day of his life...anyway plz update ASAP!
Yes… Yes it is. By the way… I will update again as soon as I can! I am not the kind of guy who purposely leaves people hanging without any legitimate reason whatsoever!
Rose Tiger
Chapter 5
Aww...Poor Naruto...
Don't feel too bad for him. Things will start looking up for him real soon.
Chapter 6
*Gasp* You made Sasuke and Sakura real mosters! I want to beat them down!
*Elvis voice* Thank ya, thank ya very much. Hahaha… But in all seriousness, that was the response I wanted.
Kage Bijuu
This is a very epic chapter that for sure.
You really think so?
notgonnasay09
While the timing of these two chapters might be a little off - Christmas in March? - they were a blast to read. Seeing how hard Naruto worked to try to get acknowledgment from other people still shows a side of Naruto that most people are familiar with, and it works out well for your fic. As an added bonus, Kiba got to knock the stuffing out of Sasuke, which is always fun to see. Another great pair of chapters.
Yeah, well... I would've gotten out a lot sooner if word pad hadn't kept glitching up and erasing em when I was almost done. Not only that, but my home computer's acting up. When I'm on it for about three hours, the monitor just goes blank for some reason and the keyboard stops working. Add that to all the crap I'm going through at home and all my school work, I'm lucky it didn't take me til the end of this month to get chapter's 5 and 6 out.
naruhinasakufan1
Chapter 1
awwwwww poor naruto
Yeah, I'm still feeling bad about doing that to him.
Chapter 2
well i think you pull off the whole Sasuke being a prick thing well off in my opinion
Why thank you. I try my best.
Chapter 3
i like how the story is going so far keep up the goos work ^-^
Why thank you. I'm pretty happy with it, myself.
Chapter 4
omg man you made naruto and Hinata switch personality's man i cant wait to see how this turn's out, i give your story a 10/10 very good my friend lol
I think that's a bit a stretch… But I thank you, nonetheless.
Chapter 5
pretty good chap
Thanks, I appreciate it.
Chapter 6
aw mamn i cant wait to see the next chap, i so wanna so how hinata and naruto are gonna end up together, but make Hinata kick sasuke's ass again, this time et hinata kick him in the ball's and make him limb home craying ha ha ha ha
Good to know you liked it. And about that whole "Hinata-kicking-Sasuke-in-the-balls" thing… That's actually been suggested a lot. So… If you guys wanna see that so badly… I'll seriously consider obliging.
Bookwurm666
GREAT STORY
*Blushes* Aw come on. It can't be that great.
adngo714
unbelievable! I thought in your fic, Sasukie is a jerk. But he's far worse then that!
Uuum… I guess I'll take that as a complement.
Okazaki323
IT WAS REALLY GOOD. I LIKE THE NARUHINA SO FAR. SASUKE'S SUCH A DOUCHE. PLEASE DON'T LET INO START LIKING HIM. AND IF SHE DOES, PLEASE DON'T LET NARUTO EVER HAVE ANY FEELINGS FOR HER. CAUSE FICS WHERE NARUTO HAS MULTIPLE WIVES SUCK. I DON'T THINK YOU WOULD EVER DO THAT THOUGH. MY ONLY QUALM IS THAT YOU'RE A LITTLE TOO HARSH ON SASUKE. I THINK HE'S A LITTLE TOO DOUCHY. LIKE, HE'S A DOUCHE, BUT I THINK HE SHOULD SPEND A BIT MORE TIME BROODING RATHER THAN MAKING FUN OF NARUTO. YOU SHOULDN'T CHANGE YOUR WRITING STYLE. IT'S GOT GOOD FLOW AND ISN'T HARD TO READ. OVERALL, THESE TWO CHAPS GET AN 8.5/10.
Thanks. And don't worry… I'm almost positive that I'll never have Ino have feelings towards Naruto. The main reason for that is the "No Harem" condition of the challenge. But I noticed… There's no rule about "one-sided love" pairings. So if, and I do mean if, I ever do have Ino start liking Naruto like that, it'll definitely be one-sided. And now we get to Sasuke… I guess I could make him a bit less of a douche later on. All I can tell you is that, for now, it is absolutely necessary for me to keep making Sasuke look like this.
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Chapter 6
Great story and I must say I find it impressive that you put all that work into answering the reviews
*Blushes* Aw... Heeheehee. *Calms down* Ahem… At least somebody appreciates my hard work on the review responses!
3rd Notice
I can't wait to read what will happen next and u should ignore people like namelesspower they are to busy taking a bus out of their ass to notice a good story
Thanks for saying so. By the way, I already do. And thanks for the complement.
