This story sucks, the first chapter is bland and filled with pointless descriptive nonsense, the second chapter is just plain disappointing, the introduction of Nora was too long, and the intro of the Mafia organization as well was a bit anticlimactic, I would delete this but I don't know how, although I would appreciate it if some authors out could possibly give me some pointers,
Ive got a couple of ideas in my head on some good projects, but I'm not touching on them until I have a better grasp the characters and better writing techniques.