Star's Allies
Chapter 5 - Iridescent Icelands
Light shone into Taranza's temporary room inside the Lor. As Taranza slowly awakens from his slumber, he sat on the bed for quite some time before standing up and exiting the room.
As he exited, he looked around to find the door outside to the deck of the sunlit Starcutter. As he wandered around, he heard Magolor talking to someone down the corridor. It was Bandana Dee, along with a giant crate beside him.
"Yeah... here's the first package…"
"Ah, thanks again… Dedede really helped out this time…"
Must be the supplies Dedede sent.
Taranza greeted Magolor as he walked to the crate. He stood alongside Magolor as the magician blasted the crate open, revealing a supply of food, water, and a multitude of healing items, along with a letter on top, which Taranza swiped from Magolor's hands.
As the spider opened it up, he took a glance at the paper and mustered the best Dedede accent he could.
"Hey! It's buddy ol' pal Dedede!
Here's the firs' suppla' cra'e I can sen'. Jus' ration 'em and you'll have an abundance of the stuff.
From, 3D."
Taranza finished the letter with a cough.
"I can't do his accent…" Taranza wheesed.
"I'd say you've done a good job," Bandana congratulated, "It was pretty darn close."
"Aha, thanks… I think I'll have some water now…"
Taranza walked past the two and took some water from the crate.
…
The ship moved slightly faster, though not without interruptions as Magolor frequently stopped the Lor to gather more Energy Spheres across the area. It resulted in the ship moving ever so slightly faster every time a new sphere was inserted. By the fifth sphere, Magolor had the ship running at 28% speed, which was still slow, but it was faster compared to when they hadn't found the spheres.
Their total count was at 32 (not all the spheres was lost during Lor's crash), and it was steadily increasing, depending on how quick the ship can take the duo there. Susie was lagging behind, but she stopped longer on certain areas to take some gems the cave had or certain vegetation on different soils.
The two ships flew across the mountaintops as both ships stop briefly for their different tasks.
Magolor went out again, this time with Taranza as they ventured out to find some Energy Spheres. Magolor, knowing where they are, trudged through the snowy alps froze the environment. Cold air blew on the two magicians, providing a chilling aura felt by their nerves. Magolor had picked one sphere up by digging it with his hands, as it had been buried by snow as storms fell and time passes.
"Hhhh… How m-many more?"
"Two."
Taranza was cold, and it was a sensation he did not like. When they rested in a small opening by a cliff, as Magolor lit a fire, Taranza weaved himself an insulative cloth, warming him at least a little bit. Taranza sighed happily; he was now not so cold. Magolor already had his clothing, which provided enough insulation so that he was practically nearly oblivious to the cold.
As the duo went back in, the two energy spheres were still deep in the snow, making it relatively hard to dig them out. Magolor pinpointed the sphere's location, and they walked to the spot. An encounter with magic snowmen or small ice dragons didn't slow their advance either, as the two spheres were collected within the span of a few hours. Now sunset, the alps is going to get much colder, so the two decided to call it a day and headed back to the ship.
Susie's team scattered around the mountain to find something the Shoppe could sell. They made their profits by selling all sorts of things, and special objects from Popstar might interest customers and net them a huge profit.
The employees stopped at sunset, but the robots kept on searching because they were tasked to search until dawn came.
One particular robot was slowly advancing to a nest, beside a particularly large ice dragon. As it stole the eggs in the night, it came back multiple times to get more, with friends tagging him as he went back and forth. As the trips slowly left evidence and gave out sound, the Ice Dragon woke up from its peaceful sleep to find that her eggs were gone, and a robot was carrying them back somewhere.
The robot turned back, looked at the dragon, and booked it back to Susie's ship. The Ice Dragon followed suit. As the moonlight shone on its scales, it was notable that this Ice Dragon was massively large. Really, really large. It was gigantic.
As the dragon followed the robot back to the camp, Taranza and Magolor were already in the Lor, inserting the few Energy Spheres they've got.
A roar came, and Magolor panicked, rushing up to his command centre to find a large Ice Dragon freezing the whole place. It was trying to encase the whole camp in ice. As its frost breath swept across the area, Magolor fired off one of his cannons at the dragon. It bounced off the dragon.
Its head turned, eyes flaring, as the Lor was completely frozen, top to bottom. The dragon continued on its rampage to freeze the civilised beings who she thought were the culprit behind her egg snatching.
