AN: So before you read the next chapter of this fanfic I'd like to address someone in my reviews, their username is Vercingetorix Rex, keep in mind I'm not insulting you I'm just helping you understand some of the things in this fanfic I've written.
"This chapter left me with a little mixed feelings because it's way too canon. I recommend taking more time to develop your story, the characters, add more scenes, descriptions.
Why is Rias interested in Issei? even with Raynare?
Shouldn't Issei be more curious and detect Raynare's signature? know that she is a fallen? Ddraig doesn't say anything?
Issei knows that Asia is with the fallen but let it be? he doesn't react when Asia is surrounded by fallen, knowing that one of them just tried to assassinate him but only when they try to extract her sacred gear?
positive point Issei didn't let Asia be killed and reincarnated as a devil
not bad, but highly recommend taking more time to think, look forward for more".
So in a fanfic it's got to have a few cannon elements so yeah.
Also Rias doesn't see Issei as a love interest yet, I'm saving that for the Riser battle in this chapter right here. But as for her minor interest in him right now, just like in any other highschool dxd fanfic, Rias can sense that Issei is abnormal.
And as for the Raynare thing. Issei can sense a supernatural being but he can't Identify them, I had this seen when Issei asked Ddraig who was in the school, now Issei can identify any human presence, evies and dragons as well, but other than that he needs Ddraig to help him.
Also Issei didn't know that the other presence were fallen, Issei can sense a presence like that but he can't identify them. (This is a handicap that I decided to give him until after Regalzeva Arrives.)
Also don't worry about Asia not being killed, I got something for her so don't worry.
I like the idea. there are many grammar and spelling mistakes, some sentences should be better turned, I recommend downloading Grammarly/Google Doc
5 feet 58 Inches is weird, 9 feet and 10 inches is more correct.
I think you are going too fast in execution.
"If Issei is so powerful, why haven't the factions reacted and investigated?
What is the reaction of those around Issei to his height? 3 meters high he is a real god walking among men.
How is Issei reacting to being a giant walking among humans? his environment not being suitable his size/strength should bother him in his everyday life, being the subject of mockery, ...
how big will Issei's harem be? Cannon harem? some extras? will there be gender bender (females Gasper, Saiji, Vali,...)?"
"So as for the grammar and spelling I got it. I use google docs to edit these but there is some glitch in the thing that makes the spelling all wrong.(Or if you're referring to the evie names "Regalzeva" and "Melvazoa" That's their names in canon.
"Also I said "5 meters", plus that's his size in canon (Rugatimu).
And in case you didn't read some of the other parts of the first chapter Jin said he used a barrier to stop that and in future flashbacks I'm planning on going more in detail for that..
Also did you not read that line I put in the paragraph where Issei goes into base form? "he then screamed one last time as he seemed to go back to normal size with his torn outfit." The only thing I forgot to add was the part where it says that Issei eyes lost their pupils and iris, (which I'm now confirming happened.)
As for the harem list, that is the only thing still in development. (BTW: the only character genders I'm changing is thus, Gasper(Because I hate trap characters.) And Meredith( I don't care if she is a beautiful girl, in the light novel she's a dick.)
(Next day)
Issei woke up to a sleeping Asia on his right side and Tiamat on his left playing with his hair.
"Good morning Tiamat." Issei said.
"Good morning Issei." Tiamat said seductively. Just then Tiamat pinned Issei and then straddled him.
"So Issei, how. far. can. we. go?" Tiamat whispered seductively.
"W-Well, wait don't we have to know each other better first?" Issei asked with a bashful expression. Just then he also noticed that she was wearing Lingerie and just as they were about to kiss Jin walked into the room.
"Issei! It's time to get ready for school." Jin said as he slowly noticed Tiamat and Issei's position on each other. "Oh sorry for intruding." Jin said as he walked out with a proud smirk. Then Issei and Tiamat fixed themselves while Asia was just waking up. Issei and Asia were getting ready for school in a hurry then made it just on time.
School
(Occult research club)
After Issei and Asia had just finished school they headed to the old school building. Then Issei sensed that Rias was in distress and then the two quickly entered the room. They saw a tall and handsome young man in his early 20's with short blond hair and dark blue eyes.
His outfit consists of a burgundy blazer with gold embroidery on the right with matching pants and black dress shoes. Underneath his open blazer is a white dress shirt that is not fully buttoned, giving a slight view to his chest.
"Rias who are these humans." The man asked.
"Riser don't look down on them like that!" Rias shouted at the man now identified as Riser.
"Rias is he another devil." Issei asked. Rias was about to reply but Riser stepped in before she did.
"I am Riser Phenex of the Phenex clan, boy!" Riser said.