HitmanReiji
well, you got the personality right but you have to consider that he will start to out run the villagers that go after him and the character interaction is kind of corny. Try making it a more serious fic if you want more readers. im not flamming or anything, just trying to give you advice
Thanks for the advice. Since this is my first solo fic, seeing as I'm co-writing the other two on my profile with other authors, I'm really nervous about it. Not only that, but I'll admit that I can be a bit defensive when somebody else just bad talks it without even mentioning something they like about it.
Duck Rogers
Chapter 5
Bout time man! Anyway good chapter but you should stop with the excessive letters (example: w-w-w-what?). Just dont do to many. Naruto is shy, he doesnt have a stuttering disorder.
A little harsh, dude. But… I guess you're right. But don't worry… His stuttering will be toned down a lot after the time skip. (Except when he's around Hinata, that is!)
Chapter 6
Another good one but same issue I stated in the last review. Especially the last sentence of this chapter. Why would he stutter in his mind? But good chapter keep it up.
Dude… The girl he's crushing on (even if he hasn't figured it out for sure,yet) kissed him. His mind went into overload! Why else would he stutter it, even if it's in his mind, before passing out? And by the way, wouldn't your mind go into overload in that same situation?
SilentSinger948
Chapter 5
Great chapter.
*Blushes a little* Thanks.
Chapter 6
Sasuke sure got his ass kicked. It was wonderful. Glad Ino is going to be nicer to Naruto. Great chapter.
*Blushes* Thanks for saying so. I really appreciate it
NotWorthEffortofLogin ()
I was looking forward to an entertaining and thought provoking story, but itappears I've made a huge mistake. First, Naruto was never beaten, justignored; and your opening scene was just idiotic and overly dramatic. Second,why do you keep interrupting the narrative? If its important, explain itthrough the story, don't stop to tell the reader what it is. Third, you tellthe reader whats going on in a very childish manner; instead strive to paint apicture, where the reader can see whats happening, feel whats happening, andmake connections to the characters. Telling us what a character is thinking inquotes does not a connection or even character depth make. Though this may come across as a "flame review," it is not my intention to beone. Rather, pointing out the over used clich駸, and attempting to guideanother writer in painting a narrative, and not rushing to "tell a story."Flesh out your characters! Make them believable! How and individual reacts tothose in his/her environment can show the workings of the characters mindset,even how they grew up and under what conditions they grew up. Think, whatwould your Naruto do in this situation, or that, really dive into the minds ofyour characters and have the act naturally to their upbringing and nature. I have no idea if you managed to incorporate some of these previouslymentioned techniques; I just cannot muster the desire to check past the firstfew lines of chapter two. If you have, well done! but you should then go backand fix your first few chapters to reader will be enticed to read to fullstory. Its an excellent idea for a story, I hope to come across this again one dayand be able to read it in its entirety. Good luck, and God's speed youngwriter!
Ya know, before, a review like this one would have pissed me off so badly I'd start ranting angrily, swearing, and making threats, but I'm waaay past caring about anybody who chooses to just slam my work without talking about anything in the chapter that they liked. And at least I got some advice on how to improve. By the way... Your anonymous sig makes you sound like a Nara!
ra'shakra nara
Very nice! I enjoyed both chapter. Keep up the good work!
*Blushes a little* Thanks for saying so. I worked really hard on both of them.
ryanshadow19
that was such a great chapter please update soon
*Blushes harder* Hee hee hee… *Calms down* Ahem… Thanks. And don't worry about the updates. I'm doing the best that I can with what I've got.
Jeikobu Kyoudai-teiru
awesome chapter, good luck on the next one.
*Blushes*Heh heh heh... Ahem… Why, thank you.
zentary
Nice chapter can't wait to read the second part. Sorry this was a late review on account of finals and other things.
Thanks for the compliment. By the way, I don't mind that it took you so long to read it.
Dragon Man 180
How did Naruto recover so quickly from Sasuke's fire ball so quickly? Even with Kyuubi healing him that's a bit much. Also, since Naruto is so shy, if you have him access the fox's chakra I think the fox should be his friend or an older sibling figure.
First of all, I never said Naruto had recovered from the fireball. I only said that he was conscious. I never said he's healed. By the way… That's a relationship I was thinking about having Naruto and the fox have later on. But I wasn't sure if my readers would like it.
TOATAL GEAR HEAD
sup ricky! just so u know i had to change everything on my profile including my pen name... you might remember my story " Hinata's dream day!" my old pen name was broughal on to the review. I absolutly love this story. you have made a much more relstic Naruto universe with naruto being the shy one. but i think you should make Hinata a bit shyer not when it comes to every one but just when her and Naruto are alone like the last scene some sort of inner debate on wnhat to do before she kissed him just to add more of a 3 dementional set of her chariteristics. the way you did it was great and i am in no way flaming you or trying to change your way of writing your story... but just an idea.