A few moments after Lor was frozen, the Ice Dragon met with Susie's ship, and decided to freeze that, too. Once the whole area was encased in an ice block, the dragon sat on top of the structure, trying to find its eggs in the ice. After trying to find its eggs, it eventually slept on the ice's top, planning to continue its search and rescue its unborn children.
Taranza was in shock as the Lor was completely under ice. As the temperature dropped, he went to his guest room and covered himself with as much insulators as he could find, hoping that morning will provide an escape.
Magolor, on the other hand, was trying to make a drill to break through the ice. He was definitely getting out of here, and if it required to show that dragon who's boss, he would do it.
He clicked the wires together and tapped in the magic battery as the drill whirred to life, spinning in front of an ecstatic Magolor.
"I've gotten it! It works! Gyahaha!"
Magolor headed out to open the deck door to find out it his machine actually drills through ice.
"...or not…"
To his surprise, his drill only managed to dig through a distance as long as his finger. It took him a long time to drill that hole, too. The ice was too thick, and the temperature too cold. By the time when he gave up, it was midnight, and their temporary base was still iced in.
All the people (minus the robots) slept cold that night, as their ships, encased in ice, can't move until they've somehow figured out a solution.
…
Morning shone through the ice, as the temperature rose. Even if it was a slight increase, it's beneficial. Susie's team already started to try and drill out, and Magolor needed to step up his game. He blasted the ice out using his magic, while Taranza (who was woken up a few short minutes later) ended up hauling chunks of ice into the Lor for their water supply.
The noise their attacks on the ice made woke up the dragon. "Groahrrrr!"
The Ice Dragon hopped down the icy block and kicked it to her cave. As the ice tumbled and slid, so did the 'passengers' on board.
Magolor was spinning around by the time the ice block made it to the giant cave.
"Augh… my head…." came Taranza's cry, as he went to Magolor to haul more ice, unsteadily floating to the extrusion Magolor had made.
The Ice Dragon roared once more, and smaller ice dragons came out. They looked at the people trapped in the ice, as they drooled.
Things were not going quite so well; if they didn't do something, they'll become snacks! (well, breakfast)
"We need to do something…"
"Should we just bomb the ice?"
"Yeah… We s-should..."
Magolor prepared a small bomb, as Taranza also readied a projectile in his hands. Together, they threw the bomb, as the wall met web and bomb, sticking the bomb to the wall, providing maximum damage.
As the Ice Dragon started to crunch down on the ice, hoping to snag their new meal, Nagolor and Taranza kept on bombing the walls. Eventually, they've made it to the outer ice, and broke through to the other ice.
A rush of blue dragons flocked them, biting.
"Oh no you don't," Magolor said, as he bombed the baby dragons with the same tactic he and Taranza used on the walls. Needless to say, it was quite effective. Susie's team came out seconds later as they've torched down the ice using a laser. With that lazer, they launched the light at the giant Ice Dragon. It managed to blind the Dragon, who was now sitting down, recoiling from the light. Magolor and Taranza circled around to the mother and flinged their best attack combination at her: a gem apple cannon. Sharp and pointy projectiles, the gem apples provided a nice ammunition to Taranza's mechanical cannon made using tensile web. As the two operated the machine, multiple hits plummeted upon the dragon. It actually pierced through its hide as blood dripped down onto the snow.
The dragon charged at the two, which was obvious enough based on its telltale sign. As it tumbled to the ground, Susie charged her with multiple guns, lazers, and other weapons. It performed multiple cuts and holes on the dragon, but it was not that effective.
The groups circled around the giant dragon, as they battled against the mother and its children, who were very stubborn at getting their snacks.
"You have any gem apples left?" Taranza asked in a hurried manner.
"I can't make more; those were my last supply! I need to create them again!"
Magolor had visited a geometrical planet once, which contained multiple different three-dimensional objects, including gem apples. Magolor took most of the interesting stuff there… Well, robbed it. (The residents gave him permission, but he took a lot)
He cultivated it in a planter, which gave him a good source of food and ammunition, which ran out. The planter only gave him a few apples per harvest, and he was out, so no more gem apples for him at the time being.
As the dragon swerved through the ice, biting through it all the way, it flew to Susie. The whole group noticed a dragon coming at them and avoided it as they continued trying to shoot the Ice Dragon.
Magolor and Susie were currently exchanging attacks on the dragon, as they bought time for Taranza to do something.
Taranza decided to roam around, unnoticed, and try to find out why the dragon was so angry.
A quick turn to its nest gave him the answer.
Taranza's hand slowly went to his face.
...
"I know what we did!"
"Huh? What did we do?"
Magolor flew around the icy breath. A few shards of ice formed on his left hand. That wasn't good.
"We might've screwed up, actually!" Taranza yelled from the other side of the cave.
"Yeah, I know! What's the cause!?" Magolor returned
"Its nest has no eggs, someone took it! I don't know who, but that enraged the dragon! Some footprints lead from the egg to the mouth of the cave!"
Susie hollered this time. "What shape is the footprint!?"
"It looks like... a circle? Well, more like an oval!" Taranza replied.
"Wait, there's a print here… 'Product of Susie Shoppe…'" Taranza mumbled to himself, as Susie instantly knew what stole eggs based on the footprint alone despite never being there nor hearing Taranza. One of her robots took the eggs. Shit.
"Susie, what the hell!?"
"I know, I'm sorry, and I'll find those eggs real quick, just hold them off for a while!" Susie ran past a confused Magolor and an annoyed Taranza as she turned back, shot a couple of lasers, and running to her ship all at the same time.
…
SLAM!
"Alright, which one of you bolts managed to screw up so hard!?"
Susie smashed the door. It is now implanted firmly on the wall.
"Query: WHO TOOK THE EGGS!?" Susie screamt at the robots."
"Answer: What's an egg?" All 64 robots responded.
"Oh, for the love of…"
Susie facepalmed at herself for buying this set of machines. Should've waited for the newer models.
"Query: Who took multiple oval shaped objects!?"
"Answer: I did, chief!" came the enthusiastic voice of three robots.
Ah. Well, well, well...
At least she narrowed it down to three.
"Query: Show me where you've placed them! The storage, or the damned kitchen!"
All three robots answered 'kitchen'.
"Finally!" Susie dashed off to her kitchen.
The robots waved her goodbye as they entered sleep mode.
…
Susie opened the fridge. Inside were multiple eggs. The most prominent eggs were the ones colored blue and white, much like ice. Susie assumed that this was the eggs Taranza referred to.
She took them out of her fridge and took the elevator to ground floor.
Taranza was doing fine. In fact, he was doing great!
Actually, no. He was cold and being chased by an ice dragon with Magolor. Sure, he could probably fight, but a distraction was what they need most. As Taranza and Magolor ran in circles, they spotted Susie carrying about four or five eggs in her hands as she slowly approached the dragon, arms stretched out, holding the eggs like a present.
"Okay, let's not do that again… I'm done with today…"
The Ice Dragon noticed her eggs was being given back, and with an intense glare, carefully scooped her eggs back up. She snorted to the thieves, and permitted them to leave as she went deeper into the cave.
No sooner than five minutes, the dragon came back to offer them five energy spheres. After it laid these on the ground, it turned its back and returned to its peaceful life.
"Ah… I'm dead tired…" Magolor complained.
Either way, he grabbed the dragon's gift.
Taranza stumbled to the Lor, with Magolor right behind him, having small flashbacks to Landia. The dragon was certainly fierce, as is with this one; it's a trait in dragons, Magolor concluded, as he went back in the Lor to continue looking at the damage report back from his crash. He still needed to melt the Lor's ice, too. What a chore…
…
Susie took a risk buying those robots from a planetary garage sale, and it was doing fine; mostly. That little blunder with the eggs nearly messed their plan to rescue Kirby. She thought it would be smooth sailing, but all she's done was shoot a gun and get stuck in ice because of one dinky robot.
Shwoop-
Her office door swung open. In front of her was… an oddly shaped robot. It seemed too small. It was also carrying something, and Susie was pretty sure she terminated all commands from the robots she had. Why was this one here…?
"Order: Leave."
"Order: Leave."
Susie sighed and stepped closer to the 'bot, and examined it.
…
Something glowed purple below the robot. Susie turned her attention to that. The robot raised its metal like some sort of costume, as a circus ball, of all things, popped up. It rolled to her.
As soon as her attention went from the weird 'bot to the ball rolling off to the side, something struck her and shoved something down her mouth, which in turn wriggled inside her, shimmering deep purple all the way-
pain pain pain pain pain
She passed out, undergoing the trial of Jamba.
…
Marx got out the costume. He was not in a good mood.
