A/N: Hey guys! I might not be around for a while, since college starts at the 10th but I will try my hardest to update as soon as I can.
Please enjoy this tribute to one of my most favorite scenes.
Also, I am extremely gladdened that I reached the 500+ reviews! A good milestone, if there may be one. So I prepared a good long chapter for you all. Please do enjoy. And leave a review please!
(11/17/10)
Saturday...
Early in the morning, Junpei woke me up and told me to meet the guys in my room after our morning rituals. I promptly threw a slipper at him after grunting a 'yes'.
Then, after losing my sleepiness, I got ready, went to the bathroom to bathe and changed.
As I was changing, the boys entered the room while I was half-naked.
"What the hell?!" I cried indignantly as I covered up.
"Sorry, we need to time this properly. I made a brilliant idea!" Junpei announced.
"It already sounds stupid..." Kenji muttered.
"Somehow, being woken up at 6AM, it can't sound any dumber than at 8AM, so shoot." Lee said.
"Anyway, snarky comments aside, I plan to go to the beach and execute it!" Junpei cried.
Everyone immediately sounded excited, but I shook my head, "Didn't you remember last year's tragedy?" I said.
"Yeah, we met a robot. Whatshername...?" Junpei said, "Nah, she isn't important, what is important is that we go off and see babes at Long Island!"
"This sounds bad..." I muttered, "Pass."
Everyone groaned angrily.
"Go with the flow!"
"Pussy!"
"Wimp!"
"Killjoy!"
"Alright! Fine!" I shouted loudly, "I'll go! But nothing good will ever come out of it!"
They whooped and stayed in their beds.
Later, Ms. Toriumi and Professor Peter, along with the girls, visited me.
"Are you well?" Professor asked.
"No..." I said weakly, "Junpei sneezed in my face."
"Gross!" The girls shrieked.
"Hush girls." Professor Peter chided, "The boys are resting. It seems as though the boys are overcome with a bout of flu!"
"Yeah, looks like you guys have to go without us..." I said as I faked a sneeze.
"No, we'll stay to take care of you guys!" They said.
"No!" I shouted, "I mean, we want you to go. Otherwise, we'd get sick even more knowing you guys are here because of us."
"It's no problem-"
"Just go, please? For us?" I said, "Take loads of pictures."
"Don't worry, Minato, I'll picture that statue until it pisses itself with joy!" Minako said.
"Go and have fun." I said, "You'll be back in six hours, right? Enjoy."
They nodded and told us to take care as they left.
The boys and I crept out of our rooms and waited until they left the buses, before they danced.
"Alright Einstein, tell me your plan." I said to Junpei.
"Get this... Operation: Babe Hunt 2.0!" He said with a flourish.
I stared at him as the guys clapped jubilantly. "I'm out of here."
"You're committed! No turning back!" Lee spat.
"I was joking... Jeez, you guys are so sensitive!" I said.
We all changed to beach wear. I wore a beach button up shirt, trendy broadshorts and slip up Sanuk.
Junpei wore a simple shirt, shorts and sandals. He changed his usual hat into a Fedora. Quan wore a tank top with broad shorts and flip-flops and Kenji wore almost the same, except he wore jean shorts instead. Lee wore an orange wifebeater shirt and horizontally checkered black and gold shorts.
"Let's go." I said as they nodded.
We hailed a taxi and Lee told him to go to Long Island. He stopped by the beach as we took a deep breath by the nose. It smelt salty, fresh and breezy.
"Ah, America! Where the sun never sets and the citizens never floss!" Lee sighed as he looked at several girls, then a Sentra blocked the way.
Lee craned his neck, cursing silently as the man in the car thought he was admiring the sound system.
"Like my stereo?" The guy said, "q. Cost me a $10,000 bucks!"
"Wow, a $10,000 sound system in an $800 car!" Lee said in a mock-impressed voice, "You're loud, you're proud and you're in a 91' Sentra! We're so damn impressed!" Lee said sardonically.
The man shook his head and drove away.
"Man Lee, you got a way of scaring people off!" Quan said.