Oh hey! Good at hear from ya, dude. I've missed ya.
Thanks for the kind words and the heads up. I'm really just trying to finish the pre-graduation chapters, so I'm not paying much attention to stuff like that. I'll go back and improve that, along with some other stuff from the other chapters, later.
Snagiyo Summara
I've got to say this is definatly a great fic. I've read a few role reversal fics like tis. But this 1 is definatly in my top 3 spots. And I must say that was 1 of the best "Saske is sooooooo f***ed" moments I've read in a while. I had chills, while at the same time laghing my a** off. Definatly looking forward to the next chapter. ja Ne
*Blushes* Hehehehe… Thanks for saying so. A lot of people on this site have been telling me this is a good fic, but I have a hard time believing it myself. Then again, I'm not very good at accepting compliments. *Calms down* Also, I'm happy you liked that "Sasuke is sooooooo f***ed" moment. I put a lot of hard work into Chapters 5 and 6, especially the parts that led up to and followed that moment.
Echo Uchiha
Chapter 1
awesome!
Why thank you. I was wondering when you'd read this and leave a review.
Chapter 2
love it!
Glad to hear it!
Chapter 3
cool!
I'm happy you think so.
Chapter 4
awesome!
Wow… Two for two. Nice!
Chapter 5
sweet!
At least someone thought so! Do you people have any idea how hard it is for me to write "warm-and-fuzzy-feeling" worthy moments? It's hard! I usually try to hide it when I feel emotions like that. I mainly do so because I'm not good at expressing them.
Chapter 6
cool!
Another two-for-two!
1st Notice
i can help pm me!
Well… At least I have another person that I know I can talk to when I have a problem with ideas.
2nd Notice
okay
Good to know that you don't mind.
3rd Notice
it's already finished
Yeah, sorry about that I *Blushes* accidentally posted the wrong notice for the third one. Probably should've deleted the second notice from my document manager before trying to post the third one. By the way, I noticed that you seem to really like writing short reviews. And I, for one, am okay with that.
Ricky: ALRIGHT! IT'S FINALLY SHOW TIME! Oh, to any assholes out there who're like NamelessPower… You can go fuck yourselves for all I care! And if ya not down with that, I got just two words for ya!
Everyone: SUCK IT!
Disclaimer: Look at my name on my profile and see for yourself. (BTW… Reeeally getting tired of doing one of these for every chapter. So, I've decided to make this disclaimer one for this chapter and all that'll follow it!)
"Talking"
'Thinking'
Emphasis on certain words
"Inner (You know, that little voice inside your head (No, not like a Bijuu inside a Jinchuuriki) talking"
'Inner thinking'
Demonic voice or evil voice talking (which includes a Jinchuuriki's feral almost demonic voice when he/she's using their Bijuu's chakra, but are still in control)
Demonic voice or evil voice thinking (See above)
(Author talking)
Dream and nightmare-based flashbacks when skipping back and forth between them and reality
Naruto: Life of a Shy Jinchuuriki
Chapter 7: The Fox Snaps and the Viper Gets Struck
It was two months after the incident on Christmas Eve and Naruto was just getting out of the hospital. After checking out, Naruto went on his way to meet up with his friends. So far, Kiba and the others had yet to find out anything about Naruto's father. But, despite this setback, they had managed to find out his mother's name.
'M-my Oka-san… K-Kushina U-Uzumaki…" Naruto thought.
Naruto was happy that he finally knew something about at least one of his parents. From what Kiba and the others managed to dig up, Naruto's mom had been a strong kunoichi, a former ANBU, a bit of a tomboy, and had been known for having a bit of a temper. Naruto was sure he hadn't inherited any personality traits or skills from her, but the fact that he actually knew something about her more than sufficed.
'I w-wish I c-could have m-met her…' Naruto thought sadly.
Naruto may not have known what she looked like, but Kiba and the others had that covered. One reason why he was going to meet up with them was because, earlier that day, his friends said they had something they wanted to give him, but refused to say what it was. As Naruto ran down the streets with a shy, happy smile on his face, a thought crossed his mind.
'D-did you r-really want m-me, Oka-san?'
Naruto shook this thought out of his mind and tried to focus on the positives. At least he now knew who she was, right? Naruto was close to the Training Grounds, where he'd agreed to meet up with them. Naruto went through the chain-link fence, surprised to see that he was early.
