Reviews so Far
Darkness68
2005-07-24
ch 1, signed God I lov3e this one but you dont update you lose points for that. So update.
fdiw
2005-07-21
ch 3, signed sorry i havent been keeping up love the story line so far
Darkness68
2005-07-21
ch 4, signed I loved your story but you dont deem to be updateing. of course I haven't waited that long for you to update oh well I just hope you dont ditch this story and leave another abandoned story unfinished.
Darkness68
2005-07-21
ch 4, signed
I loved your story but you dont deem to be updateing. of course I haven't waited that long for you to update oh well I just hope you dont ditch this story and leave another abandoned story unfinished.
IDiot speaking
2005-07-19
ch 4, anon.
I love your fan fic. not many of them are god. Im glad that you got the characters personalities. Some people make Kyo nice rfom the beggining and its weird. It is okay if he slowly changes to nice but not to be nice from the beggining thats just weird. Love your fanfic please kep updateing.
HI
2005-07-18
ch 4, anon.
IM so happy your updating. I've read so many animes that havent been updated in years. Please keep updating I love your story.
cutebowlofvioletcurry
2005-07-18
ch 4, signed
1)um... hiroyuki?
2)i think u r gunna be mean 2 me...
tohru and "unknown"
-glares at writer
"i shall remain from shaking my fist"
moo
-curry it dosen't matter
2005-07-18
ch 4, anon.
you should make tohru and one of the angels fall in love ya kno a twist
naomi
2005-07-18
ch 4,
anon. heyy! i vote for kyo/tohru and yuki/tohru! i can vote for two right? anyway love the story and i want to read more please update soon! o can you make her wings come out in the middle of class? that would be cool. so keep up the great work!
tif
2005-07-18
ch 4, anon.
hi can u make it to HATORI AND TOHRU Fic thanks PLEAASE!
ilovehatsuharu
2005-07-18
ch 4, signed
I LOVE ur story it has alot of uniqueness about it I VOTE TOHRUXKYO. I think the mystery man is Hiroyuki! I love ur story so write more soon! TOHRU and KYO 4ever
Sei
2005-07-18
ch 4, anon.
A lot longer now. That's good. It seems an angel guardian likes Tohru. Now that should be interesting.
Couple Votes so far!
Tohru x Yuki-8
Tohru x Haru (this was a vote reader prefered)- 1
Tohru x Kyo-7
Tohru x Hatori-1
(Someone voted them to be together but it seems kind of weird sorry if it seems rudebut it's okay)
Tohru x unknown character (sorry cannot tell ya yet!)-8
Kyo x Kagura-0
Kisa x Hiro-1
Hatori x Kanna-1
Haru x Rin-1
Yuki x Rin(another reader prefered)- 1
Kagura x with an angel (just being soft on her vote if you want her to be)-1
Please vote for couples!
creativitykafune: you can put in any of couples you like for them to be together okay? Well yet again, the unknown person and Yuki are tied still and what's this? Kyo is one point behind them? Who'll win Tohru's heart!
Tohru/...(spechless)
Yuki: Stupid cat will always be in last place.
Kyo: OH YEAH? I'LL WIN THIS VOTE COUPLE THINGY!
Yuki: Oh my, Kyo don't you relize somone is coming after you? (Yuki points at a running girl)
Kyo: Shit!
Kagura: My Looooove! (Kagura starts beating the hell out of Kyo)
creativitykafune: Aw... Kagura still has no votes! Poor Kagura...
Kagura: What! Let me see the votes... (Kagura stares at the votes)
creativiykafune: Poor, Poor her.
Kagura: Dammit all! PLEASE VOTE FOR ME AND KYO SO THAT WE WILL BE TOGETHER FOREVER AND EVER!
Kyo: No dammit! I don't love you at all!
Kagura: Oh yeah? YOU DON'T LOVE ME ANYMORE! I HATE YOU! (Kagura starts running and Kyo starts apoligizing.)
Kagura: You love me? Kyo loves me!(Kagura starts hugging him again and punches him to death)
Kyo: I didn't say I love you!
creativitykafune:Okay...
Tohru: Who is this unknown person?
Yuki: Yes, I would like to know.
creativitykafune: Well, you all should pretty figure it all out nowright,well if ya don't..oh well.
