Hey guys, I just wanted to give you a quick update on the current state of the story. Chapter ten is nearly complete, but I've decided to put it on hold for just a short while to re-visit chapter nine. I know a lot of you enjoyed it, but personally, I'm not satisfied with how it turned out. I realized in the middle of writing a certain scene in chapter ten that, after everything that had happened, having the characters sit down and talk about their feelings was a bit... anticlimactic. Or, I should say, it happened sooner than it was supposed to. In my Creative Writing classes, I've learned two things: one is that I use too many adverbs, and second is that it's always important to show rather than tell.
When I look at chapter nine (the parts where Edna is talking to Lilli, I mean), it feels more like a character essay. I get what I was intending to do- have Edna finally get everything off her chest and make a resolution to be a better person. But to be honest, it just doesn't feel like a satisfying conclusion to either of the girls' arcs, Lilli's especially. I recently read the Edna and Harvey comic book by Poki and Irina Zinner from 2015, and it reminded me that the series likes to show it's drama through ACTION more than words. There will be a time for when the characters need to take a breath, but not when there are still stakes at hand.
Come to think of it, I'd like to re-write a LOT of the story... but maybe in the future. For now, I need to get the first draft done before even considering the final product.
So overall, thank you all for sticking around and being patient with me. I apologize that you'll have to wait again, but I promise that this time it's not going to take over a year to complete.