Lunarian :Hi world! Here's installment #2, please read/review; preferably with helpful commentaries :P
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Question: Anyone got a good Tittle?
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Key
Text = Narration
"Text" = Dialogue
'Text' = Sarcasm, Saying's, and/or so-called... not sure word for it but you get the idea.
Text = Character Thoughts, and/or Character Tittle
~~Chapter One~~
~The Carnival Of Time~
In the land of Termina there is an annual festival called the Carnival of Time. A time when all the different beings that inhabit the four worlds gather together and celebrate. They join to celebrate time and nature as they are ever going, and to pray to thier four 'gods' for a good production this year in whatever they may deal in. It has become tradition for everyone to create thier own personal masks for this day and to wear them during the festivities. Merchants and consumers alike flock to the central square pavillion inside southern Clocktown during this time of the year. There, underneath the big clock tower they enjoy fireworks and a bazaar type atmosphere.
Watching the festivities from afar is a young child wearing a green tunic sitting on a small oaken stump. This deceptively innocent and harmless looking child is none other then Link The Hero Of Time and the unsung savior of all of Termina. He earned the tittle of The Hero Of Time when he saved his home country of Hyrule from the evil of the Gerudo king of darkness, the wizard Ganondorf, by manipulating time itself. Link then got sidetracked, upon his self imposed quest to find his fairy companion Navi, by the hijinx of a possessed skull kid. The Hero Of Time once again took up his mantle and used his skills to save Termina from destruction from a suicidal moon within the span of three days. By controlling the flow of time however, he lived through a most staggering number of days within those three.
Just off to the south of Clocktown lies the world of the swamplands, home to the deku shrubs. Slightly before entering the swamp is a large patch of land full of lush greenery and dried up old trees. It is there that Link is sitting down relaxing after a grueling long ordeal, safely away from the indiginous creatures and far away from that thieving scoundrel of a bird the Takkuri. After having his hard earned Great Fairy Sword stolen by that kleptomaniac blue buzzard, Link wisely has kept his distance from them since then. After a few minutes Link finally decided that he has rested long enough and that it should be a good time to start making his way back soon. So as the latest round of fireworks were going into the 'grand finale' he hopped off the stump and stretched out his arms and legs then took out his ocarina. Placing the blue instrument up to his lips he closed his eyes and played out Epona's Song.
With eyes firmly shut to block out any external interruptions Link was really getting into his own rendition of Epona's Song when he was pushed from the side breaking his trance. Normally a light push as such he recieved would not phase him too much, but he was distracted and swaying to the tune of the song, and when he was pushed it was at the precise moment that he was leaning off to the opposite side. So he can be excused that a gentle push knocked him over and planted his face first into the dirt. Even being caught off guard though he is still a great warrior, so he quickly jumped up and flipped backwards while unsheathing his Gilded Sword and Mirror Shield to land in a crouched position ready for any attack.
Anticipating some foolish creature to attack him such as a Stalchild or maybe a Pea Hat, he was dismayed to see only his pony friend Epona standing there giving off slight horse snickerings, leading him to wonder if that was her aim in the first place and just how intelligent she was anyway. About as tall as Link is currently with a chestnut brown coat and a fierce white mane, Epona is a loyal and lively horse with deep dark blue eyes. Quickly resheathing his shield and sword Link calmly walked back over to where Epona was standing, really Neeiyah'ing it up at his expense. Dusting off his face with his right hand he said, "Yeah, yeah laugh it up. Ya think that maybe, just maybe you have something better to do then knock me around, hmpph."
Finally getting next to her he slung his arm over her mane while saying, "But I love ya anyway, you crazy horse you. That sure was a long three days. You were lucky not being in that loop, huh girl?", he said while scratching her behind the ears making her whinny in approval. And I wonder just how many times I relived those same days, something new would really hit the spot about now... a new quest. Time to return to Hyrule I think. "C'mon girl, let's have one more ride then we'll go home", Link said while mounting her.
Ever since Link has first gotten onto Epona back in Hyrule at Lon Lon Ranch to save her from being offered to Gannondorf, Link has loved riding her. Rushing over the open fields on horseback is a thrill to him like none other, maybe because for once he doesn't have to exert much energy himself. Galloping at high speeds with the wind rushing by blowing his hair back and letting Epona show her talents by jumping over tall fences and barricades are some of Link's favorite past times when spending time with her.