Tohru?
Yuki: You better tell us...
creativitykafune: Um well... no, well let's get back to the story!
Kagura: Please vote for me and Kyo so that we will be together forever and ever!
Kyo: No,vote for Kagura for someone else!
creativitykafune: THAT'S ENOUGH! Now well readers please enjoy the story!
Flash Back
Kingdom of Hell
Ceres stood up quickly and heard a man calling out her name.
"Aya! Where are you, it's me Aki oh..." Aki saw the celestial maiden staring with those golden eyes.
"Hello Aki." Then Ceres started to change, her hair bleach blonde and her eyes changed to the color brown.
"Hey Aki!" Aya ran and gave Aki a slap in the back.
"Hey lil' sis, now what should we do now? I mean how do we capture the princess?" Aki asked.
"Let me think..." Aya then had a smirk on her face.
An Angel Tale
Chapter 5
P.E. Part 2
Kingdom of Hell...
"So you have any idea?" asked Aki.
"We shall go to the King and ask that can we go ahead of scheadule." Aya smirked.
"Huh, what are you thinking?" asked Aki.
"You just wait and see." Aya smirked as the wo twins walked to the King himself.
Kingdom of Heaven...
As the King of Heaven ordered the heaven to prepare for battle soon, The Queen of Heaven went to her bedroom, she then kneeled and put her arms on the bed while she clasped her hands and she then started to pray...
'Ryouji, Hiroyuki...please recieve my prayersProtect Princess MochikoGain her trust with swift movementsTrain her wellThe Kingdom of Hell is after her and is planning on taking her to their KingdomTake your answeres with procautionsThe Kingdom of Heaven's Princess is at your hands!By the order of the Queen and King!I give my regaurds. Amen.'
"I hope that they recieved my message." The queen said to herself and walked out of her bedroom and walked to her husband.
Earth-Tohru's class
"Tohru!" Tohru heard people screaming her name.
"Tohru!" They screamed again.
"Ehm…." Tohru found herself on the floor laying on her back and seeing a lot of faces in front of her.
"W-what happened?" Tohru asked as she kept laying down, it felt so cold to her and it made her relax.
"You fell out of your seat and you wouldn't wake up." Yuki answered.
"I did?" Tohru asked.
"Tohru how could you fall asleep in class!" Asked Kyo.
"I'm sorry…" Tohru said.
"Don't say sorry to him! He's just likes to make people upset!" Uo-chan hugged Tohru on the floor.
"Yes, but to change the subject, I sense incredible magic that has been done here…" Hana-chan announced as she played with Tohru's hair.
"Eh?" Tohru wondered.
"Oh really Hanajima, stop using your waves, their confusing Tohru, Tohru are you okay?"
"I guess so…" Tohru shook her head as Uo-chan got off her.
Then suddenly the class bell rang and it was time that their class went to next period.
"Alright class, since it was to late for me to give you your assignments I let you off for today but as for Tohru…" The teacher glared at her making Tohru get all the shivers.
"For falling asleep, I shall give you an assignment! As also you shall clean the classroom till it is spotless!" The teacher chuckled as she went back to her desk.
"Sorry Uo-chan…" Tohru had tears going down the side of her eyes and before anyone saw her she wiped her eyes.
"Well now, let's go to our next class P.E." Yuki answered.
"I shall beat you in that race then I shall become number one!" Screamed Kyo.
"Well don't forget about Tohru." Yuki smirked as Yuki already knew that Tohru had beaten them both and they were on their real speed.
"OH YEAH, I WILL ALSO BEAT TOHRU SO THAT I WILL KNOW THAT I AM THE BEST!" Then Kyo was beaten down with a rusty pipe by Uo-chan.
"WHAT WAS THAT FOR!" Kyo rubbed his head.
"It was for Tohru and we also must get to class, orange head." Uo-cahn smirked.
"Okay let's go!" Tohru said cheerfully, and then they all left to their P.E. Class and to their locker rooms.
Girl's Locker Room…
As Tohru dressed into her P.E. Uniform, as she removed her shirt Uo-chan and Hana-chan looked at her back.
"Why Tohru… why do you have a tattoo?" Asked Hana-chan as she pointed at Tohru's back.
