I moved Burrpaw to Mountainclan because they had less apprentices and Burrpaw will have a more important part in MountainClan than in Forestclan.
I also changed the mentors of a few of the cats.
Shiverkit woke to a paw prodding her side. She opened her eyes to see her friends, Erminekit and Erminekit. Their mothers had both named them on the same day, and it wasn't until after they had been named that they realized they had both named their children Erminekit. The two queens had decided to keep the names so now there are two Erminekits in the clan. The Erminekit with a white pelt is mostly known as just Erminekit, sometimes Erminekit the first or Erminekit number one, and the Erminekit with a golden pelt is known as Erminekit the second, or Erminekit number two.
"What is so important that makes you want to wake me up?" Shiverkit meowed half joking.
"Some of the apprentices promised to show us some battle moves since we will be apprentices soon and we thought you would want to join us." Erminekit the second meowed.
"Sure, that sounds like fun." Shiverkit responded.
The three kits padded over to where Burrpaw, Nimblepaw, and Brittlepw were sitting.
"Can you teach us battle moves now?" Erminekit asked.
"Of course!" Burrpaw meowed. "How about you show them that move we all learned today Nimblepaw?"
"Okay." Nimblepaw meowed quietly.
"You be careful kits."
Shiverkit turned around to see Redleaf, the medicine cat.
"Just yesterday Raccoonkit had to stay in my den for a bit since he pulled a muscle while trying to do a battle move." She meowed.
"Ok we'll be careful!" Erminekit meowed.
The three kits watched as Nimblepaw jumped in the air and brought her leg out and smacked the air.
"Wow! That was really good!" Shiverkit meowed.
"Really? I'm that good?" Nimblepaw meowed.
"Yeah, it was great!" Burrpaw assured her.
"Are you guys joking?" Brittlepaw meowed. "That was awful! She is horrible at this! I can do it much better."
Nimblepaw's tail Immediately dropped to the ground and her head bowed.
"Oh." She meowed quietly.
"Brittlepaw, what the heck! You foxheart! That was rude, you made her feel like she's worthless!" Burrpaw growled.
"I'm just pointing out the facts! She is awful at everything she does and she will never be a warrior!" Brittlepaw meowed angrily. "You have no right to call me a foxheart you piece of foxdung!"
"You hypocrite! You're telling me not to call you a foxheart as you call me a piece of foxdung! You always think you are above everyone else but you're not! You only care about yourself, and you have to insult other people to make yourself look better. You are no better than a piece of dung!" Burrpaw growled.
"Oh my StarClan! Why are you lashing out on me for pointing out the obvious! Nimblepaw is horrible, and we should just leave her out in the snow to die!" Brittlepaw yelled. Now, pretty much all the warriors were watching the argument.
"What in StarClan's name is wrong with you. You wish for your own sister to die! She is just as good as everyone else in the clan. She is a lot better than you! You are such a foxheart." Burrpaw yowled as loud as he could. "That's it."
After Burrpaw finished talking he sprang onto Brittlepaw. He clawed her as hard as he could. He kicked her and did all that he could to hurt her.
The kits watched in horror as it all unfolded. A warrior quickly ran up and dragged Burrpaw away from Brittlepaw.
Burrpaw's mentor, Butterflytail, padded up to the two cats.
"I can't believe how immature you're acting. You never, attack a clanmate, and you never, wish for one to die. Both of you will spend a lot of time cleaning the elders den as well as the nursery." She growled.
"But-" Brittlepaw started to meow.
"Do as I say!" Butterflytail growled.
The three kits watched as Tanglepaw padded up to Burrpaw.
"Thanks for standing up for my sister. No one really does it except for me, but I'm not around much since I'm always busy with medicine cat duties. This really means a lot to me." He meowed.
"So, what should we do now?" Erminekit the second asked.
"I don't know, maybe we can eat? I'm a bit hungry." Erminekit the first meowed.
"Sounds good." Shiverkit meowed.
The three kits grabbed a quail from the fresh kill pile and started to eat.
"I hope Nimblepaw is okay." Shiverkit meowed. "To have her sister to wish for her to be dead must feel horrible."
