Important A/N at the bottom
Reviews:
Green: Um, your story is exactly like canon. It's like you have just replaced haruhi with an OC. Please take this as constructive criticism. I do love your plot idea. I hope you can rewrite this someday. (Chapter 4)
Yeah, I get that for the beginning, but I swear it gets better in chapters towards the present, just keep reading and I do plan on rewriting this story once I complete it, at least the beginning chapters.
Stopdropanroll (u/6503259/Stopdropanroll): Haha good luck Daniel, I'm with ya bruh. Nice job! It's been a while since I read this so I'm a little fuzzy on the details but I do recall a certain fondness for this story that had been reawakened by the new chapter. Guess I'll have to reread everything!
Yeah, it's better to reread the whole thing with the way my update schedule is, lol. It should get more consistant with updates now that it's summer.
osburnsarena ( u/10810904/osburnsarena): This story is exactly like canrecord scratch* see, now people who say thqt are wrong, because according to the encyclopedia of jshsjsbhdns, that is incorrect. This story has many differences to canon and many original concepts. Its also well written even if frustatingly short. The only reason I thing its so short is because I want more! and tbh if voting is still going mine is on Kyouya, keep writing for as long as you enjoy it! Even if some people are rude, there are people who enjoy it! If you've read this, thank you and I hope you come across mountains of inspiration.
Thank you for your kind words. It means a lot that people like my story despite its flaws. Hopefully inspiration will keep flowing through me, it's only as frequent the more reviews I get. I'm not wrong where people only keep writing if people show their enjoyment in their work.
Quotev Reviews:
JamezMoriarty (Cynical King): Okay so this actually made me laugh really hard! I could actually see this happening to some unfortunate soul which makes it even funnier. Your story is well written and very humorous, which is a nice change from what I usually read, so kudos to you! I don't really have a criticism; more like, a quick pointer. In the description you put 'have' instead of 'has.' But other the that, your story is genuinely a good read. Keep up the good work!
~ Cynical King
I'm happy that you like my story, and yes I know there are some grammar mistakes. I will fix them, glad I got you to read my story.
Chapter 17: Camp
I let out a sigh as I looked at myself in the mirror, the memory of the one time I let my insecurities get the best of me. People still talk to me about it! It's irritating! By now things have calmed down about it, which I was happy about, and things were back to being normal... Normal for being in Ouran that is.
"Daniel! We're ready to go, come on now!" I heard my mom tell me making me smile slightly as I left the bathroom and headed downstairs where my mom was waiting for me, a big smile on her face as she was talking with Ranka, Haruhi's dad.
"Let's get this trip on the go! Oh, this is so exciting! We've never been out as a family like this since Kotoko left us." Ranka said as he went over to the car where Haruhi and my dad were waiting.
I guess I should explain some things before we head off camping. It was my mom's idea one day to go camping for the weekend and asked me to ask one of my friends to come with their parents. It was kinda a dream of hers to go camping with another family, enjoying the great outdoors, and having fun with fellow adults while the kids hung out together. I wasn't going to ask any of the guys to come because my sanity will become an issue. So I went over to Haruhi's and told her dad about the trip. Man, he's just like Tamaki and Jamie but I can at least stand him.
He immediately accepted the offer and with Haruhi, plans were made. Haruhi at first didn't like the idea but relented when her father begged her and told her how this could be a little family vacation. The rest was history.
"Haruhi, you ready for a weekend of no Host Club?" I asked her with a grin making her nod.
"Yeah, don't jinx it though. They always find a way to come along." She muttered as we all got into the camper and drove off.
Yeah, there are more reviews than I expected, lol and I don't want to keep adding to the top so I'm putting the rest at the bottom of the chapter.
Reviews:
SailorCandy: Danielle is right. We all do have moments of self-doubt. Some of those moments just last longer than others. I'm sorry I didn't know what else to comment
It's alright, as long as it's not a repeated 'Please Update!' it'll be fine.
TimeLifeMagazine: Thank you for the new chapter.
And just a little heads-up; just because you graduated from school, does not necessarily equate to more time for writing. At best, you can expect to have a few more hours a week, as the World makes new experiences for you.
Admittedly, I have been out of school for longer than I was in it, but new things took the place of school-life. Not saying that your life is the same as mine, but things will come up, and you may not feel like writing. I hope you do though, as it is a decent way to de-stress, or occupy yourself with, on a dour day.
You have a very good story here.
You keep writing, and I'll keep reading.
P.S. I agree, with you about the persistant *Update please* 'reviewers'. If they 'need' the update, then they should leave a review, as to why they deserve one. You are not under contract to entertain us. This is something you do, of your own accord.
P.P.S. As for any notes, for the review, myself; I have nothing. This is your story, and you are doing splendid with it; anything I could suggest, would not be of much use, as I do not know where you are heading with the story. Best wishes, and don't forget to relax, sometimes. Everyone needs to decompress, from what life throws at them, or they will likely worry themselves sick.
This has got to be the longest review I have ever received. In all seriousness though, I have to agree that just because I'm out of school doesn't mean I have all the time in the world. I will try to relax, even though sometimes it's hard. Thank you for the review, you should honestly make an account, that way for when you reply to other people's stories they can express their gratitude to you in some way shape, or form.
IMPORTANT N/A: Hey, guys. I'm sorry for not updating... At all for over a year. I just haven't been feeling it. I love this story, I really do. I just want to start over. Remake it, start a (hopefully) better story. The beginning of my story is cringy, very cringy, and inconsistent with more present chapters. Some things will stay the same, like replying to your reviews, if you read the remake that is. This version will not be deleted and as you have read there is an unfinished chapter here for you all to read to see what this chapter was supposed to be about.
I'll even give you a summary of this unfinished chapter, what I had planned for it until I wanted to start over;
Daniel and Haruhi's families go camping, the hosts show up (obviously, lol). Some of Daniel's past would get revealed, mostly about his mom and the reason why he had his hair grow out so long. Also, some bonding between the Host Club members as the privileged learn how to fend for themselves (or basically regular camping without their butlers and stuff like that) and it ends with them all going home with one of the host club members learning Daniel's past.
I'm not going to tell you that story, you all will just have to suffer, muah ha ha ha! You will just have to read the remake for those answers and the answer of who's going to be Daniel's Love-Interest.
Again, I'm sorry for doing this but I know I can do better with this story and I want to prove that! So watch out, for 'I'm Not a Girl! The Remake'. Your reviews for this chapter will be answered over on the remake, so don't stop commenting just because this version is over.
Sorry for the long rant, signing off! See ya in the remake! (I swear it's not going to be like a tv reboot series, lmao)