My Laundry List of Last Minute Things I Came Up With While Reading My Story

By, Lizzie

-Daughters of Poseidon: JACKSON

or twin sister of Percy or secret sister/brother of Percy

" 'Hi! I'm Ocean Sea Wave Pearl Aqua Starfish Jackson!' 'What?' Percy asked confused, 'I don't have a sister.' 'I was secretly born to Sally but was presumed dead! SURPRISE!' 'MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!' "

*I agree with Percy

-Annabeth (or any character, but mainly Annabeth) is OOC

"Annabeth suddenly burst out crying. 'WHY DO YOU HATE MEEEEEE!' "

*Seriously? Sometimes it's good to have people a BIT OOC, but ONLY sometimes. (OOC stands for Out Of Character BTW)

-FictionPress

Did you know Fanfiction has a website for just Fiction works? (FictionPress .net)

-Dialog is mechanical -_-

" 'Let's have a sleepover!' Piper said. 'Yes.' Annabeth said. 'That sounds like fun.' Thalia said. 'Have fun, girls.' Percy said. 'Yeah.' Jason said. 'VALDEZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!' Leo said."

*"STOP!" I said.

JUST SOME POINTS I WANT TO ADD: (But Don't want to go into detail about)

-)Ridiculous OC names -_- (I think I've already covered this one...)

-)All the demigods join a school at once (that's 7+ people) and no one questions them or is suspicious (I know I would be)

-)Giving you WAY TOO LONG (!) descriptions for a character you already know (ex. Rachel)

-)TOO MANY F***ING FLASHBACKSSSS (seriously... I don't want to see how much your hamsters death affected your 8-year-old self)

-)Where's Grover, Juniper, Lou Ellen, Coach Hedge, Mellie, Chuck etc.? (unless they serve as a plot pawn)

-)Characters curse too much (seriously, like every other word)

-)DON'T GIVE ME AN AUTHORS NOTE SAYING WHY YOU HAVEN'T UPDATED! GIVE ME AN UPDATEE! (like, yeah. I like don't care how like ur computer like broke down like five weeks ago and u like couldn't update cuz of finals or like bother to check ur like grammar)

-)When authors spell a god/ known demigod's name wrong (Tavis and Katey approve as well as Mark-an overused, for some odd reason, name- son of Zuez)

HEYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

How you doin'?

This is just a laundry list of things I came up with while reading through my story a few days ago. I also edited and tweaked my story up a bit to improve quality. Enjoy!

Kisses,

Lizzie