"Yeah." Erminekit meowed. "Brittlepaw is so rude."
"All cats gather here for a clan meeting!" Redstar yowled.
"Hm, I wonder what the meeting is for." Erminekit the second meowed.
"Maybe it has something to do with the argument that happened a bit ago." Erminekit the first suggested.
"We have quite a few kits ready to become apprentices today." Redstar meowed.
"Oh my StarClan! We're becoming apprentices!" Shiverkit meowed excitedly.
"Shiverkit, Erminekit, the other Erminekit, Raccoonkit, and Cariboukit, please step forward. From now on, you will be known as Shiverpaw, Erminepaw, Erminepaw, Raccoonpaw, and Cariboupaw." Redstar meowed.
"Brightstream, you will mentor Shiverpaw, Sparrowheart will mentor Erminepaw, Snowstorm will mentor the other Erminepaw, Thistletail will mentor Raccoonpaw, and Blackfur will mentor Cariboupaw." He finished.
Shiverkit touched noses with Brightstream and looked up at her.
"I can't wait to learn all I can from you!" She meowed excitedly.
"I'm glad." Brightstream meowed while smiling.
"Do you think we all should go see the territory?" Sparrowheart asked.
"Yeah, that sounds like a good idea." Blackfur meowed.
The group of ten cats padded towards the entrance of the camp.
"I can't believe we're finally seeing the territory!" Cariboupaw meowed excitedly.
They padded out of the cave, went through the tunnel that led outside and padded out. Right when they stepped out, a cold wind hit their faces.
"It's pretty cold out here." Erminepaw meowed.
"Yeah." Shiverpaw meowed.
The kits looked down at the view below them. It was breathtaking.
There was the waterfall next to them that ran down the mountain and gathered at the ground. A stream ran off of the pond and stretched through the territory and into another Clan's territory. There were pine trees on the ground and a few on the slopes of the mountain. By the pond Shiverpaw saw a twoleg nest and a small shack nest to it. It was beautiful.
"Wow! It looks beautiful! I knew the territory would look nice, but not as nice as this!" Shiverpaw meowed in amazement.
"I can't wait to see it all!" Erminepaw meowed.
Shiverpaw looked over at Raccoonpaw. He had been quiet the whole time,
The cats padded down the mountain a bit to a small pool of water from the waterfall. At the end of the pool, the water kept going down the mountain.
"This is where most cats go to get a drink. The medicine cat sends some cats here to soak their injury in the water to numb the pain." Brightstream meowed.
"Cool!" Cariboupaw meowed.
The group continued to pad down the mountain and they eventually got to the ground. They were surrounded by widely spaced pine trees and the pond from the waterfall. Tiny droplets of water from above splashed Shiverpaw's muzzle. It felt good on her face.
"Let's follow this stream through the forest to the end of our territory, and then we will circle around the perimeter of our territory, go see some stuff in the middle of the territory, and then finally head home." Sparrowheart meowed.
"Sounds good." The other mentors meowed.
The group headed towards the stream and started following it. Shiverpaw looked down and saw a few salmon swimming up the stream. They kept walking until they saw a clearing.
"This is where we battle train with the apprentices." Snowstorm meowed.
"When can we battle train?" Erminepaw the second meowed.
"Maybe in a few days." Snowstorm responded.
The cats kept going and eventually Shiverpaw started to smell something.
"What's that smell?" She asked.
"Tunnelclan." Brightstream meowed.
"A bunch of worms, spending all their time underground, hiding from the cold, the cowards." Snowstorm growled.
"They hide from everything." Nighteye meowed. "The cold, the wind, other cats, anything that vaguely looks like a threat."
"They are cowards, but they're also sneaky. They sometimes sneak underground and tunnel into our territory and steal prey. That's why we have to block all the rabbit holes. We may not be able to eat very many rabbits but they won't steal prey as often." Sparrowheart meowed.
They headed away from the stream and along the edge of the territory. Shiverpaw's paws started to ache a bit later.