His breath went erratic as he saw her shaking, turning, and reliving a trouble worse than himself.
"I don't want to do this, and yet they push me under the conditions of my life…" His stunt with Flamberge had landed him in this job, with nothing but an unbearable costume, a Jamba heart, and himself.
And now, he was looking at Susie, wanting to go out of the ship already.
With her out of control, he'll have a much easier time setting up what's next. At least, that's what Hyness said. As Marx stood there for who knows how long, he finally witnessed the final stages of the Jamba Heart; the crushing pain it will give.
Susie started to hyperventilate, tears forming in her eyes, as her posture slowly changed to a fetal position.
Marx noted this change, which was his task, as he was being watched. Always watched. He can't purposely fail, or he'll suffer a terrible fate. In any case, it's irreversible now, and he prayed to the other two to beat the Jamba Heart. He swiftly moved into the sunset, flying all the way.
…
It was black. All was black. Everywhere she went, all was dark. The sky blended with the floor. The floor had already been black, which made navigation even worse. It went on for ages, for miles to no end.
She had no sense of time. No sense of space. No smell. No color. No taste of the black apple on an equally black tree. The void was absolute nil, a torture that can ruin millions under pressure.
It starts with guilt, or maybe uncertainty, or pressure. It greatly amplifies these things, and combined with crucial memory, it can devastate someone. A strategy that will always work.
…
A spark of an old memory surfaced to Susie's brain.
Susie was deep in it. Her father made things worse. She was angry at him, yes, but he was still a father. He'd gone crazy, yes, but he's still a father to her. And family is important in the vast, empty expanse of space.
"Come on, Susanna. You've got it!" Mom cheered on. I didn't know how to beat these other guys, but if I had an advantage, my intuition would be it. As I raced my friends across the hill, my father stepped on by, as he farmed his share of crops with our neighbour. It was a good day, I think.
Maybe Jonas would want to play with me again.
…
Black, shiny liquid. It just came bursting out of the ground. Father has made his own well now; but it wasn't for drinking. Oh no, it was for money! Turns out this really sold well amongst countries. It's a race between all the countries to get this new, shiny cash cow! I think, that's the word, anyways. 'Cash Cow.'
Dad was really happy when he found that black water. He was swimming in it! I laughed at that. He looked so silly! Mother didn't seem too happy. I wonder why. Maybe it's because she didn't like the water?
How could anyone not like the water, anyways? It's making dad happy, and so I should be happy too!
…
Bickering occured between my parents. Dad was wearing a business suit now, saying that we should make as much money as we can during this oil craze, as the experts call it.
Mother wanted to keep our lives simple, to keep us grounded to our poor ways.
What sort of mother is she!? A one who doesn't strive for advancement in technology and economy!?
I'm pissed off at my own mother. I shouldn't do this. She's done so much for me. I just wish that she could understand dad's views. It could make us rich! It could help us become a better family! Why keep living with uncomfortable things when we can afford new ones?
…
Dad just hit gold. He was selling gold now. We were filthy rich! Mom contested dad. She went off in her own path. I followed dad, of course. Who doesn't want money?
We kept on living the luxurious life, while mom went back to our old house and stayed there.
I really wish that mom and dad could get together again, but with her irrational thought process, I don't think we could do it.
…
Father bought a spaceship. We're setting off tomorrow. I can't wait.
The day has come. I'm ready! As the multiple robot employees came into the ship, I noticed that I was the only one who wasn't a robot. As dad signed on the robots and myself, I encountered my mother, who was watching the launch along with dad's friends. She gave me a handkerchief to keep tidy.
As soon as I went on the ship, I trashed her gift in the nearest bin.
…
We landed on a planet! It was lush and green. I was a secretary now! I had plenty of training for the rest of the 'Haltmann Company', as I like to call it. We even have an anthem of sorts! I tried to approach my boss, my dad.
"Hey, uh… dad?"
"Yes, Ms. Secretary?"
I thought of this as his formal way of addressing me.
Following that sentence, I gave my report. He took the papers, and we went our separate ways. We didn't even look at each other, I kept trying to look at him, but it seemed like he was too focused on something…
…
He's just made a grave mistake. Father; no, Max "Profitt" Haltmann just left me. He left me, 'on accident', as he said, on a volcanic planet. He'd found the Star Dream… and completely forgot about his own daughter!
I'll need to survive… in order to see him again. I can't lose faith… He will come for me!