"Issei he seems a bit…I don't know." Asia commented to Issei's agreement.
"What was that girl, you should know your place especially since you're a lowly human!" Riser shouted.
"I-I'm sorry sir I just-" Asia said only to be greeted by a hard slap on the face to the shock of everyone in the clubroom, even the maid that Issei and Asia took no notice of.
"Filthy slut! Learn your place!" Riser shouted then he groped Asia. At that point Issei had enough and stepped in.
"Hey." Issei said in a dark voice while keeping his innocent looks. Just then he punched Riser resulting in him landing outside of the building to everyone's shock.
"Boy who do you think you are?!" Riser shouted.
"I think you should leave us alone." Issei said giving Rias and her peerage a huge chill down their spines, they had never expected Issei to sound like that while having such a look on his face.
"W-Whatever." Riser said being fazed by the young man. "So Rias is excluding these humans, is this your peerage?" Riser asked.
"Yes and don't speak ill of them." Rias said with venom in her voice. Just then Riser snapped his fingers and then multiple women came out of a magic circle, one of them catching Issei's attention.
"Well Rias, unfortunately for you I have a full set so even if you challenge me to a rating game you have no chance." Riser said cockly.
"Oh who is that one?" Issei said pointing at one of the girls, she is a beautiful young girl with dark blue eyes. She has long blonde hair tied into twintails with large, drill-like curls and blue ribbons keeping them in place. The front of her hair has several bangs hanging over her forehead, her outfit consists of a light purple dress with dark purple accents and a blue bow at the front. At the back, three feather-like extensions mimicking a bird's tail protrude from the dress.
"Huh, me?" The girl asked.
"Yes, you have a similar smell to Riser over there." Issei said.
"I am Riser's bishop as well as his sister, my name is Ravel. But I'm surprised that you took notice of me out of all the girls." The now named Ravel said.
"If you mean in power you actually have great potential even greater than your brother. But as for looks, among them you are actually the cutest one in the peerage." Issei said, causing her to turn completely red while an enraged Riser shouted.
"Hey don;t talk to her you piece of shit human!" Riser shouted.
"Do you have something to prove here?" Issei asked, back to his dark expression but his eyes were closed.
"No but I'm just going to burn you now!" Riser shouted.
"Try it then, chicken." Issei said with a now darker voice, and his eyes were now open and they were the color dark green, he was staring intensely at Riser when he was about to act when the maid stepped in.
"That's enough for you two." The maid said. While releasing her aura.
"What is?" Issei replied by releasing his own aura, he wasn't releasing his full base aura but it was enough to make even the maid's aura look insignificant.
"Issei-kun that's enough!" Akeno shouted. Somehow getting his attention he subsided his aura. But for everyone to look at him in shock.
"So can someone tell me what he is doing here in the first place?" Issei asked returning to his innocent nature.
"The Gremory household and the Phenex household are trying to marry both Riser and Rias to strengthen the Gremory bloodline." The maid said.
"To be honest I think if Rias marries him it will put you in a worse situation considering how he treats people." Issei says. "And besides, isn't it better to let Rias decide who she marries? If I were her I would never choose that jerk right there." Issei said.
"Why you!" Riser said then was instantly silenced by Issei.
"Get out of here." Issei said back to his dark voice again while looking at Riser. Not too long after he left along with his peerage in a magic circle.
"Issei…" Rias said quietly while blushing.
"So how many days until this rating game starts?" Issei asked.
"It starts in 10 days." the maid says.
"Good, Rias, I suggest you guys train. He may be a jerk but he's onto something when he said you were no match for him." Issei said, Rias now snapping out of her thoughts replied.
"A-Alright!" Rias said.
Time skip
(10 days later)
"Issei was at home eating dinner with Tiamat, Asia and Jin, they were all enjoying the food until a magic circle, it was the maid Issei and Asia saw at the clubroom more than a week ago.
"Greetings, my name is Grayfia Lucifuge." The now known Grayfia says. "Issei-dono, I regret to inform you that Rias-sama has lost the rating game." Grayfia said to the shock of Asia and Issei.
"What?!" They both shouted.
"Fear not Issei-dono, I want you to come with me." Grayfia said to which Issei obliged without question.
(Underworld)
Issei met Sirzechs and he briefed him on what to do. And an hour after that when Riser and Rias were about to exchange vows, Issei destroyed the doors and shouted
"I don't!" Issei said with a commanding voice, gaining the attention of everyone in the room.
"What?...ARE YOU DOING HERE!? GUARDS!" Riser shouted. Then a few armored devils flew towards Issei, only for them to be crushed by his aura. "What.. What is this?!" Riser shouted.
"Just a little entertainment I prepared." Sirzechs said.