They went along the Forestclan border and finally started heading back to camp. Shiverpaw's legs ached so badly, that she could barely walk. The cats padded back up the mountain and into the tunnel that led to camp.
"You five can go have something to eat and claim nests in the apprentices den before going to sleep." Sparrowheart meowed.
Shiverpaw went to the apprentice's den first so she could get first pick on a nest. She chose one as far away as she could from Bitterpaw's nest. She went to go out to eat and saw the two Erminepaws by the fresh kill pile waiting for her. Shiverpaw grabbed a small bird from the fresh kill pile and joined them. The three finished their meal and headed into the apprentices den. Shiverpaw saw Bitterpaw complaining in her nest.
"Why do there have to be more apprentices in here? We were here first! Ugh, why do I have to clean the elders den? If those old scraps of fur can't care for themselves, then we don't need them! They're just extra mouths to feed. I hate this clan." She meowed.
"Shut up Brittlepaw, no one wants to hear your stupid rambling, we all want to sleep and you're preventing that." Burrpaw groaned.
"I hate you, I can talk when I want, stop asking me to do stuff so you're more comfortable!" Brittlepaw spat back.
"Hypocrite." Shiverpaw heard Erminepaw mutter under her breath.
Burrpaw sighed and gave in to Brittlepaw's selfish whining and laid back down. Shiverpaw laid her head back down and fell asleep.
MountainClan
Leader: Redstar - reddish brown tom with a white underbelly and muzzle
Deputy: Nighteye - pitch black tom with piercing amber eyes
(Apprentice: Brittlepaw)
Medicine cat: Redleaf - russet she cat with a white belly and muzzle and green eyes
(Apprentice: Tanglepaw)
Warriors:
Blackfur - black with grey eyes(mates with Windfrost, father to Raccoonkit and Erminekit)
(Apprentice: Cariboupaw)
Sleetstorm - big grey and white tabby tom with cold blue eyes(mates with Coalwhisker, father to, Tanglepaw, Brittlepaw, and Nimblepaw)
Coalwhisker - big, long furred black she cat with one yellow eye and one blue eye(mates with Sleetstorm, mother to Tanglepaw, Brittlepaw, and Nimblepaw)
Blizzardtail - small white and grey tom with mottled tabby stripes and sharp blue eyes
(Apprentice: Nimblepaw)
Brightstream - white she cat with light russet splotches and blue eyes(mates with Sparrowheart)
(Apprentice: Shiverpaw)
Sparrowheart - brown tom with darker brown flecks and amber eyes(mates with Brightstream)
(Apprentice: Erminepaw)
Snowstorm - large white tom with broad shoulders, lean muscles, and a thick, white, coat that hides most of his battle scars, has a long scar on his eye and his other eye is yellow
(Apprentice: Erminepaw the second)
Thistletail - sandy brown she cat with small black and white spots, a very fluffy tail, and orange eyes
(Apprentice: Raccoonpaw)
Butterflytail - light brown she cat with a white underbelly, dark brown paws, a russet spot above one eye, blue eyes, and a tuft on the end of her tail that looks like a bug wing
(Apprentice: Burrpaw)
Windfrost - light grey she cat with yellow eyes(mates with Blackfur, mother to Raccoonpaw and Erminepaw)
Goldenflight - golden she cat with green eyes(mates with Redstar, mother to Erminepaw(the second), foster mother to Shiverpaw and Cariboupaw)
Apprentices:
Tanglepaw - small black tom with long messy fur and yellow eyes
Brittlepaw - tall grey and white she cat with sleek fur and dark blue eyes
Nimblepaw - lithe black and white she cat with long fur and big orange eyes
Burrpaw - small tom with thick spiky dark brown fur that sticks out in all directions
Raccoonpaw - white tom kit with a black mask, black feet, and a black ringed tail and yellow eyes
Erminepaw - white she kit with green eyes
Shiverpaw- fluffy white she kit with sharp claws and amber eyes(prophecy cat)
Erminepaw(the second) - golden tabby tom kit with amber eyes
Cariboupaw - Pale greyish brown she kit with dark amber eyes and ringed mud colored paws
Queens:
Kits:
Elders: