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The writing style in this is a tad repetitive for reasons that are obvious.
Class Task Year 4 - Write about a special day. Use a word list or a spell checker.
My Special Day by Jimmy Burns
My special day was last week. My childminder collected me from school as usual. We were going to buy some sweets when my Daddy met us. My minder was surprised but I heard Daddy tell her that as he'd finished early today he thought he'd take me to play in the park before we went home. Then Daddy and me got into a car. Daddy said it was a police car but it didn't look like one. I wanted him to put on the blue light and make the nah nah noise but Daddy said it was an unmarked police car and they need to be quiet. That's so the criminals don't get a warning that he's about to catch them. As a treat he let me sit in the front. I pretended to be a policeman as we drove through the city to a carpark in a strange place. We stopped and got out. No one was there except for a lady standing beside another car that was big and black. Daddy waved to her and then told me that he needed me to be a big boy and help him. He wanted me to continue pretending to be a policeman if I did it well he'd buy me some Star Wars Lego. I asked if he'd get me an even bigger set than Kieran's and he said yes. Then the lady came over to us and asked Daddy if he was okay with the plan. Daddy just nodded and then said to me that the lady was going to play the game of pretend with me. The rule was that I had to go with her and make believe that she was my Mummy. He'd be walking around watching to make sure I did it good and I had to pretend I didn't know him. I had to do what the lady told me. I said was it okay to lie because Mummy tells me off when she catches me doing it and Daddy said just this once. The lady said thanks to Daddy and then gave me a sweet.
When she held out her hand I took it and we walked together down a lane to the playground that was in the middle of lots of trees. That was easy. She was prettier than Mummy no lines around her eyes and she smelt nice as well. She was not dead old like Mummy or Daddy. When we got to the playground the lady told me to go and play so I did. While she went and sat with another lady. The playground was full of swinging ropes and wobbly bridges and wood chips that got into my shoes. I was wondering what to play on the bridges or the climbing things when a boy who was already playing there bumped into me and we both fell over. When we both got up he asked me if I was with my Mummy. I said yes and then he pointed to the other lady who was talking to my pretend Mummy and said she was his Mummy. He was called Luke and I told him my name. Then we played at being pirates, he was the pirate king and I was a brave prince, for a long time while they talked. Daddy says women always talk forever about nothing. I saw Daddy walk past us but remembered what he'd said so I didn't say hello to him. We seemed to have been in the playground for a long time and I was getting bored with playing pirates when the two mummies got up and called to us. We all walked up a path when my lady's phone went off and she answered it. I didn't understand all the words but suddenly me and Luke were being pulled up the path and squashed into a strange car and Luke's Mummy drove very fast to the hospital. Then we all got out and went into the building. I didn't want to go in as the hospital smelt funny and the last time I went there a doctor stuck needles into me. Then I thought about the Lego and went with them. The mummies seemed to know were we were going. We passed lots of signs with funny names on them all ending with ology until we suddenly stopped at a swinging door. My lady, Luke and his Mummy went in. I was going to go with them but then Daddy turned up. He took my hand and said I'd been a good boy but could I sit and wait for a few minutes and here was some chocolate. So I went into a room which had nothing in it except some chairs lots of dull posters and a table with a magazine called Hello that was full of smiling people in big houses. I was there for ages when Daddy came for me said it was time we went home. I asked if I could say bye to Luke but Daddy said he and his Mummy had already left. I saw my lady talking to a very tall man I hadn't seen before. She looked angry but when I waved to her she smiled and said Good boy Jimmy.
Before we went home I asked Daddy about my Lego so we went to the toyshop first. I asked Daddy on the way if I'd been okay, Daddy said I'd been very good and helped the police a lot. When we got home Mummy wanted to know where the Hell we had been and why my school uniform was so dirty. I showed Mummy what we'd bought and told her what I'd done and that it had been dead exciting. She got cross with Daddy and shouted a lot more using some very naughty words. I tried to help Daddy. I pulled on her sleeve and told her it was okay and I wanted to be like Daddy when I grew up, and then she got even crosser. Then Daddy said something about a little girl called Sarah and Mummy went quiet. Then she began to cry. Her face went all red and wet, she didn't look very pretty but Daddy just his arms round her and said something in her ear. Then she sniffed and said don't do it again. She's always saying that to me as well.
That was my special day. I helped Daddy and got my Lego as a reward. Kieran was dead jealous the next day when I told him what I'd got. Daddy said I wasn't to tell anyone about what we did but I'm writing it so that doesn't count.
Teacher's note to Headmistress: Should we notify Social Services about this, Jimmy could be at risk?
Headteacher: Mr Burns is an officer with Special Branch and had a word with me the next day in case Jimmy did mention this at school. He wasn't able to give me details but I understand that Mr Burns was present or in touch with events throughout and Jimmy played an important part in helping to apprehend some very dangerous people who have since been arrested.
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