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Naruto
Konoha academy
Naruto had come to the academy, excitedly waiting for the teams to be chosen when Iruka came into the room and said "alright everyone settles down, I will now announce who you will be paired with." He then began by saying team seven will be led by Shisui Uchiha, it's members will be Naruto Uchiha, Torune Aburame and Hinata Hyuga." Naruto yelled "YEAH I get to be with you guys" Hinata then blushed, thinking "I get to be on Naruto's team and Torune thought I must be careful around them and observe them closely." the Iruka said "next will be team 8, it will be led by Kurenai Yuhi and it will be made up of Kiba Inuzuka, Sai and Shino Aburame." Then Iruka said "team 9 will be led by Kakashi Hatake and will contain Sasuke Uchiha, Sakura Haruno and Fu Yamanaka" Sasuke then thought "great I got teamed up with two people I barely know." Sakura then thought "yes I got put with Sasuke" then Fu thought 'good I can keep an eye on him.' Iruka then Said "lastly the final team will be led by Asuma Saratobi and will contain Shikamaru Nara, Ino Yamanaka, and Choji Akimichi" Ino then thought "UGH I got put with lazy ass and fatso" Shikamaru then thought 'it is going to be such a drag being on a team with her' Iruka then said, "now everyone waits here your Jonin Senseis will be here shortly." He then left the room.
Later Academy room
After Iruka had left the room the first Jonin sensei had arrived, she was a young woman with fair skin, black hair, and very red eyes. She said "my name is Kurenai, I will be the Jonin sensei for team 8, Kiba then said "yeah let's go Akamaru" the dog then barked in response. Then Sai and Shino got up in response and they left. It would be a while later when the door opened to show a man with a black beard and a cigarette in his mouth. The man then said "my name is Asuma Saratobi, I am here for team ten" Ino then in response said "ugh finally someone got to come on you guys lets got." then Choji got up and said, "Shikamaru let's go, our jounin sensei is here." Shikamaru who had his eyes closed before this said "I have to get up now, and I was just getting comfortable here." After that, the lazy genin got up and left with his other two teammates. Then shortly after that with the usage of the body flicker jutsu a man with the traditional Uchiha wear came in and said "I am Shisui Uchiha and I will be your jonin sensei for team 7" Naruto then said "finally you got here I was waiting too long" then after a second Naruto realized, he then said "wait a minute your the guy always with Itachi" Shisui then said, "yes, I was hoping you would remember me Naruto, now come along." As they left Naruto said, "hey Sasuke I hope your sensei gets here soon." Sasuke then said, "yeah Naruto he will probably be getting here soon enough." However, he would not come as soon as Sasuke wanted to and when his Sensei finally got there Kakashi said "sorry I got lost on the path of life" he said with a smile under his mask. Sasuke thought "that's a lie, let's get this over with." However Fu was not as quiet, he said "you're late, it is improper for a jounin to be this late, you will make us look bad if you do it this way." Sakura then responded to this comment "you shouldn't say that, sorry for his poor attitude." Kakashi then said "no that's all right" however in his head he thought "so he will need an attitude check." Kakashi then said "meet me on the roof." the three genins then left the room
Training grounds
Team 7
Naruto looked at his new Sensei and asked him "so Shisui-Sensei, what are we doing here." Shisui looked at his new student and told him "well we are here for you three's final test, that test you had taken in school was to see if you can take this one, to pass this, you must attempt to take these bells from me now." After he said this Torune got up and asked him "so to pass this may we use all of our skills, even ones that may kill." This then told him, "I promise you won't kill me with that'' After saying this a small smile formed on Torune's face as he took off one of his gloves, revealing purple bugs covering his hand and tried to pounce on him, however, this did not go according to plan as Shisui quickly got away in a puff of smoke. Naruto then very confused asked him, "what was that, how did he get away and why did you take off your glove and also what were those bugs on your hand." Torune then turned around and said, "to answer your questions, first the Jutsu he used was called body flicker only those with a Sharingan can use it well in combat, the second I took off my glove to use my bugs, the same bugs that can eat away at chakra." Torune then looked at the third member of the team and he then addressed her "Hinata can you use your byakugan to learn where he is." She then startled by her being asked something then complied and used then she then said " he is past the hill over there, I think he is waiting for us to attack. Torune then said "good now let's plan a strategy of attack, now can you tell me what you guys can do'' Naruto started by saying "well I can do all the academy jutsu's, I know the shadow clone Jutsu and I know the great fireball jutsu." Hinata then followed by saying "I can use the academy jutsu too and I am pretty good with my Byakugan and the gentle fist" Torune nodded and said "Ok now I think I have a strategy we can use"