"Eh?" Toru then turned white noticing she had forgotten all about that winged tattoo she got on her back and she knew what will happen to her...
"Tohru…" Tohru faced Uo-chan as she quickly put on her shirt and shorts.
"WHY TOHRU, KYOKO-SAN WOULD BE FURIOUS IN HEAVEN AND IF SHE WERE ALIVE, SHE'LL COOK YOU FOR DINNER!" Uo-chan screamed as she dressed madly while Hana-chan dressed calmly.
"I'm, I'm sorry…I just saw this tattoo on my back a little while ago" Tohru bowed fast as she could while telling the honest truth.
"Nice…excuse Tohru…but I'm sure that Kyoko-san would be very disappointed with you…" Uo-chan sighed as they went out of the P.E. class and headed out the field.
"Eh-heh…" Tohru whined while she tied her hair in a pony tail as also did Hana-chan.
Boys Locker Room…
"Eh? I thought I heard an angry fit." Kyo said.
"Oh? Maybe it's just the figment of your imagination?" Yuki smarted off.
"OH YEAH, SO ARE YOU READY FOR THAT RACE AGAINST YOU AND ME!" Kyo shouted as the boys heard the news as they were dressing.
"Na ah, it's not just you and me who are to race, it's you, me and Tohru, remember stupid cat?" Yuki poked Kyo's hand with a single finger.
"Arggh, stop calling me a stupid cat you stupid rat!" Kyo slapped Yuki's hand away and marched off outside forgetting one small but important thing.
"Stupid cat…" Yuki called.
"What!" Kyo yelled.
"Don't forget your shirt idiot…" Yuki threw the shirt at Kyo and walked right passed him and headed outside to the field.
"ARRGGGHHH" Kyo flustered as he placed on his shirt while everyone laughed at him.
"LAUGH ALL YA WANT!" Kyo shouted as he ran outside to the field while flustering.
The field…
Tohru and the rest of the girls were on the girl's side of P.E. class while the boys were on the boy's side and with them were the first years that'll be joining their P.E. class.
"For today, we'll be having mixed boys and girls field activity since we have nothing to do well begin!" The teacher yelled as he blew on his whistle.
Uo-chan, Hana-chan, and Tohru were at the track side waiting for Yuki and Kyo for the race.
"Tohru, why don't you exercise first while we wait?" Asked Hana-chan.
"Oh, okay." Tohru started to stretch her legs out.
"That was a good idea Hanajima!" Uo-chan laughed.
As Tohru exercised, she felt so flexible that she was able to do anything. Tohru smiled as she exercised because she thought it was fun. Tohru started to jump in the air and twirling backside ways and before she landed on the floor shed did a split, then she layed down and twisted her legs in the air as she twisted her body with it to sit up and then rolled backward, stopped, and jumped up and stood up with one leg in front and one leg in back and started to stretch her legs again.
"Whoa…" Uo-chan said amazed.
"I sense different waves from her." Said Hana-chan.
"Tohru! That was awesome!" screamed Uo-chan.
"Eh?" Tohru snapped out of her focus.
"That was amazing of how you exercised!" Uo-chan hugged Tohru as Tohru sat next to them.
"Oh…" Tohru then saw the two new students appear in front of them.
"That was good Honda-san." Ryouji and Hiroyuki shook their heads as they said.
"T-Thank you but call me Tohru instead." Tohru smiled at them until she felt the shivers and a spooky voice saying,
Leave alone Hiroyuki and Ryouji you don't deserve their kindness, do you want a swelled head?
Tohru immediately hugged herself tight and turned pail.
"I could…beep… them with Electro poison waves…" Hanajima said as she stared out the trees where the new fans of Hiroyuki and Ryouji hid from and they started running.
"Oh you poor thing, Hanajima don't zap people." Hanajima hugged Tohru's head.
"Tohru we are very sorry about that it's our fault, are all ea… schoolgirls like this?" Asked Hiroyuki.
"Ah ha, they are because right now you guys are the hottest guys in school just like Yuki Sohma and Kyo Soma as you can refer him orange head." Uo-tani smirked.
"Oh yeah!" Smiled Ryouji as Hiroyuki shook his head.
"Well, I've heard you got a race with those Sohmas' yes?" Hiroyuki asked.