"G-guys? A-are you h-here yet?" Naruto called out.
Naruto walked farther in when someone grabbed him and threw him into a nearby tree.
"Argh." Naruto grunted, closing his eyes in pain before the person slammed their fist into his gut.
Naruto opened his eyes and saw Sasuke and his twelve goons right in front of him. Naruto started to panic.
"Wh-wh-what're y-""SHOVE IT, UZUMAKI! Since you're bodyguards aren't here right now, you've got no one to protect you!" Sasuke shouted at Naruto before grabbing him by his shirt collar and pulling, throwing him to the ground.
Sasuke then kicked Naruto in the gut as hard as he could before stepping on him, pressing him into the ground.
"Like the taste of dirt, Uzumaki? Then have some more! "Sasuke said before lifting his foot and stomping on Naruto.
Sasuke took his foot off Naruto and turned towards his goons.
"Half of you hold him down and the other half whoop his ass! " The Uchiha shouted.
They then proceeded to do just that. They kicked Naruto anywhere that wasn't blocked by the ground, stomped on him, and overall beat Naruto to a pulp.
"CUT THAT OUT!"
They all turned to see Hinata glaring at them.
"Let! Him! GO!" Hinata shouted as she activated her Byakuugan.
Sasuke's goons all flinched as the Hyuuga heiress activated her kekkei genkai.
"Man up, you wimps!" There are thirteen of us and one of her! Even if two of you hold Uzumaki down, we can take her!" Sasuke shouted at them.
When Sasuke's goons heard him say this, they all got an evil glint in their eyes. Then, all but two of the ones who'd pinned Naruto down got up and walked to the others. Sasuke then turned towards the other two and said.
"Make sure Uzumaki watches this!"
The two who had Naruto pinned grabbed his head, angled it upwards, and held it in place, forcing Naruto to watch. Naruto was forced to watch as Sasuke and his goons then spread out and surrounded Hinata. As soon as they had Hinata surrounded, they all ran in all at once to attack her. Sasuke threw a punch at Hinata. She sidestepped the blow, only for one of Sasuke's goons to kick her in the back from behind. Every time Hinata tried to dodge a hit, four more came her way. The way Sasuke and his goons were beating Hinata resembled a pack of hyenas attacking a wildebeest.
"STOP!" Naruto shouted.
Sasuke and his goons turned and looked at him. They saw tears forming in Naruto's eyes, then turned and continued to beat Hinata.
"I said sto-" Naruto started to say before one of the goons got on top of him cupped his hand to Naruto's mouth, silencing him. Sasuke turned to him and said.
"Shut up! First her… Then you!"
Sasuke then continued his hand in the beating. Naruto, for the first time that he could remember, was angry. And this wasn't any ordinary anger. No, this was the kind of anger that, if given physical form, would haunt veteran Jounin's nightmares. Meanwhile, something stirred within the seal on his stomach.
Inside the seal
Inside a sewer-like area and behind a massive cell door with a slip of paper with the kanji for "seal" written on it, two crimson-red eyes with cat-like slits for pupils opened up, piercing through the semi-darkness of the area. The creature that the eyes belonged to was none other than the Kyuubi no Kitsune, the strongest Bijuu in existence (now, that is!).
"Heh heh heh… Looks like I underestimated the kit. He really canget mad… I'd say this is a good a time as any to see what the kit's reallycapable of." The old fox said in its booming baritone voice.
The Kyuubi then proceeded to send a small, dark red stream of chakra out through the seal.
"Let's see how much the kit can handle before he snaps and gives in to his impulses…"
Outside the seal
Naruto was trying to free himself from the two goons who pinned him down when he looked again and really took in the scene before him: Hinata was being beaten to by a crowd after trying to protect him. To Naruto, this was like a scene out of one of his nightmares. Suddenly, Naruto felt something spring up within him and, for some reason, one of the worst nightmares he'd ever had begun to flash before his eyes.
He was pinned to a wall by some kunai with no means of escape and a crowd of villagers closing in. The villagers began to cut and beat him anywhere the could reach. Minutes later, Naruto was covered in so many cuts and bruises that even those close to him might not recognize him right away.
Naruto flinched and began shaking in fear as the image flashed through his mind.
Suddenly, Kiba and the rest of his friends, along with Iruka, arrived on the scene.
"Leave him alone!" Iruka shouted.
"Yeah, what's Naruto ever done to you?" Kiba shouted.
"Do you even need to ask! This little demon took our friends, comrades, and families from us!" One of the shinobi in the crowd shouted.
The crowd then turned their attention on Iruka and the others.
"N-n-no…' Naruto thought as a strange red chakra started to slowly seep out of him.
