Chapter 20:
Haytsun: nice chapter! and yes tyzula too! raava and vaatu is out! what will Katara tell aang.
Ahhh thank you so much, I cant express how much your reviews mean to me. I mean in general but also just you! Your reviews where the first and probably the reason i had the courage to continue this story after the first few chapters. Also yes, Tyzula is period. Funny thing is i actually planned on them being friends but your comment about Tyzula (way back in chapter 2!) was what inspired me. I know it felt a little forced at first but as i grew into it and as i grew as a writer i feel like it was definitely the right choice and I love what it brings. So thank you!!!
Guest: :both vatoo and Raava enter the fic interesting. raava just like vatu look like a kite, a glowing bluish white kite, but a kite nontheless, i wonder if wan will appear to.
I replied to this comment in the comments but I kinda just was like, yk what I love reading and replying to any and all reviews so Hiiii. Yah, I remember at this point in my writing I was like I am defiantly doing something with Vaatu, but I didn't have it figured out yet. I do now, and I guess you guys will just have to wait and see where it goes.
CoziB: Ok so I really don't like how they look like a freaking rug so I changed there forms. But, they are still the same spirits otherwise. Like whoever designed them must have been high be they remind me of the flying rug from Aladdin.
Hi past me….
Laval Asher: Wow this chapter was very great.
Thank you thank you I enjoy praise.
davidkline177: good story so far, let's see where this goes.
Thank you!!! As for where it goes, as you've probably found out it is in no way following my initial outline. So… I'm just as excited to see lol.
Chapter 22
haytsun: nice chapter, i love that part azula told aang about fire i cant choose between azutara and tyzula, can they be together with azula.
Thank you!!!, I reread the chapter to remind myself but ya I liked writing that part too, I remember I think the guru said something like and and I was like, the 100 reference time. Honestly girly same, like their all so cute together. Ty Lee is definatly who I'm going for, I wouldn't have told you that 6 chapters ago though lol. But ya you can definitely see in the last chapter. And as for who she will end up with, while there is another fic coming after the next two books. Nah I already know who she ends up with but ima love keeping you guessing.
davidkline177: not a bad chapter. iroh is a straight up villain as his mind set shows he knows ozai was abusive but dose not even attempt to see reason. aang is a flake selling out his fellow avatar. all and all pretty spot on. the story was a little hard to fallow at some points but still very good.
In this fic I wanted to write Iroh more human than the series's did. I made him be in love with Ursa, which was something idk why I added and because of the fact that y'all now know Azula wasn't her kid he felt less attached to her. He's also human and was forced to choose and chose Zuko. I wanted to reflect the saying "she's crazy and needs to go down," he sees her as a lost cause. Aang is week and easily manipulated. He was jealous of what he perceived Kataras relationship with Azula to be and aloud his emotions to lead his reasoning, or that's what I was trying to go for. Ngl reading this chapter straight up confused me I'm like girl wdym. I will probably rewrite it soon.
Chapter 23
Laval Asher: Wow, this chapter with Azula at her breaking point was really great.
You can probably tell by now that I love writing the internal strife in Azula. I feel like she definitely blocks out trauma, but like when it comes back it comes back. And part of her journey is going to be realizing that avoiding things and blocking things out of living in denial isn't good. But ya, I love to write it and I'm really glad you liked to read it!!!
Haytsun: maizula scene when well too! zuko and iroh ugh nice job tylee.
I am so glad to here you comment on that scene because i screwed up in the chapter and wouldn't have realized it, this is actually why I was rereading chapter 20 and i was like fuuuuck. Anyway yes, i loved this scene too… my writing definitely got better in this chapter, lol where'd that fluidness go rip. Anyway thank you so much, where would i be without you _
gimenaguzman9; Azula solo puede contar con sus amigas, que familia de m le toco. Tan ingenuos pensar que Ozai les iba dar paz, Aang inmaduro ahora resulta la invasion es culpa de Azula. Sokka es un desagradecido, Azula que le salvo la vida, su prejuicio por la nacion del fuego me tiene harta. Katara eligiendo Azula sobre los otros fue lo mejor que lei . Me gusta conocer mas del trauma de Azula y su paso por el mundo spiritual. Espero con ansias saber que para con Azula una vez que se recupere!
Translation: Azula can only count on her friends, which family of you touched it. So naive thinking that Ozai would give them peace, Ang Inmadur now turns out invasing is a guilt of Azula. Sokka is a disgraceful, azula that saves him life, his prejudice for the nation of the fire has fed me. Katara choosing Azula on the others was the best thing I read. I like to know more of the Azula trauma and its passage through the spiritual world. I look forward to knowing that for Azula once you recover!
Honestly the translation kind of sucks so this was difficult for me to understand. However, from what I could you made a lot of good points. I wanted to delve more deeply into the racist part of Sonja's character, which I feel like realistically would be there. He's no as emotionaly mature as Katara and he hates the whole firenation rather, just as the world does. Racism works both ways in this case. Idk it's something I was trying to develope.
The Dark Sapphire: Story has gotten a lot more cohesive since chapter 15 and the story is ten times better for it. It's like you flipped a switch and all the sudden the writings gone from shaky to confident. From the notes I saw you took a few months off. New perspective did a lot of good.
This chapter was a huge relif to read with all the misunderstandings by the boys cleared out. Though now that they're separated. The dumber half is running off to kill Ozai while the smarter half is qoing to a glorified cemetery.
I can not describe how much fun it was for me to read your reviews. It was so fun seeing your reaction to each chapter. And to read your comment and go back and reread chapters because of them I got to witness how much I truly did improve. Lowky kinda makes me not want to rewrite it but I know some of the easier stuff may deter readers.
As for the Gaang or what's left of it ya, shots about to get real.
25: And the last chapter so far comes to a close. Vast improvement from the first chapter I'll tell you that. I wish you well in life and in continuing the story.
Stoppp I'm blushing!!!!! I loved reading your reviews and actually checked out your fic which is amazing. If you ever want to come back here and give me the honest review I would totally not mind *wink wink*.
I can't confirm that this "book" will see the final confrontation between Azula and her father. Who will prevail, while your just going to have to find out. I would say I'm posting a chapter soon but that's bs because I swear on mg life I've tried schedules and shit and like…. it doesn't work for me. I hope it's soon tho!!