-Earlynickname- dam, not even an hour and you already have commented. Well anyway, thanks I wasn't sure if my decision to add Pricilla would go well with you guys. So thanks for the reassurance.
-silverexcel115- you get two chapters.
ok I gotta ask is 115 a call of duty zombie reference. But other than. punctuation problem I'm actually quite happy with the review as punctuation is something I'm really bad with and Grammarly charges you for that feature and since my wallet is practically nonexistent it's really hard for me to get that fix and I don't have anybody to help me.
So sorry my story isn't for you and thanks for the review as now I know what I have to do to fix it so others like you can enjoy my story. So if you read this chapter can you go back and let me know if I made the punctuation better or worse.
Yeah so keep in mind I write these responses as I write these chapters so every time I start to work on a chapter I check the reviews just to make sure I get every response I can.
Yeah sorry but I don't write this whole thing in one sitting I add little by little every time I get the drive to write. It's why there might be inconsistencies with the way I respond as I can consistently change my mind on what I want in certain chapters.
Because my original plan was to roughly follow the anime with some big and minor changes along the way but by chapter 4 I decided to scrap that plan and try to go away from cannon. I used up the last of my original plan on chapter 5 and now I have to figure out where I want to take this story. I have three different endings two of which are basically me continuing the story and the final one involves a lot of research and me reading the web/light novel. So yeah I'm undecided on what to do.
Either way, I might go from anime only to light novel reader. Just depends if my bank can handle it.
So yeah those are my current plans for this story but don't be afraid of giving me ideas hell if you want an ending where izuku becomes the harem king then let me know as I'm always open to change and I don't really have any plans that I want stick to.
Day 13
When izuku awoke, he was alone in his room. Then the door opened, and ram came in.
"Oh, hey ram how long was I out.
"You were out for 3 days."
Izuku felt awkward. You know that feeling you get when someone is mad at you but takes the passive-aggressive route.
Yeah, that's how izuku felt with ram.
"Um, are you mad at me for some reason?"
"You know, While you were out some really strong guy appeared."
"Oh, really how strong we talking."
"Well, they say he took a lighting rod to the face."
"Wow scary, I might want to avoid him then."
Ram narrowed her eyes at him.
"U-Um. ram your kind of scaring me."
"Would you like to see him?"
"Yeah, I would love to see how cool he looks."
Nodding ram grabbed a mirror and held It up to his face.
"Oh, you meant me, didn't you."
Ram sent him a glare, that had izuku cowering behind the sheets. But it also sent a shock of realization through the poor boy. Normally his suit would be able to absorb most if not all of the elements, allowing him to be safe whether it be cold, fire, or in very and I mean very rare cases lighting.
Ram paused at the look of shock on izuku's face.
Now that izuku actually looked at his face he was shocked. on the right side of his face was a lightning trail, and it went from his upper right forehead through his right eye, down to his jaw.
His right eye still had its green color, but now it was murky and unfocused.
Izuku covered his left eye, and to his surprise, he could no longer see.
"Wow, I looked like endeavor, if his scare was a thin line, that resembled a lightning bolt."
He turned to ram only to see her even more irritated. Gulping he decided to ask what's wrong.
"Nothings wrong, just my current boss is an idiot."
"Ouch."
Izuku flinched when he heard her backhanded commit.
"Well, it's time to get up."
"You're not going to be doing anything today."
Izuku looked at ram.
"That includes your workout."
When izuku flopped back on the bed like a child, ram was stunned for a moment, before giving izuku a stern glare.
"And I mean it. If I catch you doing something to strain your body, I'm gonna put you on that bad permanently!"
Gulping izuku nodded. The ram began to smile.
"Well, ok then miss Emilia, rem, and I will be busy for most of the day, so please take it easy ok."
The way she smiled sent chills down his spine. The smile looked normal but he could tell it was anything but that.
So izuku got dressed after ram left of course. He then walked into the war room. Where only crusch in the room.
"Hey, what's got you in a twist."
Crusch looked up from a large piece of paper.
"Well, my last expedition didn't go so well. And because those weapons are so heavy we have to build them on the battlefield instead of just taking a cart there."
This "weapon" was this world's form of an artillery gun. Only it used magic instead of actual ammunition.
Their problem was, it would take too many ground dragons just to pull one, so having multiple would be next to impossible.
"Maybe you could see up an ambush."
"How would we do that I mean this thing flies, and is incredibly strong."
"Well, you could always lead it to a location and then take it out that way."
When crush started planning out possible locations for this supposed ambush she didn't notice izuku having a flashback.
