Have you missed me? (No.) I got my friend to read through my Story before I published it this time. But she's not perfect and may have missed some words. (Never knew some meant a lot.)
Hopelight followed the medicine cat to the moonpool. (Yay! She spelled moonpool right finally!) She let out a happy yowl as she reached the entrance to to the pool.(Never knew Thunderclan cats liked to swim.) She followed the medicine cat until she Saw the poop.(What? if you missed that, reread and laugh hysterically like a 5 year old.) The pool sparkled and she went Wow!
She sat down next to the medicine cat and Touched her noses (Never knew she had 2 noses!) to the pool. She felt cold and let out a moan (If you know what I mean) she then opened her eyes and saw fifty million billion gazillion kitties from starclan. (I don't think fifty million billion cats died in warriors.)
"You are awesome." mewed one of them.(Yes, you only said that 50 million times.) He touched her nose and she felt ouchies.(... No comment) "Owww!" She screamed.
Another cat touched her and she felt lots of pain. Finally after everyone had ummm (I love how she writes ummm in the middle of her being a leader. Also why in the world does she get 50 billion lives and Firestar did not?) touched her nose Bluestar sat in front of her.
"Hopestar your mission is to eliminate meat eating from all the clans and to do that here is a ct(What's that word?) to help you." (Didn't Bluestar eat meat?)
Bluestar threw a purple cat at Hopestar and the cat stood up. "I am vegatariankit. I will help you make the clan go vegetarian. But first Hopestar you must rename Thunderclan as Vegetarianclan." vegetariankit ordered.
Hopestar nodded and she woked (Grammer Nazi alert!) up. Vegetariankit was next to her, suddenly she noticed the medicine cat eating a mouse.
"Traitor!" Hopestar cried, "You are banished!" (Insensitive prick. If the medicine cat is gone, then who's gonna help cure sickness? Oh right, she wants her clan to die because she's to "awesome" for them.)
"Too bad Hopestar cried the medicine cat, who unzipped himself (How does a cat unzip himself? Oh yea, Tom did that once in Tom and Jerry) and was GASP Evilstar. (GO EVILSTAR!)
"Meatclan will rule the forest and to do this I will kill you Hopekit.(Yes! The Mary Sue is gonna die!)" He crowed. Leaping at her. Hopestar let out a wail as he came towards her, hes gonna kill me! She thought. (Wimp. You don't deserve to be leader.)
Well another chapter done. Don't worry it only gets worse from here. and on the bright side you still have about 16 more chapters to go! You can do this!
Thank you for shopping at walmart~Moonlight