μαγικό υδρομασάζ: magikó ydromasáz – Magical Whirlpool
A/N: Here is the re-written version of μαγικό υδρομασάζ (magikó ydromasáz) Once again I have to say that this is in response to Tanker0923's Naruto/Negima Challenge. Now some of you maybe asking "Unforgivenone you never mentioned that you were going to re-write this so why are you?" or you maybe asking "Judging by how poorly your last 'Revamp' went why are you revamping this one?" or Finally you maybe saying why the hell are you still writing fanfics you suck at it." Well to answer these questions The reason why I am re writing this one is because I always felt like I was rushing the fic and due to that feeling I want to take my time develop more things and edit others, and generally just get it right I love the Negima series and as you can see by my fics I really like the Naruto series I mean it's the first official 'ANIME' I watched and new was anime, it is also the first Manga I started to read. Now for those wondering why I'm doing another revamp while Devils Maelstrom did so poorly all I have to say is that I will be doing more to develop things and the revamp of Devils Maelstrom while it seemed like a good Idea at the time I didn't take the time to fully sort out my thoughts and get a general Idea down. For those of you saying I suck at writing and should quit all I have to say is you try make a few stories first then comeback to me about it. I will say this is mostly practice for me since I plan to write a book series sometime in the near future. Anyway enough of that first thing is my original Idea for the Pairing was at least 30 girls… yeah I was getting yelled at for 20 so Imma really downsize it. Right now it's not set in stone but from Negima these are the girls I am thinking of pairing with Naruto
Yuna Akashi, Kazumi Asakura, Ako Izumi, Asuna Kagurazaka, Ku Fei, Konoka Konoe, Setsuna Sakurazaki, Mana Tatsumiya, Chao Lingshen, Kaede Nagase Chizuru Naba, OC, Ayaka Yukihiro, Mei Sakura, Takane D. Goodman, and Theodora Basileia Helladis de Vesperisszimia
While from the Naruto side of things I am currently looking at Ino, Tsunade, Anko, Komachi, Gazeru, Samui, Mabui, Koyuki Kazahana, Queen Sara, Temari, Ameno, Akita Inuzuka, Hana Inuzuka, Sasami, Fu, Fem Haku, Hinoko, Kin Tsuchi, Mikoto Uchiha, Shizuka, Sen, Kagura, Sakura and Anko Mitarashi
Now before I get any angry reviews saying that this is too many! Remember this is not set in stone. I know I need to downsize before I post the actual harem which I am thinking will be between 8-12 girls 4 of which are arranged marriages.
Now for the pairings that are set in stone
Negi x Yue Ayase, Nodoka Miyazaki, Makie Sasaki & Anna Yurievna Cocolova
Jack Rakan x Feminized Jiraiya
Albireo Imma x Kaguya Otsutsuki (I have a general Idea as to how to work this)
Nekane Springfield x Kakashi Hatake
Donet McGuiness x Akashi-Sensei (Have to give him a name)
Shizuna Minamoto x Iruka Umino
More to come, at a later date.
Now before I spoil anything Imma Gonna Shut my Big Yap
Prologue: The Ingenious Mess-up
'It's finally over.'
Hiruzen Sarutobi thought as walked toward the villages center still wearing his battle gear a black jumpsuit with mesh segments over the lower portions of his limbs and a green gauntlet that covered his right arm. Donned on his head was an armoured hood with a bandanna-like forehead protector over top tied with two long straps. For a few hours ago the Kyūbi no Yōko a massive mindless monster that could raise tsunamis and flatten mountains with just a single swipe of one of its nine tails had attacked the village wounding many and killing many more.
