Dreamstar13: This is pretty short if you don't count the songs. Now then, Kaori bring in the review box.
Kaori: Ok. Here is you freakin' heavy box.
Dreamstar13: Thank you. This review is from obsessed-reader from chapter 23. It reads:
Very good story! Now, I dont mean to imply anything, but in chapter 19, Sakura was 2 years old. In chapter 18, you said it had been two years since Miroku had proposed to sango, and they got married soon after. Pregnancy lasts 9 months...You might want to fix that. A few other objections, a two year old would almost definately not be able to beat someone much older, much less a demon with training. In fact, I doubt a two year old can even really fight. also, sakura has a hiraikotsu? Hiraikotsu is a weapon made with any demon bones, and is very heavy. Now, I doubt a two year old can lift that(Miroku cant), and that hey know how to make one and had the resources. For these, you just might want to go into further detail.
Please do not be angry, I had a review like this on one of my stories once, except it was much more rude and did not explain the complaints, and I was angry at the person. i just want you to know that I am simply pointing out some things that you might want to fix to make a wonderful story even better.
Ok, let's say...Sango was found pregnant earlier than she was supposed to and was given birth a few months after her wedding. Plus, I'm just rounding her age...and this is a two year old that has Sango for a mother. Plus, this is a miniature hiraikotsu that she uses to fight demons. She is strong enough to hold it but she can't use it as a regular weapon. And remeber Shippo said he was goin easy on her. That was a long review, so let's just start the story now.
Chapter 24
Karaoke Time!
Out of the well, came two hanyous and a little boy. The male hanyou was carrying a heavy box while the other two followed right after him.
"This is going to be fun! We'll be singing, except Souta…" Kagome started.
"Hey! Just because you think my singing sucks for one song doesn't mean it sucks for any other."
"Fine. Singing, eating, playing…"
"Wait, did you say singing?" asked a now nervous hanyou.
"What's wrong Inuyasha? Can't sing?" Kagome teased.
Inuyasha, not wanting to be teased by his mate, just simply replied, "No. I can sing."
"Ok. Then, it will be a tournament. We will be in pairs… but Souta I guess you can't sing at all. Not enough pairs." Kagome grinned. She knew that Shippo and Rin wouldn't sing, neither would Kaede and Sakura was too little to read.
"Thanks sis." he said sarcastically.
"Well, all we have to do is wait for everyone to come."
"So we're waiting for Kaede, Miroku, Sakura, and Shippo?" Inuyasha asked.
"Not only them, but Rin, Kouga, and Ayame." Kagome happily said.
"WHAT! THAT MANGY WOLF COMING TO OUR HOUSE! NO WAY!" Inuyasha yelled so loud, the whole village could hear.
"Don't worry Inuyasha. Kouga gave up on me years ago. He's with Ayame now." Kagome assured him.
"He better." Inuyasha mumbled.
"Well, you're not complaining about Rin. Why?"
"As long as Sesshomaru doesn't come. She can come."
"Aww. You're so considerate, Inuyasha." Kagome teased. Shippo and Sango are giggling (Shippo spent too much time with Sango and Kagome).
"Hey!" Inuyasha begins chasing Kagome around the house.
"'Knock…knock' The guests are here!" Kagome shouts happily.
"Sorry we took so long Kagome, but this human was too slow." Kouga said in a too cool voice.
"I am not slow!" shouts a 13-year-old girl.
"Kouga! Don't be mean to Rin!" shouted Ayame.
"Ok! Stop fighting." Kagome separates them and calms them down. "Let's start the party then!" Kagome was now holding a pink cordless microphone (From the episode called "The Last Banquet of Miroku's Master").
"Let's start! Miroku and Sango, come on up!"
"Yay! Mama and Papa get to sing. YAY!" Sakura clapped louder than everyone in the room.
"Are you sure Kagome?" Sango asked, nervously.
"Yes." Kagome says as she pushes the mic into Sango's hands (A/N I don't own any song I use in this chapter. Though I wish I did).
"This song is called… "The Start of Something New." Kagome said. "With Sango and Miroku singing it. Enjoy! Oh, and Kaede, Souta, Sakura, you are our judges."
"Ok." they all said.
"Miroku: Living in my own world
Didn't understand
That anything can happen
When you take a chance
Sango: I never believed in
What I couldn't see
I never opened my heart Miroku: Ohhh…
Sango: To all the possibilities oooo…
Both: I know Sango: that something has changed
Both: Never felt this way
Sango: And right here tonight
Both: This could be the start
Of something new
It feels so right
To be here with you
And now looking in your eyes
I feel in my heart
The start of something new
Miroku: Now who'd of ever thought that
Both: We'd both be here tonight
Sango: And the world looks so much brighter
With you by my side
Both: I know that something has changed
Never felt this way
I know it for real
This could be the start
Of something new
It feels so right
To be here with you
And now looking in your eyes
I feel in my heart
The start of something new
Miroku: I never knew that it could happen
Till it happened to me Ohhhh… yeah…
Sango: I didn't know it before
But now it's easy to see
Both: It's a start of something new
It feels so right
To be here with you
And now looking in your eyes
I feel in my heart
That it's the start
Of something new
It feels so right
To be here with you
And now looking in your eyes
I feel in my heart
The start of something new
Miroku: The start of something new
Sango: The start of Both: something new."