Since he was going to be adjusting to the normal flow of time again Link figured he should 'kill two birds with one stone' as it were. Leading Epona through the various clumps of bushes spread around the inner sanctum of the town, near the observatory and down past the entrance to Milk Road he let Epona have some good exercise while simultaneously filling his stocks of bombs and arrows. I've been away from Hyrule for a long time, can't be too careful being prepared. Finally after spending an hour riding around Link decided it was time to move on, so he brought her to the southern gate entrance. Hopping off at the gateway he took her by the reigns after giving her a carrot.
Even from outside the town the loud sounds of celebrating could be heard, a big difference from the usual din. Apart from the noise Link could smell the freshly baked goods of vendors wares. Standing in front of the entry Link saw one of the town's many guards men standing at duty, manning his post to defend the town from any monsters as well as keeping the unarmed citizens within the town walls. He greeted them as they passed through with a quick salute and nod of acknowledgement, "Welcome sir to ClockTown, enjoy the Carnival." Link gave a nod in response to the guard and politely replied, "Thank you good sir, I shall.", while taking in the sights of the festival in full swing. Impressive, why couldn't the town have been this lively before. The booths in the main square were now fully open for buisness with lots of people from all over milling about. Link could see Gorons, Zoras, Dekus and even a pirate or two congregating all over the plaza.
Right at the entrance Link see's a stand set up selling custom and hand made masks, but he could tell that none of them were magical or had any special abilities that could be of any help so he skipped it. Across from that stand is a vendor selling ice cream treats at fifteen rupees a piece. Noticing the five main members of the Bombers Gang hovering around he thought it would be a nice way of paying them back for all thier help to treat them to some. With a cheery smile and a wave of his arm Link called out, "Hey Jim, how is everything?" Jim, the leader of the Bomber's replied, "Ey, Link! Everything is fine , hardly anyone in need of help so we're taking a break for the Carnival day, even our secret passage way guard."
Looking over to the side of Jim, Link now saw the sixth member of the Bombers Gang there, the youngest one that they have play guard duty to thier private passage to the observatory. So then that'll be 90 rupees then, heh a pittance. Looking at them all Link said, "Hey everyone, It's been great fun being with you guys and thanks for accepting me as one of you. I have to leave to go home now so I guess this is where we part ways. How about I treat you all to an ice cream treat as my way of saying thanks for everything!" Being with all these children is almost like a small taste of the Kokiri again.. I miss Saria... Amisdt the cheers of the Bombers Link walked up to the vendor and said, "Excuse me sir, I'll take 6 servings for my friends here", gesturing to the grinning gang.
The stall vendor had been getting slightly anxious with that group of six kids hanging around his area, worrying they might try something to steal something if he wasn't careful. Buncha brats, crowding and taking away my potential customers... not a rupee among the lot of em'all. When a new kid approached him he was thinking this was going to be thier instigator of distraction, so when the kid said he would buy six treats he was suspicious.
Link wasn't aware of the shop keeper's cynical nature so he was surprised to recieve such a cold and penetrating stare in response to his statement. What's his problem? After a few moments of staring the guy said, "Six pieces are 90 rupees, do you HAVE 90 rupees?" Link was a little miffed that someone would doubt his sincerity so he decided to rub it in the snooty man's face a little. He slowly placed his giant wallet on the counter and then withdrew 2 large orange rupees and a silver one saying in a false innocent voice, "Hmm no I don't think I have 90 rupees, just two 200's and a 100 piece rupee. "I guess I'll have to take my buisness elsewhere", Link said wile piling his rupees back into his bag and slowly turning around. 5..4..3..2.. "Wait Sir!", he heard from behind him.
Quickly wiping away his triumphant smile, Link turned back towards the man with a questioning gaze. The man looked like he was ready to faint any minute so Link felt he should ease up on the poor fellow. Quickly walking up to the counter Link pulled out a silver rupee and said, "Six, if you please, and keep the change." The vendor beamed a grateful smile and said, "Of course, right away kind sir! Thank you, and I apoligize for my ill manner toward you." Link smiled as the man gave out the treats to his friends with much enthusement. Amazing what a lil tip will do.