Flashback izuku's 18th birthday
"HAPPY BIRTHDAY IZUKU!"
as everybody enjoyed izuku 18th birthday party izuku was approached by Mei.
"Hey, izuku here's my present for you."
"Oh thanks, Mei."
When he opened the small box, he saw a phone. The difference was it wasn't named brand.
"Don't worry this phone is the best of the best. It's basically a quantum computer but better. And it's self-repairing. Not to mention if you ever find yourself in a situation without your suit, this bad boy, can build one of the suits I've ever made for you. And to add the charry on to it has a kinetic battery so it will never run out."
Izuku was so happy, not only was this phone one of a kind, but izuku could tell mei put a lot of hard work into making the phone. And that warmed his heart more than he ever realized.
Present still day 13
Turning back to crusch, izuku was about to start talking, when he saw it was sunset. Then one of crusch's maids informed them their dinner was ready.
During dinner, it was really awkward for izuku. Rem and Emilia would take side glances when they thought he wasn't looking.
Ram would just glare at the scar, making izuku feel uncomfortable. Then an idea hit izuku.
Slamming his hand on the table izuku yelled out.
"I have an idea."
"What idea?"
"Ok hear me out."
"No."
Izuku faltered.
"But, you didn't even hear me out."
"No good plan ever started with 'here me out'."
Ram shot izuku down without hesitation.
"Aaannhways, the plan is simple. Crusch you set up a location, and I will find, and lead the white whale to said location, where you go to town on the thing, while I hold it in place."
"See it's as I said he's an idiot."
"Oi!"
Izuku thought it was a good plan. Sadly he was the only one.
Rem leaned towards her sister.
"Siste, sister, it seems that the lighting strike fried izuku's brain too."
Izuku fucking pouted at the girls. He fucking pouted.
"Rem, ram, it's not polite to tease him."
"Thank you."
"He's obviously still recovering."
Izuku's whole body slumped.
Then crusch finally spoke up.
"Actually that might be the best plan yet. And since your really fast, you just might be able to do it.
"See it, is a good plan."
Izuku had shouted back at the girls.
"Oh, no did miss crusch catch it too."
"No, the plan is still pretty dumb."
"Damm, my only teammate has turned against me."
When izuku started fake crying, the whole room started laughing.
"Well, as enjoyable as this has been, I really am tired., So good night."
The group all disbanded towards their rooms.
Day 14
As izuku walked towards the blacksmith's shop, he saw one of the candidates get dragged into an alley.
It was the one that relied on their massive luck to get the throne. Priscilla was her name. He had met her type before, hell kacchan was that type before they went into yuuei. So he knew if he questioned her luck, she would just calm, he was the product of her luck. So izuku mentally prepared himself as he stepped into the alleyway.
Sighing izuku spoke up.
"Ok guys this is just getting old. Ever thought of getting a job, or like I don't know, actually checking who your robbing."
His slumped posture seemed to set off the three thieves. When Their eyes widened, izuku smirked.
"Oh, so you do, remember me."
Izuku Stepping forward, was all it took for them to run away in fear.
"Wow I scared them that bad, now I feel like the villain."
Izuku turned back towards Priscilla, a confident smirk plastered on his face.
"So how's that luck been treating you."
"Don't address mine self, as if we are equals."
"Can't believe I expected more from you."
"Oh, there you are princess."
"Al where have you been."
Izuku used the brief distraction, to quickly grab an appa, then he returned to the alleyway, all without any of them noticing.
"What are you eating, peasant."
Izuku looked at Priscilla, then pointed towards the appa.
"Oh, this."
"Yes, now answer the question."
Izuku answered in the kindest way possible.it even through off Priscilla, who normally would expect some to take offense to her words.
"It's an unpeeled appa."
Izuku then handed her one of his extra appas and walked off wishing them a good day.
"Al, that boy is amusing."
Al sighed.
Day 38
Today was the day crusch Karsten and the Emilia camp were scheduled to go on the hunt. It had taken crusch a month to get enough support. So now she had a fairly sizeable army.
They were in an open field, that stretched on for miles. In side on of the main tents, they discussed the battle plan.
"Ok, here's the plan, izuku will lead the white whale here, where we will set up a bush for it."
Looking around crusch made sure the people were understanding the plan.
"Any questions?"
When no one voiced their opinion crusch continued.
"The plan for the ambush is simple. I want those who are ranged fighters to fire everything they've got, and those who are up close and personal, you guys will need to find some way of attacking it."
"And don't worry about it moving too much, my job will be to hold it down, while you guys do your thing."
