So...same thing as the last one. I haven't finished reading yet, because my life is hectic at the moment and I'm super lazy when I have free time. I've just gathered enough info for this review. I can leave more in the comments if you want further input after this.

Grammar

There's actually quite a few grammar errors in Fate X. There's a lot of sentence fragments and capitalization issues. Some words are capitalized in the middle of a sentence. Sometimes, commas are used in the wrong or random places as well. There's also a rather large number of typos, in which the completely wrong word is used. For example, I've seen multiple times where the word is meant to be used, but instead the word he is used.

6/10

Plot

The plot is a little confusing for me, but I think I've got the main idea. Skite and the Purple Sabor battle throughout this video game and discover some startling secrets. The game as 1000 players and Skite is one of the weakest ones of them all.

It's an interesting enough plot, and it sort of reminds me of that one Anime, Sword Art Online.

Though, I do think it goes a little fast. My advice would be to slow it down a little. Maybe start with Skite entering the competition to be in the game, rather than just jumping into the game.

7/10

Oc

I believe Skite is an OC. Correct me if I'm wrong. He's an interesting character, to say the least. Sometimes I find his arrogance annoying, as he hasn't much reason for it. He seems to be kind of a jerk, only in the game for himself. He doesn't care who he has to hurt to get what he wants.

It's definitely different, and I like that. He's not automatically the hero type. He doesn't care about anyone but himself at first. I'm interested to see how he grows throughout the story.

Purple Sabor is an interesting character as well. She sort of feels like an oc to me, but if I'm wrong I apologize. I'm not familiar with the fandoms in this fic. She's quite the badass, and I'm sensing some kind of dark past. Though, right now there's not a lot of information about her. So, it's hard to get attached. (Though, like I've said I'm not finished reading, so maybe we'll learn more throughout the story.)

7/10

Cannon Characters

As I've said I'm not really familiar with these fandoms, so I'm not exactly sure what the characters are supposed to act like. But from my limited Anime knowledge, they seem pretty accurate.

8/10

Writing Style

The writing style in Fate X isn't my favorite. For one, it's written in the first person, which -- in my opinion anyway -- makes the MC sound rather dimwitted and stupid.

Another issue I had was the bold and caps lock. There's a lot of sentences written in caps lock, and it just makes the whole thing look unprofessional. The bold font could be okay if done tactfully. Too much makes it look awkward.

There's also a great deal of astricts. Which...just...no. Don't do that. That's lazy. Instead of saying *sigh* you should fully type out the sentence. "I sighed, bored."

It just makes the writing look more professional and less lazy. The only time you should use this * * is in a roleplay.

Now, there are a few paragraphs that describe people and things very well. But mostly they are brief and lackluster. There are pictures to help, like images of the school and some of the characters, but I'm not here to judge pictures. So, a little more description wouldn't hurt.

One last thing. I think there could be a little more internal struggle as well. We need to know more about what Skite is feeling. The book touches upon it very briefly before moving on. But I think it would be beneficial to have it be a recurring theme, as I'm not sure I'd easily get over the fact that I can't remember anything about myself the way Skite seems to. Having thoughts about it happen over and over is more realistic, and it helps the readers better connect with the characters.

6/10

* PLEASE NOTE THAT THE WRITERS FEATURED IN THESE REVIEWS HAVE EITHER SUBMITTED THEIR STORIES TO ME OR GIVEN ME PERMISSION TO REVIEW. THIS IS IN NO WAY MEANT TO BE RUDE OR HATEFUL TOWARDS ANY PARTICULAR WRITER OR THEIR STORIES. THESE REVIEWS ARE SIMPLY MY OPINIONS. *