The crowd then proceeded to beat them to death. They gut Chouji like a fish, beat Shikamaru like a piñata, and hung Shino up by his neck while they cut him up like salami.
'St-stop…' Naruto pleaded, the chakra flaring outward and growing in quantity as his whisker marks grew more refined.
They threw Kiba into a nearby wall, then hung him by his legs and cut his limbs off one-by-one, decapitating him as soon as he hit the ground.
'C-c-cut it out…!' Naruto exclaimed as his fingernails grew into claws and his canines extended.
They impaled Iruka on a dull pike and stabbed him while they watched him bleed to death.
'STOP IT!' Naruto shouted in his mind.
The crowd then turned their attention to Hinata. They ripped her eyes out of her head and then began to give her all the treatment that they gave the others.
'I SAID…' Naruto thought, opening his eyes to reveal slitted, crimson-red colored spheres in place of the usual deep-ocean blue.
"STOOOOP!" Naruto shouted in rage.
When Naruto shouted, the red chakra that was now pouring out of him spiked, releasing a small shockwave that blew the two goons on top of him clean off, sending each of them flying into a tree. When they heard Naruto shout, Sasuke and his goons all looked in Naruto's direction. They then saw a sight that made about five of them crap their pants: the normally shy, kind, quiet, would-never-harm-a-fly Naruto Uzumaki that they were used to was glaring at them with demonic-looking eyes that were filled to bursting with what could only be described as anger, hate, and pure, concentrated rage. Before any of them could even attempt to even speculate what could have brought about this change, Naruto, adrenaline pumping through his body like water from a flood rushing through a flood gate, disappeared from their sight in a burst of speed. Less than a second later, Naruto was right next to Sasuke, kicking the Uchiha boy off of Hinata and into a training post.
"Ugh." Sasuke grunted in pain.
Sasuke looked up and saw that Naruto was already in front of him again. Naruto picked Sasuke up by his shirt collar and sunk his fist deep into his tormentor's gut. As soon as Naruto's fist made contact, Sasuke was sent flying about five feet into the air. As Sasuke fell, Naruto caught the "avenger" by the back of his shirt collar before the he hit the ground. Swinging his arm upwards then jerking it back down abruptly, Naruto threw him to the ground. Then the enraged blond turned his attention towards the goon squad. As soon as Naruto looked in their direction, the five boys who craped their pants ran scared. But, unfortunately for them, they didn't get far. Naruto appeared right in front of them, stopping the five boys dead in their tracks. Naruto stood there for only a moment before running forward and sinking his fist deep into the nearest boy's solar plexus. As the first boy fell to the ground in pain, the rest of Sasuke's goons ran in to try and help. What happened next was nothing short of a mass ass-whooping. Naruto kicked the boy on the ground in the chest like a normal person would kick a pebble on the ground, sending the boy flying towards the group. Then, in a burst of speed, Naruto zipped into the center of the group, gave a slight hop, and kicked the two boys nearest to him in the face. The two boys fell, unconscious before they even hit the ground. One of the boys behind Naruto threw a punch at the back of the blonde's head, only for Naruto to tilt his head towards the side to evade the blow and slam his elbow into the boy's stomach. Naruto grabbed the boy's wrist and flung him forward into one of the others in front of him. Then, the normally shy and timid blond just looked at them all with a bored but angry look plastered on his face.
"Is that all you got?" Naruto asked with a sneer.
Three of the boys on Naruto's left side ran in and tried to tackle him to the ground, only for Naruto to jump, kick one of them in the chin and slam the other two boys heads together, knocking all three boys out cold. Sasuke, having finally gotten up and shaken the cobwebs out of his head, ran forward to fight alongside his underlings. Sasuke looked around in utter shock: Naruto had taken down seven of his goons in under a minute, not counting the two who each got flung into a tree when Naruto had shouted. In just under a minute, this fight had gone from thirteen-against-one to four-against-one.
"What the... What the hell are you?" Sasuke asked.
Naruto turned his head in Sasuke's direction, but he didn't answer. But, as soon as he looked at Sasuke, the sneer left his face and was replaced by raw fury! Sort of like the kind of look you'd get from a fox or a wolf if you harmed a member of its pack.
"Grrrr…" Naruto growled loudly, making the four boys jump with fright.
"S-S-Sasuke... This don' look good." One of the goons said.
"I say we run!" One of the others said.