"Yay Mama and Papa!" Sakura shouted.
"That was really good." Kaede said.
"Not that bad," Souta said, "but could have been better."
"What are you Souta, Simon?" Kagome teased.
"What? I'm being logical." Souta said.
"Next is… Kouga and Ayame. They will be singing "What I've Been Looking For"."
"I'll beat dog-turf here easily." You should be able to know who that is.
"In your dreams! Ya mangy wolf!" You should be able to know who that is too.
"Calm down you two. Let's get this show on the roll!" Ayame and Kagome shouted.
"Kouga:
It's hard to believe
That I couldn't see
Together:
You were always there beside me
Thought I was alone
With no one to hold
But you were always right beside me
Ayame:
This feelings like no other
Together:
I want you to know
I've never had someone that knows me like you do
the way you do
I've never had someone as good for me as you
no one like you so lonely before I finally found
what I've been looking for
Ayame:
So good to be seen
So good to be heard
Together:
Don't have to say a word
Kouga:
For so long I was lost
So good to be found
Together:
I'm loving having you around
Kouga:
This feeling's like no other
Together:
I want you to know
I've never had someone that knows me like you do
The way you do
I've never had someone as good for me as you
No one like you
So lonely before, I finally found
what I've been looking for
Doo Doo DooDoo
Doo Doo DooDoo
Do Do
Woa-ah-ah-oh."
Everybody just clapped, scared by Kouga's voice as he sang, but happy with Ayame's singing.
"Uhhh… I have no comment." Kaede simply said.
"Ha! She likes it so much, she's speechless." Kouga bragged.
"No, she hates it so much, she's speechless."
"Grr…" they both growled.
"Uncle Kouga, bad! Auntie Ayame, GOOD!" Sakura said. Shippo and Rin nodded in agreement as they ate their candy.
"That was simply horrible Kouga! Good job Ayame.
"What!" Kouga yelled. "How dare you mock the great Prince of the Wolf Demon Tribe's singing."
"Kouga…" Ayame was now having the anime sweat drop thing on her head. "Well, up next are Kagome and Inuyasha."
"Alright, I can do this." Inuyasha reassured himself.
"The song they are singing is "Breaking Free". Let's start!" Ayame announced.
"Inuyasha:
We're soarin', flyin'
There's not a star in heaven
That we can't reach
Kagome:
If we're trying
So we're breaking free
Inuyasha:
You know the world can see us
In a way that's different than who we are
Kagome:
Creating space between us
'Til we're separate hearts
Both:
But your faith it gives me strength
Strength to believe
Inuyasha:
We're breakin' free
Kagome:
We're soarin'
Inuyasha:
Flyin'
Both:
There's not a star in heaven
That we can't reach
Inuyasha:
If we're trying
Both:
Yeah, we're breaking free
Inuyasha:
Oh, we're breakin' free
Kagome:
Ohhhh
Inuyasha:
Can you feel it building
Like a wave the ocean just can't control
Kagome:
Connected by a feeling
Ohhh, in our very souls
Inuyasha:
very souls ohhh
Both:
Rising 'til it lifts us up
So every one can see
Inuyasha: We're breakin' free
Kagome: We're soarin'
Inuyasha: Flyin'
Both:
There's not a star in heaven
That we can't reach
Inuyasha:
If we're trying
Yeah we're breaking free
Kagome:
Ohhhh we're runnin'
Inuyasha:
Climbin'
To get to that place
Both:
To be all that we can be
Inuyasha:
Now's the time
Both:
So we're breaking free
Inuyasha:
We're breaking free
Kagome:
Ohhh
Inuyasha:
More than hope
More than faith
Kagome:
This is true
This is fate
And together
Both:
We see it comin'
Inuyasha:
More than you
More than me
Kagome:
Not a want, but a need
Both:
Both of us breakin' free
Kagome: Soarin'
Inuyasha: Flyin'
Both:
There's not a star in heaven
That we can't reach
If we're trying
Inuyasha: Yeah we're breaking free
Kagome:
Breaking free
We're runnin'
Inuyasha:
Ohhhh, climbin'
Both:
To get to the place
To be all that we can be
Now's the time
Inuyasha: Now's the time
Kagome: So we're breaking free
Inuyasha: Ohhh, we're breaking free
Kagome: Ohhhh
Both:
You know the world can see us
In a way that's different than who we are." Everyone is now clapping and cheering as Inuyasha and Kagome stare into each other's eyes.
"Inuyasha and Kagome are the winners!" Kaede, Rin, Shippo, and Souta shouted.
"Sorry Mama, sorry Papa." Sakura said as she went to go congratulate them.
"So, now I know you can sing." Kagome teased.
"Oh yeah?" Inuyasha pulled her into a passionate kiss.
"Now that's what people want in a party. Let's eat!" Kouga and Ayame shouted.
There, review. Review REVIEW! Hoped you liked it, oh and I have a question. Do any of you know what movie I got the music from? Now then, REVIEW.