…
The ship came. It was spherical now. It only took him a day to come and pick me up… And I greeted him as I walked past him.
"Oh, hello there, dad."
"...Dad? Young lady, you must know that I don't have any daughters at all. I had a wife, yes, but no daughter. Well, uh…"
He stumbled slightly at my name.
"Ah, I'm sorry. Who were you again?"
My heart cracked. One day, I've been deserted. The next, completely forgotten. I need my revenge… for this poor excuse of a father.
"My name is Susie, and I'm your secretary, Mr. Haltmann."
"Oh. Sorry for my blunder."
He went off on his levitating chair.
I was angry, and angry at him and his company.
…
Every day, it was about money. Money, money, money. I am about to punch this man, but I have to stick to the plan…
…
We've arrived to Popstar.
…
My chance has come. Pinky has defeated Haltmann's robot; which means that as soon as he steps into the Star Dream, I can pull off his helmet controller.
There he goes.
Never have my heart beat in such intensity.
Three...
Two…
One...
GO!
I nabbed it!
I paid no attention to father's screams nor his words as I placed the controller on my head. Now… I want my family back together, please!
The Star Dream fired its laser at me. I was knocked unconscious. When I woke up, this native was standing over me, and I commanded him to destroy Star Dream. I knew it was no good, which is why I had a backup plan. The original ship is completely fixed by now, and I'll pack everything into the ship. The robots, sadly I can't save, but I'll find new ones. I fled off the Access Ark as the ball rose up with Star Dream on top. I fled.
…
A return to home will do.
I didn't visit this place at all during the years my father spent building his wealth.
I looked inside my old home. Inside was nobody. Apparently, my mother killed herself when father launched his ship. Her body was still hanging as I stepped in the door. I fell into shock as my mother's handkerchief, which I had carelessly thrown away all those years ago, was her final gift for me.
I cried for her.
…
Jonas had a girlfriend now. Both of them didn't recognise me. So, I pretended I didn't too.
…
With nowhere to go and no purpose in life, I started to build wealth again. I don't think I can live without it. Money was important, but family is, too.
My ship flew across space, visiting planets I now remember and travel to.
"You were supposed to help me, Susanna…"
Mother was in front of me. My breathing was erratic. I can't calm down.
Flashes to her suicide came back. It felt worse.
"I gave you my final message… and you trashed it."
"I raised you from a child so that you can become a good woman, not this."
"You're a failure, Susie."
"I can't even call you Susanna anymore."
"I'm dead because of you."
I had no reason. This was the one loose thread in what I thought I had buried nearly a year ago.
Her comments flooded my brain. I wanted to cry. Cry, and never come here again. I was proposed an offer. Let it inside my heart. I'll never feel pain again.
The night went on smoothly. No interruptions at all. Well, it went pretty smooth up until the crack of dawn.
CRACK!
"What the-" Magolor jolted awake, as he had fallen asleep on his control desk a few hours before.
A door slammed at the end of the ship, with Taranza up and ready, yet he still looked like he was dead, based on the expression on his face.
"What now..?"
"I don't know… let me check…"
Lor's screen showed Susie's ship sliced cleanly in half, with a giant robot standing on top of the ship. Outside the ship were panicking employees, running for their lives as a giant robot shaped much like… Susie?
"Oh."
"What?" Taranza peered over Magolor's shoulder. "Amazing! It's a giant robot!"
"Alright, I'm going to have to pilot this like a battleship again…"
As soon as Magolor started steering the Lor, Taranza hurried up the deck.
Standing on the floor with wind blowing in his face, he closed the door behind him and started to strategize as Magolor veered around the robot's torso.
As he circled the robot's torso, he noticed that with each step it makes, it has to really struggle.
Must be really heavy…
Heavy…?
"Taranza, knock it down somehow!" Magolor yelled through the intercom, as Taranza started to get going on his 'knocking the robot down' idea.
The simplest solution was a piece of rope.
However, Taranza still needs a mechanism to attach the rope to the mech without him being unable to grab it. As such, he began spinning a long strand of magic rope.
He balled one of the ends with a weight inside, creating some sort of 'rock slingshot', but without a tool to throw, he was going to sling the ball outside with wind blowing on him in the crack of dawn as the sun rose up.
Normally, sane people would probably consider how the wind will potentially affect the ball. Or how you shouldn't even throw at that dark of an hour. And maybe have some second doubts about fighting a giant robot.
