Chapter 8: Catching Up Part 1
Hola amigos. This will be different than the normal chapters so please stick with me here. There is a viewer that has no name that has given me a fully thought criticism of my story. I've always asked for stuff like this and I am so happy with it. Now in response to your comment I would like to comment on your comments. Try saying that gives times fast.
1: Yep, I agree with this here. I've just always watched the Pokemon anime and I've always cringed when Ash battled. I've always thought of how I could of won that or how he should've actually do it. Apologies for making him too op and shit. I'm literally contradicting what I said in the prologue. Now I have thought out this team beforehand and all but I wanted to make a few of them interesting. BIGJAW has a lot more to him that will be coming. Night Wing (the shiny Charizard) was just something I've nerded out over for a while. I wanted to at least make it a bit more interesting on how he would be acquired and I ran through a bunch of scenarios. The way that he wanted Bronze to help him battle Salazzle seemed to be the most interesting. Trust me, I know it's op and all.
Now onto the whole edgelord and Hau thing. I kinda keep having that mentality from the games that he is easy to fight. For real, he's really easy to battle. Edgelord on the other hand I should've let him win in the Battle Royal. I just find it hard to let Bronze loose. I know it sounds weird and all but we all just hate losing in the games and I didn't realize I've been keeping that mentality. He will lose in the future though, I promise. I have tried to show that he can struggle in battle. BIGJAW was gonna lose that battle against Charizard. Bronze had to call in the Calvary so he could make sure BIGJAW would make it out in one piece. Bronze was even boxing Charizard at one point to buy BIGJAW time to escape. He got absolutely wrecked by the Charizard but he at least tried. Which will bring me to my next point.
2: Now, I do blame myself for this but I will cut myself some slack for this reason (I know, it sounds douchey as hell). Bronze, Hau, Lillie, and Gladion are all 15, not 11. I don't think you took into account that Bronze is 15. He's not going to be wide eyed and easily impressed by everything around him like Ash. He's a teenager and he obviously would have a different mentality if he were 11. I wanted to make him older because it would fit his character a bit more. An 11 year old who carries around a piece of wood and is overly violent just doesn't sound as believable. 15 seemed like a good compromise. Also, I feel like I made him seem somewhat interesting, though I'm nowhere near perfect at this shit and I know there is some major improvement that could be done. I've also made Bronze try to be a 'tough guy' which is the reason why he does things that would make a rational person think his mind was running on a potato. He carries around a stick and doesn't hesitate to box an eight foot dragon. Bronze is also nowhere near the average body type. I've based him off of me which is a 6 foot, overweight, 15 year old Mexican. I'm nowhere near as violent as him but I would get like this if someone was trying to break down my friends. Maybe I wouldn't be as extreme as Bronze but I would threaten them. He feels like Hau is a competitive younger brother. I assure you, when Bronze said he would knock Gladion's teeth out, he wasn't kidding. I couldn't stand when I saw this in game, I wanted to punch him when he trying to break down Hau. I know it doesn't really fit the Pokemon world too well but that's how I wanted him to be. I'm not saying I've written him perfect by any means but I think I've did ok with him. I appreciate it though and I'll try to take it into account. I do know though that the dialogue could be way better than it was in the last chapter.
3: Yeah, I've blown through the trials pretty quickly. I've just never found them too memorable. They seemed easy and dull. I had to think about how I wa gonna respond to this comment and yeah, I moved way too fast. I just kinda didn't realize since the games move quickly but I will start to slow down a bit. Though I think they move so fast because compared to my other stuff the chapters are way longer. Now I do have a story called Meet the Dad(#advertisement) that's based of one of my favorite games and a cool internet series. I have personalized the characters to an extreme so I have to build the world they are in to compensate for the cross over and to cater to how I have written them. I'll work on the pacing of this story a bit more but sometimes I just write WAY more than the chapter needs because it's genuinely fun to write when I'm in the mood.