As he walked along the streets towards his destination Hiruzen saw his people civilian and shinobi alike aiding in the recovery effort. Some running back and forth with bandages others with chairs and stools. Some people where aiding the wounded providing basic aid where they could. It wasn't until he arrived at the center of the village that he saw all the bodies lining the street. He noticed numerous shinobi going up and down the rows with a clip board, noting the deceased. He saw those who had survived and not fought the massive run up and down the rows searching for husbands, wives, brothers, sisters, sons and daughters and upon finding their loved one he would hear their mournful cries. Parents grieved, and cursed what ever higher power may or may not be out their while crying over their children, husbands over wives and daughters, wives over husbands and sons, and children over parents and grandparents. Hiruzen continued up and down, the columns back and forth through the rows his eyes roaming from face to face all while reciting the names that belonged to each face having known some their entire lives while others since his own childhood. Then as he approached one of the ends he saw the bloodied spikey blonde hair and white haori of his successor Minato Namikaze Fourth Hokage of Konohagakure and there laying next to Minato was his wife. Kushina Uzumaki was cute as a young girl and as she grew she became a beautiful woman. Only to be out done only by red hair, which at one time caught the eye of all those who saw her now only standing out against the dark dirt road. Hiruzen continued through the deceased searching for one face in particular and as he went through again and again without seeing it hope began to well up in his chest. Hope that he dare not nurture for experience told him that it his hope was false. It wasn't until his sixth or seventh pass through the lines of the deceased that he saw it the one face he had hoped would not be among the dead his wife of 40 years a woman who during the first shinobi world war took down three platoons of enemy shinobi while holding back a fourth so she could buy enough time for her teammates to escape the battle field.
"Saru no joō." He began his voice heavy with grief "Why? Why did our story have to end like this why couldn't we continue on together facing our future and living out our remaining years in peace?"
Though the question was asked it was posed to no one for it was one that needed no answer. Hours seemed to go by as he looked down as his beloved wife before a voice to his left spoke
"Lord Hokage." It said
"Is it her?" another voice this one to his right asked
Not trusting his voice Hiruzen Sarutobi Third Hokage of Konohagakure survivor of the three shinobi wars student of the first and second Hokages and the one who was intrusted with the will of fire, nodded his head in confirmation.
"Lord Hokage!" A female voice coming from behind him spoke
The urgency in her voice caused Hiruzen to turn around and look at her she wore a white cloak and black trousers with bandages tied around his right leg, arm-guards, gloves and black sandals. Her long midnight black hair was tied back into a long ponytail she is wearing a mask with a hornet or bee motif inclusive of antenna other than that detail the mask is completely white.
"Commander? What are you doing here I thought I told you to watch over Naruto." Hiruzen said
"I apologize for leaving my post Lord Hokage but I left Naruto in Lord Jiraiya's hands. He wishes to speak with you and is waiting in your office." She said afterwards though she noticed the body of Biwako Sarutobi behind Hiruzen
"Although I could have him come here and we could leave Naruto with the Lady Uchiha who also wishes to speak to you in regards to Naruto's living situation now that his parents are deceased." She said
"Tell Jiraiya to meet me here and we will discuss whatever it is he wishes to discuss then. As for lady Uchiha Inform her that we have yet to confirm his survival, now leave." Hiruzen stated with a tone of finality in his voice as he turned back to gaze upon his wife for the last time.
"Sensei." A voice said causing Hiruzen to turn his head and look at the speaker
There stood a tall well-built man with fair skin. He has waist-length hair that was tied back into a pony tail, with two shoulder-length bangs framing his face. There are red lines under his eyes which extend down all the way to the bottom of his face. He has a wart on the left side of his nose. He is wearing a green short shirt kimono and matching pants, mesh armor is visible at his wrists and ankles. He is also wearing hand guards, a black belt, wooden sandals, and a red haori with two yellow circles on each side. On his back a large scroll can be seen and on his head he is wearing a forehead protector with the kanji for oil.
"Jiraiya, thank you for coming to meet me. I was told you wished to see me. I assume that it's in regards to something important." Hiruzen said while looking at his student
Jiraiya nodded his head in confirmation
"I have a few things that need your urgent attention and one thing that needs the attention of the Konoha council both Shinobi and civilians. But before we get to that sensei I wish to give my condolences to you and pay my respects to Biwako-Sama as well as Minato and Kushina." Jiraiya said as he lowered his head.
