SUP PEOPLE! Im back ;3 and as I promised I made this chapter about 1600 words longer than the last chapter. So enjoy, rate and review, and goodbye!
Akio was currently on the ground panting as he was trying to unlock his "chakra", which was definitely harder that it looked in the scroll, it was like trying to hold your breath for an hour and having no consequences, it just wasn't seeming to be possible. "I'm never going to be able to do this...so how did he do it and become so known in his time?" He said as he looked up at a painted picture of Naruto Uzumaki. "Common Akio, you can do this." He said as he once again got into the position used to channel chakra throughout his body, expecting the same result as the past, what, 700 attempts? Ya that seems about right, but this time something else happened, he started to feel..warm, and safe. It felt like being hugged by a mother that loved you to much to let you go. 'Is this chakra...?' He thought as he silently looked at his hands, not seeing anything but feeling it (Chakra is not visible unless it is in a very large quantity for those of you who don't know what it is.) Akio continued to examine himself in confusion as to where this so called "Chakra" was, but he couldn't seem to see it no matter how hard he tried, he just knew it was there, so he decided to go on to the second exercise of chakra, he walked towards a scroll labeled "Basic Jutsu"
Meanwhile
Mane felt tired and bored, she was close to falling asleep, which if you know Mane, almost never happens. 'I wonder where Akio is...' she thought of her new friend as she looked at the door wondering whether or not to go outside and enjoy the sunshine, or stay in her bed and enjoy a nap. Choosing the first option she got up and walked to her door, opened it, and winced at the sudden light reaching her eyes. As her eyes settled from the sudden sunlight, she looked around and smiled tiredly before putting her shoes on and walking outside to take a walk. As she was about 15 minutes into her walk she stopped and sighed before heading back home "Nothing to do..."
Akio could now be found extremely exhausted and trying to stand back up before collapsing to the ground as he pushed himself to a wall breathing heavily "why...pant...did I decide...pant...to do this?!" He exclaimed quietly as he laid down on his side and fell asleep
Akio's dream world
"...where am I...?" He questioned himself as he looked around the room tiredly, it looked like an old building, red, and shaped like an upside down funnel. "It looks...boring yet extravagant, like someone important lived here." He took another look around the room before a staircase suddenly appeared in front of him. "This seems like a good idea, walk up the magical staircase that appears right in front of you, amazing plan" He said sarcastically, that was, until the room around him started to fall into nothingness. "...okay magic staircase it is." He said as he started up the staircase not wanting to be caught by whatever as seemingly eating up the floor, when he reached the top of the staircase he was now in a long hallway, and seeing that he didn't have much of a choice other than to run down the hall and into the door at the other side. As he started his sprint he noticed every step he took, the floor would vanish, making sure that there would be no way to get back down. As he reached his half way point the floor started to collapse altogether and he started jumping from piece to piece, being careful to pick the pieces that weren't falling down into the endless abyss below him. "Common almost there!" he yelled as he dived at the door, pushing it open and sprinting inside, only to see that the floor stopped falling at this point and just...stayed. "What the hell just happe-" he was cut off by a voice to his left, "Yo~ nice to meetcha Akio!" He turned to face the man that somehow knew his name "Who are y-" he stopped dead in his tracks as he now stared directly into the face of Naruto Uzumaki. "Y-your N-N-naruto Uzumaki!" He yelled as he stared at the man he idolized for being able to do everything he couldn't with ease (Jutsu, tree walking, and water walking) "thats right~ and your Akio, the suitor to my equipment, jutsu, and history, nice to meet you in person because now I'll be in your head until the day when you no longer need me." "...you're kidding right?" "ya you got me, I'm not leaving your head roomy~!" Akio just stared at the smiling face of Naruto in shock at his announcement, "So..you can see everything I see?" "Yep, not only that, but I can speak to you when you wake up, I just dragged you here cause it would be awkward to explain that there was now a voice in your head." Naruto said with a plain look on his face, "OH, don't use up to much chakra, you could die and then there goes my suitor." "WHAT?! WHY DIDN'T YOU TELL ME SOONER?!" "I enjoyed watching you blow yourself up while trying to use jutsu, by the way you're using too much chakra for these simple jutsu, try using less. It would work out better for you." "well...thanks for the tip I guess..." Akio stated as he began to wonder how to get out of here, "Take the door to your right if you wanna leave." "Oh thanks." Akio thanked Naruto for the tip and the directions of how to get out.