"Scaring him off?" Lee looked confused, "I was just saying what was on my mind."
We laughed as we took in the sight. People playing volleyball, girls sunbathing, kids swimming and teenagers watching Jersey Shore.
"Jersey Shore never fails to remind me that we're all just idiots watching those idiots act like idiots on reality TV." Kenji said.
We walked around the beach, and Junpei and Quan insisted on having a race, which we goaded them into. They raced around a bouy, until Junpei began choking on something, so we all came to his rescue.
"Junpei!" Lee cried as he punched Junpei's chest and he spat out something latex.
"What the hell is it?!" Kenji said in disgust.
Lee picked it up with a stick, "It's... a condom!" He said as he flicked it away. We laughed at Junpei as he vomited his breakfast out.
"Okay, looks like swimming is out of the question!" Kenji said while tearing up.
"Shut- ugh- up!" Junpei said as he retched, "Fucking assholes littering on the goddamned ocean!"
We helped him get over it as we went to other places.
"So, are we gonna start the Operation now?" I asked.
"Excited, eh?" Junpei smiled, "I knew you had my tastes!"
"Ahhh, after seeing you swallow a condom, I don't think we have the same tastes at all..." I said.
"Gimme a break-ugh!" Junpei nearly retched, "Anyway, let's commence! We only have a few hours to work!"
We scouted the beach.
"Seen anyone good?" Quan asked.
"I dunno... All these Americans look absolutely the same." Kenji said.
"There!" We spotted a cute group of girls.
"Who approaches first?" I asked.
"Me!" Lee and Junpei said at the same time. They immediately began to argue.
"Roshambo it, we're on the clock!" I snapped.
"Ro...sham...bo!" Junpei's scissors beat Lee's paper.
"Fine, go ahead Casanova, let's see you fail." Lee said.
We approached with Junpei. He just stood there until the girls eyed him and he turned around and asked me what to say.
"Just ask questions!" I said.
He nodded and turned back to the girls.
"Um... Can we help you?" She asked.
"I dunno... Can you?" Junpei said.
She and her friends smiled, "Are you looking for something?"
"Is there something we should be looking for?" I asked.
They looked at each other, very amused, "Where are you from?"
"Where are you from?" Junpei asked.
"Hahaha! We're from Jersey!"
"We're from Japan." Kenji said.
"You met the Emperor?" One of them asked.
"Why meet the Emperor, when we have five beautiful Empresses in front of us?" Quan said smoothly.
They giggled, "What are your names?
"What are yours?" Lee asked, keeping his excitement in check.
"Dani, Trixie, Tamara, Angel and Jenna." They blushed, "Don't tell on us, okay? We're not supposed to talk to strangers."
"Okay..." I said, "But only if you girls want to be told on..."
"Oh my God, you boys are so cute!" Trixie said as she approached, "Especially you, blue-haired angel! But we have a shift soon... Come by the Desperado cafe and we'll brew you some... hot coffee..."
After they winked and left, we jumped in joy.
"Success!" We shouted, "Time to go on the prowl!"
We looked around and saw a lone brunette.
"My turn." Lee said before we could object.
We came at a respectable distance.
"Hey, how're you doing?" Lee asked smoothly.
"I'm fine." The lady said, seeming slightly interested.
"Are you fine?" Lee asked.
"Uh... Yeah..."
"Are you fine then?" Lee asked.
"What the fuck is the matter with you? Are you retarded or something? The hell is the matter with you?!" She said, obviously annoyed.
"Do you want me to be fucking retarded?" Lee asked innocently as the girl rolled her eyes and moved away.
Lee came back with his tail tucked behind his legs.
"Sigh..." Lee said as we went to find new hunt.
"Mama Mia!" Quan cried as he spotted a fine looking lady.
"Let me have this one, lads." Lee said.
"You had that last one, you selfish pig bastard!" Kenji cried.
"Look, guys like me always need girls more than you." Lee said.
"Meaning you're a man-whore!" Kenji countered.
