Rise Of The Durins

by Gloria Regali

In Erebor two weeks after the battle for the mountain Ailyn daughter of Thorin wakes with a start. Disoriented and still healing from her injuries she goes in search for the rest of her kin. Much to her dismay all things are not right in the Mountain. While Thorin is bedridden, Dain becomes a problem. The younger Durins must try to retain order. Together they will rise.

4. What do you think?

I know that is might not be normal to ask for options in such an upfront fashion, but as I said before starting this story I truly care about it, and want to give it my all, I am also the kind of writer that values the opinion of my readers

So, I was wondering if any of my readers would like share opinions of the story so far? Also, if any of you see any sign of my OC becoming a complete and utter Mary Sue, please for the love of Durin tell me! I cannot stand Mary Sues and I never ever want any of my OCs to become one. Writing a Mary Sue is one of my worst fears of writing

Don't be shy, I truly want to know what your opinion may be, it is how I write, and learn to write better

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