Story/Link: A Chance Meeting
School: Hogwarts
Year: 3
Topics: Conciseness and Commas
WC: 170
A/N: IWSC Writing School Round 6. A/N with sentences to be judged at the end.
A Chance Meeting
Hermione glances up at the dark, massive clouds drifting towards her, and she lets out a long sigh. Although she would be content with sticking her nose in a book at the library for a bit longer, she's not eager to get caught in a storm.
She pulls out her new umbrella, delighted by its burgundy color with gold polka dots. When she presses her thumb on the button, the canopy doesn't budge.
Great. Right when Hermione needs her umbrella the most, it won't open. She should have checked its mechanics before the rainy season began. Thunder crackles, followed by a torrential downpour that soaks her hair and clothes.
"Oh, not now!" she groans.
"Would you like some help?"
An unexpected man's voice makes Hermione gasp. She lifts her head and stares into a pair of striking azure eyes below the ginger fringe matted to his wet forehead.
Her heart thrums in her chest as the surrounding raindrops fade to a sprinkle.
His mouth forms into a lopsided grin. "Hi."
A/N: For the grammar section, I'd like the following sentences to be judged, please.
Coordinating Conjunction:
Hermione glances up at the dark, massive clouds drifting towards her, and she lets out a long sigh.
Dependent Clause:
Although she would be content with sticking her nose in a book at the library for a bit longer, she's not eager to get caught in a storm.
Appositive:
She pulls out her new umbrella, delighted by its scarlet color with gold polka dots.