Timeskip: A few minutes later
After paying their respects to the deceased Jiraiya and Hiruzen started to walk to the Hokage Tower, and upon entering the office of the Hokage they saw a beautiful young woman with a very voluptuous figure, very long blood red hair and violet eyes. Her hair is tied in a long ponytail, reaching all the way down to her legs with an orange ribbon keeping it in place. Around her neck black leather choker can be seen. She is wearing a cropped strapless corset top, skin tight leather pants, black leather gloves, a black leather arm band and black leather boots. The woman was looking down at the small white bundle of cloth that she was holding.
"Who are you? How did you get in here? How did you get past my security? What are you planning to do with Naruto?" Hiruzen questioned his body tense and ready to strike should the woman prove hostile to him or young Naruto.
"Naruto Namikaze. You who Minato Namikaze decided to make the godson of Jiraiya Toad Sage of Mount Myoboku one who has more claim on this village than even he knows, and Tsunade Senju Granddaughter of the First Hokage, Grandniece of the Second and Granddaughter to the strongest Uzumaki to ever walk the earth of this world. Naruto Uzumaki. You who Kushina Uzumaki decided to make the godson of Evangeline "The Maga Nosferatu" McDowell, Nagi "The Thousand Master" Springfield, Albireo Imma, and her. Should any of those Kushina named your god parents ever find out that the hers and Minato's deaths were a direct result of the actions of certain individuals I fear what might happen to this village and its inhabitants should those individuals ever incur their wrath. But I believe you will bring about great change not just to the shinobi but the entire. Grow strong Naruto and harness the great power that slumbers deep inside you. In the meantime, rest easy knowing that I will be keeping your inner demon at bay."
"Hiruzen Sarutobi Son of Sasuke Sarutobi, Student of Hashirama Senju and Tobirama Senju. You who has been entrusted with the Will of Fire and has been named Third Hokage of Konohagakure no Sato I charge you with the task of Keeping Naruto safe from all enemies his parents have made, and you Jiraiya of the Sanin when you have discovered that which you have always yearned to know seek out the twin cat and she will gift you a relic that can only be used by one of your bloodline. As to your questions Hiruzen, I have been gifted with many many names over my extraordinarily long life. Currently though my name is Akira, as for you second question getting past children is of no great feat for one such as myself your third question is pretty much the same as your second so I won't bother answering it as for what I am planning to do with young Naruto here well that should be easy enough to figure out since I just stated my intentions." The now name Akira stated before she raised her head to look at Jiraiya
"If you have a question boy then speak or forever let be unanswered for I don't normally gift mortals with conversation."
Jiraiya looked at Akira briefly
"What are you Akira-san? And what did you mean when you said one who has more claim on this village than even he knows? Also What did you mean by seek out the twin cat after I discover what I have always yearned to know?" He asked
"Listen and Listen well Jiraiya and Hiruzen for I shall not repeat myself." Akira said as Nine long red fox tails appeared behind her "I am Akira a Kyuubi no kitsune and I come from a world beyond your comprehension as for your other questions I gave you enough information so you should be able to put what ever small portion of your brain is used for your non perverted thoughts to work and figure out what I am speaking about until then you will not get anymore information from me, or any of my kin. Now then since we are finished I will be taking my leave of you two."
Akira stated causing Hiruzen to seethe in anger
"And just where do you think you will be going with all the knowledge you have of the village I will have you detained and interrogated to ensure you are not a threat though I do believe that nifty illusion you used to try and scare us should prove that you are infact a greater threat than whatever false information you tried to pin on other people. Infact I would dare say that you are responsible for all the death and destruction that has happened tonight." Hiruzen said as he started to move in order to attack Akira only to be rooted in place by and forced down to both knees by an immense pressure
"While your right in thinking I am a threat but your wrong in thinking that the people painted by my information are a lesser threat when compared to me. I know more about your village than you could ever begin to imagine. On the other had my tails are no illusion and to think that they are would usually warrant your death but I made a promise to Minato and Kushina a promise to protect this village from any and all enemies that it may face, and you standing there claiming that I would be responsible for the deaths of two people that I viewed as siblings. I ought to kill you for your insolence." Akira said her nine tails waving menacingly behind her
"Akira-san! I apologize for my sensei's misunderstanding of your words for in a way the two of you are the same. You both want what is best for Konoha. Now would you please calm down I would hate to wake young Naruto." Jiraiya said whilst bowing his causing Hiruzen to stare at his student in shock
"Jiraiya what are you doing?" Hiruzen asked
Just as Jiraiya was about to respond to Hiruzen's question a vibrant laugh filled the room causing Hiruzen and Jiraiya to look back toward the source Akira.