"Hey, where I come from, my list of wenches is an obvious sign of opulence." Lee announced proudly.
"Flatulence?" Quan said confusedly.
"OPULENCE!" Kenji shouted.
"What does that mean?" Junpei asked, "Opulence... sounds similar to passing gas."
"Fool, that means he's got loot." I said.
Before we could intercept Lee, he started after the girl.
"Hello madame!" Lee said, "Would you fancy-"
"That guy has AIDS." Junpei said sullenly.
The woman ran away quickly.
"Coño! Fuck you!" Lee spat.
We let him curse at us as we scouted for more.
Junpei pointed, "I'll have that one." He said as he pointed to a young looking girl and her friends.
"Hey." Junpei said amiably.
"Hello." The girl squeaked.
"Uh... I'm Junpei."
"I'm Kiara. I'm 19."
"Y-you look good." Junpei said.
"Thank you." Kiara said.
"Wanna go out for ice cream?" He asked nervously.
"Why not?" She said, "Can my friends come?"
"Hell yeah!" Kenji shouted as the girls giggled.
"Just so you know," Lee said loudly, "That guy swallowed a loaded condom. So he's already had his share of cream... Just the one with no ice." He said with a wink.
The girl's faces fell, "Uh, we gotta go and... Uh, clean the beaches."
Kiara looked longingly at Junpei, "But I want ice cream..." She said as she was dragged away from us.
Junpei felled Lee with a low kick, "Cock blocker!"
"We're even!" Lee spat.
Junpei felt resentful to Lee after that.
It was Quan's turn after that. He found a red headed girl hurrying somewhere.
"Hey, hey, wait up!" He cried, "I'm red headed, you're red headed... We gotta at least know each other! I'm Quan!"
"Oh, hello!" The girl said with an air of aloofness, "I'm Ariana. I'm sorry, but I need to head back to my friend's trailer..."
"Wait, wait..." Quan insisted, "I say forget them. Let's have fun!"
Her eyes widened, "Okay!"
She was a bit of an airhead, but we did have some fun before she left. We played watergun and making pottery before she left.
After that, we went to a cafe, specifically, we went to the 'Desperado' cafe, where the Owner was a hulk, like Odin, and the five waitresses from earlier were beautiful goddesses, Valkyries.
We ordered some food and I tipped the waitresses generously. Junpei sighed with content after drinking his iced tea.
"I love America!" Junpei sighed, "Everything here is free! Free drinks, Freedom of speech and I am loving these delightful free muffins!" He said as he bit in one from a box he took from the counter.
Kenji looked at the box, "Dude, these are $6 a box."
Junpei discreetly spat it out and returned the box as Kenji rolled his eyes.
Lee seemed downcast though, "Okay, almost a week in this country and we didn't even get to score..." Lee bemoaned.
"What about Fuuka?" I asked him.
"Hey, I draw a very thin line between lust and love and I don't put a toe out of line with her until she's ready. The wenches I'm after are dispensable." Lee said sternly.
"Come on, we're missing all the action!" Kenji cried.
"Okay, watch this..." Quan said, before looking at an American in a bikini, "Hey Missy! Want to eat ice cream with me and my friends?"
The American curled her lips, "Get lost, dickweed."
Quan snorted, "Come on, asobi ni iki mashou, girlie!"
"Ice cream?!" Kenji shouted incredulously, "ICE CREAM?!"
"Girls like ice cream." Quan said simply.
"Yeah, little girls." I said, "So, unless you're into lolicon, that won't work."
"Haha, that how you pick up girls?" Junpei laughs.
"Come on, man, you can't do it that way, look..." Lee said as he made a fast, noisy, licking motion with his tongue.
"What the fuck is that?" I said in disbelief.
"That's what you do." Lee said.
"That is disgusting is what it is." Kenji said.
"Watch it." He said as he did it again.
I mock-punched him, which he dodged, "Oy, look at that fucking thing, man... you look like a lizard... like you got a bug coming out of your mouth."
"See, I knew you wouldn't understand." Lee said, "Chicks here dig that. Hey, look."
