True Love Always Wins is a Girl Meets World one shot by @directionercrazy1 ( AngelWings98 on ) As usual the summary is up at the top if you're interested.
Grammar
The grammar in here is pretty okay. Better than most fanfictions anyway. But there are a lot of run on sentences that make it a little exhausting to read.
I'd advise commas. You can never go wrong with commas. Or semicolons.
Example:
Isbella and the Fireside girls were out doing their Fireside girl thing, and they came across a beautiful butterfly; but the butterfly was secretly an angry monster because cartoon logic.
Another thing I seen a lot of is that number thing, where instead of writing out the word they put the number. Which is fine for years, I think, but to say "I have loved you for 5 years." is grammatically incorrect.
You should write it out like: "I have loved you for five years."
One last thing. When using dialogue, you must have commas.
AngelWings often does it like: Doof said "Curse you, Perry the Platypus!"
It should be like: Doof said, "Curse you, Perry the Platypus!"
5/10
Plot
The plot is pretty okay. It's the standard romancey proposal type thing. I love a good proposal story.
But being a one shot it kind of ends quickly. It's over within two chapters. Which is perfectly okay. I just usually prefer longer stories.
8/10
Oc
There were no ocs in this story
N/A
Cannon Characters
Now, I'm not as familiar with the characters of Girl Meets World as some other shows. But I think AngelWings does a pretty good job at keeping them in character. I can definitely see Maya calling Josh a doofus.
9/10
Writing Style
So, I like how easy to read AngelWings' writing style is. However, I am a person who loves details and length.
This one shot was a bit short for my taste. There weren't a lot of details or emotional words.
Example :
My eyes widened at the sight of the ring, my heart beating faster. Was this really happening? I felt as though I might faint. Tears began streaming down my face. "Yes!" I screamed, before he even finished asking the question. "Yes, I will marry you!"
Okay...probably not the best example, but you get the idea.
5/10
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