As soon as he said this, Naruto made his move. He shot forward faster than a bullet fired from a gun and punched the first goon in the face, sending the boy flying into the training post Sasuke had been near just a moment ago. As soon as the boy made contact with it, the post bent slightly and splintered. Naruto then turned his attention towards the others. The boy who'd suggested that they run tried to do just that, only for Naruto to appear behind him, grab him by his shirt collar, and swing his arm over, slamming the cowardly little goon into the ground back first. The boy's head bounced against the ground, knocking him out like a burnt out light bulb. Sasuke and his last flunky ran forward to try and double team Naruto. Sasuke tried to sweep Naruto's feet out from under him while his flunky tried to punch the blond boy in the face. But this failed miserably. Naruto merely dodged both the hits by hopped up, caught the other boy's fist, landed on Sasuke's leg, and threw the other boy on top of him. Naruto then kicked Sasuke in the gut, sending both of them skidding away. As soon as Sasuke's goon tried to stand up, Naruto shot forward and kicked him in the face, busting his nose and rendering him unconscious. Then, Naruto turned his attention to Sasuke. Naruto shot forward and kicked the bane of his existence (A.K.A Saspunk) in the face and planted his foot on his chest. With his foot firmly planted on the Uchiha boy's chest, Naruto began to press his press down on him into and stomp on him.
"AAAAARGH! UGH! AGH!" Sasuke screamed in agony.
After about a minute, Naruto stopped and Sasuke tried to speak.
"*Cough* P-please... H… Have mercy." Sasuke pleaded, coughing up a little blood as he spoke.
As soon as Sasuke said this, Naruto looked down on him.
"Pathetic." Naruto said, causing Sasuke's eyes to widen in shock and anger.
"WHAT'D YOU CA-"
Naruto pressed his foot down harder, silencing the Uchiha.
"Shut up, you cowardly worm! You think that's painful? You think that hurts? TRY LASTING A DAY IN MY LIFE!" Naruto shouted as he took his foot off of Sasuke's chest.
Naruto then reached down and grabbed Sasuke by his throat.
"Ugh."
As soon as he had a good grip on, Naruto lifted the Uchiha boy as high off the ground as he could, so that Sasuke had to look down at Naruto to look him in the eyes.
"Now listen and listen well. I don't care whatyou do to me. But, from this day on, you leave my friends out of it! If you so much as lookat one of them the wrong way, I'll make what I've done to you and your pathetic cronies today look like a little slap on the wrist! DO YOU UNDERSTAND?" Naruto shouted in rage, squeezing Sasuke's throat as he talked.
As Naruto held him up by his throat, Sasuke couldn't help but quake in fear at the sight before him. This was not the Naruto he knew. Sasuke wasn't sure if Naruto had been faking it the whole time or if he'd finally snapped. But, if the look on the blonde's face and the almost crazed look in his eyes were any clue, the latter definitely seemed to be the correct answer. Frightened, confused, and losing control of his bowels, Sasuke nodded.
"Good." Naruto said before throwing Sasuke to the ground and kicking him in the gut.
"NOW BEAT IT!" Naruto roared at the top of his lungs.
At that, Sasuke stumbled to his feet as fast as he could and ran home, scared senseless. As soon as Sasuke was out of sight, Naruto, breathing hard from shouting like that, started to calm down. As Naruto composed himself, the red chakra began to recede, the adrenaline pumping through him slowed to a crawl, and his appearance returned to normal.
'Wh-wha… Wh-what… Wh-what was that?' Naruto thought in surprise as he looked down at his hands.
Naruto looked up to see Hinata staring at him in shock, and a little bit of fear, as well. Naruto blushed when he saw Hinata staring at him.
"U-um... Hi-Hi-Hinata-Ch-Chan? A-are you o-okay?" Naruto asked as he walked towards her.
Hinata shook herself back to reality as soon as she heard Naruto's voice. She then looked at Naruto again and saw that he was back to his old self again.
"Naruto-kun… Th-that was… THAT WAS SO AWESOME! YOU GOTTA SHOW ME HOW YOU DO THAT! C'MON, NARUTO-KUN! PLEASE!" Hinata yelled while glomping Naruto. (Glomp: a 'running tackle hug'; you see them in a lot of anime (Definition reference: Zazi The Beast))
Naruto froze up as soon as Hinata glomped him. He felt his face heat up.
'Hi-Hi-Hinata-chan is… Sh-she's h-hugging me!' Naruto thought before he passed out.
Hinata felt Naruto go limp in her arms.
"N-Naruto-kun? Naruto-kun? Oh man… Kiba's gonna kill me if he sees this!" She said when she pulled back and saw Naruto unconscious.
Later
Kiba, Ino, Chouji, Shino, and Shikamaru were talking amongst themselves while they walked towards the Training Grounds to meet up with Naruto.
"I cannot wait to see the look on Naruto's face when he sees this!" Ino exclaimed, holding up a small, thin box.
