Grammar

Commas. Everyone has issues with commas. Really loathing those little things. They're very tricky. There's like fifty rules for them. I think maybe I'll do a chapter later on them, just so I don't have to keep writing it out. It'll be easier to refer people to that chapter instead, I think. Same thing with numbers, capital letters, and tenses.

Okay. So, for everything that won't be in a later chapter...

There are a few typos, but that's fine. Easy fix with an editing app or editor.

The biggest issue I saw was contractions. There's a lot of apostrophes missing where they should be. For instance, I'm will be written like Im a lot.

And there's a little confusion with the words there, their, and there. And also you're and your.

There - is a direction. Example: Go put that over there.

Their: is a pronoun. Usually for more than one person, but it can also be used for a single, non-binary person.

Example for multiple people: Their family car is adorable.

Example for SNB - Ben put a beanie over their head since their hair was purple and distracting.

You're - is a contraction for you are. Example: You are going to the dance. Or You're going to the dance.

Your - is the form you use when something belongs to you. Example: Your cell phone is ringing.

Other than that the only thing I have seen is capitalizing the titles. That doesn't really affect the story itself, but generally, the first letters of each word in the titles are capital. (With the exceptions of one letter words and to and the.)

5/10

Plot

I've read a lot of fanfics that follow the canon storyline, most of which add lots into the mix. This one is interesting in the fact that it is strictly a, and there is no OC involved what so ever.

7/10

OC

As stated before there is no OC so...

N/A

Cannon Characters

The canon characters are written decently. Mostly they just stick to the show's dialogue, but when the story starts straying from the script they are still pretty well in character I thought.

9/10

Writing Style

The story has a nice pace about it, especially in the beginning. It's not too fast, and it's not too slow. I love the dramatic irony in the fact that Laurel is the Black Canary and Oliver is Green Arrow, and neither know at first.

The only criticism I have is the point of view switching. Often the story switches from the third person to the first person. This can get confusing for the readers and make them lose interest pretty quickly. It also just looks tacky and unprofessional. It can be done if done stylistically, but it's ill-advised for the reasons stated above. I'd just avoid doing it all together. If you start in the first person, you should end in the first person. And vise versa, if you start in third, end in the third.

8/10

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