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I crouched down on my knees, my eyes shit tight as I shuddered at the pain on my shoulders. Trying to keep hold of something to help with the pain, I held s deathlike grip onto the grass below me and grinding my teeth together to stop myself from screaming out in pain. I could feel the red liquid pour down my arm, as the pain intensified. I barely took notice as someone began to carry me away towards the village. My vision became fuzzy and unclear as I started to lose consciousness.
'Your pathetic', a voice seethed. What? 'I never knew you could be so weak Kaname, pwah you disgust me.' My blood began to boil in fury. That's true, how can I faint at a time like this, when my life was just threatened, when I needed a chance to get home. Damn that Kagura, how dare she try and get the better of me. Whoever took me to this world, whatever they wanted I would not let them win! I finally found the urge to open my eyes.
"AAAHH," I gasped out, tearing my eyes open. I looked up to see the face of the monk from before hovering over me, as he carried me towards the village. I raised my head quickly, trying to get out of his arms. "Put me down, now! I can walk on my own, I'm no weakling!" I seethed pushing at his shoulders. He glanced at me with a serious look, and regarded me intently. I pushed even more on his shoulders. "I said get off now!" At that he relented putting me to my feet, but hovering his hands over my shoulders as if I were going to collapse again. HAA, fat chance at that happening.
I rose up, ignoring the pain on my shoulder and proceeded towards Kaede's hut without looking back once. I heard the others walking behind me in silence, which made sense as they seemed to expect me to break down from the attack. I said nothing at all, and merely went to Kaede's hut and sat down. She dropped her bowl and rushed towards me looking at my shoulders intently.
"My dear child, you are badly wounded, sit here, sit here I am going to apply some herbs to help the pain and then bandage the wound," she slurred, as she took out some smashing bowls and started to smash the leaves that she carried. Kagome entered the hut shortly afterwards and began to help.
After what seemed like hours, Kagome and Kaede were able to treat my wounds till I felt no pain at all. I thanked them heavily, thankful that that was all I had, and nothing worse. Slowly a girl in a pink kimono entered the hut accompanied by the monk from before, Inuyasha and a small child. I glared at the monk, wary of his approach.
"Kaname, these are our friends Sango, Miroku and Shippou. He little cat you see before you is called Kirara," Kagome said, introducing the new faces before me. They all regarded me intently, glancing quickly at my bandages. Inuyasha rolled his eyes, looking quite impatient by the stalling. I looked down to see a cute little cat looking at me with its wide eyes. Kirara walked towards me and set herself on my lap, catching me off guard. I smiled petting the adorable creature. How adorable, her fur is so soft!
"You wish to know what happened, right?" I asked, guessing from the looks that everyone was giving me. Sango approached me with a sad desperate look in her eye.
"Please tell me why was Kohaku there, what happened?" I sighed and began to retell the events that passed at the pond. The others soon explained to me that kohaku was Sango's brother, who had died but had been resurrected by Naraku to torture her. Naraku, according to them, was an evil demon who causes trouble and seeks the power of the sacred jewel shards.
"But what does this Naraku exactly want with me, is it this strange power that he desires?" I asked looking down at my hands. Kagome grabbed my wrist looking at me with concern. Inuyasha answered me after a long pause.
"Who knows what he is planning, but knowing him it can't be good. I think you should come with us. You seem to know how to fight and defend yourself and leaving you is would only satisfy Naraku. That lousy bastard probably wants to take your powers for himself." I froze staring at him in shock. My powers.
"What do you mean powers, are you saying that if I travel with you I might be able to learn how to control this power of mine?"
"Yes, it is best that you accompany us my lady," answered Miroku. I turned to his direction to see that he was getting up. "It is only natural that he would go after beauty and powerful woman such as yourself." Huh, what the hell is this weirdo babbling about, I thought. The monk lowered himself before me, grasping my hands in his and looking straight into my eyes. "My dear lady maybe, you might want to save yourself and bear my child you might have some happiness." What? This guy is joking obviously. I narrowed my eyes at him, glancing at the others to see their looks of exasperation pass through.
"Sure," I replied sarcastically, smacking him in the head. "Does that satisfy you, you creep," I said, annoyed. Sango took her hand and smacked him across the face. Wow, this guy really is an idiot. I shook my head and turn my head towards Inuyasha. "I will accompany you, when do we head out."