Now I'm so sorry I haven't Updated in a while I've had writer's block and while I wanted to write this chapter and in fact have sat down to write it so many times I just had no clue where to go from the last chapter. That and I have been sick lately (I get sick a lot) and have edited the other chapters cause I forgot to add things so you might want to go back a read them. Now I would like to know who you all would like to ship Adriane with here are the Choices.
Fred Weasley
George Weasley
Nevel Longbottom
I am open to suggestions so please tell me who you want her to be within a Review (I feed off of them)
On the Reviews.
Guest: It's very peculiar this fanfic is totally different to everything I've read so far hehe I hope I can find out more about this fanfic and I got a lot of attention and he knew what Harry will do next against all the people that hurt him, I will be reading you Bye!
Me: Thank you I had to use Google translate to know what you just said as I can't read Spanish.
Tsukikageshi: I like the chapter. The beginning is a little disorienting but I like the chapter overall. It helps to specify that the character is asleep or at least have them going towards bed the scene before, even if it is a previous chapter etc.
Setting a word count is something I've been told helps for chapters. Totally forgot to mention that earlier. Spellcheck is fine. My vision isn't good so sometimes I miss that, my phone is old, my keyboard acts up, and sometimes I simply have two left thumbs. I catch it a lot but there's always that time I don't.
My glasses got munchkin munched so currently broken. So... It makes it a little more difficult on my tiny phone. So nah. Your good.
Your writing isn't bad. Not refined exactly but that comes with practice. You have the talent and your working on it and that's all anyone can really ask of you. The reviews are meant to help improve, so hopefully, this helps. I've seen professional writers with less talent. It wouldn't put you at the top but it already means you just means you have potential to stand tall as a writer in the industry. It's tough nuts but it's possible. So ya know, stop putting yourself down and practice. You're not bad. With some beta readers, you'd probably even do well. We all need to be told we missed something or it reads funky sometimes. Like I tell the person I edit for, sometimes we have this story in our heads and we need to be reminded when details don't make it or translate differently than we want them to. It's all there in our heads but we need to make sure it's translating with the effect we want and the details we want and need in order to tell our story.
You're not bad at writing. Everyone is always improving and I'll probably be dead before I stop myself. Don't put yourself down. You have good ideas and not many people can make a three-way crossover halfway intriguing. Usually, by the first or second chapter, I hate it and quietly leave without a word so as not to hurt any feelings. The character immediately is op and it's like, by the time chapter 1 or 2 is up, there is no place left to take the character. So then they have this world breaking mary sue type character, who doesn't work for what they can do and the world itself simply bends around them rather than them interacting with the world.
So far you have not done that. No bulldozing through problems. The conflicts aren't magically resolved by it. No "ah I have all the answers" blah blah blah. As awesome as those things might be, they don't make for great stories and I've never read a story crossing these particular things that don't do that.
Don't sell yourself short.
Me: OMG THANK YOU! It means so much coming from someone that isn't a friend or family and I got a little teary-eyed while reading this so thank you.
Adriane was now sitting with Grinlast in his office, they were discussing whether She should take on all her ladyships or only one or two.
"Grinlast what would be the benefits and drawbacks of taking on all of my titles, Besides having a long ass name that would take forever to say let alone write done on anything." She said this while trying not to break the teacup in her hand what grinlast had sent up, Taking a sip she sighed.
"Well, Adriane the benefits far outway the drawbacks." Seeing the raised eyebrow he continued " For one thing you would be considered an adult in both the magical and Muggle worlds and have access to all of your Family vault and Properties and you will be able to override the sealing of your parents will that Dumbledore had done"
Grinlast froze as the sound of a teacup shattering and looked to see Adriane with remains of a teacup clenched in her hand from holding it too tight.
"Grinlast are you trying to tell me that Dumbledore had MY parents will be sealed" Seeing the nod from Grinlast they let out a growl.
"I'll do it, Please get me the rings."
"Right away Adriane"
A few moments later Adriane was staring at the six rings on the table, Five of them being her ladyship rings and the other one was her heirship ring for house Black.
"Grinlast how am I to ware all of these rings? I only have so many fingers and would like to know if there is any way to hid them from the public as I do not want anyone to know about my status just yet?"
"Ah, You can make all of the rings into one all you have to do is put one ring on and then put the other ones on the same finger and they will form together into one."