Real World
Akio awoke with a start as he jumped up and looked around 'I wonder if that was just some messed up dream...' '"Nope, It was real roomy'" 'wait you can read my thoughts...SHIT' Akio mentally swore to himself as he stood up and walked back over to the scroll that was currently lying on the ground. "Might as well use the tip he gave me." Akio said as he looked at the scroll for the substitution jutsu, he went through the hand signs trying to channel less chakra, and to his surprise, he found himself standing now outside the cave, as he walked back inside he saw a small rock on the ground and it took him a little bit to realize that he had successfully done a jutsu for the first time. "YES!" he yelled to himself as Naruto sweat dropped at the celebration for succeeding in such a low level jutsu. 'Idiot.' Naruto dead panned as he watched Akio celebrate in excitement, "Well sorry mister shinobi, I wasn't taught this right away!" Akio replied a little annoyed. Akio had finally decided to call it a day as he got up, walked over to his stuff, and left the cave towards his home. "I can't believe whats happened today..." Akio said a bit dumbfounded as he thought over everything that happened that day, he just couldn't believe it. First he became friends with Mane, then he found a headband, the he walked into a cave full of ninja tools, scrolls on chakra, and even magical powers called jutsu that were powered by said chakra. "OI AKIO!" Mane yelled from behind him, "What?" Akio said as he turned around to be pushed to the ground while she was on top of him "WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?! I'VE BEEN BORED ALL DAY LONG!" "Sorry, I told you I had detention but I got side tracked on the way home" Mane then pouted, she knew Akio would never give in to her arguments no matter how hard she tried to get him to speak. "humph" she said as she turned away from Akio in disappointment. 'I know what your doing' Akio thought as he sweat dropped at her childish behavior "Im not speaking about the day" he said annoyed now, "HAH SO IT WAS SOMETHING BAD!" "wait what?" the argument continued for a good 40 minuets until Akio finally decided to just start walking home while Mane continued the argument.
Akio, now at home, was done with his dinner, shower, and was now laying in his bed tiredly staring at the ceiling, "Hey Naruto...what ever happened to you and your friends?" Akio asked curiously, if he was such a good ninja and fighter, he should be able to protect them all, right? '...' "Well?" '...' "...you don't have to talk about it if you don't want to you know that right?" '...I know, it was just a time that I would rather not talk about...' Naruto thought to Akio as he began to remember what had happened to the ninja world and why it had so suddenly vanished away from life, there where no signs or survivors to tell the tale either so...what had happened to make them all vanish from existence? What was powerful enough to kill them when they could form mountains and defy logic? Who knew, but Akio decided not to press any further as he asked a different question that had come to mind, "Hey Naruto?" 'Hmm?' "What was your life like?" Naruto had inwardly grinned 'Well, my life was unfair to begin with, people called me a demon for something that, no matter how hard I tried, I couldn't change.' "Then why did you try so hard?" 'Because I wanted to change that, I wanted to prove to them that I was no demon in hiding and that I was just a person like everyone else. But their Ideals stood strong without fail for so long, at some point I considered giving up.' Naruto thought, as Akio was about to ask another question Naruto continued 'But every time I was about to, new people who loved me for who I was kept entering my life, they saved me from myself before I could do any harm to myself, they where the reason I kept on going, their names where, Iruka, Saindame, Asuma, Kakashi, Sakura, Sasuke, Lee, Guy, Neji, Tenten, Gaara, Kankuro, Hinata, Ino, Kiba, Choji, Shikamaru, Tsunade, Jiraya,' Akio stopped listening to the names at that point and decided to try and doze off before he went on again, Naruto sighed as he knew that Akio was going to sleep, but as he decided to go to sleep he asked into the world, nobody in particular as he drifted off into sleep. Naruto on the other hand had stopped and started to ask himself, 'what if there are more like him, what if everyone else got a suitor before me? What if...Im not the only one...?' Naruto sighed as he fell asleep, or at least drifted off as much as a being of thoughts could without dispersing.
WELL THERE YOU GO, 2000 words~
Dulemina - Intriguing. Some spelling mistakes and the sentence structure is very hard to read. I suggest fixing it up, since it is quite annoying. Anyway your idea is awesome and I hope you can continue with it while making it more interesting and full of depth. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Thanks for the criticism and support I do try to be unique in my writing but if more people have trouble with reading my stories I'll try to fi it just Review and put it down, its helpful to me, anyways I'll try my best in the future and might go back to fix it once I really get into this.
UNTIL NEXT TIME, BYE GUYS!