Well here is the second chapter rewrite and update that I promised. I have been able to spend more time writing and fixing issues with my stories as of late so I hope these changes make you want more. I have set a poll on my profile, just click on it to vote for the 5 girls you want in the harem. Vote often and I will pick the top 10-15 girls for the Harem.
Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto but if I did he would be smart as hell.
Written by: Mr. M (Dark Insomniacs)
(Bold = Kyuubi speaking)
(Italics = Narrator talking)
(Regular font = Naruto talking or specified characters)
Chapter 2: Chains Broken
The Hokage sat in his office as he read the report about Naruto's condition; which only depressed him even more. It seems that the boy had not shown any signs of coming out of his coma and it had been over a month since he was brought to the hospital. The old Hokage was just one of those grieving for the boy, as word spread of the Kyuubi brats demise, cheers could be heard as the village celebrated the child's current state. Along with the old Hokage, a few others visited Naruto daily: the family that owned the ramen stand that Naruto loved so much and Kakashi visited every night. You could often find Kakashi sleeping in the chair next to the boy in the morning as nurses checked his vitals. Kakashi's reactions every morning were the same: he asked if there was any changes in the young blond and every morning he received the same answer and that was none.
(INSIDE NARUTO'S MIND)
Naruto woke up and was in a dark damp sewer where he could not remember what happened and for some reason he thought that was a good thing. He slowly sat up and got to his feet as he started to walk down what seemed to be an endless hall that had what looked like red, yellow, and blue pipes running along the ceiling into the pitch black hallway. As Naruto traveled the length of the hall he came to a giant room. As he walked into the center of the room he could see what looked like two giant golden gates held together by a paper that just said "Seal". As Naruto stares at the gates he feels very uneasy about them as if something of great power lays beyond the golden gates. As Naruto reached the gates,he heard a sinister laugh.
"HaHaHaHa, you finally came to see me." Spoke a voice to Naruto through behind the giant gates.
Naruto looks on as two giant eyes open that look like fox eyes. Then as he got closer, the creature moves towards the gate so Naruto can see the true form of power. Naruto looks on in awe as a ten story fox with crimson fur and nine crimson tails looks down at him and bares it's razor- sharp teeth at the now frighten five year old.
"Who are you?" Asked Naruto with fear in his voice.
"I am fear. I am power. I am the Great Demon Lord, the Nine Tailed Fox Kyuubi no Youko." Spoke the Kyuubi from behind the large gates.
Narutostares at the fox and cannot believe that here was the fox that the fourth Hokage had killed right in front of him. Naruto looks up at the fox confused.
"Am I dead?" Asked a Naruto who wasn't sure he wanted the answer to his question.
"I guess I would have to be since the Fourth Hokage killed you, those damn villagers, I never did a thing to them, why did they do it?" Spoke Naruto out loud.
The fox looked at Naruto perplexed.
"Surely he knows that I am sealed within him, if not, this might be hard to explain to the child." Thought the Kyuubi to itself.
"Child, you are not dead, I can assure you of that." Spoke the Kyuubi in a way to eliminate any doubt from the young blonde.
"Then where am I?" Asked Naruto to the Kyuubi.
"You are in your mind. You need to know a few things before we go any further, Naruto." Replied the Kyuubi to Naruto.
To say, the boy is shocked is an understatement; all he could manage to do is nod in an okay fashion.
"HaHaHaHa!" Laughed the Kyuubi at the young child's expression.
"Naruto I will not harm you; would it be easier to talk if I took my human form?" Asked the Kyuubi to Naruto.
Again, the boy just stares and nods in a okay fashion. A blinding light appears in the cage, as it fades, Naruto can see a beautiful red-headed women standing about 5ft. 8ins. with red eyes, slits for pupils and fox ears, and with nine fox tails waving behind her. She is wearing a crimson kimono which shows off her DD sized bust with a black sash across her waist. She stands at the gate looking at the young boy who now had a slight blush on his face and smiles.
"Naruto please believe me when I say I never meant to attack this village. I was controlled by an evil man who's hatred for the leaf village knew no boundaries. I have been asleep since I was sealed into you as a baby but, because of the beating you took it finally woke me from my sleep." Spoke the Kyuubi to Naruto.