And so starting from right to left she grabbed the Gryffindor ring. The ring was made out of Rose Iron that had a golden rose color, It had red Rubys alone the middle with the Gryffindor house crest in the middle and the words 'fortune favors the bold' in fancy script inside of the band.
Putting it on Adriane was a little surprised when it resized to fit her ring finger, They looked at Grinlast who nodded to show that yes that was normal. "The heir and ladyship rings resize for a perfect fit so the heads do not have to replace the ring every time there is a new head of the house"
"Ah, That makes sense"
Adriane went to put on the next ring and saw that it was the Slytherin ring, The ring was made up out of silver with Emeralds alone the middle with the Slytherin crest in the Middle and the words 'Learn the rules so you can break them properly' Adriane chuckled a little at that it seemed like something that a Slytherin would say.
Putting the Slytherin ring on she watched as it fused with the Gryffindor one, on the outside, it seemed as if nothing had changed but somehow she knew that she could now change the ring from the Gryffindor or Slytherin ring in a secant.
Turning to the Ravenclaw ring she saw that it was once again like the other founder's rings. This one was made out of white iron with sapphire's alone the middle and the crest in the middle with the words 'Wit beyond measure is man's greatest treasure' Putting it on they turned to the next one.
This one was the Potter ring and Adriane felt her breath catch while starring at it.
It was made out of White Gold and had a blue gem in the middle with the family crest in it and the Potter family motto engraved on the inside of the band 'The last enemy that shall be destroyed is Death'.
She put the ring on before turning to the last of the head of house rings, This one was the merlin ring. It was actually pretty simple, to be honest, it was a simple white gold band with the motto on the inside. But the motto kinda had them confused ' Keep calm and save Arther...Again' Adriane had a feeling that she wasn't getting something but it was still funny as hell.
She put it on while holding back her laughter, she could laugh at the strange motto later, before turning to the last ring left.
The black heir ring, She had no clue if she wanted to take it or not because Sirius had Ignored her cries for help alone with Remus and another was because they already had a long name now and didn't want another last name but against their better judgment went to put it on.
The Black heir ring was made out of Black iron with small white diamonds alone the middle and had a black onyx in the middle, On the inside of the band was the black family motto 'Always pure' causing Adriane to snort with disgust.
They put it on her other hand cause one they had no clue if it would fuse with the other rings as they are Ladyship rings and this one is an heirship ring.
They looked at grinlast with a small smile before they felt their vision go black and information started to flood their head.
From the Gryffindor ring, they got Knowledge about the different styles of sword fighting They would still have to Learn how to use it though, Just because they had knowledge about sword fighting did not mean that they could just pick up a sword and become an expert at it.
From the Slytherin ring, They got a basic Knowledge of Occlumency, How to build their defenses and what not they still had to do it themselves but now they didn't have to learn everything from a book.
Ravenclaw Ring gave them Knowledge of the hidden rooms in Hogwarts that no one had found yet. Yeah after the first two it wasn't very overwhelming.
Potter ring gave them basic muggle fighting styles but like the sword fighting, they got from the first ring they still had to learn how to use it.
And from the Merlin ring, They got a whole lot of jokes and insults to use on other people to their confusion. When would they ever call someone a clotpot, what did that even mean?
When they came too they saw that they were still in Grinlast's office but
this time they were laying down on a couch that had not been there before.
Sitting up They looked around the room and noticing Grinlast was sitting at his desk she got up and walked over. "Hello, Grinlast any idea of why that happened?" Grinlast jumped a little bit at her voice and looked up before answering "I'm sorry, I had thought that you knew about the rings imparting their Knowledge to the new head of the house."
"That's okay Grinlast you forgot it happens to the best of us."
While Grinlast still looked a little guilty he at least seemed better than before.
"Adriane I took the liberty of having your parents will be brought up here while you were unconscious with the thought that you would like to read it."
Adriane felt a little choked up at the thought of reading the will but she needed to know what was in it for it to be sealed.
"May I read it Grinlast?"
"You may, you just have to put a drop of blood on the crest to unseal it before you can read it."
Doing just that Adriane unfurled the will and started to read.
I James Charles Potter do hear by declaring that I am of sound mind and Body and not writing this under distress of any mind-altering substances.
I Lily Maire Potter nee Evens do hear by declaring that I am of sound mind and Body and not writing this under distress of any mind-altering substances.
To Sirius Black
Sirius, I leave you 5 thousand Gallons and Custody of my Little Girl take care of yourself Padfoot.
