So...I haven't exactly finished reading this yet... But it's taking forever to get done with everything else going on in my life. So, I've just gathered enough information to do this review. I'm sorry. I'll leave more reviews in the other chapters after this if you want more of my input...but for now...here we go...
Grammar
I haven't seen too many grammar errors throughout the first four chapters I've read. It's pretty decent actually, and I rather like it.
8/10
Plot
Twisted Death has an interesting plot, I think. Definitely unique. Although, Anime isn't usually my thing, so sometimes it's hard for me to follow. (I like a few but not many) Overall though, it's a pretty cool story.
Brandon, as far as I've read, is tasked with protecting two girls from these undead beasts -- necrolizers. Of course, he has his own struggles and I look forward to reading more about them as the story continues.
9/10
Oc
As far as I've read there aren't any ocs. So, for now, there's not much to say about this section.
N/A
Cannon Characters
Now, as I've said before Anime isn't really my thing. I know next to nothing about it or the shows in this genre. So, needless to say, I've never heard of this Anime that this fic is based on.
Though, the descriptions at the beginning of the book help a lot. It's a very detailed description of each and every one of the characters. Brandon -- tough and badass, yet soft-hearted when it comes to the girls he's looking after. Mika a feisty young gal with tons of moxy. So far, all the characters seem to be very well written, and I've very much enjoyed getting to know them. I look forward to discovering more about them all as the story continues.
9/10
Writing Style
The writing style in Twisted Death is very descriptive with lots of details. I love reading the fight scenes, as they are very well done in my opinion. I can perfectly visualize them when I'm reading them, like watching a movie in my mind's eye.
However, there are a few phrases and words that are repeated a lot. For example, there was one paragraph in one of the early chapters talking about a corpse, when Brandon was checking out the crime scene. It was stated numerous times that there was no corpse. Avoid repeating information, unless absolutely necessary. If it's something we won't easily forget, it only needs to be mentioned ones.
One other thing -- in the same chapter -- there were a few things that could be rephrased. Like this one sentence, "...the men in the armor and toolbox..."
This sentence doesn't make a lot of sense, and I'm still not quite sure what it means. Perhaps, it would be better if it were something like "...the men in the armor, standing next to the toolbox..."
9/10
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