Hi could everyone please tell me whats wrong with my fanfic because I cant improve if your only telling me its not too good, THANKS FOR THE GOOD REVIEWS but make sure you give me stuff im doing badly so I can become the best author ever

OK THIS IS EDITED HI THIS ISNT A cHAPTER EITHER I WANT PEOPLE TO REVIEW ME OR ILL NEVER KNOW IF IM GOING WELL what do you think of the plot? Whats your favourite plot? Whats your favourite twist? Thanks in advbance!