"What are you talking about "entertainment"?!" Riser asked furiously.
"We watched your rating game with Rias and we were pretty underwhelmed. Then we decided to invite Issei here to give us what we were looking for in the game." Sirzechs explained.
"Oh please what does this scum hold that is worthy of even our attention." Riser said. That was Issei's que to finally reveal himself.
"Now Ddraig!" Issei said as a red gauntlet appeared on his left arm. To the shock of everyone, even Sirzechs and Grayfia, they knew that he was stronger than them by leaps and bounds but they had never expected him to be the red dragon emperor.
"So Riser, are you ready to be defeated by me?" Issei asked with his innocent expression.
"Like hell I will! Red dragon or not I will still win! Even if you do host that lizard!" Riser said.
{Issei, make sure it hurts.} Ddraig said to Issei's agreement.
(Battlefield)
"So tell me dragon if you win what would you like to have as your reward?" Riser asked.
"I want you to call off this pointless wedding, and that Rias gets to choose whoever she wants to marry!" Issei stated. "And what do you want if you win, my opponent?" Issei asked.
"I want to lock you up and torcher you for the rest of your long life, as well as make the blonde girl you have my sex slave!" Riser stated to the anger of Issei.
"Ready when you are Riser." Issei said coldly.
"Here I come boy!" Riser shouted. Just then the two engaged in flight and Issei mid-way to Riser charged up a green energy shield which was shaped like a sphere around his body, just as Riser was about to make impact the force of the shield threw Riser to the ground, then Issei now fully charged up the shield slammed himself as hard enough to not kill Riser but make it hurt alot, then Issei dispersed the shield which made a crater in the ground and sent Riser flying Issei flew after him but while Riser was still in mid air Issei threw a green blast as him. (AN: It's not a gigantic eraser, it's a normal energy blast shaped as a little sphere.) Then Issei proceeded to beat him up. Riser was using his regeneration ability but Issei was still overwhelming him. Then Issei decided to rapidly punch him through the ground, then he got off of him.
"Had enough yet?" Issei asked.
"Pant* cough* No! I can…Still fight!" Riser said.
"Suit yourself." Issei said as he charged a gigantic eraser, he manipulated the blast for this one so it doesn't obliterate gim. Then Issei threw it at him which on impact made him agonize harder than he ever did in his entire life. Issei then attacks Riser with a punch to his face. Then, he punches the Phenex face again, grabs him by his neck and throws him down into the ground, inflicting a great deal of damage. Then Issei got off of him then saw him limp out of the crater he made.
"N-No this can't be! Screw you lizard when I win this I'll make sure not only Rias marries me but I'll also make her kill her own peerage and I'll make you kill that blonde girl!" Riser said, but unknown to him that was a mistake.
"You just made this a million times worse for yourself." Issei said with an innocent expression but his voice was extremely dark. Issei then charged another blast however this one seemed like it would do some real damage. "Gigantic crusher!" Issei said as he threw the attack at Riser. AN:(This isn't one of broly's attacks this is something I came up with on my own, this attack surrounds it's targed in an energy sphere then the sphere releases an explosive amount of energy inside torturing it's victim.) Riser agonized as he felt his entire body burning at temperatures he never thought he would feel, all of his bone up to his torso have been completely incinerated and his entire body was charrd, but he was still alive. "So Riser, the only reason you're alive is because I allowed it. If I kill you it would be because I demand it. So with this last chance, wanna give up now?" Issei asked with his dark voice and innocent expression.
"I…give." Riser muttered.
"Riser Phenex admitted defeat, Issei wins!" Grayfia announced.
"Alright Riser, let's fix you up." Issei said back to his angelic voice. He instantly healed Riser with his power and Riser walked away with a blank expression.
Human world
(Old school building)
"Issei…..you did it!" Rias said.
"This battle is over." Sirzechs said. Riser had already left the field while Issei was about to teleport back to the old school building, upon his arrival he was blindsided by Rias who hugged him with tears of joy.
"Issei!" Rias cried while blushing.
"Way to go senpai!" Koneko said, which surprised Issei since she's usually monotone.
"Nice going Issei-kun! But I didn't know you had a sadistic side as well." Akeno said.
"Nice job Issei!" Kiba congratulated.
"Issei." Rias said before suddenly kissing him on the lips.
(Underworld)
"Well there we go, well at least my father and lord Phenex have now found common ground." Sirsechz told Grayfia.
"Yes, but what do you think of this generation's red dragon emperor?" Grayfia asks.
"I honestly am blindsided to that, however I feel like we're in for something big." Sirzechs replied.
And that's the end of this one. See ya around! But first:
Attacks Issei used
Gigantic slam.
Gigantic eraser.
Gigantic crusher
Revenge demon