"You amuse me Jiraiya you want what's best for Naruto yet you don't trust me one bit and are denying your every futile instinct to attack me which maybe you free Naruto from my grasp or maybe you move to attack and die before even start moving, or the final scenario you move to attack me and in the process as I am defending my self you accidentally kill Naruto, regardless I applaud your restraint. Very well I shall for forgive Hiruzen's blunder of trying to keep Konoha safe."
After Akira said this Jiraiya released a poorly concealed sigh of relief
"However in return for my mercy Jiraiya I charge you with cleaning up the mess that certain factions are causing starting with your first students maybe you should go check on your little tadpoles and get rid of anything that rots for if there is rot the tree will die. Now if you'll excuse me I have work to do… rather more work to do thanks to that idiot Minato."
After saying her piece Akira turned around a placed Naruto back into his crib and then upon confirming that the baby was still asleep begun to glow red and then disappeared in a flash of red light, in which once the flash disappeared it left both Hiruzen and Jiraiya wondering where Akira had disappeared to.
End A/N: And that's a wrap for the Prologue I believe I did a better Job with this one than the previous one if anyone wants to know I will be keeping my original records for the first version of this story also as I was writing this I added more names to the list as well as subtracted some (in my mind of course) and toyed with many different Ideas so I think the Pairing for Naruto might look something like this
Negima girls
Arranged Marriage: Theodora Basileia Helladis de Vesperisszimia (Would Halve her age so it would be a better fit for Naruto.)
Arranged Marriage: Mana Tatsumiya or Kaede Nagase or Ku Fei
Falls in love with him:
Yuna Akashi, Kazumi Asakura, Asuna Kagurazaka, Chao Lingshen, Setsuna Sakurazaki, Konoka Konoe (and then those who didn't make the Arranged Marriage) Mana Tatsumiya, Kaede Nagase, and Ku Fei
Naruto Girls
Arranged Marriage: Ino,
Arranged Marriage: Temari
Falls in love with him
Tsunade, Anko, Komachi, Gazeru, Samui, Mabui, Queen Sara, Ameno, Akita Inuzuka, Hana Inuzuka, Fem Haku, Mikoto Uchiha, Shizuka, Sen, Sakura, Tsume Inuzuka
Now please note that this is not set in stone and is still up in the air and before any of you say that Tsunade should not be added to the pairing same with Mikoto Uchiha and Tsume Inuzuka I ask you to be patient and wait for you see IF I add Tsunade to the pairing I have an Idea an Idea me and Undead Kitsune had discussed at length though it was a while ago so I don't know if he would remember but I honestly think it might work and it revolves around the same item that would change Jiraiya's gender now on to my question
What fic would you like to see updated next cause right now I am going to post a few more chapters for this one before I figure out what is next so I leave it up to you my audience to decide and if you have any questions for me I always try to check my messages on fanfiction so as not to leave any question unanswered and before I end this I would like to give a big shout out to Zanark Sathanus for giving me a challenge and really making me work to start things off. Also another big shout out to ArcherEdgeBond he's been a very good buddy of mine for many years and has always helped me with this writing stuff even if he doesn't really like Naruto, and finally a Shout out to Undead Kitsune you damn bastard you give me to many Ideas and due to that you are the reason I have like 50-60 fanfic's in the works you damn bastard. Oh and I would like to give a final shout out to another good friend of my and actually my former girlfriend thanks for putting up with my incessant wanting of getting your opinion on certain things and thanks for always saying what you mean and not dancing around your words for fear of hurting my feelings.