This fic is really not turning out how I planned it at all. It was SO much better in my head. This really, really isn't one of my better works- I'm beyond disappointed in it. I feel like its complete and utter crap.
Shadow Amaryllis brought up several good points in a review that I think everyone should know. The plot is so full of holes it's disgusting. And everyone's horribly OOC. This is a half-baked fic. Anyway, one question was how did Hinata manage to poison the food? Umm…honestly, no clue. Maybe she snuck into the kitchen? . Second point was that the Hyuga Clan would offer much more resistance. Yes, they should have. Again, blame my crappy writing skills and lack of imagination.
I do wish this fic was better written. And better thought out. I wrote this on a whim- I was tired of fics where kunoichi were repeatedly portrayed as weaker than some of the guys. I mean, they never get to do anything cool or crazy like the guys do. They don't have the drive Sasuke, Naruto, etc all have. It's like…they're all mediocre. So, I wanted to write one where the kunoichis kicked butt. And I love Neji-angst. I lurve Neji, and I lurve torturing him even more. Hence, make Neji blind, and Hinata and Ten Ten go on a killing spree. Slaughter the Hyuga Clan. Pretty crazy, right up there with Itachi!
Sorry for the horribly long A/N.
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A/N: Make sure you've paid attention to the warnings in chapter one. For the amazingly stupid ones out there who do not read warnings- even when written in attention-grabbing, capital letters- I'll state it again. WARNING BLOODSHED. I've said it twice now. So I'd better not hear any whining. It's very simple; don't like it, then get lost.
Ten Ten skidded to a stop, chest heaving. Her brown eyes were wide. She'd made a mess with her shurikens, but apparently she'd missed the slaughter. Blood was spattered on the walls. The wrinkled, bloodied bodies of the elders lay in discarded, haphazard heaps throughout the room. Body parts lay amongst the red puddles staining the tatami mats, so thick the straw couldn't soak it all up. No kunais or shurikens were visible; this damage, this massacre was done with a heavier blade. That of a sword. The room was soaked in blood; everything was drenched in red. The killer hadn't just killed; the victims had been butchered, torn apart limb by bloody limb. Literally.
At the center, wrapped in a blue blanket, lay Neji. Blood spattered on the blanket, and on Neji's pale, soft white face. His eyes were pearly white; their lilac sheen was gone. He was blind. His eyes were focused at an odd angle, as if he was trying to see something that wasn't there. His long, thick sienna hair had been braided. His pretty, bloody face was a blank slate. Fear that had been replaced by shock.
Hinata knelt at his side. She wore a mesh shirt over a black tank top and dark purple capris. There were a few drops of blood on her; a few cuts and scratches. Everything-and everyone else- was coated in blood. But she wasn't. From the splatter patterns on the walls, floor and ceiling, Ten Ten knew the blade had struck out, slicing away from the killer, thus directing the spray of blood outwards. The killer wouldn't be coated in blood.
Hinata smiled sweetly at Ten Ten. "I apologize. But the elders decided to execute Neji tonight. It was an unforeseen hitch on our plans." The Hyuga girl was strangely calm and serene, but she held Neji's lily white hand tightly in her own bloody ones.
A dismembered hand speckled with moles lay near her foot. Ten Ten curled her upper lip and stepped over it, wincing at the squishing sound of blood under her feet. She gasped when she came closer; Hinata had scored her own headband as well.
Neji stiffened at the sound of feet on the tatami mats. He reached around as if searching for a kunai, but Hinata held his hand tighter. "It's alright; it's just Ten Ten."
Neji struggled to sit up. All that time in a coma, and the drugs Hinata'd put into his body, left him weak. Hinata put her arms around her older cousin, helping him up. "Ten Ten?" Neji asked, holding out his hands.
Ten Ten knelt, wincing at the cooling blood soaking into her knees. She nodded, then realized Neji couldn't see it. Neji would never see again. "I'm here." She took his hands in her own. Neji was cool to the touch.
"You never came to see me." His voice was soft, sounding almost hurt.
Ten Ten coughed, quickly lying. "I did; you were in a coma, remember."
"I missed you."
"I missed you too." Ten Ten leaned forward, pulling free of Neji's hands and wrapping her arms around his slim waist, pulling him to her. His lips were soft and cool. And tasted like blood. Neji had lost weight in the hospital; too much. Through the thin yukata he wore, she could feel his bones. Neji's unseeing eyes closed, and Ten Ten ran her hands over his bloodied braid, wishing she could undo it and run her fingers through his thick hair.
Hinata watched them, annoyed that Ten Ten took her cousin out of her arms. She coughed delicately; Ten Ten raised her head and looked at her. "We'd better get going; we need all the time we can get to put distance between us and Konohoa."
Ten Ten sighed. "You're right."
Hinata reached for Neji, but Ten Ten wrapped her arms around him. "I'll carry him; you fought more than I did."
"He's my cousin."
"He's my lover." Brown and pearly lilac glared at one another.
Tbc…
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&coughs& Ehem…yeah, a lil bit of a spat between Ten Ten and Hinata there. Ten Ten loves Neji, and Hinata feels overly protective of her blind cousin. Hence, fight over Neji.
Oh, and don't forget to review. C'mon. You KNOW you want to. Clicking the pretty purple box is fun. So is poking Neji. So, if you review, you get to poke him! I promise, he won't see it coming!