Now about the trials. The first trial on Melemele was really memorable because it was the first trial we all did. It was just raw battling and a intermission from Team Skull. Now the Akala trials were all forgettable and tedious. Lana's was ok but Kiawe's was easy and Mallows, while humorous was just tedious. Charizard was added because I wanted a Charizard and I think it made the trial a bit more interesting and was a good way to introduce him. Yeah, it's still op as all hell but I will try to find a way to downplay this. Now with the main focus on Bronze. Once again, game play mentality. Now Bronze is the main character and all so I thought he should be the main focus. I will try to write out some chapters on the plans of Hau and Lillie and Gladion. Maybe I'll even get to Lusamine and Bronze's folks. I'll try to take this all into account when I write. Also, how are the personalities of Bronze's Pokemon? I've wanted to flush them out a bit more and I think I did a good job with Night Wing (Charizard) but I haven't touched upon Luna (Umbreon), White Fang (Rockruff), and Bruho (Mudbray). BIGJAW will have a lot more about him in time.
4: Yeah, I knew made the dialogue there just way too simple. I focused a lot on Charizard this chapter I kinda just cut to the chase. I found Kiawe extremely boring in the games. I also wrote this late, like really late at night. Once again, Akala had boring trials so I kinda wanted them to end quickly. I'll try to take my time with dialogue from now on. I howl it wasn't all like that, and if it's was then I apologize. I never said I was a good writer.
5: Please make a name for yourself so we can discuss this a bit further. I'm more than happy to discuss my story with you. I can't really talk to Guests without making a new chapter. This is really into a problem if a Guest like you act silly gives out really well thought out criticisms. It seems that you should make an account so the writer can further talk to you about it and how to improve the story. That's just my pet peeve. Thanks for putting time into this. You obviously thought it out well.
These events are taking place during Bronze's second trial if you were wondering.
Panolia Ranch
"Use Razor Leaf", Hau commanded. Datrix flew up into the air and unleashed a wave of sharp leaves. The opposing Riolu ran with ninja like speed speed across the battle fired. He dodged the leaves and jumped into the air.
"Riolu, use force Palm", the opposing trainer said. The jackal ran to a rock and jumped off it. The then ready a punch and hit Datrix in his torso. Datrix fell to the ground and the impact was hard.
"Are you ok, Datrix", Hau asked. Datrix got up and shook the dust of its feather. Hau jumped up and said, "Alright, we're still on a roll".
"Riolu, use Return", Hau's opponent said. The Riolu charged at Datrix.
"Dodged it", Hau said. Datrix flew out of the way. "No finish it off with Razor Leaf". Datrix unleashed a wave of leaves. Riolu tried to run but the leaves had already caught up with him. The sharp leaves hit the jackal multiple times. Riolu then took a knee and shook in pain.
"Come on Riolu, you can do it", his trainer said. The poor jackal tried to stand but it was in too much pain. Riolu then fell forward and fainted. "Oh no".
"Yeah boy! You were awesome out there, Datrix", Hau said as he hugged his starter Pokemon. Datrix then let out a cheerful hoot. Hau looked up and saw the trainer he had just battled looked down. He hung his head low and returned Riolu to its Pokeball. The kid looked like he was ten years old so it was only natural for him to be a bit down after a loss. Hau walked up to him and said, "Hey, turn that frown upside down". Hau gave him a smile to show he was being a good sport.
"That's easy for you to say. You were the one that won", the kid said
Hau stopped smiling and thought of what to say. "Do you have a rival", he asked. The kid shook his head no. "Well I have one and he's a really tough trainer", Hau said. "We can't seem to beat him though". "But that never stops me from trying. Being a trainer isn't all about winning, it's also about making friends with the pokemon and people you meet".
