kagamisama nandayo! wats wrong w/ spllin? i ned help,help me rewrit my story descript kudasai~

I wrote my new friend kagamisama in b/c she gave me a review! disny shoutout 2 hr~ if u wanna b in my story nara, give reviews + criticism ne? ^-^ I can handl construktiv critis

I follow Sora-kun off the beach ad onto the main island. We catch a ferry to ther.

"Ano Sora-kun, fery wo catch ka ne?" I ask timedly.

"Yeah, we go to ferry, my desu." He whispered.

Now we're on the ferry. It was big & white, with flowers on the sides.

"Ano Sora-kun, doshite flowers on the sides why?" I ask.

"Cause this is a weddin ferry, ne?" he slyly replys. I get hot again, and the ferry chimney grows, biger, then blows out smoke & gets back smal size. I feel the same way w cutie!.

To ease my mind, I look over the side into the beautiful blu oceon. Dolphans jump up out o/ the water, and flounders (shaberi: we just learned abut flunders in class today) jump up w/ them, w/ smiles on there faces. Its kawai, but then I feel a bump.

"Hey, moshimoshi girl!" A girl ran up to me and said.

um who are u?" I ask. "Oh my names Kagami Sama," she replys smoothly.

"And gurl, u look kawaii, damn!" she hoots.

She then touches her chest and blushs. "Gurl u so lucky, u got fat tities. I am jus a petanko (shaberi: watch "Tsurupettan" from Touhou, the girl w/ horns s jus 2 kawai! & WATCH IT ON NICONICO NOT YOUTUBE!)

"I'm sory ure tsurupettan, shoujo. (GIRL) O, my oppai arent too big, are they?" I ask.

Kagami-chan smiled slyly. "I'll show you," she said.

"If they werent big then i couldnt do this!" & then she bit it like on Strike Witches!

"Oi, y you do that?" Sora screamed and slaped her away. She gav him mid finger and then looked at me.

"Well shoujo (shaberi: means girl!) u wanna be tomodachis (shaberi: friends!)?" she asked me.

I gave her a knowin look. She then gasped and realized she mesed up.

"Oh! yea Im Asian," she said.

i still didnt approv. "Japaneze?" I sed whil givin her a evil eye.

She sighed sadly. "No, sux im not japaneze, im only corean, is that ok?" she begged.

I taped my chin. "Hm, watever. corean's good enouff. Anyway lets get some gohan (shaberi: its funny how the japaneze word for food is the same as gohans name from Dragonball z! o.O)

"Hey sora-kun, we got any gohan here on fery?" I talks.

He shook his hed. "No, but we dont need any, were here!" He pointed to island.l

I looks where hes pointing. I cant believe my eyes! "Wow...!," I awed.

it was bootiful. there was sand evrywhere, and litle kodomos playing out in sand. i saw a mcdonalds up front.

"Yay, food! Iko, iko!" i grab my new tomodachis sora and kagami hands and we run to mcdonalds.

we get there. i ask the gang wat they want.

"Oi guys whatchu wantna taberu?(eat)" I say.

Kagami wants som fries (shaberi: her fav food is mcdonalds french fries, she told me on aim jus now! wwwwww ^0^), and sora wants a Big Mac w/ larg fries & larg soda & m&m mcflury (oreo one sux!) & apple pie and more soda.

Kuso thats a lot! "OK but as long a u taberu it all up sora-kun !" I yell ovr my sholder.

I get to cunter to order. "hey ther, can i have a

"What would u liek 2day?" the wetres smiled.

I get a closer look. Her eyebrows r mity thik, so i stare. Jiiiiiiiiiiiiii~ (shaberi: whenn japaneze stare at peple,, they say "jiiiiiii~". its 1 of there wierd automotopeea)

Hey those brows can only b... Mugi-chans!

"Gasp, Mugi-chan, u work here!" I scereamed.

She got worie cuz i was 2 loud. "Ano, hai (yes), but keep it down desu kudasai. (Please keep ur voise quiet)", she wisperd. "and plz spek in japaneze kudasai, i don't speak good english (plez speak in japaneze to me because im japaneze)"

oh yeah i forgit mugi-chan was workin here to eperience workin 4 freal, since she 2 damn rich to hav 2 wrk. "hm jpn's mor fun to spek anyway da yo. (japaneze is more fun 2 spek than english anyway, of course)."

"Oh man Mugi-chan, watash hope anata ha don't get in trouble w/ mckyds staff like in the keion webepisode da (transl: i hope things wor out 4 u like in the blurays)," I whispered.

"No, dajobu desu (im fine)." She smiled.

"Oi," I say, "so hows my favorite Yui-chan doing desu ka? and her gitar ka mo? (hows Yui-chan doin, and her gitar also too?)"

Mugi-chan smiles. "Ano, Yui-chan wa fine desu, gitar wa fine. Yui-chan wa still taberu my cha and taberu mah ceeke, thou. (Yui-chan & gitar r fine, she still eats my food)."

I smile, and b/c i smile so big my hair flies up, and i hold my hands up 2 my chest in balls fists to show my excitement. jus like yui-chan in keion episode 1 "Oh, u gota show me sum o/ ur oishi ceeke, i want sum! i was so zelous o/ Sawako-sensei in keion season 2, she got meron ceeke deshta! (I want sum ceeke, im mooooou that sawako-sensei got some melon cake & i didnt'!)"

Mugi-chan giggles. "Eeh, will do. nice 2 see u, Kaori-chan~"

i tak r food 2 the tble. "Taberu mina-san!" I yell and put my arms out in Vs.

Kagami-chan said "Cum sit next 2 me, Kaori-chan!)

I did, and began to taberu. it was oishi, but then i heard something. "Ha!...!" I sed under breth.

Kagami-shan looks concerned. "Wuts wrong?"

I then ran 2 window, something wuz happeneng. then suddenly, a man w/ long white hair in a black cloak came crashin thru window!

gaspie, nani hapens next? find out next time!

wrote dis wile listning to miku's "LAST NIGHT, GOOD NIGHT" by livetune, it is so kawai song! i lurv miku, she makes such cute sounds w/ her voice. i am trying to by miku append software so i can start makin mukuu songs 2~! i need mony, but i kep spendin it on figures + bass guitar. HAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaatsa! c u next time in cutechocopockiikissu no shaberi no jikan!1