Grammar

The grammar was pretty decent in this fic. There were a few mistakes, but nothing I want to be too picky about. Reading over the book after you finish writing it (or whenever you feel like it honestly) will help. Getting someone to edit for you is also a good option. (That's what I normally do, because I'm too lazy to do it myself haha)

Plot

The plot was really interesting, even though I only knew information about one of the fandoms in this fic. I liked the way Carrie ran into the others, and I like that she actually seems traumatized and distressed by all the torment and abuse that her mother and bullies put her through. She spends the first few chapters completely apprehensive about everything, even though she now knows what her mother did to her is very wrong. It's hard to capture this effect well, especially in fanfic. And the pacing is excellent. It doesn't drag on too much, and it doesn't go too fast either.

OCS

As far as I can tell there aren't any original characters in this. Correct me if I'm wrong

Canon Characters

I love the way the characters interact with each other. There is good dialogue and believable reactions to their surroundings and the things that happen to them. For the most part of what I can tell, they're accurate to how they're supposed to be written. My only suggestion is to add a bit more inward thoughts and feelings. There is a lot of this, but I still feel as though there could be a bit more.

Writing Style

I liked this writing style. Plain and simple. There's good vocabulary, great detail -- not too much, not too little. The perfect amount of details so that readers can easily visualize the settings without being overwhelmed. As stated previously, the dialogue is believable and likeable. For the most part, the writing style shows and doesn't tell. Which is good. That's a difficult thing to grasp sometimes, but I feel like this book does well with that. The only criticism I have, as I stated before, is having more inward thoughts and feelings.

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