ok everyone thanks for your advice I will take this into consderation and turn this into great story. alrigth?
Chapter 2: Battle to Decide the Fate of the World
A great battle ensued between Jay and the mysterous warrior. Jay won, but it was a dificult battle. Perhaps the most difficult battle of all. Jay fell down onto his hands and knees and wept. The man had gotten away, but the fight inside Jay's soul was not one. Perhaps it would never be one.
Norma walked up to Jay. "hey jay what's shakin' bacon" she asked, her usual perky self. Jay screamed at her to leave him along... he'd had a truly bad day. "Get over it" she replied. "Couldn't have been that bad. Stop being a baby." She's right Jay thought to himself as he swallowed his tears. "Ok good" Norma said happily. "Neway Will wants to meet us. At Werites Bacon. It's were we live."
"I know Nomra!!!!!!!!" Jay screamed, running off into the distance... he couldn't stand being bossed around like that. Norma could be so aregint...
Jay finaly reached Will's house. Harriet was being brat so Jay said shut up. Chloe, Senel, Will, and Norma were allready their. Chloe's hat had been painted red. Will walked over to Jay and bonked him on the head. "That's for killing Moses. Anyways... Norma says you fought a guy. Someone who's bad. Is this true, or is not a true?"
"Fine..." Jay replied. This storey from his past... was more paneful... than anything else from his past. But if his friends wanted to no, he would tell them. He loved his friends more than life itself.
Preview for Chapter 3: Jay reveals his background with the mysterious warrior!!! Don't miss it! Please keep the constructive criticism coming!