He points to a hot chick wearing a bikini.
"Ay caramba!" Kenji drools.
"Whoa!" Junpei gasped.
"Man, she's looking at us!" Quan said as she turned around.
"So, waddya say Don Juan? You think you can do it with her?" I asked.
Lee smirked, "I think so..."
"Wanna try it?" Kenji asked.
"Why the hell not?" He said as he stood up, "You fools gonna watch?"
"Yep. You're probably not gonna do it." I said as we stood up and shadowed him.
"I'm gonna get her, just watch." Lee said as he swaggered towards the young lady, who was lying down on a sunbathing bench near a swimming pool.
"Go ahead, Lover boy!" Junpei shouted, "Do your thing!"
"Just be quiet and let daddy work." Lee said.
"Lover boy!" The boys and I sat next to a woman and her two kids.
Lee smiled at the girl, "You're looking fine today!"
The girl raised an eyebrow.
"Yes, you, I've been watching you from over there." Lee said.
I talked to one of the little kids, "Kid, want to see something funny? Look at that silly man over there."
The mother smiled at me for being friendly.
"We're gonna watch our friend there. He's gonna stick his tongue out to that girl. Look..."
Lee did the tongue thing to the girl, who looks at him with revulsion. She promptly slaps him hard on the face.
"Ittai, kusutarre!" Lee yelled.
The mother, the kids, the boys and I laughed, "See what happened to him?" Junpei giggled as we approached Lee.
"Hey, you know if I wasn't such a nice guy, I'd pimp-slap you back!" Lee spat at the girl as Kenji put his arms around him.
"Chill out, bozu!" Kenji said as he laughed at Lee's welt.
"Pervert!" The girl shouted.
"Bitch... lesbian... dyke!" Lee spat at the girl angrily.
"Dude, if you want women, you need money, look..." I said, pulling out a wad of cash, "Girls!" I waved the money, "Over here!"
The group of bikini-clad girls instantly came over.
We chatted with them, until Lee decided to get fresh with one of them, making the entire group leave, much to everyone's ire.
Using a ruse, we decided to get Lee to buy something while we plotted revenge.
After recalling a manga I read, I decided to speak out.
"I have an idea." I said.
I told them of my plans.
"That's nuts..." Junpei said in disbelief.
"But who'll do it?" Kenji asked.
I gulped, "It's my idea, so it's only fair if I do it."
Quan smashed his fists on the table, "No!" He said so loudly, we flinched, "You love Minako! And I don't want you to risk it! I'll do it." He said.
"Quan..." Kenji said.
"Don't worry. I can take one for the team... As much as I hate girls whose hair color has nothing red in it..." He said, "Wish me luck."
"Give this to them." I said as I gave him $1000, so,e for him, and the others for the girls.
Lee came back, "Where's Quan?"
"Out. He wanted to pick up some girls without us messing up." Kenji said.
"That so?" Lee mused, "Well, he needs it."
Then, Trixie came forward, "Hey, Lee, my friend Wendy wants to meet you."
A shapely looking blonde strode forth. She was absolutely stunning.
"Hello!"
She said with so much charm, we were all mesmerized.
"Hey, lady!" Junpei said.
"I want you!" She points to Lee.
"You heard her! Ladies choice!" Lee said as he put his arms around Wendy.
"I want some private time with you!" Wendy said, tracing a finger on Lee's mouth.
"Oh, you don't waste time, do ya?" He said, "Alright, but I'm a bit too short on cash-"
"Here buddy, take it. Something from me to you." I said, giving him a $100.
"Thanks! I owe you one!" Lee said as he grabbed Wendy, "Let's party. I'mma rock out with my cock out, and you'll jam out with your clam out. This will magical!" He took her to an abandoned lighthouse Trixie pointed out.
After a few minutes, we decided to check on him. We stacked up several crates to peek.
Lee slumps over in pleasure, "Man, that was terrific Wendy... So good..."
"Yeah... say, Lee, you into Yaoi?" Wendy asked.