"He'd better like it! I mean, we didn't go through all that effort to find it and get it for him for him to not like it! And you guys know how much I hate effort." Shikamaru said lazily.
"I never wanna see another textbook again as long as I live!" Kiba yelled.
"Then you're in bad luck, Kiba-san. We still have about three years or so before graduation." Shino pointed out.
"I know! And I fricking hate that!" Kiba exclaimed angrily.
They soon arrived at the Training Grounds and were met with a sight they never thought they'd see: Sasuke's goon squad scattered all over the field, each and every one of them unconscious. One of them was out cold while leaning against a slightly-bent and splintered wooden training post, two others each leaning against a tree in the opposite direction of the other, one with a bleeding broken nose, one with a seemingly-fractured jaw, and two piled on top of each other. To top it all off, the group discovered that five of them craped their pants.
"What the devil…!" Kiba said in surprise.
"What happened here? It looks like small twister came through this place! " Chouji exclaimed.
"Uuum… I believe that they might know something about all this." Shino said while pointing to the right.
The others all turned their heads in the direction Shino was pointing in and saw Naruto and Hinata. Naruto was out cold and leaning against a tree while Hinata was lightly slapping him in an attempt to wake him up.
"Think she had something at do with this?" Kiba asked, looking at Chouji.
"Who, Hinata-san?" He asked.
Kiba nodded.
"Most likely." Chouji said as they all walked towards them.
"Naruto-kun? Come on, Naruto-kun! Please wake up before he gets here!" Hinata pleaded.
"Before who gets here?"
"Before Kiba gets here! Duh, you id-KIBA? Wh-when did you g-get here?" Hinata said as she turned around and saw Kiba and the others.
"Long enough."
"Exactly how long is that?"
"Enough ta see Naruto knocked out and you panicking while trying at wake him up!" Kiba said, sounding a little pissed.
"Uuum… Yeah… Funny story… Well… It kinda has to do with why Sasuke's goon squad is here, unconscious, and scattered around the area." Hinata said nervously.
"We're listening." Kiba said, clearly irritated.
Hinata then proceeded to tell them what happened, everything from her finding Naruto in trouble to him fainting when she hugged him.
"Wow. Just… Wow." Shino said.
"Yeah… Who would've thought Naruto had it in him!" Chouji said in surprise.
"Hmm… I'm not buyin it. How do we know she's not lying?" Kiba said.
"Kiba… I swear, on both my eyes and my mother's grave, that it's all true." Hinata said.
This surprised everyone because, for someone from a clan with a doujutsu (Basically, an eye-based kekkei genkai) to swear on their eyes was basically the equivalent of a lifetime promise. (FYW, this idea was inspired by another fic and I just felt compelled to use it. If the author of that fic doesn't approve of me using it, then just tell me and I'll remove it.)
"Th-that wh-what's all t-true?" Naruto asked, having finally woken up.
"Oh, all that stuff about how you clobbered Sasuke and his goons, Naruto." Kiba said before his eyes widened in surprise.
"Wait, NARUTO? How long ago did you have you been awake?" They all asked.
"I j-just w-woke up." Naruto simply said.
"Oh. Well… Okay, then." Kiba said.
"Sooo… Was Hinata-san telling the truth?" Ino asked.
"A-about wh-what?"
"About you doing all this to the goon squad, whooping Sasuke, and sending him crying home with his tail between his legs?" Chouji asked excitedly.
"W-w-wait… Th-that w-wasn't a d-dream?" Naruto asked nervously as looking towards Hinata, as if he expected her to answer.
Hinata just nodded her head confusedly when Naruto looked towards her. As soon as Hinata verified this, Naruto… Fainted from shock.
"I guess we can take that as a yes." Shikamaru said as he pulled a little bottle out of his pocket.
"What the hell is that stuff?" Hinata asked.
"Just watch and find out?" Shikamaru said as he opened it.
After the bottle, Shikamaru held it under Naruto's nose. A second later, Naruto jolted up.
"Wh-what happened?" Naruto asked.
"You fainted after you found out that what you did to Uchiha-san and his minions was not a dream." Shino replied
"Oh." Naruto said, blushing bright red.
"Please don't faint again, Naruto-san."
"Wh-why?"
"Cause we've got something for you." Ino said in a sing-song voice.
"Wh-what i-is it?"
"Open it up and find out." Ino said teasingly before handing Naruto the small box she was holding.
Naruto opened the box and looked inside. As soon as he saw what it was, he started to cry tears of joy. Inside the box, was a framed picture of a woman with fiery red hair, a warm smile, violet eyes, and was gently rubbing her engorged stomach.