A few minutes later
Shisui was wondering 'where are those kids, I hope I didn't move too fast and dishearten them' and as he thought of it he saw three shurikens going at him. As he saw them he used body flicker to quickly getaway, however before he could catch his breath he saw Naruto making hand signs and said "Shadow clone jutsu" following that three identical clones appeared. Then as they went after he could get rid of two clones Torune and Hinata appeared she then activated her Byakugan and attempted to attack Shisui with the gentle fist when Shisui moved out of the way and then kicked after using body flicker to get behind her. However, before he could move the remaining clone grabbed Shisui and Torune with a hand ungloved hit Shisui. However, to all their surprise, he turned to smoke. Torune surprised then said "what he was a shadow clone" Shisui then appeared behind him saying "yes, after all that effort you were deceived, however with that being said would you still keep fighting." Naruto then said "yeah there is no way I can back down now" Hinata then responded by saying "I agree with Naruto I am not giving up either." Torune then said "neither will I" Shisui then said "In that case, you pass"
Naruto then said "WHAT" Shisui then said again "you pass, as a shinobi you must be willing to fight on even if the odds are against you, now come on I will take you guys to eat."
Later
Ramen shop
Shisui asked, "so since you are going to be my genin what are your likes and dislikes, what are your goals." Naruto went first, saying "I like my family and people who are nice, I don't like those villagers who always talk behind my back and my goal is to be the first Uchiha Hokage." Hinata then said, "I like spending time with my friends, I don't like those who are mean to my friends and I want to become strong enough to protect my friends." After she finished speaking Torune spoke, "I like gaining more control of my bugs, I don't like it when my bugs hurt others and my goal is to defend Konoha." Shisui then said, "okay you three we will meet again tomorrow to have our first mission now go have fun today." After saying that he used a body flicker to leave. Naruto then said "I hope he teaches us that soon, anyway I am going to check on Sasuke and his team. You guys want to come with me." Hinata then nodded and Torune said "well since Fu is with them will join you." they then went off to meet with Sasuke
Team 9
Sasuke was sitting on a bench eating a prepared lunch when he heard an all too familiar sound. "Sasuke is that you." Sasuke then saw Naruto running up to him with two people behind him. "What is it Naruto and who is that with you?" Sasuke said with a scowl, Naruto then said "Nice to see you too, this is Torune, I believe you've met and this is Hinata, they are my teammates." Sasuke then looked up at the two teammates and thought 'so he's with a Hyuga and that boy he was friends with in class, not like my team is much better.' then as if from his head his teammates appeared, a girl with pink hair said "there you are Sasuke!" and following behind her a boy with auburn hair and yellow eyes came. The second boy said, "Oh hi, Torune nice to see you here, lets talk." Torune then responded "yes we need to talk." the two then walked away. Naruto then greeted Sakura saying "hello Sakura, how are you doing." Sakura then responded "I am fine you idiot" Naruto then said "so what did your Sensei have you do for your test. Sasuke then responded telling Naruto "well Kakashi gave us a bell test and after we failed Sakura got tied to a pole and me and Fu gave Sakura food and then Kakashi appeared and told us we passed, saying how teamwork and not abandoning your friends is important." Naruto then said, "yeah we got something similar from Shisui-Sensei, ours was a little different though." Naruto then said, "I am excited for tomorrow, we are going to start doing missions, that's the first step to becoming Hokage." Sasuke then responded, "do you really think you can become Hokage, look at how strong Dad is and he got passed over for being the fourth Hokage." Naruto then thought about it for a minute and then responded "yeah well then that means I will have to get stronger than Dad and so will you." Sasuke then asked, "why will I have to?" Naruto then said, "well you will be my assistant, Itachi will be clan head and I will be Hokage you can't be the only one to stay as a normal ninja" then Sasuke thought of it and with a small smile said "well somebody will have to keep that hyperactive body of yours on task" They then both smiled and continued to do this foursome time, both were excited for what would come.