"Haha, hell no!" Lee said.
"You should be." Wendy said.
"Why?" Lee laughed.
"Cause you're in one right now!"
"Waddya mean?" Lee asked.
"My real name is... Wendy Wu..." 'She' said with a grin.
"No...!" Lee said as his face filled with horror.
'Wendy' says as 'she' takes off 'her' wig, revealing the smug, smiling and revengeful face of Quan.
"AHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Lee shrieks in absolute shock as he covers himself with a blanket.
"Hahaha! Got you again, shitbrick!" Quan laughed.
"You said you were that waitress at the Desperado!" Lee shouted.
"I lied!" Quan said as he laughed so hard, he cried.
"I'll fucking kill you!" Lee roared.
"I didn't feel a thing, but YOU did!" Quan laughed.
"You jerk!" Lee roared, "Then that means-"
Lee ran out and vomited several times.
"Hey Lee, how'd it go with... Wendy?" I asked.
"Uh, n-nothing! Hehehe!" Lee said as he laughed.
Quan came out, "Sup Lee?"
"Oh, Quan, what were you doing in there?" Junpei asked.
"Lee and I were-" he stopped abruptly as Lee looked vengeful at him as he raised his shirt, revealing a 1911 Colt 45. "Doing a threesome! Yeah!"
"That so?" Kenji said nervously, "Then let's call this a Mission Success and go home." we agreed as Lee vomited for a while and went with us.
I stopped by the Desperado to say goodbye to Trixie and the girls.
"Oh, bye!" Trixie said as she and the girls kissed me and the boys in the cheek, throwing Lee a sly smile, for she knew what he did.
"Incidentally, why are you guys working here?" I asked.
"We're saving enough money for college." Trixie said.
"Really?" I said, collecting the remaining money I had, about $10,000 bucks, since I initially took a few thousands with me from Japan, "Here. From me to you girls."
"Oh no, we can't accept this!" Trixie said, handing it back to me, blushing.
"No, don't be modest. You guys have been nice to us. Go on. For your college education." I coaxed her.
She and the girls hugged me and kissed me, "How can we ever repay you?"
"Well-" Lee began.
"No time, Lee!" Kenji said.
"We could call Wendy-" Quan suggested.
Lee whipped out his gun and pointed it to Quan, "Say that again!"
"Whoa, whoa, just kidding!" Quan said.
Lee decided to give the gun to the owner as he couldn't pass APS with one.
"If we're ever in Japan, we'll look you up!" Trixie said as I gave her my number.
"Safe trip!" The girls cried as we walked away.
We were a bit annoyed at the slow moving family in front of us as we walked the boardwalk.
"Gee, thanks alot slow walking family in front of us!" Quan muttered, "Oh no, DO spread out, so you can create the Great Wall of Idiot! Geez, we are too thankful that we risk the danger of being smeared to the road in order to pass you just to walk like a normal human being!"
We arrived in the nick of time. The buses were passing on as we overtook it and hurried to our floor and changed back.
"We're back!" The girls cried, "Hey boys!"
"Hey... We're feeling better now that we saw you guys!" I said.
"Aw how sweet- wait, why do you have tans?" Yukari asked.
"Uh..."
"And why do you smell salty?" Minako asked.
"Must be your imaginations!" Junpei said loudly.
"Whatever you say." Yukari said, "We're leaving now."
We all took our stuff and looked at the penthouse longingly as we went down, then I remembered our laundromat stuff, so we sent our stuff ahead and went to the laundromat.
"How much for the lot?" I asked, grabbing my wallet.
"About $55." The man said.
"$55 dollars! That's highway robbery!" Lee cried.
"$11 dollars for each of your shirts." The man said simply.
"Okay, fine." I said, throwing the money to him, "Clearly, it doesn't cost that much, but I'll pay it anyway, since I'm not really sure what you do and how much it should cost... In fact, I'm 110% sure all you did was iron it and put a plastic sheet around it, eh?" I said.
He shrugged as I sighed and slapped the money on his desk.
