you thik the fic was bad?, that was nothing compared to this

The beautiful smurfette was near to the river,washing her hair ,is not that she didn't look pretty before,she was pretty although she would be covered in dirt

"hey Kumi"

it was handy smurf, she allways touhgh he was one of the most handsome smurfs in the village , besides hefty,but he was already taken

-hello handy,What brings you here?-

-well,i just broke up with marina-

marina was handy's mermaid girlfriend , she was pretty,but of course ,not as much as Kumi

-but why?..you don't love her anymore-

-no, i don't...

He hold her hands and looked her directly at her eyes

-i love you know...

she was shoked...handy?, in love with her?,that was imposible, nobody loves her, just the whole village!,but nothing more, and how could he?

-you?...is this a joke?

-no,i had love you a long time ago, since i see you the first time,i just waste my time with marina, now i got tired of hide my feelings, i love you,you are the only for me...

Kumi almost faint,it was all true?

-oh handy i...

she really wanted to say,i love you too,but she also had feelings for hefty, but then she though "he loves smurfette, he never will be into you"

-handy...i love you too

Both hugged and kissed passionately,sealing their romance

unfortunately,somesmurf had seeing them,nothing more than hefty smurf,who was with a bunch of flowers , waiting to declare his love , but now, he was into tears and ran away, with his heartbroken

lets see what is wrong with all this:

-our mary sue is beautiful,no matter what

-She don't have one, but two!,love interest

-Handy go directly, in the cartoon,when he was in love with smurfette , he was very timid, and with marina hefty had to push him,to he go close to her,so no,he wouldn't be so direct, oh,don't forget that in prev chapters he cheated on marina

-Hefty,is crying , because his love doesn't love him back, have you seen how many times smurfette had reject him?, he never cryed, he is a though guy

other thing ,that is not actually a requirement to the fic be bad,but it bothers the mostly of the smurfs fans: handy and marina's break up, as the 90% of the fans like the pairing , and is the most popular,and in a bad fic the most popular pairing is broken

And hefty and smurfette are possibly the second most popular, with approximately 60% of aproval,so this will be bother some fans too