Too bad this was 'normal' for Taranza now.
With a long piece of rope, he bolted down to where Magolor's at.
As the door from the deck slid open, Taranza stuck his head in and commanded Magolor.
"Steer the ship near the robot, I can pull it down!"
"Yeah, got it!"
The ship slowly turned closer to the robot. As Taranza waited for his moment, his heart started beating faster. He needs to land this shot…
Like a lasso.
Taranza swung the ball part in a circle, making it gain momentum.
And… come on…
Taranza saw its leg off the ground.
Perfect.
Taranza aimed at the lifted leg and threw his shot. The rope was actually long enough for Taranza to start pulling. As he attached the web to the mast, Lor Starcutter was suddenly halted.
Job done, Taranza headed back to Magolor as the magician started to fly away with a robot in tow.
Unable to keep its balance, the robot crashed to the ground. With its materials being too heavy, it could not stand up anymore.
"Strike target Face Susie…"
Magolor pressed enter on the console log. His star cannon fired at the Susie robot.
All of them hit. The robot's outer exterior wriggled for a bit before it shut down.
Taranza flopped to the ground. "Phew…nice battle… I'm gonna go check the damage..." he sighed, as he went down to check on Susie.
Taranza went out of the cruising starship as he entered the robot using his own method: 'blasting a hole'.
As the spider lowered himself down to the impact the robot made by falling down, he knocked on the robot a few times before turning around and started to walk back.
Hiss… crumble crumble…
Sounds came from the robot.
Taranza turned back at the robot to see what the commotion was.
Taranza's eyes widened as something burst out of the metal shell.
He was clocked in the head with a metal knee, sending him off to the world of dreams.
Taranza went out cold as the new, smaller robot, rampaged through the landscape around him.
It had somehow tore through the cold, hard metal exterior. The robot was shaped like a Metal General, a round robot capable of many tasks, but it had no pilot on the mech, leaving the question of whose actions was the robot enacting?
As Taranza laid on the burnt soil, the robot headed for the Lor Starcutter.
…
Magolor landed Lor. He hadn't heard from Taranza in a while, which was odd. He said he was going to check… but did 'checking' really take that long?
Clank.
CLANK.
Clank.
CLANK!
The ship shook, and rose on its own. Did something hit the ship?
Magolor viewed the cameras again to see a smaller robot pounding the hull.
"Oh boy…"
The robot jumped a high amount as it landed on the Lor, making the ship recalibrate itself.
Magolor slammed the deck door open as he had his magic in hand, which he threw a homing ball at the robot the instant it was ready.
An explosion was heard, and a small dent formed as the robot rained bullets on Magolor.
He propped up a green forcefield around him, as the magic held against the rapid-fire madness ongoing right in front of him.
As he looked around for any sign of his partner, he didn't see the arachnid at all.
"Where's Taranza!?"
Ice Dragon, Protective Mother
Not wanting to cause any trouble, this is just a caring mother whose eggs were unlawfully stolen by Susie's robot who accidentally stumbled upon its eggs. With her eggs gone, she will find the perpetrators and get her eggs back, even if she stands no chance. Its large body allows it to do heavy attacks, but she prefers her icy breath. Her breath encases its victims and enemies in ice, for the rest of her children to then eat. It's isolated itself, but people still manage to find a way to her cave…
AN:
Ice Dragon is the same one from the one Kirby fought. It's gone and raised a family!
I intended for Susie's corruption (in her POV) to be a seperate bonus chapter, but I didn't want to litter the fic with bonus this, bonus that. I'll do them occasionally, but I'd rather not this time.
Taranza's out cold, Marx did something, and Magolor is holding out against Susie. We have a lot of people today trying to screw each other up.
Opinion: Do you like the boss battles? Would you rather have less of it?
I'll probably remove my plead for rates and reviews for future chapters after this one. It seemed too needy and kind of annoying to ask your readers for stuff. At least, that's where I stand, currently. All past chapter will have not have their pleads removed, as of this time.
Also, I was going to post this the day before, but my internet decided 'noooooope'.
icanwrite13: Susie sends her regards.
Kirbzarmon: Thank goodness I nailed that part. At least, I think so. My chapters are filled to the brim with fight after fight, it started to look like a boxing ring!
rachael. : Thanks! The team have some personalities that mesh alot… like Taranza and Magolor. I hoped I differentiated them enough...