Jim looked to Link and wondered why he didn't get one himself so he asked. "Hey Link didn't you want one yourself?". Link smiled good naturedly and replied, "That's okay I'm fine. Goodbye all." Jim gave a quick salute and then said, "Farewell fellow member. The Bombers Secret Society of Justice Forever!" With those final words Jim and the gang ran off to Eastern Clocktown. Link watched them run off playing together feeling nostalgic for a moment. Probably going to the observatory
Finally moving on in this seemingly long line of distraction in a place where just a day ago was barren, Link looked over to the left where the banker used to have a sign up and was surprised to actually see him there himself. Listening in for a moment he heard him calling for attention with such statements as, "Garunteed safe! Termina's number one bank!, and the ever popular and embaressing for a certain hero, "The only bank used by Link!". Granted it wasn't general knowledge that Link was thier savior from the moon, for which he is thankful for, but it seemed like he made quite an impact regardless due to all those individuals he helped out. Hurrying over to him he yelled out to get his attention, "Hey!".
With a flushed face from embaressed like that, Link tried to talk him out of doing that by saying, "Stop that, I never said you could use me to get buisness." The banker stopped his sales pitch and looked over at Link for a few moments before he replied, "What's this? You need somethin'? Excuse me, but let me take a look at you... Ah. yes... Link." By this point Link was ready to roll his eyes in exasperation. After all I saved up and even using me for buisness he STILL needs to check for his stamp to know it is me? Aiiyi yi. The banker didn't notice and kept talking, "What's wrong with a little free advertising? Anyway nevermind that now! I'm glad you are here because as my number one customer you have been chosen to recieve a unique one of a kind special item. Here, check it out." So saying he chucked something at Link who caught it on reflex.
Looking at what he was holding Link was initially unimpressed and voiced his opinion, "It looks like another adult wallet." The banker looked a little insulted at that, but was quick to overcome it and said, "Have our service not served your rupee problems well? That there is a special magic wallet, crafted with powerful magics from a wandering mage. With this wallet you can deposit and withdraw your rupees from our bank from any distance no matter where you are! You will also be glad to hear that we have fashioned a private vault of your very own, and will no longer enforce the 5,000 rupee limit.", he finished off looking exceedingly happy with his speech.
Link's face took on a very happy form and quickly tested it out by putting one of his orange rupees in it. The rupee rested inside the bag for a moment before a purplish black hole opened up and took it away. Link was almost drooling at the usefulness of such a wallet, "That is so cool!". Reaching into the wallet to remove some rupees he couldn't find any, and so with a questioning frown he asked the banker the problem, "How do you get your rupees back?"
At Link's obvious puzzlement the banker couldn't grin any wider as he said, "Why, that is the best part! Simply say your name and how much you are withdrawing and it will be in the wallet next you open it! If you want a specefic arrangement then just say that as well." Link wasted no time in testing it out. Closing the wallet tightly he thought for a minute and said, "Link withdrawing 2 blue rupees and 1 red rupee." He felt the wallet vibrate slightly within his grasp then opened it up and there was his 30 rupees. "That is very nice", Link said staring at his new wallet in fascination. The banker took Link's distracted manner to run off back to his safe yelling out, "I'm glad you like it. We will just charge your account 4,500 rupees for the expenses in crafting it and call it even. Good day!".
By the time Link realized that the banker got away without settling his using him it was too late. Agh, That sneaky little... Oh well, it's a really great wallet anyway.. even if thats just about all my money Shaking his head to get off of that particular train of thought Link saw just one more person between him and the tower's entrance, and luckily it wasn't someone he had much acquantance with. It was the Goron with his name, or rather Mr. Link-goro if Anju was here. There he was standing off to the side with his red ribbon bowtie and blue hat with the golden insignia and a black visor. He was calling out selling tickets to the Goron races, "Come all-goro, watch the amazing Goron races-goro."
Finally Link was at the door to the clock tower, and looking up at the clock could tell that it was 3:00PM because the first red circle was to the right of the sun symbol. I prefer Hyrule's gossip stones to tell me the time, great for working out frustrations too... "Okay, girl let's go", he said as he led her down the stairs, over the bridge and to the door. Standing in front of a silver door with green moss around it, Link was ready as he walked towards the door leading Epona saying, "Okay time to go home!".
The following thunk heard was but a small noise compared to the profanity uttered when the door didn't open.
The door stayed shut...
(To Be continued)
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Snowsilver: Thank you for the review. Here's to hoping I did good. :Cheers:
m (pinpig123@aol.com): I kind of envisioned it in my head as a catchy opening of sorts. I was humming the zelda theme as I wrote it.
Luigi Mario: KOG: Thank you. I haven't vanished yet. It is indeed, my hope that I can have those two meet.
Kevone(sportsballer10@netscape.net): Thanks for the review. I'm happy ya looked in my profile. Yeah, I know they are too... but that hasn't stopped lots of other fic writers from similiar taboo's.
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