His opponent then looked up at him and turned his frown upside down. "Thank you", he said. "I hope I get to be a strong trainer like you". He then walked off and said Alola
"Enjoy your adventure while it lasts", Hau said. He then looked down to Datrix and asked, "You ready for the trial". Datrix had already fallen asleep again. "Can't you just stay awake for once", Hau sighed as he returned the owl to its pokeball.
The heir to the Kahuna throne walked through Paniola Ranch. He then turned to see fencing of the nearby daycare. He ran up to the fence to see a Eevee chasing around a Pichu while a Lillipup was curled up in a ball, fast asleep. He then pulled out his pokeballs and unleashed his Eevee and Pikachu. The two saw their fellow brethren and ran up to the fence. The Picu ran up to the fence to meet Hau's Pikachu. The two exchanged greetings by having electrical currents form between their cheeks. Hau's Eevee and the other Eevee just started to nuzzle their heads together.
"Hey you two! Y'all better come back or else you're gonna miss nap time", one of the daycare workers said. The Pichu and Eevee said their goodbyes and ran back the worker. "I hope these two weren't causing you any trouble.
"Naw, they were just being adorable", Hau said with his arms crossed behind his head. "Alright you two, time to get back in your balls", he said as he returned the rat and fox to their capsules. "Alola", Hau said as he walked off.
Hau got a bit less cheery as he saw the sign that said Route 5. He looked at the sign with anger his eyes and started to have a flashback.
Hau had his care free attitude to block out Gladion's whole speech. He tried not to let it bother him but these were very hurtful comments. "You can enjoy Pokemon battling when you put everything you have into it… which clearly you have not". These words were like being shocked by an Electabuzz. Hau thought he was doing just fine with his adventure but this was making him think back on his choices he had made. He was taking losing like it was a normal circumstance.
"Sure, it's fine to enjoy battling… but this brat... he's just using that as an excuse not to try hard because he can't beat the kahuna when he's serious". Hau remembered how this comment really hurt him. It made him look back to when his grandpa would pass. How was he gonna be a kahuna if he couldn't beat a random edgelord in a simple battle.
Hau snapped out of his flashback of the edgelord heckling him. He took a deep breath and continued onward. Hau saw the trial grounds were close by and ran to it in excitement. Hau went through the opening. He saw a girl with blue hair walking up some steps and he just thought she had to be the trial captain. "WAIT", Hau yelled as he sprinted towards her. Lana turned around and jumped from seeing a boy moving so quickly towards her. Hau was about to stop when he tripped over a rock and fell flat on his face.
"Are you okay", Lana said in concern as she went to help Hau up. The boy then picked himself up quickly and rubbed his face.
"Y-yeah… I'm fine", Hau said weakly as he tried to hold in a yelp of pain. He then shook himself off. Hau looked at the girl and asked, "Are you the trial captain".
"Yes, yes I am", she said. "My name is Lana and if you couldn't tell, I specialize in Water-Types Pokemon.
"Oh really, then this shouldn't be too hard on Datrix and Pikachu", Hau said. "Let's do this", Hau said as he ran ahead of Lana. She just watched him run and stayed by her spot.
A few minutes had passed and she had already set up a fishing poll by the docks. She then heard the panting of a tired Hau as he walked forward. He sat down and said, "I should've let you lead".
"Yes you should of", Lana said as her m pole started shaking. She then started to reel in her string and she saw that it was a Magikarp on the then end of it. She then threw it on the land and it started to flop around. "Can you help me by holding it down", she asked. Hau ran to her side and pushed down the fish. Lana forced the fish's mouth open and took out her lure. "You can let go of it now".
Hau didn't listen though and picked up the fish that flopped around in his arms. He carried it to the water and said, "Alright, go back home to your friends and family", Hau said with a smile. The fish then jumped out of his arms and slapped him with its tail multiple times. It then landed in the water with a splash and swam deep into the crystal clear water. Hau then fell on his behind and started laughing. Lana even giggled at the hysterical event.
"Let us begin your trial", Lana said as she walked deeper into the tall grass.