"I-i-is… Is this…?"
"That's right, Naruto-san. That's a picture of your Kaa-chan." Ino said kindly.
"Hope you like it! Cause you have got no idea what we had to go through to get that." Shikamaru said with a smile.
"Th-th-thank you, e-e-everyone." Naruto said, trying to hold back his tears.
"Any time, buddy." Kiba said.
Later that night, inside the seal
Naruto opened his eyes and was shocked to see that he was inside a corridor that resembled a passageway in a sewer.
'I-I… I d-don't understand. One second I'm l-lying down to g-go to sleep after p-putting that p-picture of my O-Oka-san on my bedside table, and then th-the n-next i w-wake up in a s-sewer.' Naruto thought, completely baffled.
Just as this thought crossed Naruto's mind, he heard a loud, low roar echo from farther down the corridor. Naruto jumped with fright as soon as he heard the sound.
"Wh-wh-what w-w-was th-th-that?" Naruto asked nervously.
Suddenly , he heard a voice call to him in a booming, baritone voice.
"Come, Naruto… Come here…" The voice beckoned, making Naruto shake with fear.
"Wh-wh-who a-are you?" Naruto asked, afraid to get an answer.
"Just come to meee… And all will be revealed." The voice called back.
Still scared, but overflowing with curiosity, Naruto followed the voice. Within minutes, Naruto came across a big open area. Looking around, all Naruto could see besides the walls was a massive cell-like door with a slip of paper with the kanji for "seal" written on it.
"H-h-hello?" Naruto called out nervously.
"Over here…" Naruto heard the voice call again.
Upon hearing the voice call out again, Naruto realized that the voice was coming from behind the enormous cell door.
"That's right, kit… Over here. Come closer…" It called out.
Naruto took a few steps closer to the massive cell door.
"Closer…" The voice called again.
Naruto stepped closer.
"Closer…"
Naruto took a few baby steps towards the cell door, feeling extremely cautious. The voice calling out to him was extremely creepy and, even though the sane part of his mind told him to turn and run, the curious part wanted to know who or what the source of the voice was.
"That's better…" The voice said as a set of eyes behind the cell door opened up, revealing slitted, crimson-red orbs.
The creepy red eyes then looked downward and stared straight at Naruto. Frightened, Naruto backed up a few steps, as if preparing to run.
"Oh, don't be like that… After all, is that any way to treat someone who's known you since the day you were born?" The creature that the eyes belonged to called out in that same booming voice that had led Naruto to this spot.
"Wh-wh-who… Wh-wh-who or wh-what a-are you?" Naruto asked, shaking with fear.
"All in due time, kit… All... In due… Time…" The voice called before the scene in front of Naruto's eyes faded away.
The last thing Naruto saw as everything faded away was the silhouette of a massive fox with nine tails in the darkness behind the cell door.
To Be Continued…
MHG: Well this will be interesting. Next time you see this naruto is facing a alternite version of himself, my Naruto from Wyvern chronicles. How will 2 Narutos react to coming in contact with one another, we will have to find out. Lets hope the fox can keep him alive through the war he's about to go into.
Ricky: Wow… Counting the review responses, this is probably the longest Chapter I've ever written… NICE…! And, if anybody wants to know, I was listening to my favorite song, "Monster" by Skillet, when I wrote the beating Naruto gave Sasuke and the goon squad. So… Review if you want. If you don't want to, then… Fine. Speaking of doing whatever you guys want, if any of you want's to draw any thing from this fic, I won't stop you! Also, if you want to, I'd suggest checking out these fics:
The Diary of a Shy Jinchuuriki by Angelito Soldado
Another take on the "Shy Naruto" Challenge. It's also one of the first fics I ever read. Well… The original version was, anyway.
The Shy Jinchuuriki by Mr. Alaska
Another take on the "Shy Naruto" Challenge. Overall… It's a pretty good fic. FWY, this isn't his only NaruHina fic.
Periwinkle Healing by ImaginedRain
A NaruHina Hurt/Comfort/Romance fic. Long story short, Naruto and Hinata go on a date. Then, while Naruto's walking home, someone attacks him, knocks him out, takes him back to his apartment, and does something to him that should never be done to anybody as nice as him. Quite a bit of NaruHina fluff in later chapters. Not only that, but you get to see a side of Sasuke that you though never existed. Overall… A pretty good fic. But is hasn't been updated in months!
Our Eyes Are the Same by DarkElite24
Overall… I like it. I mean, despite somethings that were done to Naruto and HInata in their childhoods that might offend some people, the plot more than makes up for it! Well… In my opinion, anyway.