Broken Soldiers 2 review

This is my very first fan fiction ever! Please enjoy and sorry for anything that might look incorrect or spelling. The first section (was chapters) will be taking place in the first game and will slowly pick up as Jane Shepard's and Garrus' relationship builds. I had decided to just go with the ME 1 story line a bit because my mind thought it was a good idea. Thank you! All characters belong to Bio ware, the story however belongs to me. Sorry it took so long! More chapters are on their way! I promise! Oh and I am not the best at 'English' so sorry for any so called mistakes. Thank you!

Broken Soldiers:

Chapter 2: goodbye and hello

Jane walked out into the mess hall only to be confronted by a little too over enthusiastic Corporal Richard Jenkins. "Commander Can you believe it? A Spectre! A real live Spectre is on board with us!"

A small smile crept up on her face. Jenkins had always reminded her of the little brother she never had. Ever since she came aboard the Normandy, enthusiasm and confidence where the only emotions she had ever seen on him, but pure joy seemed to be the most prominent at the moment. "Yes Jenkins, I know. I was planning to try go talk to him."

"Oh, when you meet him could you get me his autograph?"

A short breathy laugh escaped her lips, "I'll see what I can do. In the meantime, what are you doing up so early?" Shepard questioned with a small smile planted on her face.

"OH! Sorry I guess I was just too excited to sleep much. Getting to meet a Spectre! A Turian Spectre! You…you! The Great Commander Shepard herself! The Hero of the Blitz! The Butcher of Torfan!" said with his hands up in the air, his voice rising with each thing named.

This time Shepard chuckled; it's hard to not be happy around this guy. "Yes Jenkins. Just keep your voice down; there are a few people onboard that if they wake before needed they get really grumpy."

Jenkins with an ear to ear smile on his face, did a crisp salute and whispered, "Yes sir!" and walked off.

Jane wandered down to the Cargo Bay making her way to the oh so beautiful Mako. Shepard wanted to try and get some new upgrades and make a few tweaks in the Mako before landing. She knew that they weren't going to be able to use it at Eden Prime but you can never be too careful.

Rolling under the mako Jane started going to work. First testing then tweaking the suspension and thrusters; cause since they were launched planet side by literally flying off of the ship, so you might not want to be crashing all around inside . Then working on the cannon algorithms for they would sometimes get jammed when being rapidly fired.

Working on something like the Mako always made time fly right by, and that's what she loved about it. She only realized how much time had passed when Nihilus had gently tapped her foot twice to get her attention. Shepard Rolled out from underneath the Mako then proceeding to clean her hands on a rag she had found nearby.

"Sorry Nihilus fell in love this guy." She said while patting the side of the Mako as she wiped her hands clean "So... What's up? What are you doing down here?"

"What I'm not allowed to check up on you anymore?" Nihilus playfully jabbed, "just because I'm a Spectre now doesn't mean I don't care."

Shepard released a short laugh and turned so that he had her full attention. "Really? Being a big bad Spectre like you are always looking for trouble... Are you sure you can handle that level of danger?" Shepard the. Took a step closer and almost whispered, "can you handle that much excitement?"

Jane received a surprised then amused look from Nihilus followed by chuckle of sorts. "Oh Jane, that… that is a good one; almost thought you had forgotten about our little game," chuckling once more he continued, "But no matter how hard you try, you can never beat" pointing both of his thumbs at himself, "the KING!" Nihilus couldn't help it he tried to hold it anymore; he slowly let a big goofy smile be displayed on his big goofy turian face.

Shepard on the other hand waited only a few seconds before she started cracking up and holding her stomach while trying to breathe. Eventually Nihilus had joined into her laughter since his big goofy turian smile was starting to hurt.

How long has it been since I laughed like that?

After finally coming down from their fits of laughter, a few giggles were all that was left of Jane. "Ok fine I'm letting you have that win. By the way, I think you have a super fan; good luck sleeping at night." finishing it with a small chuckle.

"Oh I see what you did there," squinting his eyes at her, "nice try."

"Hey, it doesn't hurt to try. Anyways, you didn't really answer my question."

"And what was that?"

"What are you doing down here?" Nihilus suddenly tensed then relaxed, with his arms across his chest, leaning against the side of the Mako.

"Jane…" How am I supposed to…? "How…how's your dad doing?" Nihilus said shifting foot to foot nervously, evading the inevitable.

"Alright…Why?" Confusion and worry now visible in her voice. By this point Jane was off of the Mako and standing off to the side away from Nihilus.

"What's he been doing recently?" hoping for a distraction.

"The Usual, Old man farming." Jane said jokingly for a chance the uncomfortable feeling to go away.

"That's good. That's good." An uncomfortable silence settled between the two for a moment. Nihilus was looking anywhere but Shepard and eventually found himself looking at piece on the floor like it was the most interesting thing there.

Why is he nervous? "Nihilus you alright?"

"Yeah, fine."

Jane's brows frowned in confusion, "Is it about the mission?"

"Kind of."

"What do you mean 'kind of'?"