"Hey, wait up", Hau said as he scrambled to her. The two walked through the damp grass. This was one of those time he wished he wore those thick hiker boots Bronze has. He squished into the ground each time he took a step and the cold water would start to bother his feet. "So, you mind giving me a bit of insight to what this whole trial is gonna be", Hau asked. "Pretty please with extra Malasada filling".
"Your trial will be herding Pokemon", Lana said. "I will be testing your persistence here".
"Wait herding", Hau asked. "I'm not exactly built for herding pokemon. I tried to rope up some Tauros on my friend's ranch and it didn't end well", Hau said with his hand behind his head.
"Don't worry, it's not what you think", Lana said. The two then made it through the damp tall grass to see another body of crystal clear water.
"Wow, now that's a sight for sore eyes", Hau said as he admired the scenery.
"Yes, it is quite beautiful. Now, your trial starts here", Lana said. "I need you to get to that whirlpool over there". Lana pointed to the whirlpool.
"But I don't have any water Pokemon", Hau said. Lana was about to offer him something to aid him when Hau had a brain blast. "Go, Datrix", Hau said as he unleashed the owl. The owl materialized and was once again sleeping. Hau then shook it awake and said, "Now is no time for sleeping, Datrix. I need you to swim to the whirlpool over there". Datrix turned its head fully around to see the whirlpool. Datrix then pictured it was a certain Croconaw in the water. Datrix was wide awake at that thought and flew up into the air. "Alright, now we're cooking", Hau said with enthusiasm. "Use Razor Leaf to get that thing moving", Hau said. Datrix then angrily unleashed a wave of sharp leaves into the water.
The whirlpool then stopped swirling. Datrix was confused on what had happened but then didn't care as he was hit in the back of his head. An angry Wishiwashi was floating at the top of the water. "Datrix, use Razor Leaf", Hau yelled. The owl let out another wave of leaves butt he fish dived into the water. The fish was safe thanks to the water lowering the velocities of the light weight projectiles.
Datrix was still in the air waiting for the fish to pop up. It then felt a wet, cold, body hit the back of its head. It turned and saw that Wishiwashi was still angry. "Again, Razor Leaf", Hau said. The fish just swam back down into the water. Datrix then used the vegan attack only to see some of his leaves float up. The fish then lunged itself and hit Datrix in the back of his head, once a again. The owl was starting to get annoyed and flew back to Hau. Hau then knew he had to think of another plan of attack.
"That Wishiwashi is really fast in the water but can only attack if it exposes itself", Hau thought to himself. "Well, I got something that can deal with this", Hau thought to himself as his Datrix was looking at him, confused because his pokemon trainer wasn't giving commands. Hau then pulled out another pokeball and unleashed another pokemon. Pikachu then materialized out of the ball. "Alright Pikachu, use Thundershock on the water", Hau said. Pikachu then looked at Hau and looked at the water. It charged up it's cheeks with electrical crackles and shocked the water.
The whole body of water started to flash yellow for a few seconds. Pikachu kept shocking the water till it dropped. It then shocked itself and fell on the ground. It was breathing deeply and it cheeks crackled with electricity. Hau then kneeled down and dug through his bag quickly. He pulled out a Oran berry that he took from Bronze's place and force fed it to his little rat. The Pikachu then jumped up and had it's cheeks crackle as it was feeling a whole lot better. "Aue, I'm so glad you're okay", Hau said. "Now, back in the ball", Hau said as he pulled out Pikachu's pokeball and returned it to it's capsule. Hau then looked at the water to see Wishiwashi floating up on its side, fainted. "Pikachu has more power than I thought", Hau said to himself.
"Excellent Job. I would of prefered another way than shocking all the water but it worked", Lana said.
"Yeah, but it was still pretty awesome", Hau said with a smile.