"Why yes, we are just waiting for them that's all." Tohru smiled brightly while Hiroyuki and Ryouji smiled back.
"Tohru!" screamed a mega-cheerful boy.
"Oh Momiji!" Smiled Tohru.
"Momiji wants a hug!" Tohru's hair started to prick up while Momiji ran toward her for a hug but before Momiji could even hug Tohru, a guy with spiky white hair wearing a lot of accessories grabbed Momiji by the back shirt.
"Momiji." He said calmly.
"Hatsuharu-kun!" Tohru whispered a thank you to him while Haru nodded his head.
"Haru no fair!" Momiji whined as he tried to kick him.
"So, we heard you'll be racing Yuki and Kyo today are you guys waiting?" asked Haru.
"Tohru's racing!" Momiji shouted happily.
"Why yes!" Tohru clasped her hands together.
"So, who are these guys?" asked Haru thumbing his hand toward them.
"Yeah, why are they so friendly with Tohru?" Momiji shouted.
"Oh, these guys are transfer students and they go to our class." Uo-chan answered.
"Oh." Haru said while Momiji pouted. Then suddenly out of blue Hana-chan said spookily… "I sense that these two, Hiroyuki and Ryouji's auras are so powerful…" Hanajima said as Hiroyuki Ryouji, Tohru, and Momiji flinched especially Hiroyuki and Ryouji while Haru stayed calm.
Then a flock of people came running at them shouting at Tohru about the race and her exercise moves.
"Wow Tohru, you were so amazing! Can you join our club? No, she'll join the gymnastics, no she'll join baseball, no she joins softball, no she joins… (They babbled on) Tohru are you really racing with Yuki Sohma and Kyo Sohma? You know you can't beat them! You don't deserve to race with them! Their Princes! Hey look their here!" Shouted the group while Tohru went all ditzy while Uo-chan calmed her down as well as Momiji, Ryouji and Hiroyuki just watching Tohru and the rest of the group and especially Tohru.
Haru then ran toward the group making the group around Tohru clear and run to Kyo and Yuki and then Haru started tugging onto Yuki's shirt.
"Hey." Haru said.
"Hey, now let go of me Haru." Yuki replied.
Then as the group reached over to Tohru, Yuki and Kyo started to go ballistic in their minds seeing Tohru trust the two new students and they only just met.
"Who the hell do ya think you are!" screamed Kyo while also Yuki trying to calm down his anger by shaking his head and then he kneeled forward to Tohru.
"Are you okay?" Yuki asked.
"I'm fine…just a bit dizzy." Tohru shook her head as she stood up.
"Heh, hi the names Ryouji and nice hair, orange head." Ryouji smirked deciding on using the nick name from what Uo-chan said and while he smoothly moved his hand in his blonde spiky hair.
"ORANGE HEAD, WHAT ABOUT YOU BLONDY!" flustered Kyo.
"Oh, thank you for the nick name but you can't call me that cause I'm not the only one with blond hair, my cousin does as well." Ryouji then smirked once again.
"Why you!" Kyo was about to punch Ryouji but Ryouji had caught the punch.
"No one punches me unless I let them get it…" Ryouji smirked.
"So Tohru, are you ready for the race?" Yuki smiled at Tohru.
"Yes!" Tohru said with a bright smile.
creativitykafune: Hiya! Did ya enjoy! Well I'm very sorry if the grammer was bad to you if you think. And if you were expecting Tohru to have wings pop out in the classroom, well I'm sorry it won't be cause It seems to be to early for that if you think about it, but definately she will have the wings! Well I hope you did like it. It was so hard to type! Ask me any questions if ya like and also please review!
Kagura: Don't forget about voting for me and Kyo to be together and ever! (Kagura hugs Kyo tight)
Kyo: No, we shall never ever be together dammit! (struggles to get out of the hug)
creativitykafune: P.S. also please answer these questions.
1. Who is this unknown guy I've been talking about? (I bet you know! But if not, guess ya gotta wait!)
2. Who do you think I will pick for couples?
3. Who'll win the race?
4. How will Ryouji and Hiroyuki gain Tohru's trust?
creativitykafune: P.S.S I'll also put in who is this unknown person. Won't it be exciting to know?