To Remus Lupin
Remus, I leave you 10 thousand Gallons and the two bedroom Cottage that you loved and don't even think of giving them back as Me and Lily no longer have any use of these and Rose will have the rest of the Estate. Help Padfoot take care of her, she'll need her Uncle Mooney.
To Alice Longbottom
Alice, we leave you 2 thousand Gallons and the plant clippings from the Potter greenhouses.
To Peter Pettigrew
Peter, We leave you a curse if you were the cause of our death's if not we leave you 7 thousand Gollans.
To Albus Dumbledore
Dumbledore we leave you a warning leave our Daughter alone.
To Rose Potter
Rose, We love you sweetheart we hope to get to see you grow up into the Amazing woman we know that your be. We leave you the Potter estate and whatever property there is.
Take care, Rose.
Now onto who gets custody of my little Rose Blossom
Sirius Black
Alice Longbottom
Remus Lupin
Minerva McGonagall
Amelia Bones
In NO circumstance is Rose to be left with Lily's Sister Petunia Dursley if no one listed above can take in Rose she is to be given to Lily's cousin Bruce Wayne who lives in Gotham.
Lily Maire Potter nee Evens
and
James Charles Potter
Witnessed By Albus Percival Wulfric Brian Dumbledore
Adriane was shaking with suppressed tears and anger by the end of the will.
"THAT BASTARD I WAS NEVER SUPOSTO GO TO THE DURSLEY'S!"
The wind started to creep around the room, Magic reacting to Her anger. Grinlast stared in awe for a moment before yelling to be heard over the racket the wind was making "ADRIANE PLEASE CALM DOWN YOU ARE GOING TO TEARE MY OFFICE AND THE BANK APART AT THIS RATE"
Adriane froze before calming herself down.
"I'm sorry about that Grinlast I lost my cool there for a moment"
"It's Understandable Adriane No one will think less of, in fact, I'm impressed that you did not blow the bank up right away with all that untrained power you have."
Adriane groaned as they rubbed their forehead "Grinlast do you have any idea's on how to CONTROL my power's so something like this doesn't happen again?"
"Why yes, I do."
"Really?"
Adriane looked a little skeptical So he explained " For a small fee Gringotts can provide you use of a time chamber"
"What's a Time Chamber?"
"A Time Chamber is a room that a day outside is around a year inside."
"Um, Grinlast wouldn't anyone notice that I'm a few years older than I'm supposed to be?"
"No, as you do not age while inside, we do not understand it but we just chalked it up to magic."
Adriane looked thoughtful " How much will this cost and will I have some time to buy a few things beforehand?"
"Well, the cost depends on how long you would like to use it and what else you want with it, If you want some teachers to teach you while you are in the chamber then it will cost extra."
"I think I would like around five years in the chamber, while it may be more then I will wind up needing It is better to have more time to learn than less time. And yes I would like a few teachers for both magic and Muggle subjects"
"Muggle Subjects?" Grinlast sounded confused so Adriane decided to explain.
"Muggles are ahead of us by years while they may not have any magic they make up for it in stride as they are always advancing while The Magical world decided to go with a motto of 'If it ant broke don't fix it' and stopped making as many advancements. I wish to learn more as I might move to the muggle world to get away"
Grinlast looked surprised at the thought of the Muggle world being more advanced then the magical one "I see well I will see what I can do. The cost will most likely be around 100 thousand gallons since you want five years."
"Thank you, you can take the amount out of my vault"
"Now in regards to your shopping I will try to get everything in needed in order for this to happen and work while you are out is there anything else that you will need?"
Adriane thought for a moment " Actually yes is there any way for me to get money without needing to go to my vault's every time?"
"In fact, there is give me a moment I will be right back." Grinlast hoped off of his chair and left the room, a few minutes later he came back in carrying a dragon scaled pouch.
Getting back in their chair they spoke "This right here is a wallet we only give to high priority customers, you can tell it the exact amount of money you want in any currency Muggle or Magical and it will give it to you. You need to put a drop of blood on it to key it to you so only you and you alone can use it."
Adriane Looked at the pouch with a touch of surprise "How much will it cost?"
"About 500 Gallons."
"Really. I'll take it please, can you take the amount out of my vault when you take the cost for the time chamber out"
Grinlast gave a chuckle "Yes we can"
Walking out of the bank Adriane Looked around with a smile it was a new decade of her life.
Next chapter is Adriane's shopping trip tell me if you liked it in a review.