"Well, there is no sense in keeping the ball from moving forward", Lana said as she walked along the path. Hau and Datrix quickly followed. The three walked down the path in silence. Hau was appreciating the beautiful scenery of the trial sight, the lush green vegetation, the crystal clear water, and the happy pokemon swimming around in the water, almost at the speed sound. Wait, what?
"Woah, those pokemon are swimming faster than the Professor's junkheap of a ship", Hau said hysterically. Datrix rolled his eyes as he walked forward.
The three kept walking and as they walked by a waterfall Lana said, "Did you know that I met Kyogre here in this very spot". Lana was thinking about trollish thoughts in her head.
"Hah, nice folk tale. I know people who have actually met the Tapu in person", Hau said with a laugh.
Lana puffed her cheeks and said in an annoyed tone, "Trainer's these days… why can't they be more fun to mess around with". The three then walked in silence as they walked to the next body of water. They made it another part of the river and found a whirlpool once again. "Now, would you like to use a Lapras so you may go through your trial with much more ease", Lana asked.
Ha turned around and said, "Nah", in his carefree manner. "Datrix, use Razor Leaf on the water", Hau said. Datrix flew up in the air and unleashed a wave of leaves. The vegetation hit the water hard. Datrix then flew to the ground and started to groom itself. Hau then saw water start to splash. The water then bursted upwards and landed a pokemon that looked like a water spider. It landed on a nearby rock and looked pissed. "Woah", Hau said. "Alright Datrix, let's start this off with Razor Leaf", Hau said. Datrix unleashed a wave of sharp leaves from its wings. The spider used bubble but the bubbles were popped by the sharp leaves and hit the spider full force. The Spider was knocked into the water but then swam at an incredibly fast speed and used Bug Bite on the owl. The Spider took extremely small but rapid bites of the owls wings. The Owl was knocked out of the air and landed on the sandy beach. Datrix struggled to get up and shook the sand off himself. "Shoot, Bug types are good against Grass. I should use a Flying type move", Hau thought to himself. "Alright Datrix, use Peck", Hau said. The owl then flew up and charged. It then pecked the Dewpider and it got knocked into the water once more.
"Alright, that was pretty good", Hau said. Datrix looked at it's trainer with satisfaction. The spider then jumped out of the water and tried to lunge itself to the owl midair. "We got 'em where we want 'em. Datrix, use Razor Leaf", Hau said. The Owl used the move but then the Dewpider used Mirror Coat and the leaves bounced off it like a ricochet The owl few up and maneuvered around the leaves and used Pursuit. The Dewpider dodged and used Bubble. It had little effect on Datrix though. "Finish this off with a good Peck", Hau said. Datrix charged and hit the Dewpider in in the head. The Spider was then knocked into a rock and fell flat on its face. The Dewpider fainted and Datrix flew through the air and flew in circles. "Alright, that was awesome", Hau said as he jumped. Datrix then flew to the ground and groomed its wings.
Hau ran over to his buddy and was congratulating him. Lana then said, "A beautiful performance". "Let us proceed", she said. "We shouldn't keep your trial waiting".
"Alright. Let's go, Datrix", Hau said. He walked a few steps forward and saw that Datrix was not next to him. He then turned around and saw that Datrix was asleep. "Aww, come on", Hau sighed as he went over to his pokemon and picked it up. Datrix's eyes shot open but saw it was only Hau. "The sooner we finish my trial, the sooner you can go back to sleep", Hau said. Datrix then flew up and landed on Hau's shoulder. "Hah, I knew I'd grow on you", Hau said. Datrix then brushed it's leaf, hair thing and hooed in response.
The two then proceeded onward behind Lana. They were getting deeper and deeper into the tall grass. The grass was getting high though and it went up to Hau's hair. He was barely able to make out what was in front of him. "Ah, there it is", Lana said. She ran ahead, not being slowed down by the mush they were clamming ground.
