Hey Droogs-A quick message from Symbiotic
First off, let me say this. Hey droogs! Yeah I know I'm ripping of James Macdonough so bad right now, but that doesn't matter. I have to tell you all some very important things that are happening concerning my crowning achievement so far. That achievement is the Fire Paved Skies series.
I recently received an amazingly well done review from an author named Shiranui the Brave. He is a very talented author and an even better critic. Shinanui came across Fire Paved Skies The Entrance and wrote a very nice and long review that can be viewed on his forum. It was basically saying that even though the story was good, it was more flawed then it was done well and that it wasn't done right. Please note I am not demoralized by him and I mean no bad words towards him. He showed me so many things that previous critics had overlooked entirely that I did not think were an issue. If I hear that any of you are screaming at him in private messages for what I am about to do, I will see to it that you get banned.
Some of the things he pointed out that I did horribly were
1. Representation of the characters. I have to admit the way I did portray the characters was supposed to not be stereotypical and not just what everyone portrays Naruto and Sakura and Hinata as. I tried to be more unique and non conformist. Instead though I expunged so much of the original character's personality that they apparently are not that good at all.
2. I had a huge issue with portraying emotion, which I think was hampered by my then horrible grammar. I have to admit that this was not a good thing to do.
3. A lack of a central goal for all to follow. It seemed that the simple "go kill Sasuke and go home" idea is not enough, and I have to agree with her. It's lame and not enough. It only really concerns Naruto and none of the other girls.
Along with the fact that my romance was horrible done and I hated the way the first story evolved later on, it is with a heavy heart that I am telling all of you that I am deleting the first two Fire Paved Skies stories. However, this does not mean I am canceling the series!
I feel that much of this has to do with a lack of background knowledge of any past info of the girls and that needs to be fixed. I am instead going to start writing up prologues better concerning the initial formation of The Goddesses and how they got to where they are now. I feel this is the best thing to do and needs to be done.
Like I said, I mean no bad feelings towards any of you. And do not think that Shiranui the Brave is a bastard. He is not and was very kind and polite in his review and he has only given me greater morale and confidence in desire to write this series.
The stories will be taken down soon and I will save them for when I wish to post them again. In the meantime, I will start writing the new prologues.
It's been fun droogs, and I can't wait to do more,
Symbiotic