Yo!
Sorry for taking so long with chapter 5 but I'm having to resist every temptation to just cut it and post what I have now. So instead, I thought I'd give you guys a sneak peak at what the next chapter will include. I'll keep it up since taking down chapters messes with people being able to post reviews.
Please Read the Author Note at the end and respond if you can.
Enjoy!
He tried to sneak a bottle of Strawberry Fanta onto the table but Mayu threatened to use it to hit him if he did not put it back, so tea it was. Frankly, he was lucky that the donuts themselves did not get thrown away. Then again, not even Mayu can say no to donuts made by the one and only Hungry Donuts.
...
Issei glanced at the donut plate before looking back to Rias, only to have his attention redirected back to the plate. He knew there were ten when everyone walked in, but now there were only seven left. Looking back to his guests, Issei became wide-eyed when he realized what happened to the three that were missing. Koneko had two in her hands, and one in her mouth. It took only seconds for the other occupants of the room to realize where Issei's attention was and they themselves were slightly surprised, despite their knowledge of her fondness for sweets, to see the first year girl stuffing herself. When she realized everyone was looking at her, she finished the confection in her mouth and said, "They're good." before getting started on the second one.
...
Now it was like someone mixed some chocolate to the drink. It wasn't so much that it completely overpowered the original flavor, but just enough to get an even taste of both. After letting these thoughts run their course through his mind, Issei grabbed himself a donut. Thinking about milkshakes got him hungry again.
...
"Hmm," Issei muttered to himself as he wracked his brain. "It has been a while since I last saw him, but I do remember that during our trip he made a wolf and a dolphin his familiars for a while." Realizing the looks of incredulousness his guests were giving him, Issei protested with, "They are very intelligent creatures you know. Besides, I think that dolphin might have been psychic."
...
"You don't have to say anymore. I won't lie and claim to know your pain, but I do understand that it isn't something you can just get over, even after 6 months. Just know this, no matter what we will be here for you. After all," she smiled a small, hidden small, "we are family now."
...
Six months ago, if he had been asked what comes to mind as the strongest image, Issei would have embarrassingly admitted that it was Son Goku charging up his Kamehameha. However, that was six months ago. Now, what came to his mind was…
...
"I think it would be for the best if you came back to school."
...
"Rias," Sona continued, her voice now one full of caution. "Be careful. If Issei were to stray, I don't think any of us could stop him."
...
'You got anything to say about all this, Ddraig?'
...
"Issei-sama, I…. I… I need your magic inside me now!"
...
"Golem here is more of a housekeeper, so he can keep you company while you recover from the side effects."
...
"I know that the phrase 'With great power must also come great responsibility' is from an American comic, but that doesn't mean I can just disregard them."
...
"What's a Ghoul doing on campus, by itself! Plus, it seems different from the normal ones!"
...
Water; Please!
...
"Before coming back to school, I'm gonna have to clear the slate."
...
Thank you for reading this preview. Like I said, I'm going to keep this up to make it easier for people to post reviews.
Being the bumbling author that I am, there are some things I still need help on.
I would appreciate it if anyone could give me some feedback on Japanese traditions regarding their dead. I know that people have shrines in their houses, but is that always the case? What about the graves at the actual cemeteries?
For the harem, I am updating the list to include Murayama the kendo classmate. Frankly, I have too many ideas with her so I can't bring myself to exclude her. With that said, the current list is:
Rias
Raynare
Kalawarner
Asia
Akeno
Koneko
Kiyome Abe
Xenovia
Irina Shidou
Ravel
Serafall Leviathan
Murayama
Then there is the list of those who are on the poll:
Tsubaki
Sona
Kuroka
Rossweisse
Isabella (Riser's Rook)
Karlamine (Riser's Knight)
Xulean (Riser's Rook)
I will repost the poll so that people can cast their votes again. Remember, vote for your top 3 choices.
For those of you who did not notice, I have taken Tsubasa, Sona's Rook, off the poll. This is not permanent, but I honestly don't have that many plans that concern her. I originally put her on the poll solely because the light novels said that Tsubasa likes Issei/guys like Issei and one source said that she doesn't confess to Issei for fear of being killed by Akeno and Rias (though I have yet to find the text that actually said that). If more material pops up in either the light novel or the anime or maybe even other fanfics, then I will probably get some more ideas focusing on her and she will be on the poll again.
Speaking of characters, KiriaMizuno gave me the idea of a creating magus craft technician who is an expert on magic rings and is flirty/grabby with Issei. I have taken this idea and expanded on it greatly. Her background, various abilities, personality, and introduction to the story have already been planned out, but I am not sure which character to use as the base. I was originally debating between Fujiko of Zetai Karen Children and Tabane Shinono from Infinite Stratos. However, I do recognize that there are many intellectual females with gorgeous bodies throughout the world of anime so once again I turn to you, my wonderful audience for recommendations. Who do you think would make the best magus craft technician for this story? Depending on final choice, I may have to alter the personality, but that's a small price to pay for quality characters, don't you agree?
Another character I would like some help with is a new familiar for Haruto (happens after the beginning of this story but before the Raiser arc). This one will be a female dark elf. I have not completely settled on her name or personality and the story behind how she becomes Haruto's familiar is still in the works. Frankly, as of now, it's basically Haruto running into the tribe of dark elves, meets this girl who is in a tough spot (currently debating between slave, prisoner, or princess about to be married off), decides to help her and takes part in a chess match that basically follows the No Game No Life edition and she becomes his familiar despite all his protests and attempts to convince her otherwise. Like I said, all I've decided on for sure is that Haruto will have a female dark elf as a familiar by the time the Raiser arc comes around. So I need some help with figuring out other details like personality and name. Just give me whatever comes to mind and I'll see what I can use.
Now to answer some reviews.
Idea Person 1097: First of all, let me thank you for being the first to provide an opening sequence and I have to say it looks pretty good. I see you repeated two consecutive steps, but that's minor. I will have to make changes later on as the boosted gear evolves during the Riser arc, but with the way you have it that won't be an issue. Now, to answer your question, I was actually thinking about the Phantom Beelzebub who had insect familiars that injected their mana into humans to control them (KR Wizard 21). So no, this familiar was not summoned by a Phantom that used a WizarDriver. However, don't think I have forgotten about that concept. Heck, I already have the outline for a movie-like special that involves Issei and his friends fighting against a group of dragon based Phantoms led by a powerful Phantom with a personal connection to Issei. As for the python, how many snake like creatures grow multiple heads?
Finally, on behalf of a friend of mine who is starting here on Fanfiction dot net, I want to ask for your opinion on something. He's writing a fanfic that will be based on either Kamen Rider or Super Sentai/Power Rangers and wants to know which one it would better fit in. The details are as follows; it takes place in a galaxy where each planet represents a fictional franchise. The series starts off following a main character who grows up in the Mushroom Kingdom and becomes Kamen Rider Mushroom (or Mushroom Ranger) and is defending the planet eons after the heroes of old (Mario, etc.) are no more. The second part begins when he realizes the dark forces are working on a larger scale than he thought. He ends up traveling the worlds, expanding to a team of 5 – Mobius, Spiral Mountain, Hyrule, and Skylands – and then, as their assault on the enemy empire progresses, to six – Aincrad of SAO – and finally seven – Cybertron, by an android. He's hesitant to label it as Kamen Rider because there are seven of them, but also Rangers because they don't have oversized Zord-like machines. Responses with your opinions would be appreciated.
That's it for now. Please Favorite, Follow, and Review. But most of all, thank you for reading!