Hi! This my very, very first fanfic & I ask for CONTRUCTIVE criticism. No flames.
Summary: Phoenix is an awesome star racer but doesn't know about her family. A mysterious letter comes to her doorstep & whisks her into an adventure. Who's Eva? Who's Jordan? AND WHO THE HECK IS PRINCE AIKKA? Rated T for safety.
Disclaimer: I don't own Oban-StarRacers, only the idea.
Chapter 1: Phoenix
The race was going horrible. I'm stuck in the back of a bunch of rookies & they're kicking our asses. "Lee, what the hell is wrong with you?!?! We're pros but they are kicking us around!! Pull it together!" I yelled. Suddenly, the guns started to fire & I smiled. We were going to win. I pulled ahead of everyone & went at top speed. 3 seconds later, I crossed the finish line. "Our winner is the amazing Phoenixa Team!" yelled the announcer. I opened the hatches & Lee & I walked out. Lee is a thick-headed 18 years old & is loved by the ladies. The fact that he's muscular, a rebel, & has AMAZING skills is what makes Lee…Lee. Me? Well, have you ever heard of Maya Wei? Let's just say I'm an exact copy of her. No plastic surgery, believe me. Just then, our bonehead manager came to me with the trophy. "Phoenix!!! We're going to the Inter-Planet Championships!" he yelled. Tyler Qwerty was just a bit older than us & loved me. Well, we want to fire him but we don't have a backup. When he came to me, he tried to KISS me. "That's it!!! I'm fed up with this!!!!!!" I yelled. Everyone turned to us & started to take pictures. "You are FIRED!!" I yelled. "You can't fire me baby. I'm your boyfriend," he said smugly. "WHERE ON GOD'S GREEN EARTH DID YOU GET THAT FRICKIN' IDEA?!?!?!?!?!" I roared. Another thing you know about me. I have a HORRIBLE temper. Then, punched him in the face & stomped away. Through the lines of the horrible paparazzi, a coach watched me & smiled.
When I entered my apartment someone was in there, looking out my window. "WHO THE HELL ARE YOU?!?" I roared. This wasn't my great day & I was pissed at my ex-manager. "You remind me of my…never mind. I'm Don Wei," Don said. "Well, I'm Phoenix, just Phoenix." I said, shaking his hand. "Can I make an offer? Since you & Lee dumped your manager, you need a new one," he said. Without thinking or consulting with Lee I said, "I'll take it." "Good. Meet me tomorrow, with Lee," he said leaving. Before he left, I asked him a question. "Why do you what me?" He paused for a second & said, "At the moment I'm not at liberty to say." He closed the door leaving me with a bunch of questions.
So, what do you think? If get me one review I promise to write another chapter.
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