The Reason
Tori: Hello, it has come to my attention that the number of reviews drop every time I post. I feel real bad that for all the people who have read this only a few(some more than once which I am really grateful for thank you) have taken the time to actually leave a comment. Even if it is for criticism I would not mind, if would mean that someone took the effort to tell an aspiring writer that their work is good/crappy/something only a deranged person could understand/tear jerker/ect… Now I know there are people who will not even deem it worth while to read this. But I feel real bad not posting and sounding like a nag or something. I just feel if people want more out of me, they should say. Now I will give a sort of spoiler so that this rant is not totally worthless, but I have decided that I will not post the next chapter until I get five reviews. That is not asking for a lot is it? I hope this teaser is enough to get people to review more…
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Hao smiled at his sleeping brother. It was a long day for the both of them. The Asakuras had the audacity to send some horrible little girl claiming to be Yoh's fiancé. The situation seemed fine, until she slapped him. Something….happened to Yoh… It was like he was a completely different person. Now Hao knew Yoh had an affinity for controlling water more then the other elements. What he saw happen though was not what he was expecting.
In the instant that she had slapped him, he had grabbed her wrist. Of course Hao remembered their conversation years ago about how if Yoh tried he could suck the water right out of someone. Until that moment the elder twin had never seen it done.
The girl's hand turned shriveled and dry when he grabbed it. His eyes were like deep pools of hatred. Even the way he stood seemed imposing and threatening. Yoh had whispered something to her and she had run away, her hand returning to normal when he let go. When the younger brunette turned to face Hao he smiled a smile the older shaman hadn't seen in over a year.
"Aniki did you see? The water trick worked! Maybe that'll teach the Asakuras to quit bugging us for a while!"
It was just for a moment, but Hao felt the old Yoh starting to come out again underneath the memory block. Though after he had said that, he promptly fell backwards in a dead faint.
Tori: Now I hope this is enough of a teaser to get those reviews coming, I am on more often and am working on other projects again too. But I like this one, I cherish is and want people's opinions…is that so much to ask for?
