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Hope everyone's having a great day! Sorry for not updating sooner but the workload is preventing me from writing. I'm just lucky enough to write this to you! Anyways let's get on with it
From Gogeta89:
Love the chapter but just wondering, is Robin actually flirting with Goku or was that just poking fun that Goku is oblivious to any means of romance towards him? I.e. Boa Hancock
did find it funny that Boa got a little jealous, hope it was legit, it would be awesome to see a love triangle and see who would gain his attention first.
Keep up the work man and can't wait for the next chapter!
A: Thanks for the review! To answer that question, let me ask you this... Do you want that to happen? I'll leave it to the reviewers to make that decision. A love triangle, or keep it as it is. I'm glad you found it funny because I thought it was perfect to add in that line, but yeah to all reviewers make your decision and I'll go through with what you want, and who knows? It might be fun to write about two attractive ladies fighting over one guy. Thanks again for the review!
From bad girl 61:
What about Chi-Chi? She is Goku's wife and wouldn't stand for someone flirting with her husband, even if he was in another world.
A: ... Oh man are you in for a treat at chapter 12 lol. But just to be on the safe side I'll go into an advanced reason that even I didn't add into the story. Chi chi ran away due to Goku's disappearance in her life, she felt alone in the world without him, sure he was gone during the majin buu era but remember, he was able to come back so she didn't snap. Now realizing he never may come back all those feelings Chi Chi suppressed inside of her flooded in her mind leaving her very depressed and possibly on the verge of suicide.
To Chi Chi, the world looks and feels completely different after Goku left. To her the world seems like a dark place, what previously was beautiful looks ugly and even sinister. Without Goku's presence, she feels as if she's a burden to all and believes loved ones, even her own children, are better off without her.
With Goku not being there cheering her up on her worst days, nothing seems comforting or worth living for. There's no apparent hope for things ever feeling better, and that everything will always be miserable. Even though Chi chi's children are the reason she stayed alive, it was Goku that really pushed her to keep going, and now without him, the logical part of Chi Chi's brain thought running away was the best option for her. I hope this was enough as this was a little sad, even for me...
From Azaira:
I want to read, but your story doesn't have any real formatting.
Each paragraph should have a single focus. If a person speaks, it should ONLY be that speaker talking within its paragraph. When you introduce a new speaker, the paragraph should end and a new one begin.
It would also help immensely if you alter the format of different speaking types. Thought could be italics, mentally speaking to another could have something different as well, while normal physical speech could simply be quoted.
Many little things could be changed, but grammar and formatting are the two biggest turn-always in writing. There is no story if it isn't legible - grammar. But a story where you have people doing a back and forth conversation in the same paragraph can just gets utterly confusing and annoying.
I STRONGLY suggest you go back through your work to split paragraphs up for easier reading.
A: Thanks for the advice! If I have the time I'll make sure to go back and re edit my story and make it a little bit easier for you to read and enjoy. Sorry if that bothered you! Actually, that's not a bad idea really, changing the format when I have a character in their thoughts because I'm being serious when I say I hate repeating Goku thought to himself, he thought this, he thought quietly, it was getting on my nerves but I really never knew how to change it. I'll experiment with it and see if I like it. Sorry about the grammar though it was never really my strongest point. I hope making fight scenes are good though! Lol. Again thanks for the review; It really does help me out big time.
From mohamed ali 32:
so did he just say that goku doesn't reach light speed until ssj4 because of a death battle in original dragon ball goku moved faster than tienchinhan's solar flare he had a power level of 200 for god sake
Now he is a f*cking god
A: Thanks for the review! Yeah I thought death battle wasn't really reliable as they had left out some crucial details to Goku's feat. He's getting stronger everyday and is potentially reaching levels that might surpass Beerus, a god of destruction. Okay I'm serious, can some put a review with a link showing with real evidence that Goku is a god, because every time I look it says he has the power that are god-like and an episode said he had the powers that rival the gods but never said Goku being a god. I might be wrong about it but eh, just to be safe I'll leave it as Goku being a god. Thanks for the review!
From DeathHanshi:
I honestly couldn't read past the point where he gets knocked out by one of the snake sisters...A goku that has gone up against majin buu? Impossible. As an infant he literally fell off a cliff and landed on his head and he was okay. a blunt hit to his head from an object? that object would have shattered.
A: Thanks for the review! I know I know how is it possible for Goku to be one shot with an object but I just needed an excuse for the next chapter, also I used the blunt strike to the head trying to copy Vegeta when he struck Goku in the back leaving him unconscious. Sorry if this bothers you and it sucks that you're leaving because of that reason, the other chapters have gotten better with Goku showing his power leaving all those who witness it scared. I.e. the marines.
From Yetiashi:
Instead of acting as a prisoner, is there a reason why he didn't just fly and follow them?
A: Thanks for the review! The reason why I had him as a prisoner was to first introduce him as a weakling in the beginning to the marines (But not enough to send him to level one in the prison) and then in the next chapter show who they really were dealing with. Also I stated that Goku was malnourished during the travel so flying would definitely sped up the process of his hunger. I hope that was an acceptable explanation, thanks for the review and I hope you continue to read my story!
From Hdudbd:
No!stay with gokuxchichi...no need for goku lovey dovey with anyone else...
A: Thanks for the review! Sorry bro I've already made the story the way it is now, I hope you'll still accept the way it is now though! Thanks for the review!
Thank you all for sticking with my story! I know it's not the greatest but the fact I get to express my ideas and for people to actually like them makes me feel great. Once again i'm leaving the decision to the reviewers if they want a love triangle and have Nico Robin be into Goku. Actually f*ck it! I say tell me who you want to be added to the love interest of Son Goku and I'll see what I can do. So go all in ex: Alvida, Domino, Go Nuts! I hope you all continue to read my story, Thanks and enjoy!