"Hey, wait up", Hau said ashe ran forward, or well trudged forward. The musty ground was not as easy to walk on as solid ground. Hau said to his Datrix, "Go look for Lana". Datrix flew up and soared through the air. He then saw the blue haired girl was just up ahead. Datrix was about to fly down to Hau but he had something else in mind right now.
Lana was sitting in the sandy beach, looking at the water falls. She breathed in deeply and exhaled. She was enjoying this peace very much. No trainers barking order to their Pokemon, no fighting, no awarding Z-Crystals, just the rush of the water falls and sounds of Pokemon. Everything seemed all well and good but that didn't last for long. Datrix flew down to Lana and landed on her head. She looked up and said, "Well hello again, where is your trainer", She asked. The owl then started pecking her head angirly. "Hey! Oww! STOP IT", she yelled. Datrix then finished pecking and flew back up into the air. Must of been pissed that she left them in the mush and tall grass.
Hau was trading forward but was going slower and slower. Every step he took seemed like he sinking deeper into the loose mud below. He then heard flapping and saw Datrix Descend from the sky. He then pointed his wing forward to show Hau where to go. "Great job… now can you help me out here, I'm kinda stuck", Hau said awkwardly as Datrix saw that his legs were engulfed by the mush below. Datrix sighed and grabbed Hau's bag with its talons. He then hoisted him up and hovered him a bit over the ground.
A bit of painful flying later
Hau and Datrix fell onto the white sand of the beach. Datrix just layed on the sand in exhaustion and Hau was face down on the beach. He was covered in mud and sand. "Oh dear, are you alright", Lana said as she rushed to his side.
Hau then slumped up and said, "Yeah cough I just need to violently gags wash off". He then trudged over to the water and fell in. Lana was dead panned as she didn't know why she had just seen. After a few seconds in the water Hau swam up and breathes deeply. "Oh man, that's so much better", Hau said as he splashed into the water. "This water is so pure, it even got into the hard to reach spots", Hau said hysterically.
"Well, I suppose there's no use in asking if he wants to use Lapras", Lana said to herself. Hau was swimming around in the water, having a gay old time. Gay means happy so don't get triggered.
Hau kept swimming in the crystal clear water until he saw something. It was a miniature whirlpool that didn't even pull him in. "Hey Datrix. I think if found the next trial Pokemon", Hau said. Lana then cracked a smirk as she knew what was about to happen. Datrix flew over to Hau and was confused by the pathetic excuse of a whirlpool. "This one's kinda wimpy", Hau said. He was about to be in for a surprise when he saw the whirlpool had just disappeared.
Datrix flew up and saw that fish were swimming faster and faster into one spot. Datrix started to hoo and Hau turned and asked, "What's wrong, buddy". Then he saw what was wrong in the form of a dark figure in the water. The creature then jumped out of the water and was revealed. It was the same angry, Finding Nemo fish before. Datrix flew away and Hau swam for his life. The fish landed with a fish gigantic splash and roared. Hau and Datrix went wide eyed as they saw they saw Fishzilla. Yep, that's what I'm calling it now.
"Aue, that's a big Pokemon", Hau said with fea run his voice. Fishzilla roared and swam towards him. "Use Razor Leaf", Hau said. Datrix unleashed a wave of leaves that were heading straight for Fishzilla. Fishzilla dived under the water and avoided the leaves. "We should get back in land", Hau said as he swam to the beach. He got closer and closer but the saw Fishzilla rise its head up. It then roared and it's aura flashed to life. "Datrix", Hau yelled in fear. He was almost shitting his shorts over the fearsome Fishzilla. Datrix sent a wave of Sha leaves flying and hit the totem Pokemon in the face. The leaves started to rupture the colors of the fish. Hau then quickly swam up to land and took a breather.
He turned back and saw Fishzilla was pissed. He then looked to Datrix and said, "Thank the Tapu". Hau was trying think of how to tackle this. Totem Pokemon can the strategized against since they come out randomly and he won't even know what kind of Pokemon they are. Hau did notice something though. He saw that the Razor leaf seemed to hurt but also mess with the colors of the totem Pokemon. He didn't know what that meant but he does know that it's defenses' aren't as boosted as the Totem Gumshoos.