Naruto looks up at her and asks the only question on his young mind.
"Are you the reason the whole village hates me?" Asked a down trodden Naruto to the Kyuubi.
The fox women looks down with a sad expression on her face.
"Yes Naruto, I am the reason the villagers try to kill you and have hatred toward you. I am sorry for all the pain I have caused you, but I would like to make it up to you if you would let me?" Responded the Red-headed Vixen.
"What do you mean? I already have forgiven you and besides that, what could you do when your locked up in my mind?" Questioned Naruto to Kyuubi.
"Well, that's exactly why I can help you for I can morph your DNA your body structure and, in your case, awaken your Kekki-Genkai." Responded the Kyuubi.
"What! I have a Kekki-Genkai?" Shouted an exuberant Naruto.
"Yes, you do. It is one of the oldest and, in fact, it has not been seen in the last 10,000 years and I can awaken it for you. The only bad part about your bloodline is that I have no idea what will happen and how it may change you. The Uzumaki's bloodline morphs every generation so the form is always changing to better adapt to the world around the individual that holds it. I can read your DNA to tell you the basics of its powers, but beyond that, we will have to look for information when you wake up." Answered the Kyuubi.
"That's sounds great Kyuubi-chan (fox women blushes at the suffix). But how long will it take to unlock my bloodline and morph my body to make it stronger. What can you tell me about the bloodline I have." Asked Naruto to the sexy Vixen.
"Well, there is good news and bad news to the first question; for it could take days, months, or even years to unlock the bloodline you hold due to it not being seen in thousands of years and, as far as how long it will take, well at least 6 -7 years to complete everything we must due." Responded Kyuubi to Naruto.
Naruto was very disappointed because by the time he would wake up his academy class will be in the final year and he would not be able to be a ninja because he would not have any training.
"So what good is it to have a bloodline, if your not going to be able to be a ninja? So what's the point if I won't wake up in time for the academy and cannot train and get stronger to become a ninja?" Asked Naruto to the Kyuubi.
"Calm down Naruto-kun (now it was Naruto's turn to blush) what do you think we will be doing while you are here. You will be training and not just by anyone, but by me and a few others that I think will make you smile." Responded the Kyuubi to Naruto.
At this point, Naruto's frown turns into a smile, and unfortunately, to turn right back into a frown and at this, the Kyuubi looks at him confusion.
"Why do you seem down Naruto-kun?" Asked Kyuubi to Naruto.
"Well, it is cool to be able to train in the ways of the ninja by you and as you said a few others, but what about my body? I will not have the muscles or physical strength to perform them outside of my mind." Responded Naruto to Kyuubi.
"You're not as dumb as many think you are, but after you are done here; you will not be smarter but stronger than any other ninja before, I guarantee it. Like I said before, I will make your body strong and your muscles grow just as if you were doing the training outside your mind scape." Answered the Kyuubi to Naruto problem.
With this new information, Naruto was as happy as he could be, but he still wished he knew what his bloodline does.
"Kyuubi-chan, what can you tell me about my bloodline?" Asked Naruto to the Kyuubi.
"Well, after checking your DNA, I can tell you that you can form some kind of wings, your eye sight becomes enhanced, your skin and bones become tougher and your mind becomes sharper, but to what degree these changes are; we will have to wait and see. I have begun unlocking your bloodline and enhancing your body. It's time to start your training and we will cover all forms of the ninja art. We will start by unlocking your chakra and then move on to control. You will have different teachers depending on the art being learned and before you ask, I may be thousands of years old, but I never had to use chakra and a few other things you ninjas use; so that's why we will get others to teach some of their lessons plus different views that will help you learn what works for you and what doesn't. So, are you ready to say good bye to the Naruto, the civilian, and say hello to Naruto, the Ninja Kitsune." Answered the Kyuubi to Naruto.
"YEAH!" Responded Naruto to the Kyuubi's statement.
A/N: Okay peoples here is the rewritten and updated Chapter 2 Chains Broken what did you think? Well let me know and please review and vote on the harem on my profile.