We went down and took the buses to the airport, where everything was easy until we passed the boarding gate.
"Sir, I'll need you to step outside for a minute." The airport guard said to Lee.
"Whoa, whoa, did I beep or something?" Lee said in a panicked voice, "Probably just a 45. bullet lodged in my testicle or something-"
"No, not really, you didn't beep. Just a random security check, if you would step out for a moment..."
"'Random' huh?" Lee said dubiously, as he stepped out.
"Yeah." The guard said.
"So, this ain't got nothing to do with my 'ethnicity' or whatever the hell you call it?" Lee said loudly.
"Come on, Lee, just do what the man says!" I said.
"Yeah, that or he'll get busted. If he does, I never met him before..." Junpei whispered.
"Sir, it is my sworn duty to check for illegal drugs or guns." The guard said.
"Ah, so just because I'm Asian and that I look like some Yakuza punk, you think I'm packing heat or running drugs, is that it?" He said loudly, "What are you, some sort of racist?" Lee said sharply.
"Racist?" he said in disbelief, "Dude, I'm a Black-American." The guard said.
Lee laughed, "Haha, please, I'm blacker than you are!"
"He doesn't mean that! He doesn't mean that!" the boys and I pleaded to the guard, but Lee dismissed us with a wave of his hand.
"You look like some pasty teenager who got a cheap spray tan! Compared to me, you look like Edward Cullen in New Moon!" Lee said.
"Hey, who you calling Edward Cullen, asshole?!" The guard said, going to Lee's face.
"Me, you Edward Cullen-looking piece of shit!" Lee bellowed.
I went between them, "No one here looks like Edward Cullen! No one!"
"Unless Robert Pattinson passes by." Kenji said.
"Not helping!" I hissed.
"What's going on here?" The chief said as he strode towards us.
"Sir, Eddy Cullen here thinks I have illegal drugs and weapons here just because I'm Japanese!" Lee said, "And that is 100% puro racial profiling, which I would be more than happy to report to the MRGI..." Lee trailed off.
"No, no, no, no, no, that will be fine, yes," the chief said, "My deepest apologies!"
"S'all right." Lee sniffed, "Keep your boy on a leash though... He got an attitude!"
We walked away as the chief berated the guard.
"Must you always cause a scene?" I asked.
"We're in America... so long as I got the freedom of speech, no one here is gonna shut me up." Lee said, "Besides, I got a pot pipe and nearly 7 keys of marijuana..." He whispered.
We laughed as we took the plane, first class, and left the beautiful New York below us 30,000 feet below.
A/N: well! Finally done! I had to down a few redbulls and burn through a few prompts, but worth it!
Please leave a review afterwards!
Huh, I want to say you keeping up the balance, butt then again...you don't,
because if Minato loves Minako the he does...It's utterly pointless...butt if
you make a sudden change...it's better be something good...like I don't
know...Yukari's having "ring-a-ding-ding" with Minato and then Minako comes in shock...and then excuses...and then all over again...
Very nice job on the hot springs...but I would go like this...spook the
girls...so that they decided to look...but then the boys keep creep them out
and the girls leave...and happy ending for the boys...
And, Nice job, Junpei, on interrupting...Minato...Mhahahaha take that
omnivore...
Sigh... I don't want to sound mean, but the 'butt' you're using needs only one 'T'.
Why should I make a sudden change? Makes zero sense to balk right now...
"Ring-a-ding-ding?" What is that? Ice cream?
Well, whatever it is, it doesn't sound so smart, so I'll disregard it entirely.
You're making no sense. AT ALL.
And the bigger question is: Why would they do that? Sounds downright wierd. Extremely wierd. Not to mention downright crazy. Also, I'm not into that pervy stuff. I write about it, but I don't get into it...
Haha, also not all are in the same opinion as you with Junpei interrupting...