Izuku clarified.
"Are you ready!"
"Yeah!"
The battle cry of hundreds of soldiers rang through the field. As izuku flew away, the whole camp set up the magic cannons, and other equipment they may need.
As izuku flew around, he approached an area covered in fog.
"Wow, this reminds me, of that one horror story, about the mist."
Then his danger sense kicked in. Turning around he saw the white whale. Izuku used a combination of air force moves, and his black whips to piss off the whale, enough to blindly follow him.
"Wow, you look mad, sure we can't talk this out."
Rooooor
"Guessing, that's a no then."
Izuku kept flying, if he slowed down for even a minute, the whale would swallow him whole.
Up ahead he saw the camp. Turning around izuku began his part in the ambush.
"Black whip overload!"
Once above the camp, izuku began to summon hundred of black tendrils, just to ensnare the beast. Now all he had to do was keep it still.
As it thrashed and struggled the whole camp began to unleash hell. Emilia and rem were launching massive ice shards at it, while ram and crusch launched great big blades of wind.
Somehow Wilhelm managed to get on top of the beast, and began slicing and carving away at the thing.
It was bloody. He couldn't tell how much blood Wilhelm was covered in, but he could tell that man was on a revenge-filled mission.
When Wilhelm carved out its right eye it got mad. Suddenly it released a massive roar, and then two more appeared.
"Did it just make two body doubles?"
Izuku asked himself, but That proved to be his downfall. The second whale rammed him into the path of the original one's tale so it could slam it down on izuku.
Izuku mat the ground like a meteor striking the earth. Izuku was hurt and badly. He could feel his broken ribs, and his back was hurting like crazy.
Spitting up blood, izuku knew he messed up. Instead of preparing for the fight he sat back and did his regular routine, now this was the price. For as durable as he was all it would take was one good blow and izuku was down.
"Dammit my body hurts, and it's hard to breathe. But I need to end this."
Izuku got up slowly. He pushed past the pain and used black whip overload again.
Everybody saw how instead of hundreds of black tendrils it was thousands. Each whale was completely wrapped up in the tendrils. Then izuku shouted.
"Fucking die already."
Using back whip izuku pushed through the pain, just enough to start crushing the beast. It was slow but eventually, the whale stopped struggling, and it slowly died as izuku in pain, frustration, and anger crushed the thing to death.
But it was not a happy victory. Looking through blood-tinted eyes, izuku saw how much damage the whale had been able to do, in a short about of time.
The mages, archers, and some healers had all collapsed.
The weapons they had brought with them had been destroyed mid-flight, and now that it was over izuku could see just how many people they lost two. It seam, while he was out the girls, worked hard just to try and hit the thing.
Looking at them he was released, they all seemed fine, if not exhausted.
He tried to walk, only for a white-hot pain to shoot through him. Falling to the ground izuku couldn't breathe, as his injury caught up to him.
"Oh no, izuku quick Felix heal izuku."
Izuku was too exhausted to reassure them he was fine. So he laid his head down on the dirt and closed his eyes.
When izuku came to, he was still tired, but he needed to be awake. Looking around he was still on his stomach with Felix healing his back.
"Your back is still hurt pretty bad and your ribs are badly bruised but not broken."
Izuku sighed, glad he wasn't out for a long time. Crusch and Emilian helped him onto a cart, that would take them to the capital for better healing. Next to him were ram and rem, they both decided izuku was now their pillow.
After an hour of travel, izuku's danger sense warned him of incoming danger. Looking towards the front, izuku saw a man dressed in all white.
Izuku grabbed rem, ram, crusch, and Emilia, right as the cart was destroyed by the man.
"Don't you know it's rude to run someone over? It violated my right to stand here."
When izuku landed he set down the girls.
"Who are you."
"Look at all the food just losing ground."
Izuku stepped closer towards the girls. These two kept setting of his danger sense. The man dressed in white put him on edge. He was just too relaxed to be weak.
While the other figure seemed a little too enthusiastic, about the prospect of food.
"I am regulus corneas, representing greed.
"And I'm Lye Batenkaitos sin archbishop of gluttony."
Izuku was warry he wasn't at his best and it hurt to go past 50%.
"As I was saying you violated my ri-"
Izuku ignored him because Out of the corner of his eye, he saw Lye bend down to eat someone. Turning to him izuku used 15% and attacked him.
"No you don't."
Izuku shot him with an air bullet. Then while Lye was occupied with dodging, izuku had rushed up to him and punched him in the gut, hard enough to knock him out.
