The New Girl

by LilyJackson

COMPLETE 'So before anyone can get to a phone,' Joseph said raising the gun. He aimed at me and shot. 'No,' Zack screamed and jumped in the way. The bullet hit him and he fell to the ground.

11. Possible Rewrite

Hi, its LilyJackson.

I just read my story and realized it could have been ALOT better. I'm thinking about rewriting it, but I want to see what y'all say. So just tell me what I should do and if you have any suggestions I will take them. And I will probably update my other stories soon.

Thanks.