Red Eyed
If you hate the story for bad writing, I'll understand since I'm still a noob at writing these stories
However, if you hate it for being My Little Pony, then leave.
I don't want to get hate or criticized for being a brony
I want to be criticized for writing or plot
Hope you understand.
Changing format again btw.
Once arriving at Canterlot, Twilight was noticing something strange.
Twilight: Why is so quiet?
Rainbow: No pony is outside either.
Applejack: Well, I reckon that they're just inside to stay safe.
Fluttershy: Or maybe they're all going to attack us!
Rarity: Don't be silly darling. They won't attack us.
Pinkie Pie: Unlike now?
A bunch ponies show up and starting attacking them.
Twilight: Every pony, get down!
Spike: Why are they attacking us?
Applejack: This isn't like them!
Rainbow Dash: Umm...has any pony noticed that their eyes are completely red?
Twilight: Wait a minute, they are!
Applejack: Do you think something's controlling them?
Twilight: I don't know, but we need to get to the castle.
Once they get to the castle, they notice how dark it is.
Spike: Why is it so dark?
Luna: It's so they don't see us.
Twilight: Princess Luna, what's going on? Where's Princess Celestia?
Luna: Well, she's trying to find out what's happening to the ponies.
Rarity: Did see find anything?
Luna: No, she decided to look across Equestria but found something disturbing.
Fluttershy: What is it?
Luna: It's not just Canterlot. Manehatten, Vanhoover, and Appleloosa were affected. She decided to asked the other kingdoms if the same happened with them.
Twilight: And?
Luna: They said no, but they want their students back so it doesn't affect them.
Meanwhile, back the school
Trixie: Teaching the students is so much easier without Discord
Starlight: I know. And the students are enjoying their short timeoff.
Trixie: However, I have this really uneasy feeling that something will go wrong.
Starlight: Just ignore it. Twilight will handle it, unless if it's Discord.
Trixie: Eh, I guess you're right.
Sandbar: Hey Consular Starlight? Where did Headmare Twilight go?
Starlight: She had to go to Canterlot for a problem. Don't worry, they'll by back soon.
Trixie: Knowing them, sooner then you think.
Gallus: So did you ask where she went?
Sandbar: Canterlot. Some sort of problem.
Smolder: When will be back?
Sandbar: Soon. It's Princess Twilight. She and her friends will handle it.
Ocellus: Well, I guess more timeoff then.
Yona: Yona don't know but Yona isn't feeling so good.
Gallus: There's something wrong with your eyes. They're switching from black to red to black again.
Yes, less than a day than when Chapter 1 was released but I don't care
This won't longer than I though.