When he slumped to the floor Regulus wasn't happy to be ignored.
"Don't ignore me it violates my right to talk you know."
He sent a wave of dust at izuku. When izuku blocked, it felt like a truck had hit him instead of dust.
"We were supposed to me up with sloth at Irlam village, but thanks to you we'll be late."
Izuku's eyes widened, They were the backup. Now he had to beat him and fast.
"Why don't you just die, you're violating my right."
"Wow, for someone posing as greed, you sure act prideful."
Regulus was mad now. He kicked up more dust, but izuku used that as a chance, to kick him with his left leg.
When regulus slid back he was shocked, just how strong was the boy to be able to push him.
When izuku saw just how unaffected regulus was he remembered the fight between all might and the nomu at the u.s.j.
Izuku then powered up to 80% and began dealing blow after blow on Regulus. Then after 500 consecutive blows, he did one final uppercut to his stomach.
"NEW YOUR SMMMMMASHHH."
Izuku sent Regulus flying through the air. Panting izuku when to take a deep breath.
CRACK.
izuku felt his ribs crack. Felt was the first person to react.
"What happened."
"Well if, if, my ack body isn't 100% then I can't use my 100%."
Izuku coughed up blood. The girls were extremely worried, as blood leaving the body, was rarely a good thing.
"Ok, we need to get to the capital, where we can all heal and rest."
Shaking his head, izuku told them they were the backup, to an attack on the village near Roswaal domain.
"But what can we do. Your are in no condition to fight, and most of our army is too tired to fight."
"Yea your right."
Then izuku exploded in a cloud of smoke.
"Izuku you fool if don't come back I'll kill you myself."
Ram had shouted, however, only her sister noticed the tears brimming in her eyes.
Izuku flew as fast as he could. the village could be destroyed and he might have been too late. Izuku was pretty sure he broke the sound barrier, with how fast he was going.
"Come on I need more power."
Izuku began to go past 80% starting with 85%.
"Crap I can feel my bones creaking."
When he arrived at the village it was noon. Looking around he was on edge. The village was too quiet.
Stepping up to one of the houses izuku opened the door.
"Hello anyone there."
Had the situation been any different, izuku would have noted this to be, like a horror movie.
His heart was beating fast. The adrenaline was kicking in. Suddenly he heard the floor creak behind him.
Turning fast enough to give any normal person whiplash, izuku spotted a little kid.
"Um, hey there what happened here."
The little girl began crying silently.
"I-it was horrible, this man came to our village, and began slaughtering everyone."
"How did you escape."
"When he killed my mom her body kept me hidden."
Izuku hugged the girl. Now all he had to do was get this one out, and back to safety.
"Ok let's get out of here."
Despite being the future symbol of hope, izuku held little hope, others got as lucky as this girl.
"What's your name."
Izuku had asked for the girl's name, right as they were leaving the village.
"My name is petra."
"That's a nice name."
Then izuku's danger sense warned him of danger to his left. Tackling petra he told her to run while handing her his phone, and money bag filled with two weeks' pay.
"Take this and make your way to the capital. once there find the Karsten household, give them the phone, and tell them izuku is very sorry he couldn't make it."
After she ran off izuku faced the unknown asalent.
"And who might you be."
The man was around izuku's height and had green skin. The man bowed down and spoke.
"Petelgeuse Romanee-Conti representing sloth, at your service."
With the adrenaline kicking back up izuku charged right at the man, with 15%. Halfway through the charge, danger sense warned him of an approaching object to his right.
Mind clouded through the pain and fatigue izuku started using his full strength.
It wasn't enough.
Izuku was smacked to the side as he struggled to stay awake izuku decided to use 100 percent.
"Detroit smash."
It was enough to knock him away, and he even sustained damage but was ultimately unscathed.
Eyelids getting heavy, he could no longer stay awake, his last thought was if petra made it, and how sad the girls would be, once they found out.
With that izuku midoriya died
RETURN BYDEATH
And yeah that is all folks in don't worry as I'm writing this at the end of the chapter I now have a plan for the next 2-3 chapters but don't quote me on that.
Also go check out "Even if it's another world, I'll still become the symbol of peace." its only one chapter, at the time of this writing, but so far it's really good, it's izuku in re-zero but earlier than Subaru and he is still in that story too so go check it out.
/ok I'm writing this as I just finish correcting chapters 3-5 and wow I'm drained il fix 1 and 2 later but yeah I'm so tired and with what I have planned out this is gonna be a pain to write. Hopefully, this shows my education to fixing and improving this story.