"Hit with another Razor Leaf", Hau said. Datrix used the grass attack but Fishzilla toughed it out and tackled the owl. Fishzilla landed on the beach and its impact caused a cloud of dust to appear. Hau covered his eyes and waited for the dust to settle. He uncovered his eyes and saw Datrix was a few inches in the sand. "Hang on, I'm coming", Hau said as he went over to his starter. He dug through his bag and pulled out a super potion. He was about to spray it when Fishzilla jumped out of the water. Hau quickly sent out Pikachu and said, "Thundershock". Pikachu's cheeks crackled with electricity but as it launched it's electric attack it also shocked itself. The totem pokemon's colors were rupturing like crazy, from light to dark blue every two seconds. Fishzilla roared in pain and dove underwater.
Hau then ssaw Pikachu was about to faint but he scrambled near it and caught him. He cradled Pikachu and said, "What is that about". He then set his rat down, gently, and pulled out his pokedex. He was gonna have to make the quick because Fishzilla is probably pissed about retreating because of an electric rat. He looked at his Pikachu's moves and saw the problem. He was calling out a move Pikachu didn't know anymore. He saw Thundershock was long ago replaced by Discharge and he didn't even know it. Pikachu may have been shocking itself because it's been holding in so much go its electricity trying to perform Thundershock over Discharge that it shocked itself.
"Oh, well that's just meow power for us", Hau said, now knowing the answer to his problem. "Alright Pikachu, you ready to help", Hau asked. Pikachu nodded and had electricity crackle in its cheeks. Hau then heard a groan from his owl and quickly sprayed him with a super potion. After the recovery, Hau, Datrix, and Pikachu were ready for some more action.
Fishzilla jumped out of the water and roared. It blasted water out of its mouth. "Dodge", Hau commanded. The rat and owl jumped out of the way of the giant fish. "Razor Leaf! Discharge", Hau said. The owl and rat combined their attacks to form a bean of leaves and electricity. Both attacks hit Fishzilla hard and it started roaring in pain. "Alright, Quick Attack, Pursuit", Hau commanded. Datrix and Pikachu both ran at the giant fish as it tried to recover from the elemental attacks. The hit right through it and landed on the sand. They opened their eyes to see a bunch of Wishiwashi were flopping on the sand. The two saw that the beast had a huge hole where they hit. Hau was so confuzzled by this but he knew he should take advantage of it. The fish tried to body slam Hau but the boy jumped out of the way and ran to his pokemon.
"Alright guys, his defenses are weak and he's pretty damaged. Let's finish this", Hau said. Datrix and Pikachu jumped in front of him and got ready to attack. "Alright Datrix use Razor Leaf and Pikachu use Discharge", Hau said. Pikachu's cheeks started to crackle with electricity and Datrix charged up its wings. The two then launched their attacks at the weakened Fishzilla. The fishes eyes went wide as it saw the electrical and vegan attack coming right for it. The shocks from Discharge made its colors flash quickly. Fishzilla roared in pain as Razor Leaf swiped at it.
Hau and his pokemon were tense as they watched the totem pokemon writhe in pain. The fish gave off one final roar of pain and it started to deteriorate. The fish was shrinking, and shrinking, and shrinking till it stopped. A small Wishiwashi then laid eyes on it's opponents. Pikachu and Datrix looked in confusion and Hau looked like he was about to give another command. As the fish saw Pikachu charge up it's attack he knew, he fucked up. The fish then flopped on the beach and into the water. It then swam deep into the crystal clear river and shook in fear.
"Ha, that Wishiwashi is such a fraidy cat", Hau said hysterically.
