Here's a next submitter...person, Sparkle123tt. She has captured the hearts of many with her book. I even met one of my best friends through her fanfic earlier this year. That being said I will still be completely honest. So, let's get started shall we?
Grammar
So...grammar. If you talk to Sparkle she'll tell you that she doesn't have very good grammar. Which, and this is the nicest way I can say this, is kind of true.
Throughout the story there is inconsistent capitalization. For example, she'll do something like:
"phineas, I love you," Isabella said.
All names should be capitalized at all times. ( Albeit, editing is hard and with so many words...who has that kind of time?)
That's really the only thing that bothers me about her grammar.
If I'm being super nit picky, I could talk about commas. You can never got wrong with commas. When in doubt...add a comma.
Other than that she has pretty good spelling so...
4/10
Plot
So Glitch is another one of those fanfics in which the author takes their oc and puts them in the show.
The main plot of Glitch is essentially season one of Legends of Tomorrow with a few unexpected twists, making all the more entertaining.
Some people don't like this, they think it's annoying. I, however, find it to be refreshing. It's good to know there's some writers out there with an imagination of their own.
I like how she's not afraid to let the plot get dark, too. I don't imagine too many fanfic writers would allow their oc to be raped.
As the story progresses you get a lot of insight about her character, Clarity. I think she does this smoothly. It's not to rushed and it's not too slow either.
8/10
Oc
Okay. This is the one I really wanted to talk about for Sparkle's review.
So lemme just say...probably one of the best ocs of all time. There's, like, a million people that can back me up on that.
I just love Clarity Springs.
Sparkle does such an amazing job with her, and I can tell she was very thought out. From her tragic backstory to her amazing fashion sense.
Okay. I just want to break a few things down.
1) I love how Sparkle isn't afraid to put Clarity through hell. She's got scars, emotional pain, all the works.
2) Clarity is not only bad ass and clever, but she also gets insecure, like an actual human being. When Kendra is being mean to her, when gets upset until Ray makes her feel better.
3) She's loyal. She's kind to everyone, including Mick and Leonard. And I just think those are some great qualities to have.
4) I like how she actually has her own lines. I've read a lot of these kind of stories where I've gotten annoyed at the author's oc for stealing a cannon character's line. Clarity is so original in every way. It's refreshing
10/10
Cannon Characters
So, since the first half of the story is completely stuck to the script, Sparkle obviously keeps them all in character. I mean...copying words down is easy.
But it gets impressive, when she can continue to keep them in character, even when the story drifts away from the script.
Not many people can do that. I don't think I can. It's hard. You have to really analyze the character and study them and...know them in order to do that.
I think Sparkle does an excellent job at keeping everyone in character. Kendra constantly saying how she was a barista two months ago, Sara being a bad ass, Ray being an adorable little bean, etc. etc.
10/10
Writing Style
I'll be honest. I don't usually stick with these kind of stories. After about two chapters they bore me to death and I just...stop reading.
Sparkle has managed to keep my interest thus far. So, if that doesn't say anything about her writing style...I don't know what will.
She makes me feel things!
She uses a lot of details, making it easy to visualize the surroundings of the characters.
9/10
PLEASE NOTE THAT THE WRITERS FEATURED IN THESE REVIEWS HAVE EITHER SUBMITTED THEIR STORIES TO ME OR GIVEN ME PERMISSION TO REVIEW. THIS IS IN NO WAY MEANT TO BE RUDE OR HATEFUL TOWARDS ANY PARTICULAR WRITER OR THEIR STORIES. THESE REVIEWS ARE SIMPLY MY OPINIONS. *