By the way, you ought to seriously listen to your science class; all humans are omnivores. :3
MeowMeowReading 6/4/13 . chapter 38
Very good chapter my friend. I really liked how you made the guys kinda laid back while Junpei and Minato were careful to make sure the girls don't find them. I really like how it ended up happening anyway though. I was laughing my butt off when the guys were trying to get Minato to let them sign his cock. I didn't get to review last chapter but again with Junpei being a Cockblocker 3000. There should have been an option at Yakushima to tell Junpei to screw off. This story gets better every chapter. You are truly the most talented Persona writer.
Why thank you! I know, I hate it when Junpei ruins it...
Thanks, but I defer being called that until I truly earn that title, whoch I try my best to achieve.
The Breloom 53 6/4/13 . chapter 1
Cipher, your story is absolutely beautiful. I have to say, Chapters 37 and 13 are my favorites, mostly due to them having Minako and Minato having a romantic standoff of some sort, I can't find the right words. And of course, Junpei comes in to screw up the romantic tension between the two M's. Heck, if I were Minato, I would let him watch, lol. I love your style of writing, the single sentence which I've gotten over, the proper grammar, and pretty much everything. I'm pretty curious as to who will win the poll though. I wonder what Cato's motives are for sponsoring the trip. If I were Cato, I would jump off the plane, put in a C4, and blow everything up, but Cato's not a criminal. Lee and Quan being executed must have been horrifying for them, as they were FROZEN IN A HOT SPRING. I woulda expected Minato to abandon Junpei, and I woulda expected Lee to sign Minato's cock anyway. Anyway, your story is the best I've ever read. I'm anxiously waiting every day for the next chapter. Cipher, more power to you, and keep on keeping on :D
Gee, thanks! But that's what everyone said about Nathan Azai, until the chapters progressed... Keep an eye out! And be vocal, if you can!
Radaketor 6/3/13 . chapter 38
Well this chapter was awesome...
Lucky Minato, being spoonfed by both Minako and Yukari.
I don't really get why or how Chidori got there, she was summened by Mitsuru? I thought they lost their powers when the defeated Nyx.
Actually, the explaination is within the last few chapter... :3
BloodyAbel 6/3/13 . chapter 38
Whatever makes you moan at night :)
Whichever tickles your fancy, brother's keeper ;)
Hoshi no Ookamiden 217 6/4/13 . chapter 38
If you really want me to, I'll do so. XD
Firstly, I think my favourite part of this chapter is the cautiousness that the guys took when they were entering the hot springs. The fact that they REALLY didn't want anything like last time to happen really showed. Not to mention that it was hilarious seeing them get chased around by the girls, and I see that someone's been taking pages from Persona 4 to spruce it up a little bit. :)
Another thing that's been catching my eye is that you know how these characters are going to react. You keep a pretty decent grasp on how well each of the characters are... um... characterised. XD I have nothing to say about that, since you do that so well.
But if there's anything that I'm a bit miffed about in this story, it's the lack of sophisticated and descriptive language. Maybe I'm just nit-picking and it's just me, but I know that you seem to gravitate to making the dialogue and drama working, which I can appreciate, but I feel like some of the parts of the story rely too heavily on the reader's experience as a Persona fan. Things like that can be improved. Believe it or not, as much as I am a fan of the Persona series, I've never played even one game of the series. Luckily I've seen the whole game to know what people will be referring to commonly, but for others it could be a little disorienting. But, that's just me.
Welp, that's it for me for now... long review is long.
Keep it up! XD
Thank you! Your suggestions have been duly noted, thanks for reviewing!
I really hope to hear more from you!
2sassy4u 6/3/13 . chapter 38
And they still haven't noticed that Naoto is actually a girl, lol. An enjoyable read this chapter was, although it was kinda plain in the beginning, the suspense in the end nailed it. Minato's in a dilemma of deciding of whether to choose Minako or Yukari. Honestly, the outcome would be most obvious unless you suddenly decide to add a plot twist :P I will be looking forward to your next update :D p.s I simply can't wait for Days of Winter, Days of Summer with Mitsuru was just too sweet! Keep up the great work!
Yeah, no one knows.
There will be more twists than a labyrinth in the next few chapters.
DoW will come very soon!
There! For any questions, feel free to ask!