Lana then walked up to him and said, "You battle magnificently". "You defeated my Wishiwashi with such ease. That is no easy feat", she continued. "Please, take this Waterium-Z, I'm sure you'll use it wisely", she said as she took out a sparkling Z-Crystal.
Hau happily took it from her and said, "Alright". Hau then turned to his two partners and said, "You guys were awesome out there". Pikachu ran to Hau and nuzzled it's head against his leg. Datrix was asleep, as per usual. "Thanks for the Z-Crystal", Hau said as he was about to leave.
"Wait, I haven't even shown you the dance yet", Lana said. Hau then turned and witnessed the Waterium dance. It just looks like a Hula dance to me. After Lana had finished she said to him, "I don't normally do this for every trial goer but I was very impressed by you and your pokemon". Lana then took out a fishing rod and said, "Here you go, one of my handcrafted fishing rods. I hope you catch a water type with it".
Hau then looked at the rod and said, "I really appreciate it". "This is gonna make Bronze so jealous", he said. He was already thinking about how Bronze would of been pissed that he did not receive a Lana handcrafted fishing rod.
"Oh… you are a friend of Bronze", Lana said. "He's a… interesting fellow".
"Aw come on, sure he acts meaner than a Tauros but he's a loyal friend", Hau said. He thought back to how Bronze looked like he was about to throw down from hearing Gladion spewing insults at him. Hau also remembered he turned around to see Bronze grabbing Gladion by his shirt. He thought Bronze was trying to threaten him, which shouldn't have surprised him by now. "Anyways, thanks for the fishing rod", HAu said as he ran off with his pokemon but not before saying Alola.
Some time later…
A Magikarp was pulled out of the water, it had its mouth on a string as it was pulled. It then landed on the ground and started flopping around everywhere. Hau smiled and said, "Time to grow my team". He pulled out a pokeball and threw it at the pathetic fish. Since Magikarp were naturally weak he thought he wouldn't need more than a standard pokeball. He was mistaken as it didn't take but one shake until the Magikarp busted out of the ball. Datrix was right next to him but wasn't in a battle ready stance. "Alright Datrix, use Razor Leaf", Hau said. Datrix was just laughing, hard. He couldn't believe he was being chosen to battle a Magikarp, one of the most pathetic pokemon to ever be conceived.
The fish had anger in its eyes. It then jumped and tackled Datrix. It started to slap it with its tail. Datrix tried to swipe at it with it's wings but it's tough scales blocked the blows. "Datrix, use Razor Leaf", Hau said in an annoyed tone. He had his chance to properly battle but noooo he had to laugh because his opponent was a Magikarp. Datrix then unleashed sharp leaves from its wings and hit the fish full force. As the fish was launched into the air Hau took his chance. He then took out another pokeball and threw it in the air. The ball hit the Magikarp and opened up, unleashed red energy that would catch the fish. The ball then landed on the ground. It wiggled three times and then finally stayed still.
Hau then went up to his pokemon and said, "Welcome to the team". Hau then grabbed Datrix and walked off.
Royal Avenue
Hau and Datrix made it to where they thought was close to their next trial. He walked in the town and smelled the spiciness of those Malasada that made him go mad. Hau and Datrix walked into town and saw a certain cowboy hat wearing Mexican and his Johto starter pokemon walking to the Pokemon center. He smirked and said, "Alola". The cowboy turned his head to see Hau who was spinning a pokeball on his hand. He walked into the pokemon center but knew he would be sending someone to it right after.
Well, here ya go. The first chapter of this fic that doesn't completely focus on that cowboy wearing oaf. I hope you guys liked it. Next chapter will have something different than from the other chapters. Sorry that it's a bit short but I but I will be writing another Hau focused chapter. That's all for now and I'll see ya next time, adios.
Response to Reviews:
To that one random guest: Thank you for the constructive criticism. I really appreciate how you sounded like you actually put time and effort into writing your review. By the way if you don't make a name for yourself, I will. How do you feel about Robert?
